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Interesting! I'm going to try to give some insight into why I interpreted the story the way I did, and why I think other readers had similar takes: When this is the paragraph you use to introduce the 'cheating', and the events they describe from there have a humorously exaggerated quality to...

Aaaand chapter 43 is here. In which one new character arrives, another departs, and there's a whole lot of painful awkwardness in between. Chapter 43: To Champion Island Alan will fill him in, huh? The start of their journey across the calm sea was none too interesting, and it was all...

Title: Of Sand and Shadows Link: https://forums.thousandroads.net/index.php?threads/of-sand-and-shadows.458/post-51624 Chapters: 1 Weekly theme: no

<3 Wes needs to learn to say no to his bratty Pokémon (only nah, this is cute) Of course that's the first thing you want to spend your finite money on. Huh. Psychically sensing Rui in there? Sure seemed to enjoy Alden's company as a kid, though, eh? I imagine horrible things happened and Wes...

This was a delight, love Nate and Mightyena protecting each other and Rats and Leonard being the main powerplayers and the child just immediately crowing about how it killed Mewtwo hahahaha and trying to impersonate Nate as GREAT NATHANIEL MORGAN (also doctors wear blue) But also Titan is so...

Thank you all very much for the feedback so far! I'm glad it seems to have broadly landed and really appreciate all the insightful commentary on how the story came across and how you felt about it. Some brief remarks where I had something more specific to say: The most major changes in that...

Title: A Confession Link: https://forums.thousandroads.net/index.php?threads/a-confession.868/post-51540 Number of chapters: 1 Weekly theme: yes

Hey! I skimmed part of this a while back when you posted it and then saw it back on the first page and figured why not properly check it out and drop a review. I think you do a nice job with the monologue implying what's going on in the opening. We get a sense of Nida feeling weak, wanting this...

Title: Delivery Deferred Link: https://forums.thousandroads.net/index.php?threads/delivery-deferred.983/post-51534 Number of chapters: 1 Weekly theme: yes

Already betaed this, so this'll be a more compact review with more overall thoughts rather than line-by-lines, apart from: Got some extra line breaks in there for whatever reason. I think this story does a nice job with understated worldbuilding that doesn't get in the way. It's a PMD world...

Title: Starfrost Link: https://forums.thousandroads.net/index.php?threads/starfrost-osas-one-shot.970/post-51489 Chapters: 1 Weekly theme: yes

Figured I'd check this out for one-shot week, since I started OSAS! Definitely don't regret it; I really enjoyed this. (Still hoping to return for at least two more chapters of OSAS, though.) I enjoy the use of slurred words to show Wes is half-asleep in pure dialogue. Cute exchange of banter...

<3 Thank you for thoughts, @HelloYellow17! I enjoyed them greatly. To clarify, I was twelve when I started the first version of this fic; this version is a reboot (rewrite from scratch, largely the same broad-strokes events happen but all the prose was new and the play-by-play was for the most...

I'm going to drop some links to my fics here for good measure since honestly you wouldn't really know they existed before: Butterfree (one-shot) Trainers aren't supposed to have favorites, but you were my favorite. And then you started losing. A story about Butterfree, a trainer, avoidance...

Fic: White Swan, Black Swan Link: https://forums.thousandroads.net/index.php?threads/white-swan-black-swan.551/post-51286 Chapters: 1 Theme: Yes

An actual review for the prologue, after I read it and did some art for Smeargle Swap! Way too long because I cannot shut up but I hope it's illuminating. I'm a little confused by the "his own". Usually the "own" in a situation like this would be added to clarify which character is being...

Author's note: Hello, all! This story was originally written in 2012, then revised fairly significantly in 2020 and posted here. I got some good feedback on that one, and have been working on more extensive revisions on and off since. This, finally, is version three. I would still appreciate...

Fic title: Of Sands and Shadows Fic link: https://forums.thousandroads.net/index.php?threads/of-sand-and-shadows.458/post-51150 Chapters: 1 Weekly theme: yes

Hey! I'm back with a proper review of chapter one. I thought I might review three chapters at once but then I went on to write an essay and it's 4AM, so I'll just post this one and return to it later. Something easily fixed that jumped out at me here - it's not obvious until the next sentence...

Thank you for thoughts! Mark understands Sandshrew fine, but sometimes the fic has brief untranslated Pokémon vocalizations: - In a few cases (mostly Eevee), it's essentially 'baby talk' - a young/childish Pokémon babbling something that's not intelligible words. - Usually, it's just...