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Junebug44

Bug Catcher
Pronouns
he/him
Chapter 6 Review:

Finally, a Vienna feature! It's interesting to see what she's actually like after hearing from Florent's POV. I like that she has more of a sibling relationship with Odette than a parent one; I've heard very similar things from people I know who were a product of teen pregnancies. Her casually suggesting Odette should suck more dick got me rolling. 😭

Now, onto the date! Honestly, I figured that realistically the whole operation would be a slow burn patient plan, but it really feels like Odette isn't making much progress at all... It almost feels like Dorien is being careful about it, which doesn't really seem in character unless he knows Odette's plan the whole time? I'm not sure.

Holy cow he just wiped her memory??? What is going on? Why does Dorien need Odette? Things seem like they're getting a little supernatural and I'm here for it. I'm even thinking Dorien might be a vessel for a deadly sin, maybe Greed? It seems like he wants to get her on his side but then he brings up sensitive topics?? Idk this guy is genuinely creeping me out. I think he might be a super-genius behind the scenes or something.
 

Junebug44

Bug Catcher
Pronouns
he/him
Chapter 7 Review:

Holy cow what a chapter! In such a place filled with rich people, I half expected to see Florent's other kid somewhere in the vicinity, but we got a lot of characters nonetheless.

I love that we got an Isaur feature! She's my favorite; she likes food and is a goated wingwoman. I like the interactions between her and Clovis. And on that note, Clovis is a really cool character; he has Odette wrapped around his finger. I can't help but wonder if maybe he's the sin of Lust? I like him tho he seems like the only person in the room besides Odette and Noel who has a head on his shoulders.

That battle was crazy; I did not expect to see these crazy weird Pokemon just in the middle of a crowded room. From what I see, I'm thinking that shiny pokemon are used for vessels of some kind for these weird Pokemon, and Dorien is gonna use Odette's Sylveon to awaken another one? It would explain why he wants her to like him so badly at least.

It's very clear that Odette finds Dorien repulsive now since it's emphasized a lot, almost every time they interact. I'm curious to see where the plot goes next!
 

Junebug44

Bug Catcher
Pronouns
he/him
Chapter 8 Review:

I love the groupchat, I've read a lot of fics with them and it's making me wanna write them into my own. Seeing the chat got me some questions tho...who are Claude and Noemie and Basille?

Noel threw his duffel bag down and doubled over, placing his hands on his knees as he leveled his breathing. “Who cares? Nobody's in here, right?" He lowered his voice to ask that

"Made sure of it."
Missing a period. Also I was a little confused about this. Odette said the last sentence, right? Was she being sarcastic or nah.

LORE DUMP LORE DUMP LORE DUMP!!! I'm so glad I get to see some hints as to what's really going on with shinies. Does this vessel thing apply to every shiny? I'm scared for Sylveon now... Also, my guess on what Sacrilege is is that it has something to do with the monster pokemon that gives regular pokemon their ferocity. Maybe it's their literal blood.

I can tell Odette is struggling to come to terms that Virtue Corp MIGHT be bad cuz she knows Bernard is associating with them. I also love how Odette and Noel are doing their own theorycrafting. Clovis is a Virtue Corp agent? This is getting crazy and I'm loving it!

Also name-drop Deschamps. Big moment! (also i love the metaphor of putting together the corner pieces). I'm so hyped to keep reading.
 

Junebug44

Bug Catcher
Pronouns
he/him
Chapter 9 Review:
This is definitely not the place for you to be riding my dick."
Small detail but I'm not sure this is the expression you're going for. 😭 Usually riding my dick is like being obsessed. IMO "on my ass" works a little better.

This chapter is already off to a crazy start! I didn't realize we'd get such a close up into the shiny trade and what's going on with all these rich people but I'm fascinated. I also love the interactions between Enora and Odette. I feel so bad for Enora given the situation she's in and the arguments between them are very natural and not forced.

Holy there's a technology that calms rampaging Pokemon? That's good worldbuilding; honestly in a place where Pokemon could be around rampaging and stuff I was gonna assume people would just shoot them or take them down with their Pokemon, but I'm glad you gave an alternative.

The whole interaction with Clovis was awesome. I'm starting to like this guy more and more, and it's cute that both him and Odette both looked each other up lol.

AWWW I love that Enora has Odette's back. That was an adorable moment.

The smile she formed was bitter as she lazily returned it.
This sentence confuses me a little... is it implying that Dorien smiled first and she returned it with a bitter one?

edit: nvm she’s returning the wave, im stupid

HOLY SHIT THINGS WENT HAYWIRE SO FAST. The killing of the Gyarados was so gruesome wow I had to brace myself reading that. And then the little glimpse of Wrath was crazy, and Damion is getting more and more unbearable. Holy cow what a chapter!
 
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Junebug44

Bug Catcher
Pronouns
he/him
Chapter 10, 11, 12, 13, 14 Reviews:

These chapters were so good and kept me so hooked I read them all at once when I should have been working. Firstly, the whole chapter with Dorien's POV was really cool. It really helped emphasize how disgusting Dorien and his lackeys really were, while at the same time giving some firsthand insight into sacrilege and how it's sold and administered. ALSO I KNEW IT DORIEN HAD A SIN but i guess Greed and he was Envy. Close enough whatever :mewlulz:

And then the iceberg chapters were a WHIRLWIND of information and emotions. Seeing Odette get closer and closer to finding out that she has Wrath in her has me on the edge of my seat, I'm practically screaming at my screen. I love how you clarified information that we already had as well as giving new information. Kept things interesting.

I have SO many thoughts about the lore, but my main ones are this. I want to learn more about JL and Florent and what their relationship was. It seems like a Dumbledore Grindelwald-ish relationship where they both wanted similar things but JL just took it way too far. Enigma vs Virtue Corp is interesting, and I'm also interested in why Valentin (feels weird calling him that now lol) isn't a huge fan of his father.

The flipping between Odette's horny-mode and investigation-mode is done very tastefully and I'm here for it.

I just realized Odette is literally a shiny human. wtf.

Also interesting lore with the fact that holy water is a thing and it works. Great foreshadowing with the fact that Odette has trouble in churches and stuff. I wonder if this fic will expand upon Greater Things once this Kalos plotline is over.

Only thing that confused me is the fact that apparently blood type mons have been around for so long. Even if rich people put all their effort into trying to hide it on the internet, won't it be impossible to completely eradicate it from the general population? You're telling me there wasn't a single leak? At the very least I can imagine some "conspiracy theorists" making blogs online about how these Pokemon are real idk. I'm ready to just accept it as a fact but it's interesting to think about.

On the other hand, GIVE ME MORE ABOUT BLOOD TYPES (pls). Do they have moves? Do they have STAB? Do they have weaknesses/strengths? Can a blood type control a blood type? Can you get a shiny blood type? Can the blood type controlled by a blood type control a blood type? Bloodception. And then THAT blood type controls a regular Pokemon. Ultra shiny :copyka:

Getting an explanation on Vice Dust is awesome.

Ok final chapter. Noel getting a potential love interest is cool. Odette seeing Florent is big milestone. Them being stuck at Valentin's place is cute. Odette getting mad at Noel is crazy. Crazy? I was crazy once. They locked me in a room. A rubber room. A rubber room with White Swan Black Swan. Why is it named that? I'm gonna go crazy waiting for the new chapters to come out holy cow.

This was an awesome read. Thank you so much for writing this, I'll be forever referring back to how you did things as inspiration for my own writing. This is the first fic I've delved into at TR and it's convinced me to continue reading other people's. Junebug, out.
 
Chapter 15 - Well, Fuck

Sinderella

Angy Tumbleweed
Staff
Location
In Guzma's Closet
Pronouns
She/Her
Partners
  1. sylveon-shiny
  2. gothitelle
  3. froslass
  4. chandelure
  5. mimikyu

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Chapter 15: Well, Fuck
CWs: Strong Language, Talk of Drugging, Talk of Killing Someone

It was only there that she realized she was alone with him.

