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Hey! Here for Catnip, read the first chapter. Here are my thoughts. This beginning scene was pretty confusing to me. I understand that it's probably partway intentional with how otherworldly the events happening are, but a lot of it for me was due to stuff being hard to parse, like here and...

Oh! In that case, you might actually enjoy Seiren, a story that comes before Hunter, Haunted. It's practically goreless (hence its lower rating), much lighter in tone and Red's phobia of technology (due to PCs being basically death machines on his original journey) is a major plot element. Helix...

Here's your Smeargle Swap! Sorry for being late. Here's Elliana carrying an injured Crest away from his crash site!

The opening line is something that has been kind of a thorn in my side for a longer time. The thing is that it is supposed to be "breath", the noun, since it's meant to be observation/narration rather than an instruction he'd be telling himself, which using "breathe" makes it seem like - but a...

Hey there! Here for Catnip. Very sorry for being so late, it's been busy over here. Anyway, I've read Chapter 1 and here are my thoughts. Commentary So, reading this chapter, I felt like the prose got redundant in a few places, this being one example. The boy is described as being in...

September 20th Game! Organizer: Canis Sign-ups open until Thursday, 23rd 10:00 EST [countdown here] You have until the end of the countdown to submit your fic of choice. You may change it anytime up until the rolling takes place. Submit to me via TR or Discord DM. Review window opens: once...

Hey! Here for Catnip, picking up where I left off, the third chapter. out of context this becomes very frightening i got bad news for you kid it was only at this point canis realized this was, in fact, a journeyfic >starts conversation unprompted >unloads huge rant >leaves before the...

September 6th Game! Organizer: Canis Sign-ups open until Thursday, 9th 10:00 EST [countdown here] You have until the end of the countdown to submit your fic of choice. You may change it anytime up until the rolling takes place. Submit to me via TR or Discord DM. Review window opens: once...

Chapter Two italian swearing On the one hand this is thoughtful, but on the other I'd expect a lot of morphs named ShadowBlood DarkFury walking around With how much description this scene had of Salem's sensations, I was expecting a mention of the floor being cold but it didn't come...

Not all pokémon speak the same! Canine language is indeed limited to canines. It's also not just any canines, but sapient ones - only sapients can use complex verbal language like ours. Completely wild houndoom and other canine pokémon communicate like our wolves. I think my intention with the...

Hey! Here for Catnip. As you requested, I've read the revised first chapter. I skimmed the prologue for a recap as well, but I didn't pick up much that had changed so I have no comments to give there. As the second half of this chapter also seemed to match the content of the corresponding scene...

August 24th Game! Organizer: Canis Sign-ups open until Friday, Aug 27th 10:00 EST [countdown here] You have until the end of the countdown to submit your fic of choice. You may change it anytime up until the rolling takes place. Submit to me via TR or Discord DM. Review window opens: once...

It was basically different paths the conversation and Red's freaking out about the spider would have taken. So both in a way, I suppose. Well, I would argue that she was trying to de-escalate the situation once Red apologized and seemed to come more to his senses, which made the situation seem...

Hey there! I'm here for Catnip. I have to say, though, that this review might not hit 250 words - the story is very short, and I'm very unfamiliar with the source material. I hope it's alright. Missing another row change between these paragraphs. The characters seem to talk mostly in a...

I'm really glad to hear that went well! I spent so long going back and forth with that. Probably about half the outtakes I had for this chapter were the spider parts done slightly differently. This is true and it annoys me, but it is indeed because of plot reasons. I also think of Jordan as...

EDIT: I've been thinking about some things and I've decided I want to put up a disclaimer regarding the psychiatrist scene and about Red's "diagnosis" in general. Catch it under the spoiler. --- IT'S BEEN FOUR MONTHS AHAHA how did that happen? well, i guess summer job and a really difficult...

This question popped into my mind and it seemed like one better suited for a forum thread than just a Storycrafter ping. So: What - or who - are some inspirations behind your characters? Have they been inspired by some other fictional character or some real person you've known? Has seeing some...

Hey there, here for Catnip! Sorry that it's late. Anyway, I've read the first chapter, and here are my thoughts. Before I go into line commentary like I usually do, I'd like to point out whether I'm personally LGBT+ or on the autistic spectrum to establish the perspective I would have into...

July 27th Game! me when I activate Reading Mode Organizer: Canis Sign-ups open until Thursday, July 29th 10:00 EST [countdown here] You have until the end of the countdown to submit your fic of choice. You may change it anytime up until the rolling takes place. Submit to me via TR or...

Hey! Sorry it took a while, but I’ve now read the second chapter and here are my thoughts. You’ll be glad to hear I thought this chapter was a lot better than the first! A lot the issues I had with the first one weren’t present in this, and some were actually patched as your DMs promised. First...