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Hey! I've read the first chapter, and here are my thoughts. This is a pretty snappy start to what seems to be a traditional fantasy journey story, with a teenage protagonist having their family killed by forces of the antagonist and awakening to their hidden magical powers through peril. I...

Reviewed Gifts of the Mountain! Base: +3 Weekly: +4 ~1000 Words: +3 Total: 10 @zion of arcadia Weekly is actually worth 4 points, pointing it out so it isn't missed~

I decided to check this story out as I was intrigued by the post you'd made on improving prose and wanted to see what kind of writer you were. I'm glad I did, as it turned out to be a rather unique experience. Like Neb said, there's a strong classic fantasy feel to it which peaks with the riddle...

ho ho ho merry seiren new chapter rated teen with language, violence and some misc mature topics briefly mentioned nnjoy --- CHAPTER NINE And Then Everybody Clapped --- I’m gonna do it. I’m gonna do it. I’ll kill him. I’ll kill the ninetales. No one is around. They weren't planning on...

oh wow i'd completely forgotten about charahub, looks like the world did too... For my absolutely most fleshed out character, that being Red, I have a GDoc that started off as filling in some character information template but got the important addition of a timeline for the stories and...

ow oh and digitigrades walk on the balls of their feet by default grumble grumble Missing period? because two legs good no legs worthless C U R I O U T E red akai would like to know your location Now that I mention it, though? I feel like the "nevermind" should be at the start of...

i mentioned on discord that i'd be willing to volunteer for prizes, but for clarity i'll mention it here too. i could do a few character sketches, maybe even banners depending on how my uni starts off. and heck yeah let's do this thing i really need to kick my ass into reading things!!

aaaaaaaaAAAAAAAA freakin finally. After 6k words worth of outtakes and redos and then the 12k that made it in, Whelp is finally done. That's not to say it's in a rigid, finished state - I definitely want feedback and will try to implement critique if I can. Just... know that it might take a...

hue This makes sense, but then also kind of doesn't. How is an individual referred to when they're not present? In terms of the family's father, they refer to him by his title of father, but what about siblings? Is it then by their age in comparison to the others, like Curio introduced his...

sdfgsdhgjhgk hey yall i got another chapter for you here and things happeeeeennnn in it ok cool rated teen like always enjoy --- CHAPTER EIGHT Pallet Patrol --- I swear, people are too responsible nowadays. It took a good two freezing hours to finally get someone to fetch me a bottle of fine...

shine must be high in many ways As innnn cooking oil or dinosaur juice? *He? *y'know damn tony chill af Remove comma, I think. oh no oh god she killed people to dissect them and see what makes them tick* *This is the second joke I have made about Curio being a serial killer so I...

hooray! i am very late with this! reason is uni as always. anyway, rating is still teen this time, but unlike before, there are also some... seckshual jokes... 😳 well, enjoy --- CHAPTER SEVEN Digital Dummy --- “Honey, wake up!” I jolt awake from the shout, heartbeat kicked to superspeed in...

you fools thats how theyre gonna Rise Up!! Seems like this is the first mention of this. Pokémon therapy, huh. I wonder what that goodra needs it for. i do wonder now, do goomy swim like jellyfish You're gonna want just one or the other, only or just. missing space Shine was pretty...

Hey, I'm back for Chapter 4, picking up where I left off. I also read the first Bonus Chapter, but I don't remember much of MMM and in general figured that critique of it probably isn't useful. throw some dice to determine whether i make a jojo reference or a charlie brown reference I...

Thank you very much for the read and reply! I didn't even know about stoicism before this, haha. What I was going for is tied to emotional detachment, though, as I'm basically attempting to write a sociopath. It's not really 1:1, though, as there's that whole Twitch business complicating it...

I actually didn't get into Pokémon fanfic or really any fanfic until a few years ago. I think I read a stray one or two, but I don't really remember them having much impact. I followed more comics if anything, and even then not many. (However! I did follow Black Adventures, and it's probably the...

new chapter, get your new chapter here, only zero dollars. rated teen enjoy pls like comment and subscribe --- CHAPTER SIX I Celadon't Want to Be Here --- “Man, it feels so good to drink without having to show a license or ask some guy on the street to buy me some…” Shirlee sighs. Arktos...

uni continues to kick me booty but here we are with chapter 5. wanted to add a scene and trudged through three quarters of it until i realized it just didnt fit into the story properly and had to trash it. sad rated teen as always enjoy --- CHAPTER FIVE Fine Whining --- The lobby of Celadon...

Eevee Keith (pre-Dragony) It sure felt like a dream. If the nice gengar hadn’t told him that it wasn’t, Keith wouldn’t have known the difference. Even now, he wasn’t sure. Tall black buildings, ethereal cyan lights, lush grass. It was definitely an improvement over the slushy, muddy Pelton...

The thing I run into the most problems with in my TPP fics is absolutely the fact that I made pokémon way too intelligent. You can argue that this is somewhat of a problem for all pokéfic writers that base their works on the human world, as making the creatures mentally above animal level (or...