She was alone with him. In his house. Rained in, no way to safely leave at the moment. And he was asking her to build a puzzle with him. The subject of her intense crush was asking her to build a puzzle–one of her absolute favorite pastimes–with him.

Her jumbled conscious thoughts ceased as her chest looped itself into a constrictor knot. Suddenly, all she could do was stare at him, blinking.

“Uh…”

“I mean, please don’t feel obliged,” he said frantically. “If you want to keep reading, go right ahead, I just figured–”

“Yes!” she replied with a jolt. “I mean…yes, I’ll join you for the puzzle.”

He exhaled to himself. Was it out of relief? What did he have to be relieved about? Was he hoping she was going to say yes? The thought caused her heartbeat to pick up, so much so that she heard it pounding against her ears as she pushed herself to stand.

Now that she could actually look at the pieces, she also found time to get a better look at the box. The first thing that stood out to her was the number of parts it advertised, and she eyed it closely as she leaned over one of the chairs pushed in under the table.

“Two-thousand, look at you,” she commented, trying to ensure they didn’t get trapped in another bout of awkward silence. She also wanted to nurse the cutiefly pecking the shit out of her guts.

“I typically don’t do any less than that. Not challenging enough,” he replied coolly, leaning on the seat beside her. He looked to be mimicking her stance, but she didn’t think too much about it.

“A man of taste,” she complimented. She never did much less than 1500 pieces unless she liked the finished picture. At that thought, she reached over to pick up the box to get a better look at the image, half-expecting something depicting a dark snowy landscape or a group of ice-type Pokemon.

She was surprised to see a painted nighttime cityscape instead. Silhouettes of humans and Pokemon rushed through a downpour that only served to reflect the city streetlights. In the foreground, what looked like a gengar, a misdreavus, and a greavard lurked in the shadows of an alley.

“Oh wow, I like this,” she gasped.

“Right?” Valentin beamed. “I just picked it up a few days ago and have been slowly chipping away at it.”

That much was obvious. He’d already completed the outer edge and had begun working his way inward. He’d also begun separating the rest of the pieces by color grouping, judging by how some were in neat piles, and others were scattered about in a less organized fashion.

“I’m guessing you do a lot of these?” she asked.

“Indeed, it’s fantastic to pass the time with,” he said. “I take it that you’re a puzzle connoisseur yourself, huh?”

“I’ve gotten around,” she said coyly, pulling out the chair she was leaning on and sitting down.

“Something tells me you’re downplaying that a little,” Valentin teased, following her lead.

She stifled a scoff as she held up her hand and pinched her index finger and thumb close together. She hardly felt the need to go into every little detail about the monthly puzzles she, Bernard, and Vienna used to do when they all lived together.

“Just a little.”

She was amazed at how quickly the awkwardness had deflated from the air. The next thing she knew, all she could think about was the fact that she was puzzling with Valentin and became solely focused on trying to show off her skills at getting pieces together. Soon, they were so engaged in it that they stopped talking entirely. It only dawned on her just how quiet it was when a clap of thunder broke her out of her building trance.

She glanced up toward Valentin, careful not to move her head too much and give herself away. He looked rather engrossed in the part he was putting together, as indicated by the notch that had taken form in his brow and the way he rubbed and pinched at his chin. As quickly as she thought the awkwardness was deflating, she felt it coming back on with a vengeance.

Say something else, quick, she thought.

“You said you do this to take the edge off when you’ve drunk too much, so I’m guessing you only smoke the pecha cigarettes when you’re trying to impress other elites?” she said.

Valentin’s eyes slipped shut, the notch smoothing out as he grinned dumbly. He leaned back in his chair and rolled his eyes in jest. “Actually, Love and Frosting don’t like it when I smoke in the house, so I would normally do it outside, but–”

Lightning sent a burst of brightness into the room, followed by a clap of thunder that quaked through the wood floors and caused the light fixtures to clatter slightly. Valentin shrugged when it died down.

Odette pursed her lips. “Understood. This is probably better overall anyway.”

“You’re definitely right, but a little pecha smoke in my lungs never hurt me.”

“And a little whiskey in your system made that office conversation easier.”

He snickered, shaking his head as he reached over for a few more pieces. “Mmmmm, touché.”

They shared brief grins before Odette lowered her head to continue her work. She wasn’t sure what else could be said after that; no sarcastic quip came to her, and the idea of trying to further prod him about his life left her feeling like her insides would disintegrate. Awkwardness started to build again, and panic flooded her stomach.

Anything. Something. Say literally anything. Ask him how he’s feeling. Ask him what hair bleach he uses. Ask him if he wants a kiss.

Holy shit, get a
grip.

“I’m sorry, I’m really awful at this,” Valentin said suddenly. Odette silently thanked the gods for the reprieve.

Furrowing her brow, she raised her eyes to look at what was on the table in front of him. “What, the puzzle? You look like you’re doing fine.”

“No,” he said. “I mean this.” He motioned between them, timing it with a few strained nods. Her eyes widened in understanding.

He was in the same boat but had the balls to admit it.

Oh,” she said, putting down the pieces she was holding. Averting her eyes away, she tried to come up with the best way to make her empathy clear.

“I guess small talk is harder when there aren’t twenty people you’re trying to ignore sitting around you,” she said.

Valentin pointed at her. “You are correct; that does tend to offer a bit of a boost.”

“If it helps, we can just pretend we’re at another party, and we have Dorien clones trying to talk our ears off.”

“Perhaps,” he said, “but I’d hate if every conversation we had alone relied on us roleplaying something like that.”

Odette began to drag her fingernail across the table, having to fight off the dreamy smile that threatened to curl her lips. “That would be kind of obnoxious, wouldn’t it?”

She only wished talking to him would come on like second nature. She felt herself obsessing over every little word that came out of her mouth, and it only served to pile onto her nerves.

“I know the goal here is to take the edge off, but if you have anything else you want to ask me, I’m more than happy to discuss,” he said. “Clearing some more air might help our case.”

Odette felt some tension enter her body as several more questions began to form. They started surface-level but quickly developed into inquiries about the Clovis LeClair research she had done. No reason to worry about that anymore, though. That was null information.

What did she want to ask Valentin Ménétries that wasn’t ‘what hair bleach do you use?’ He formally invited her, so she felt more at ease trying to consider it.

One question immediately rushed to the forefront of her mind, coming on like an intrusive thought but overstaying its welcome. She warded off the sudden silence by grabbing another piece and trying to jam it somewhere in the image of the greavard she had created.

“I’m pretty set,” she lied. “Why don’t you ask me something?”

“I’d love to, and I plan to,” he said, tucking his hand under his chin as he grinned. “But, I trust you right now. I’d like for you to trust me more in return, so it’s only fair that you go first.”

He paused to purse his lips and shimmied another piece into the part he was building. “Besides, I think I sense something on the tip of your tongue.”

I wish you could feel the tip of my tongue, she thought longingly before clearing her throat. So much for having a grip.

“Not sure if I should ask,” she muttered. “Might be crossing a boundary.”

She watched Valentin roll his eyes againn as he continued to work at his little stretch of the puzzle. He successfully fitted two more pieces into it. “We’ve hopped over a few boundaries today, so I can’t imagine it’s anything worse. My goal is to be an open book to you, so please ask away.”

The more she talked to him, the more his shows of sincerity became obvious. He always made direct eye contact with her when he was trying to make her believe him or get a point across, and he always kept his brow at a neutral, wrinkle-free position while doing so. Sometimes he’d offer a half smile if the topic were light enough. And he never looked tense, even if he had all the reason in the world to be so. Tension only gripped him when he slipped up or was putting on an act.

She decided to match that energy and let the tightness in her shoulders loosen. “Okay, fine,” she relented. She did, however, brace herself for her question.

“Uh…who’s Jocelyn?”

Valentin’s cool expression fled off his face as soon as he heard the name, leaving a blossoming scowl in its wake.

