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starting what i hope to be a long list! but we'll see. Chapter 1 of Raingurl, Make It +1 chapter +1 theme total change: +2 blitz total: 2

Hey! Here from Catnip, looking at the first chapter, naturally. I'm trying to wrap my head around this sentence but it's not really working out for me. Does the compass in this context mean a navigator that would point to the set destination? Or is it a traditional compass in that it always...

AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA IT'S BEEN THREE MONTHS BUT HERE WE FINALLY ARE. chapter four. things happen in this one, you'll love it. rated mature again because language and violence. okay thank you for reading and enjoy --- CHAPTER FOUR Life --- Dappled sunlight dances atop the forest scene. The...

december is almost free for me so i hope to participate :quag:

Alright, here from Catnip! Like said before, I'd reviewed the first chapter some years back, so I'm reading and reviewing the second instead - though not without a skim of the first to refresh my memory. Anyway, here are my thoughts. I'm not sure what word supposed to be here, but probably not...

whoa i can't believe i didn't post here Seiren My (18M) adoptive omanyte son (2monM, resurrected twice) who carries the spirit of my god (13.8bilM) has recently become so obsessed with an inkay pop star (?F) that He no longer pays any attention to me. How can I kill her and get away with it...

Hey there, I'm here from Catnip. I've read the first chapter and here are my thoughts. I apologize for a lot of them being about grammar and wording, but I just tend to be pretty pedantic when it comes to that stuff. As I went on FFN out of curiosity to see what the reviews on there were like, I...

5 minutes is only so much time oh gosh oh frick next persom plese draw DA BEEST (very scray) he is like HOUNDOME combine with TAUROS and PANGRO

An important plot point in Seiren has the inkay pop star Shirlee be worried about signs of her evolution approaching. She plans to get everstone surgery to fix the situation. It's a minor spoiler, I suppose, so don't open the excerpt below if you don't want further information.

Hey! Here for Catnip, a bit late, sorry about that. Here are my thoughts on Chapter 1. My absolute first thought is Bet-Boy from TPP lore, but then I remember there are like 200 people on Earth tops that even know what that is. I will have to be honest, I would have considered just regular...

oh well why not Name: Shirlee (stage name), Shirley Tanner (real name) Gender: Female Species: Inkay Brief description: Singer-songwriter pop sensation. Bubbly on her good side, but not afraid to snap back if mistreated. Can be somewhat of a diva. Does believe in compassion, progressiveness and...

okay WHOA am I late with this but better late than never. Chapter 5 and 6 thoughts incoming. Chapter 5 I really think this paragraph and a few others could do with some splitting. You get these twists and turns, but they feel like they lose their suddenness and rhythm when bunched together in...

Hey! Here for Catnip, looking at the first chapter. You're gonna want to separate the names / addressing terms from the rest of the sentence by commas. Mind the "Let's eat, Grandma / Let's eat Grandma" example. For the latter, though, you'd end up with a lot of them, so something like may...

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Thank you! I've been proud of it myself, unusually so for a long-time perfectionist. This is a valid point, and one I did notice myself. I think I may have been too afraid to "gloss over" some things after writing intimate first-person prose for so long. I want the peril to seem real, but not...

holy crap i forgot to post these here lol espeon & match: chatot & seesaw: both happen to be tpp references. i just cant quit my roots

hello all! it's time for a new pokécentric story from yours truly. i've been working on it for a while, not helped by the abnormally bad mental stuff i've been going through lately, but finally the first part is written and ready to be posted. i don't know how many parts there will be, but...

yep, enough time has definitely passed by now. was totally waiting and didn't just forget again nope. anyway here's the conclusion to our gripping story. rated teen yet again. enjoy. --- Part Five --- Blazing white energy surfaced on Keith's skin. It tingled, even seared, but Keith didn't...

i dont even care if no one gets the reference. (i might care.)

jess might be a little upset