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Chapter 45 – The Balance of Power Everyone, aside from Anam, his spirits, and Nevren, was gathered around at the large, rocky cavern. The warmer air made it difficult for non-Fire Types to fight for long; Step, sensing this unfair advantage, breathed out a frosty cloud, cooling the room in a...

I think I'm going to add a remark that he doesn't behave like one from Alex or something, because you're right, he doesn't. It's intentional but I should probably acknowledge it in-universe more... directly. So, I actually sort of imply this waaaay later on why, but I think that's a good idea...

Hiya Desert! You can thank @zion of arcadia for tossing this story into Catnip for a review, and that's what this is for! Now, overall, I want to say that this narrative style is very prose heavy rather than dialogue, and as a personal preference, that does make things difficult for me to get...

Chapter 44 - Overconfident Owen, Gahi, Enet, and Amia all returned from the Poison Guardian’s realm. They smelled of the toxic swamp’s noxious fumes, but thankfully didn’t take much of it with them beyond that. “Brr—what a cold draft,” Amia said, rubbing her arms. “I don’t think Hot Spot Cave...

Chapter 43 – Holy Poison Owen didn’t know what it was like to slog through poisoned gunk until that day. It was thicker than water, but not quite as thick as mud. Between his scales and his thighs, it had a jelly-like feel to it in some parts, and a vague resemblance to the slime of Emily’s...

Chapter 42 – Royalty “Y’know, it’s kinda hard ter hate this place,” Manny said. “Nice air, strong trees… Could do without all the spiderwebs, though.” Arachno Forest was brimming with life. The trees were thick with dark leaves and strong trunks; very little light reached the forest floor. The...

Chapter 41 – Frozen Over The northwestern corner of the world was covered in a perpetual, thick layer of ice. The white field was dotted with black rocks and sloping hills of snow and ice. The ground wasn’t stable, and there were a few incidents early on where Valle had fallen into thinner...

Hey, Wind! This was an interesting story and I think what really gave it some staying power in particular was the ending. The reveal itself, in hindsight, was a little cliche--kinda like those stories of a hero talking to a child about some event in the past, not revealing that they are that...

Thanks for the review, Pen! Good feedback like before all around. For some clarifications... Yes, this is an early problem that I have, and I think part of it comes with being a little light on epithets combined with having too few physical descriptors sprinkled in, and so on. During my...

Chapter 40 – Regrets and Reconciliation Gawen watched silently as Demitri and Mispy recalled their past, or at least a small portion of it. They remembered bits and pieces of their first lives. Perhaps not all of it, but enough to understand exactly what had happened to them, and why they had...

ACT II – A Stubborn Ego The Hall of Origin was made of pure, white, shining tile. Light shined from above, radiating off of tall ceilings. The light bounced off the walls and illuminated the floor. The passageways were so wide that an entire squad of Owens could march, wing to wing, and have...

As much as Owen is strange, this is one thing normal about him. All Charmander, and all Pokemon in general with their elemental attributes, are aura-based in how they're emitted. It's sort of touching upon that anime logic of a Ponyta's flames only hurt if they want it to, and so on. The thermal...

Special Episode 3 - When the World Was Small Bright lights lined narrow hallways of concrete and metal. White walls surrounded polished floors of marble tile. Every sound echoed for ages across the labyrinth. A youthful, albeit deep, voice echoed from the inside of one of the many rooms that...

Whew, that's a lot to reply to. I handled the others in DMs, but since you're offline at the moment, I'll just toss them here and you can respond as you like in whatever medium. Should probably do some of these in public anyway so it doesn't look like I never reply~ That's precisely it...

Hiya Kint! Wound up reading the prologue (I think?) and the first chapter. Overall, I thought this was an interesting AU take, and two differences from the canon that I spotted seemed to cancel themselves out in such a way that it actually makes the narrative more coherent--which is rare for...

Chapter 39 – Correct “Sooo, can we evolve now?” Demitri balled up his fists, shaking them enthusiastically. Mispy listened, but spent her time prodding at one of the Hot Spot mushrooms with a vine to feign a lack of interest. “Not until we’re sure we can get you in a safe environment,” Rhys...

While disappointed I didn't place, I'm glad that my reviews were largely positive, and all the insecurities I had about my story were invalid. Instead, they found other flaws that I can learn from. Complete win for me~ I'm not used to short-form stories at all, so this was a pleasant surprise...

Chapter 38 – The Enigmatic Healer Manny crossed his arms with doubt, flying through the air with his body parallel to the ocean. “Yer gonna have ter explain that one a second time, Rhys,” he said. “They all got ate, but they’re just fine?” “Y-yes, I promise, they are perfectly safe. More than...

Oh! Wasn't expecting this by the title but now it makes a lot of sense. Well then. -- Heya, Pen! I'm here for Catnip, and I took a look at the first chapter. It felt like a long one, and it was a little slow at the start, but I found myself rapidly going through the latter half of the chapter...

Wow, now THAT is a thorough review, @Pen! I hope I can do the same in return since it seems our fics swapped for Catnip. Very good overall, and I'm going over a lot of this in DMs as requested, but this is all useful feedback that I intend to make use of when I inevitably get back to editing...