Odette sucked her teeth and smacked her hand to her face in embarrassment. “Fuck, see? I shouldn’t have asked. Forget it, I was just being–”

“No, no,” Valentin cut her off, sighing. “I guess I shouldn’t be shocked you managed to catch the caller ID, and I did make a bit of spectacle out of it.” At least he knew exactly what she was talking about, so she didn’t have to explain herself more.

He was now pinching the bridge of his nose as if the mere mention of the name ‘Jocelyn’ gave him a headache.

“Jocelyn Delsarte. She’s my fiance. My…betrothed fiance.”

Odette felt her heart stop entirely. She tried to will the oncoming despair away, but it flooded into every cavity in her body. Heartbreak came on fast, and it came on violently, apparently.

You shouldn’t be surprised, of course he’s engaged. What were you thinking?

“Oh,” she said. “Congra–”

He whipped his hand up, effectively silencing her. “Save it,” he jeered. He turned his hand and wiggled his ring finger, which, surprisingly, lacked a ring.

“Let me make one thing clear; I can’t stand her. I’d sooner hang myself than exchange vows with her.”

Odette curled her toes as she exhaled slowly and evenly, keeping the sense of utter relief from showing anywhere on her person. She wasn’t sure why she was so relieved; he was still engaged. Engaged in an arranged marriage with someone he would rather die than marry but still engaged. Something about that felt wrong, yet that little spark of hope returned. If he could get away from it, there was still a chance…

Don’t be a fucking homewrecker.

Was it actually homewrecking if Valentin wanted nothing to do with the relationship? Would she be doing him a favor? Why were arranged marriages still a thing, anyway? That had to be illegal in some sense.

But what if Jocelyn was nice? What if she was just minding her own business, trying to make the arrangement work, and he was badmouthing it in such a way? Odette would feel awful if that were the case.

However, Valentin seemed relatively level-headed and reasonable. She couldn’t imagine him being so vehemently opposed to the arrangement and hating her so much if she was someone who was just trying to live her life and treated him well. Did she even know him well enough yet to make such a deep assumption? Probably not.

Maybe he hated the idea of an arranged marriage so much that he badmouthed it regardless of how nice Jocelyn might have been. Wanted nothing to do with her because of her ties to the concept. Odette could see that happening because she’d probably be in the same boat if she were in his shoes. If that was what was happening, though, would it still be a case of homewrecking? Would she be a bad person for pursuing it?

As if she needed another thing to stress over right now. Dammit.

“So that’s why you’d rather risk damaging your expensive ass phone than take her call.”

“Now you’re getting it.” He let out another chuckle, far more aggravated than the first, as he fiddled with a few more pieces. “I think I’d prefer to play friends with Dorien than talk to her spoiled rotten ass. Absolutely insufferable.”

“More insufferable than Dorien?” she asked, trying not to sound hopeful.

She was met with a deadpan look from him, and her heart stopped for the second time. “She chewed me out because I wore a tie that didn’t match her dress to an event. Then quite literally tattled on me to her father, and as a result, I was sternly spoken to about ‘keeping an image.’”

“Oh my gods, Valentin, how could you not wear the right tie? What the hell were you thinking? Now everyone’s going to think you’re a knob,” Odette said sarcastically. That earned her a smirk.

“Yeah, well, I just got a new Hermes tie I wanted to test out; how the fuck was I supposed to know she wanted to wear purple that day specifically?” he replied, shaking his head.

“Read her mind, of course. I hear it’s easy.”

“She definitely thinks it’s something I know how to do,” Valentin said. “Except, even if I could, I still don’t think I could keep up with her nonsense. She expects me to be unconditionally in love with her. But she continuously acts like the world revolves around her and throws a fit when I can’t be bothered. Mind reading wouldn’t make her shit attitude any better.”

“Sounds familiar,” Odette chided.

“I’m sure you know firsthand what that’s like,” Valentin agreed. “Except you’re much better at playing the part than I am. I have no issue indicating that my hatred for her defies gravity.”

“That must be nice. I’d love to tell Dorien to go fuck himself. And he probably would.”

“That’s well within the realm of possibility,” Valentin said with a light laugh. “Unfortunately, the spectacles of my bitter distaste do nothing to ward her off. They just give me lectures about ‘what’s best for the families’ and every bit of nonsense I couldn’t care less about.”

In that small emotional whirlwind, Odette realized that the last name ‘Delsarte’ was indeed familiar to her. “She’s from one of the families that are helping yours with this whole conspiracy thing, right?”

He nodded. “They felt that unification would be powerful, even though our whole operation is underground, so I never understood what difference it made. It was more because Jocelyn can’t take no for an answer, and her father is fantastic at shmoozing mine.”

Blinking, Odette blindly reached for another puzzle piece. “What, she was into you, and you didn’t return the feelings, so she told her daddy to tell yours to make you suck it up?”

He hesitated before bobbing his head in thought. “Close. More like…I initiated an experimental fling that I made abundantly clear was only meant to be a fling, and she read further into it than she should have. Used it as leverage to convince our families a union would be great, and here we are.”

Valentin turned his gaze back to the puzzle as soon as he finished, making it evident he wasn’t proud of that fact. It both filled Odette with sympathy and a sense of anger. Being given firm boundaries and stomping on them so heinously? Who the fuck was she?

“That’s…” she stammered, trying to breathe through the throb in her lower back. “I’m so sorry.” She didn’t know what else to say. She didn’t want to make the conversation deeper than it had already gotten. She felt like she was imposing on him too much as it was.

Instead of doubling down on the apology, she decided to commiserate instead. “She sounds like a fucking nightmare.”

“That’s an insult to nightmares everywhere,” Valentin scoffed. “Taught me a valuable lesson about useless flings, I’ll say that much.”

Stop poking it. Let it die; you’re making this worse than it needs to be. Odette knew everything she needed to know. Jocelyn was trash, Valentin hated her, and if he was telling the truth, there was no harm in continuing to crush on him like she was. She should just leave it at that, but her desire to know more about who Valentin Ménétries actually was overpowering. What were his flings like? What did they entail? Was he…in one currently?

“Well, if you said you didn’t want anything more, she should have respected that. Fling or not,” she said.

“You’re right, yes. But I can’t help but feel like I did it to myself.”

If he were casting the line, taking the bait wouldn’t be bad, right? “That’s not how that works.”

“Perhaps not. But there’s a nuance to it.”

“Nuance or not, consent is consent, which also applies to marriage.” She was getting worked up again. She barely knew him, and yet she was seething on his behalf. It must have made itself clear somewhere in her tone because he recoiled slightly.

Odette sighed, settling back against the chair. “I’m sorry, I don’t want to keep pressing the matter and make you–”

“No, don’t apologize,” he replied. “It’s…actually cathartic to talk to a clueless party about it.” He paused, his expression falling. “I mean, not that you’re clueless in general, I just meant in terms of the situation, you’re–”

“It’s okay, I got what you meant,” she said.

“I swear I wasn’t calling you stupid, I just–” he insisted.

“I know you weren’t calling me stupid, you’re–” Odette tried to assure him.

“--find it remarkably easy to explain these things–”

“--more than welcome to discuss this–”

“--to you.”

“--with me.”

Odette fell silent as she realized she was talking over him, and it seemed Valentin quieted down for the same reason. They stared at each other for what felt like hours before Odette made the first move and returned to doing the puzzle.

“I was just trying to say, I don’t mind if you want to talk my ear off, especially about something like that. If anything, your willingness to talk at all just makes you seem more trustworthy.”

The sigh he released was relieved. “I appreciate that. But I also don’t want to bog you down with my life story.”

Was there a way to tell him he could do that as much as he wanted without her sounding desperate? She decided not to take the chance. “To be fair, I was the one who asked.”

“That you did, but I asked you to ask.”

“Do you really want to play this game with me?” she asked, narrowing her eyes.

“I’ll play whatever you want me to play, Miss Cinq-Mars.”

She decided to ignore the dopamine-laced chills that his response sent through her body. At least the quietness that lingered between them that time around was much less awkward.

“Then answer my question, sir. Nuance, you said?” she urged, fitting another puzzle piece.

Another sigh, this one long and heavy. “It’s a lot.”

A roll of thunder sent a vibration up through the floors, and Odette gestured toward the patio door. “I have time.”

It was a good while before Valentin spoke again. He seemingly took that time to piece his thoughts together because he stopped fiddling with the puzzle. “If you must know, as I was growing up, I was under the impression that…” he trailed off and clicked his tongue. “Sorry, this might be TMI.”

She shrugged in response and waved him on. Nodding, he continued.

“I grew up under the impression that the act of having sexual feelings was …not the norm.”

Odette tilted her head. “Okay…”

“And it didn’t become clear to me that it actually was the norm until I went away to school. All boys school, so it was all any of the idiots ever talked about,” he recalled disdainfully. “But, I never changed. I remained…pretty set in my ways.”

She tucked her palm under her chin. “You’re…asexual, then, right?”

Damn, she thought regretfully. The feeling deepened when she watched him nod.

“Right. And I wasn’t exactly familiar with the sexual spectrum at that point in time, so for a while, I figured there was just something wrong with me. I decided the way to fix it was to just push through the ick of it and–”

“--do the deed with a bunch of people,” Odette finished.

Valentin’s smile was crooked, and that was the only indication she needed to know she was correct.

“And Jocelyn ended up being one of those people,” she added.

“I was…desperate. And that desperation landed me in her bed despite knowing damn well she was sick in the head,” he huffed. “Not my proudest moment. None of it was, really. None of it did anything.”

Now, Odette just felt bad. Here she was absolutely lusting after him when ‘lust’ as a whole wasn’t something he had the ability to feel. She really was disgusting.

“There’s nothing wrong with you. There’s nothing wrong with not liking sex,” she said. And she meant that from every angle. “I’m sorry you felt like you had to wrestle through all that. But that doesn’t excuse Jocelyn for forcing you into marriage.”

“No, you’re right. But I can’t help but wonder what would have been had I just come to terms with it sooner. Maybe I wouldn’t be ensnared in her delusion,” he mused. “I’m perfectly happy with myself now, which only makes the whole setup of a marriage even more repulsive.”

“You didn’t know any better,” she said.

“No, I didn’t. But, I never fully learned, which is also part of the issue. Like…remember how I told you I’d taken Lust before?” he asked.

It took her a second, but she got it. “Oh, no.

“I had the antidote, drank it after every outing I had to act the part, but after a while, I stupidly decided to forgo it,” Valentin explained. “Sacrilege effects get stronger after every use, so…I figured I’d give it a shot. Even after everything. There was still a part of me that thought it was possible.”

She nodded slowly, giving herself time to sit with his confession. Giving herself a moment to decide how she wanted to retaliate.

“Can I be honest?” she questioned. Her lower back tingled.

“Please.”

“That is fucking braindead.” As much as she wished he had the capability to feel what she was feeling, there was no world where that was worth getting high on some deadly drug.

Valentin laughed outright, which she decided was a better reaction than him getting mad at her. He rubbed at his forehead as he leaned back against his chair. “You sound like my team and my brother. I already got the tongue-lashing, so don’t trouble yourself.”

“I don’t know, I think I want to trouble myself,” Odette snapped. She was shocked at why she felt so strongly about it, but she figured it was stemming from her infatuation.

Laughing again, this time more nervously, Valentin shrugged his shoulders. “If you feel it’s necessary, be my guest. I definitely deserve it, but it probably won’t be anything I haven’t heard before.”

She decided to test that out. “Noel might be better to talk to about this than me, he loves this type of shit. But you know it’s called a fucking spectrum for a reason, right? And it’s not concrete? It'll shift if your brain decides there’s room for a shift. If it doesn’t, you’re fine where you are. Leave the psyche-melting drugs alone.”

Some of what she said must have struck something within him because it gave him apparent pause. For the briefest second, he shifted his gaze toward the ground as if in deep thought.

“Is that something Noel and I should be worried about going forward?” she went on.

Valentin cut his eyes back to her. “What? No,” he replied. Odette almost cringed at how offended he sounded but held her ground. “This was two years ago, Miss Cinq-Mars. We’re long past the need to worry about it. It’s much more manageable to tame booze, anyway.”

Crossing her arms, Odette slumped in her chair a little. She wanted to be cross with him for his poor decisions, but the longer she beheld his aggravated gaze, the more she softened up. Fuck him for being so gorgeous.

“Fine. I’ll take that,” she said. “But, one more thing? Stop calling me that.”

Valentin tilted his head in concern. “Calling you what? Miss Cinq-Mars?”

“I called you Clovis when you were Clovis and now I call you Valentin. I would like you to call me by my first name as well,” she said.

For a second, she could have sworn she saw the apples of his cheeks flush red. With a few timed blinks, it was gone. “I’m…” he tried to say. “I apologize, I didn’t mean to offend you. I was just trying to keep things professional, is all.”

Shrugging, Odette pushed herself to sit up straight again. “Yeah, well,” she said in a breath, grabbing a few more pieces and pulling them over to her. “No need for that. You know bullshit about me, and I know bullshit about you. I think that means we’re friends, and friends call each other by their first names.”

He blinked at her like he was dumbfounded, but that look soon gave way into a genuine smile.

“Alright then, Odette. We’re definitely friends,” he declared. Hearing him say her first name again caused a comforting warmth to flow through her chest.

She could still be slightly in love with him. That didn’t need to go away.

No sooner had she thought that did she reach over to grab another puzzle piece, only for her hand to meet Valentin’s as he reached in the same direction. They lingered there together before Odette came back to her senses and hastily pulled it away.

Too soon, she thought.

As Valentin recoiled his hand, she watched him turn it palm up on the table. The unmistakable sight of scar tissue caught her eye, and she felt herself lean over to get a better look before she could stop. He must have caught her because she flinched from her mini trance at the sound of him clearing his throat.

“Oh, you saw my scar?” he asked. He held his hand up to let her look better at it. There was indeed a long, narrow string of raised, pinkish skin tearing through the natural lines of his palm. He smiled awkwardly before turning his wrist to look at it himself. “I was trying my skills at couples skating; long time ago. Fell while I was doing a lift with my partner, and her blade caught my hand. Seven stitches,” he said, running one of his fingers over it.

“Ouch,” Odette replied, clenching her teeth. “Stitches in the palm hardly sounds like a good time.” Not that stitches in general were a good time, but she was trying to keep the conversation going.

“I definitely do not recommend it. The scar’s a good talking point, though,” he said, tucking his affected hand under his chin, that crooked smile stretching into something far more suave.

So hot. So fucking hot. Is he flirting? Is that something he would even do? I don’t…

“I-I’m sorry,” she stuttered. She cleared her throat in an attempt to keep herself sane. “I didn’t mean to stare, I also have a little palm scar myself.” She raised her right hand, showing him her still relatively-fresh injury. “Not as old or as big as yours is, but still.”

Valentin leaned in, eyeing the old gash with interest. Don’t blush. Don’t blush, Odette urged herself. Could she even stop herself from blushing? Did that even matter right now?

“Still an ouch,” he said solemnly. “I assume you lucked out in the sutures department, though?”

Rolling her eyes, Odette reached for a couple more puzzle pieces. “Yeah, it was just a superficial cut from some glass,” she said.

“Let me guess, juggling wine bottles?” Valentin said.

Smirking, she shook her head. “If I’m being honest, I was pretty drunk. But I went out to eat with Dorien and broke a cup. I tried to pick it up…and…”

Odette’s voice slowly trailed off as a shrill ringing began to fill her ears. Her eyes fell on the puzzle, but she wasn’t focused on it. She’d become caught on what was going on inside her head. How what she was trying to tell him didn’t…feel right. Didn’t sit with her.

Brief yet vivid flashes of herself picking up the glass crossed her mind’s eye. A perfectly intact glass, full of wine. She sipped it. It was fine. Dorien spoke. Her grip on it tightened too much for a moment, then CRACK.

Broken. Blood. But…no.

That wasn’t what she had remembered. That wasn’t what she’d gone around the past couple of weeks thinking had happened. She’d broken it, tried to do something with it, and gotten cut. Solene had gotten drunk, too, right? That’s what she remembered, right?

But, Solene didn’t drink. So why had she been so convinced Solene was drunk?

Why was she suddenly recalling bits and pieces of a completely different scenario?

She was standing up, backing away from the table without realizing her legs still worked. The ringing was getting far more intense, and the corners of her vision blurred. She pushed the heels of her hands into her eyes, hoping that would stop her swimming sight and the noise, but she found no such reprieve.

“Mis–Odette?” Valentin called, the concern all too apparent in his voice. She heard him stand and soon felt his presence at her side. “Odette, what’s wrong? Are you alright?”

Moving her hands off her eyes, Odette pressed her fingertips into her temples, cutting her wavering gaze to Valentin’s worried face.

“I lied. That’s not what happened. I mean, I thought that’s what happened, but–”

He raised a silencing hand, though he moved cautiously. “I need you to slow down,” he said. “What do you mean you thought that’s what happened?”

“I mean, I remember breaking a glass and trying to pick it up, but I don’t think that’s what happened, but I don’t know why I don’t think that’s what happened because I’m…I’m so sure I remember breaking something, and being drunk, and–”

Her breathing was picking up, and her heartbeat drowned out the ringing. Why was this making her panic? What was there to panic about? What if she’d just gotten so blackout drunk she didn’t remember? Why did it feel so wrong?

She was momentarily relieved by the sudden look of understanding that crossed Valentin’s eyes, only for her anxiety to surge as she started to wonder how he might have realized what was happening.

“Okay, okay,” he said. Both of his hands were raised now, and it looked like he was going to put them on her shoulders but stopped short. She might have been disappointed if she weren’t so focused on keeping herself together. “Take a breath; you’re okay. Let me go find something, alright?”

“Find what?” She didn’t mean to sound so forceful, but it came out that way. Valentin, fortunately, didn't look any less deterred.

“I might know why you’re having conflictions and why you’re so riled up. Give me two seconds, I’ll be right back,” he said. He was backing away before he’d even finished talking, and Odette watching him skip-run down the hall Noel had disappeared down.

She numbly went after him, miraculously finding the will to ignore his instructions. She aimlessly followed him past a few doors and to a roomy, luxurious master suite. She was running on autopilot again, so all she could do as she stood in the doorway was watch Valentin rummage through the pockets of an expensive-looking coat hanging on a hook on the wall and eventually his night tables.

Valentin grumbled a string of expletives that were barely too low for her to hear clearly, but he soon found what he was looking for, as indicated by how he roughly yanked something from a drawer and kicked it shut. He stomped up to her shortly after, brows knit in dismay. “This’ll have to do,” he hissed to himself.

He held an object out to her. It resembled a shot glass with a cap on it, and a large ‘2’ was engraved on the front.

“Alright, I know this is suspicious as hell, but I need you to down this whole thing. If I’m right, it’s going to help you,” he said, shoving it into her hands.

Odette eyed it through her unsettled blinking. “What am I looking at?”

“Second-degree Vice Dust antidote,” Valentin said. “You’re showing signs of a partial jog. If you have been given anything from a second-degree down, this will set your mind straight again.”

Not even a few hours ago were they talking about this Vice Dust and antidotes and all of that nonsense, and now she was standing there with said antidote in her hand. She must have been silently staring at the glass for a long time because Valentin finally set one of his hands on her shoulder, causing her to flinch back to attention.

“Please trust me. You said so yourself; we’re friends, right? Friends help friends,” he insisted. The tender sincerity behind his words and his matching look was calming, even for a moment. “It’s all I have on me, so I just hope you don’t need anything higher.”

She stared at the vial again, trying to pick anything off of it that might have told her she shouldn’t be ingesting it. The glass was spotless, and the liquid was clear. If she didn’t know any better, she’d have thought it was water or a shot of vodka. Maybe that was all it actually was, and the concept of the antidote was just meant to be some sort of placebo.

Her raging theories aside, minus the ‘2,’ nothing about it was imposing. It was simply a shot. A shot that might stop the ringing in her ears.

In a quick motion, she pulled the top off the glass and threw her head back as she downed it. The substance tasted…clean. Milky, but clean. Something about it was actually quite soothing. It felt like she was flushing a burn with cool water.

“Did it work? Anything different?” Valentin pressed after a few seconds. She couldn’t respond because she was too preoccupied with the instant results.

I wanted to ask you about the manslaughter case you were involved in last year. Well, I guess it was more of a self-defense killing, considering the victim raped you, right? So that makes you the victim, I suppose…

She got mad. So mad. Squeezed the glass until it broke. And then…

I did say the ride would be easier if you’d put her back in her ball. Hopefully, I have enough.

What he blew at her. It burned so badly. But it was gone as quickly as the stinging pain peppered her face, leaving her feeling dazed and horrified. Solene too. Both of them were none the wiser.

“H-he…he…he got me all riled up. Mentioned…a thing that happened, then…blew some shit in my face when I refused to talk to him. And he did it to Solene, too, that’s why he wanted me to put her away,” she said numbly. “Oh gods…oh gods, oh gods, oh–”

The numbness was interrupted by a sudden explosion of pure fury. Molten wrath traveled up from the small of her back before taking every last nerve in her body in a violent grip. Before Odette knew it, she was gritting her teeth so hard she was bound to break a tooth if she didn’t let up. But she didn’t care at the moment. Not as she lobbed the shot at the floor.

“Mother fucker!” she shrieked over the sound of shattering glass.

Hey!” Valentin shouted in protest. She didn’t hear him well, though. Not as she turned and paced back toward the kitchen, hands balled into tight fists.

“I’m gonna fucking kill him!

She wasn’t sure how, she wasn’t sure when, but she was certain that she was going to ruin him. One way or another. It was pouring outside, but she’d driven her motorcycle in the rain before. She could go home, grab the rest of her team and even her gun, and–

She felt fingers wrap around her forearm and was forced to face a very steely-looking Valentin. If she were in any other state of mind, she’d have been perturbed by seeing him look at her like that, but all it did was make her rage surge.

“Excuse me, what the hell was that?” he groused. “I understand that you’re rightfully upset, but defacing my property is not something I’m going to condone.”

“You think I give the slightest fuck right now? The creep drugged me, and you’re concerned about a shattered glass?” she seethed, yanking her arm out of his grasp. “And don’t touch me.

She watched through her reddening vision as his features scrunched up as if he were studying her accusingly. It was the smallest and quickest of changes, but one that she had a hard time missing. So much for ‘not having any desire to scrutinize her.’

“Rest assured, I can vacuum up the glass,” he said. “Your well-being is far more important to me, but I don’t think breaking shit in my home is going to make the situation any better. So I’m going to advise you to calm down before we continue this conversation.”

Odette bared her teeth at him.“What makes you think I want to calm down? What about this is calming?” she questioned, her voice rising again as she closed the already tight gap between them. “Dorien screwed with my head; how do you expect me to sit here and let that slide?”

Her glare bore into him with the might of a rabid mightyena, but Valentin stood his ground. He held her gaze as he crossed his arms, his eyes twinkling with a puzzled light.

“Of course, I don’t expect you to let it slide, but I do expect you to take a deep breath and try to consider how to approach fucking him over rationally. Your anger isn’t unwarranted, but you have to understand how delicate our situation is. Letting anger dictate how you go forward isn’t going to help one bit.”

Odette responded with a scathing laugh. Fuck delicacy; fuck pussyfooting around Dorien and his shit. He had the heavy enough hand to insight her wrath, then drug her, so she forgot about it? All chances to be careful went out the window; it was war now.

“With all due offense, screw that,” she hissed. “I’ll go bash his head in by myself.”

She didn’t give Valentin a chance to say anything before she stomped around him and headed toward the front door. Unfortunately, she didn’t make it very far before he stepped in front of her, effectively blocking her path.

“Move,” she spat.

“Respectfully? No,” Valentin replied. “Above everything, the storm’s only gotten worse, and driving in your state is going to compound your chances of getting into an accident.”

Flaring her nostrils, she began to dig her nails into the palms of her hands. “Valentin, if you don’t get the absolute fuck out of my way, I’m gonna punch you.”

She was pleased with how startled he looked. His wrinkled expression and questioning tilt of his head made his shock perfectly apparent. He hesitantly opened his mouth.

“Is it normal for friends to want to punch friends? That doesn’t seem like you.”

Her breath hitched as the force of a thousand expletives suddenly got caught in her throat.

“But, if that’s going to ease your mind, have at it,” he continued with a huff. “Just be sure to aim for my jaw if my face is your desired target. Right side, preferably.” He pointed at the right half of his jaw. “I chew with my left.”

It was unreal how nonchalant he sounded. Her entire being stalled on what to do next, but a wave of exhaustion washed over her and left her feeling winded. There, she managed to start returning to her senses and realized what she’d just done.

Screaming at him, breaking stuff in his room, threatening him; was she fucking crazy?

“I—“

But, no, she didn’t have the bandwidth to be mortified at her own behavior. Not when she was still reeling at her newly uncovered memories. As the red in her vision receded and the world around her swam, she buried her face in her hands.

“I-I just–” she tried, “I…don’t…how did that even happen? How did I have…absolutely no recollection? I felt nervous around him right after it happened, but…how? How did I not know any better?”

“That’s the Vice Dust’s power. It completely overrode whatever you’d witnessed when he used it on you; there was no room for you to remember anything different. Unfortunately, though, muscle memory is a little different. Your brain forgot, but your body remembered,” Valentin said. She wished she could appreciate how gently he was speaking, but she was on another plane of thought. “It was just reacting accordingly despite you not mentally knowing any better.”

“Gods,” Odette gasped, dragging her hands down the sides of her face. “Holy shit, he fucking drugged us. He rewired our brains, he fucking drugged me and my partner, I’m gonna blow his fucking head off his body, holy shit, I’m–”

Now both of Valentin’s hands were on her shoulders, and he had leaned down so he was at her eye level. She was so out of it that she didn’t even recall him grabbing her again, and it took her several seconds to realize she was nose-to-nose with him. “Odette, listen to me.”

It was hard not to with him so close, despite the fact she felt involuntary tears blurring the corners of her vision.

“You’re okay. I know it’s really scary, but you’re okay. You’re safe right now. Breathe,” he said.

But she couldn’t. Her airways felt constricted under the revelation that the antidote brought, and no matter what she did, she felt like she couldn’t get enough in. It wasn’t until she felt Valentin squeeze her shoulders that she focused enough to take a deep breath, which she held for a few seconds before exhaling slowly.

“There you go. I know you know breathing exercises, Miss Singer, so keep it going.”

She did as she was told. The breaths eventually started coming in a lot easier. It was the only thing that was stopping the lightheadedness and keeping her from passing out. However, as she fully returned to her senses, she became acutely aware of how close Valentin was to her. He was gripping her tightly but tenderly at the same time. Keeping her from jumping to that angry high again.

Something on her face must have let him know that she had come back down because she watched his expression fall and his fingers loosened.

“Sorry, I know you said not to touch you, but I—“ he started to say, and she shook her head.

“No, it’s fine,” she assured him with a shallow breath. “I appreciate…” she shook her head again, “I’m sorry. I’m so sorry, I know that doesn’t do anything for my attitude or my mess, I just–I’m such an…I’m not really in a–”

He offered her a gracious half-smile. “It’s forgiven. Like I said, I can vacuum it up. And I think you’re well within your right to be that upset. But it’s not productive.”

That’s the understatement of the fucking century, she thought in embarrassment. At least her mind had cleared enough to where she could hear her own thoughts. Progress. Breathing really did help sometimes.

Nodding in agreement, she was suddenly working up the courage to say what else had come to mind. Swallowing hard, she tensed her shoulders. “Can I tell you something else?” she asked.

Valentin nodded. “Yes, of course.”

Another breath. Another moment of trying to make sure when she spoke, she didn’t sound like a fucking crazy person. “I think there’s more than that,” she began. “When I ran into Dorien again, I’d completely forgotten what he did for a living until he said it, and the hate was…instant. As soon as he reminded me. And-and Noel—” her voice strained under the weight her chest was under, “was telling me a friend of ours asked me out multiple times in school, and—”

Valentin nodded. “Denis, right?”

She shot him a wide-eyed look.

“They were talking about it at the club last night.”

She was shaking her head before she realized it. “Valentin, I don’t remember that. I don’t remember any of it.”

His expression collapsed onto itself. “Nothing?”

“I-I remember the date I had with Dorien, and I had…so much hate for him when he reminded me what he did for work, but…everything before that is still…”

She didn’t want to ask what came to mind next but didn’t know what else to say.

“What did he do to me?”

Valentin looked about as lost as she did, which was no help in helping her panic subside. His mouth was open like he wanted to say everything he could to calm her down, but nothing came out at first. All he could do was shake his head.

“I don’t…know,” he finally said. “Fuck. Okay. Then you definitely need a three, I just…dammit.”

Before he could fall into another string of curses, footsteps sounded down the hallway to the bedroom. A groggy-looking Noel stepped into view, rubbing his eye as he was coming out of a yawn.

“Yo, who the hell is yelling this late? What’s going on?” he called, still blinking sleep out of his eyes. It didn’t take very long for the grogginess to flee him entirely. As soon as he met Odette’s eyes, all of his tired limbs seemed to jolt to attention. He quirked a dubious brow as he watched Valentin step back too.

“Dee,” Noel asked slowly. “What’s the–”

He could barely finish his sentence before Odette rushed to him and hugged him tightly. He didn’t hesitate to return it, resting his chin against the crown of her head. Feeling his arms around her did heaps more for her nerves, and she immediately relaxed into him. Her body quivered against the warring senses of panic and ease she felt.

“Hey, hey,” he said, concerned. “What’s the matter? You’re shaking.”

“That stupid fucking Vice Dust shit,” Odette grumbled into the fabric of his jacket.

There was a pause on his end, and she felt his chest seize. “What about it?”

She pulled her face away to peer up at him. “Dorien used it on me,” she told him. “That date? I didn’t get drunk, neither did Solene. He asked me about Deschamps, and I broke the fucking cup myself. He wiped my brain about it on the boat back. I remember it all; the antidote works.”

It was hard to make Noel mad. He’d always been a very happy, very easygoing, albeit boisterous personality. So when any form of rage crossed his face, Odette always knew it was serious. On her, it was normal. On him, it was so out of the ordinary, it was frightening. A violent shine took hold of his hazel eyes, his jaw clenched, and the vein in his forehead popped as his grip on her tightened.

Anger didn’t wear him. He wore anger.

“Are you fucking serious?” he ground out.

He didn’t give her a chance to respond before he glared at Valentin. “What the fuck are we going to do about this? There clearly needs to be something done, he drugged her.”

“Noel, I hear you,” Valentin responded calmly. “You both have every right to be upset, and I am just as appalled as you are, but–”

As Valentin spoke, Noel slowly let go of Odette to approach him, closing the gap between them faster than the former could speak. Despite how quickly Noel popped his personal bubble, Valentin had to have been a wall in another life, because he once again remained rooted in place as he crossed his arms.

“No, ‘appalled’ isn’t a strong enough word. I’m gonna fucking kill him. Where does he live?”

Valentin sighed deeply. “Noel,” he said. “Again. You have every right to be fuming, but we need to be–”

“There’s no ‘we’ here. You don’t have to do anything, just tell me where he fucking lives. You can wait in the car if you’re concerned about providing security or whatever, but I’m not playing this game.”

“I’d be right there with you if the circumstances were different. We’ve been tailing him for five years, do you really think that’s something that hasn’t crossed my mind?” Valentin asked incredulously. He held his arms out to his sides before jabbing a finger in Noel’s direction. “As much as I’d be overjoyed to pop a bullet in his head, that’s not going to end well for anyone here. Not you, not me, and especially not Odette. You should be mad, terrified even, but don’t let that cloud your judgment. Take a breath, too.”

Noel didn’t have an immediate comeback, instead silently pressing his lips into a tight line as he kept his burning eyes on Valentin’s. Odette took the pause to approach again and put her hand on Noel’s shoulder, and he flinched at the feel of her before whipping around to face her. His look softened as soon as he saw her, and he forced something of a pained smile.

“I don’t know how you do this all the time,” he said jokingly, though it sounded like he was struggling. “My heart’s racing.”

He pulled her into another hug that was far tighter than the first.

“It’s not fun, I can promise you that,” she replied in a whisper, her voice shaking more than she intended. She allowed the hug to linger for a long while before she disclosed what was left.

“No fucking way…” Noel muttered through clenched teeth. She felt him bury his face in her hair.

“That antidote would only jog anything erased by a second-degree use or lower. If that didn’t completely reform her memories, somebody used a three on her at some point,” Valentin said.

“And you don’t have an antidote for that?” Noel replied, turning his head toward him again.

“That’s what I looked for first,” Valentin said. “I swore I swiped one from the lab to have it here, but I must have returned it at some point.”

“So when can you get another one?” Odette queried.

Rubbing his neck, Valentin paced toward the kitchen. “The issue is, threes are criminally difficult to make,” he said, approaching the fridge again. He pulled back the double doors and began to search the door shelves somewhat frantically. “That’s the highest caliber power, so it makes the antidote develop even harder, and as far as I remember…we might be between batches.”

It was obvious he couldn’t find what he was looking for because he soon dejectedly nudged them shut again. “I can go down to our lab tomorrow and see about getting one for you as soon as possible, but that’s all I have right now.”

“What, you can’t slide her a one? Two plus one equals three?” Noel was loosening his hug again to stand upright, one of his hands falling to his hip.

“I’m pretty sure that if it worked like that, we wouldn’t be having this conversation,” Odette scoffed.

“I just…” Noel started to say. The words got caught on his tongue, and he indicated his frustration with a grunt as he sent her an infuriated glance. “Why would Dorien even go there? Even if he didn’t know you have a temper, how the fuck did he think that was appropriate and not going to garner a negative response?” he asked. “I-I mean…Is he stupid? Does he keep that shit on hand when he fucks up with a girl? I’m so fucking…”

There was nothing else to say because there weren’t really more words for it. Except, so she thought. Valentin raised a hand, alerting both her and Noel’s attention before he approached her again.

“I hate to interrupt, but Odette,” he began, “I need you to be honest with me, right here, right now.”

Her brows lowered, and she let go of Noel to cross her arms. “Shoot.”

Valentin took a deep, readying breath. “I have my suspicions and hypotheses, and I’ve been biting my tongue until now, but now I really feel the need to ask.” He hesitated. “Is there any chance that…you might be the reason Enigma might not have access to Wrath?”

The first thing she could instinctively do was look at Noel, who appeared as if he was about to get upset all over again. But, when it looked like he wouldn’t move, she met Valentin’s eyes again.

“Is there something you haven’t told me? Now’s the time,” he urged.

Honesty was the goal here. And that photo of Florent Lambourne popped into her head for the millionth time that night. As did everything else she’d discovered throughout the day…

“The tea party,” she said. “When that bat thing tried to come at me, and I fainted. Right before I went down, something…spoke. In my head. It was…my voice, but it also wasn’t. And that thing just ran, I don’t even know how. Then when I yelled at Dorien, it was because he was trying to…figure out how I did that, I guess? I thought it had something to do with Enora all day, but…”

“She was nowhere near you when that happened,” Noel finished.

“You also said something earlier about…also getting sick around Arcean relics. I didn’t press because you were overwhelmed at the moment, but what did that mean?” Valentin continued, not taking any time to dwell on the information. Just moving forward.

Her gaze fell to the floor despite her attempt to keep eye contact with him. She hadn’t even remembered that she’d said that out loud until now. And now, there was no reason to talk her way around it.

“I…I used to get nauseous whenever I went to Arcean church for services. It wasn’t frequent; once a year at most. But it always resulted in me losing my guts into a toilet or bush, and—“

“Whoa, I didn’t know that happened every time you went,” Noel gasped, shooting her a quizzical look.

“I didn’t think much of it until I learned that’s why Dorien doesn’t like going,” she said quickly. “I didn’t think it could have been anything weird aside from a purely bizarre coincidence…”

Noel’s look only grew more puzzled, until it suddenly dispersed into a loose look of panic. Something had clearly dawned on him. “Oh my gods, wait,” he gasped. “Your astral shrine. You don’t use Arcean plates, they give you headaches.” He reached out to grab her by the arm, squeezing it with the same level of unease he held in his voice. “Churches make you sick, holy relics make you sick. Dee, oh my gods.

Not that the facts weren’t already lining up, but they were wedging themselves in place, despite her trying to avoid all the obvious. The anger issues. The symptoms being in line with blood type possession. Her eyes. The resemblance to Florent. Dorien trying to change her thoughts, trying to upset her.

They’d crossed the coincidence threshold now. She'd known, deep down, all along. But, now there was no way to deny it.

Valentin said the words before she thought them. “Well, then I’m pretty certain. I think you’re Enigma’s missing Wrath. And they want it back.”

***​

“I will say this, this is a comfy ass bed. Swanna down is fucking crazy, I might need one of these for myself,” Noel was saying. It was amazing Odette could hear it through the lasting effects of the night's bombshells buzzing in her ears.

She didn’t bother moving from her spot at the edge of the bed and simply nodded with an added "mm" because she couldn't muster up much more. She knew Noel was trying to keep things light, but it was so hard to appreciate his attempts when the weight of revelations was practically pulling her to the floor. She felt like she couldn't move. All she could do at the moment was stare at the wall.

I think you're Enigma's missing Wrath. And they want it back.

She wanted to be taken aback. She wanted to be anguished. She wanted to be horrified. She wanted to feel something that a normal person would feel upon finding out their father is a cult leader and that they're possessed by the embodiment of a deadly sin. But, she just felt empty. Neutral. As if her mind and body had already accepted it as fact. Perhaps she'd exhausted every emotion she could feel about it in the single moment she'd processed it all to be true. Or she'd just grown really adept at swallowing down those hard emotions. Either way, neither felt particularly good. However, she supposed that either was better than immediately falling apart over it. And as horrible as it sounded, she'd managed to get work past something she was willing to consider far worse. She felt relatively prepared to handle a monkey wrench like this.

“Hey.”

She didn’t need to turn her head. Noel was already crawling up behind her to sit at her side. He rubbed her shoulder, and she let her eyes fall shut.

“Penny for your thoughts?”

“You’re going to need a lot of pennies,” she said back after a long while. That got a quiet chuckle out of him. She opened her eyes in time to catch his concerned look, and he sighed.

"I will say," he said gently, "you are taking this remarkably well. But I can't tell if it's in stride or because you're shutting down, so I just need to hear it from you."

Her snicker was delayed. For a second, all she could do was shake her head. "Your guess is as good as mine," she said. "I think I've just hit a shock threshold and my body's decided it doesn't have anything left to do but quietly take it all in."

Noel nodded. "I'm not a psych by any means, but that sounds completely and totally fair."

She went back to staring at the wall, relishing in the feeling of Noel hands running across her upper back.

"I know it's a really stupid question, but are you okay? Like, full disclosure?" he eventually asked. She exhaled softly through her nose and allowed her eyes to shut again.

"I'm...functioning," she said. "Functioning is better than losing it over something that you can't really help." She aimed her gaze back down at him, just in time to catch him looking at her with that tender, sincere look he liked to give her when he was really worried about her. In other cases, it would only serve to fuel her annoyance. Right now, she needed it more than ever.

"Getting upset about it isn't going to change it. This is the hand I have, so I have to play it. It just is," she said. Despite her worries about her oddly zen state of mind, she truly did believe that.

Noel's worry didn't fade away, and she hadn't expected it to. But, he at least appeared to accept the answer. "You're fucking unreal, you know that? I mean, really. I can't even believe I know you."

The warmest smile curled his lips, one that set her heart racing, and he pushed himself up to look her in the eye.

“I know this is probably not a good time, but I’m really sorry. For what I said earlier," he said, the smile waning down into something more apologetic. "I didn’t mean anything bad by it, I was just trying to keep the mood up, but we both know I’m ass at thinking before I speak.”

“I forgive you,” she said, breathless. “I’m sorry for how I reacted, it wasn’t–”

He was shaking his head. “No, you were right. You must be on another plane of thinking right now and me making a stupid comment probably didn’t help too much.”

“And this is the part where I say you were right because–”

She stopped talking when he abruptly grabbed her wrists. Not roughly; it was more of a tender, reassuring hold. “It’s okay,” he said, an easy grin gracing his lips despite the notch in his brow. “We can go back and forth about it all night, but really. I appreciate it, but you do not owe me an apology. It’s okay.”

He only let go of her when she nodded, deciding to take his words to heart.

She didn’t like yelling at him. She regretted every instance where she had raised his voice to him. Friends shouldn’t talk to each other like she sometimes spoke to him when angry. Most of the time, she wasn’t even mad at him; she was just mad, and he happened to be around. They weren’t friends who fought. Nothing worse than petty, silly arguments, at least.

He might have insisted that she didn’t need to apologize, and she did agree that what he said had bothered her and maybe warranted some choice words. But she maintained that, overall, he didn’t deserve any of that. He’d hung around her and her explosive temper for all these years and thought nothing of it, and she never wanted to give him any reason to second-guess that decision. Now that there was an evident cause for that temper, she was afraid he’d just been given the grounds to.

She didn’t want to say anything. She didn’t even want to pay attention to the thought of him breaking off their friendship. Yet, she couldn’t stop herself from going there.

“This doesn’t…change anything, right?” she asked. She couldn’t look him in the eye and instead settled for staring into her lap, messing with a loose thread on the seam of her joggers. “If…if whatever’s happening here actually is…you’re still…gonna be there, right?”

When he didn’t pipe up with a swift comeback, her muscles tensed. That was the cue for her to start running her mouth, despite the urge to hold it shut and just become one with the bed.

“Because…I know what I said about this being a me problem and that you have no reason to care, but you’re one of the only reasons I haven’t absolutely lost my shit already, but I would understand if this was getting a little too real for you because it’s already too real for me, but I don’t know, especially now, how I could keep this going without you, and–”

Noel had her in a hug before she got too far. Thank the fucking gods, she thought, burying her nose into his shoulder. Her relief was so heavy that it caused her eyes to water, and she had to close them to keep herself in order. She wasn’t a crier, but she was certainly not in the best state of mind at the moment.

“Odette, someone would have to literally kill me to get me to stop being friends with you,” he said, his cheek falling against the side of her head. “And even then, I’d come back as a drifloon or something and just bother you some more.”

She melted into his hug. Noel always had the best hugs, only second to Vienna’s, and maybe even Bernard’s or Marieanne’s. But her eyes snapped open as a question occurred to her. “Why a drifloon?”

He scoffed, though he didn’t release his hold on her. “Ghost? Flying? Good hair? Come on, man, it’s like you don’t know me at all.

Odette could hear the smile in his voice, which was enough to get her to laugh. In turn, he broke into his own fit of light giggles too, letting his arms loosen just enough for her to pull away. It felt good to laugh. It felt good to laugh with him.

She’d spent the last half hour wondering how she was ever going to recover from the never-ending whirlwind that seemed to be her life right now. But, here she was. Laughing with Noel like there was nothing wrong. Like there was no sacrilege. No Florent. No looming dark secrets that had just come to the forefront. Just them, as close as they ever were.

"You, Odette Cinq-Mars, are absolutely fucking indomitable," he said. "And I'm so lucky to call you my best friend. But please don't forget that us squishies like me are still here for you."

The sheer strength behind his words left her stomach lurching, and she felt her eyes well up with a sudden wave of emotion. The relief, the fear, the anger, it all hit her in that moment, and her body craved the release of a sob. She reached up to cover her mouth, thinking that might do something to stop the flow of tears. It didn't work, but Noel was one step ahead of her. He reached up to wipe one away before it even had a chance to fall, and she watched his eyes start to water, too.

"Oh don't you fucking dare," he said, straining his voice to keep it from cracking. "I'm supposed to be the crier between us. You're not allowed to cry." He sniffled as a tear traced the round of his face, then quickly reached up to wipe it away as he laughed to himself. "That's a lie, you can cry if you want to. I'm just not used to it but ignore me. You deserve a good cry, you fucking boulder."

"Yeah, but crying sucks," she laughed. The force of it knocked several more tears loose. She covered her mouth with both hands as her giggles collided with sobs, and before she knew it, she was doubled over into Noel's lap, laugh-crying along with him. They rolled into one another, sniffling and giggling and wiping their tears on each other sleeves for what felt like hours. Their cries eventually subsided, leaving them lying side by side on the bed and out of breath.

As Odette refilled her lungs, she felt light. She hated crying. She hated it more than most of the other things she vehemently disliked. But, she couldn't deny that she'd needed that. All her uncertainties about her state of mind and how she should be reacting had left her through those tears. She was exhausted as a result, but she felt ready to take on whatever was coming next. Wrath demon or not, Florent's spawn or not, she was ready.

Even if the feeling was only temporary, she would find comfort in it while she had it.

Pushing herself up again to wipe the rest of her face, she glanced over at Noel to see he was doing the same.

“My ugly crying face aside," he said, sniffling, "my point stands. I’m in. I’m in deep. Probably even more so now. Do you know how long I’ve been following this sacrilege shit? And suddenly, over the span of, like, a month, I’ve found out more about it than anyone else in Kalos? And you think I’m just gonna stop here? Fat fucking chance.”

Odette laughed again but was left frowning shortly after, aching for the sensation of another true smile, and maybe a laugh to go with it.

“I know, Noel, but I can’t help but feel like I just pulled you past the point of no return,” she said, pulling her glasses off her face to wipe the lenses off on her sleeve cuff. “I know you’re invested, but your only skin in the game is that you’ve mingled with a lot of potential Enigma suspects.”

“I’d say that’s still a lot of skin,” he said. “On top of that, I’ve been past the point of no return, Dee. I’ve been dealing with your temper since we were six. That’s 73% of my life. At least now we have a diagnosis,” he said. She put her glasses back on in time to catch him playfully poking her in the side with his finger, and she swatted at him lazily.

“You’re right,” she said, her tone sardonic. “I suppose possessing the very embodiment of Wrath is grounds to give someone some anger problems.” That alone already gave her so much to think about. Did Venira’s presence just involuntarily make her upset at every little thing? Was part of it her own volition? Did Venira do it on purpose? In the past, she’d been able to keep it at bay with her hobbies, but was there another way now that she knew the source?

…did Venira know what she was thinking? Always? The thought mortified her. An eldritch beast having a front-row ticket to every unsavory thought she’d had about Valentin so far? Ever?

She didn't want to think about it. Not now.

“Anyway, I get it, but still…” she continued. She didn’t want to say the words that balled up on her tongue, but they rolled out anyway. “It’s not like they’re…probably after you, you know?”

Tonguing the inside of his cheek, Noel averted his eyes toward the ceiling momentarily. “No,” he said tentatively. “But, they’re after you.” He let the words hang for a while as if he were trying to give her time to sit with them. “If the roles were reversed, would you be bowing out?”

“Absolutely the fuck not,” Odette declared. She didn’t even need to think about it. And it was there that she realized his point.

“Okay then,” he said. “So why would I?”

She stared at him for a beat. But, eventually, she just nodded. There was nothing to argue with him over.

“If you think this sudden revelation that you might be withholding some insanely powerful demonic blood ‘mon is going to run me off, you’ve got another thing coming, sis. I don’t know what that thing is yet, but it’s probably just me shaking you and telling you to shut the fuck up.”

She smiled again. Noel made them come on so easily. “Thank you.”

“And you know that just makes you the cooler one now, right?” he said, eyes sparkling with a childlike eagerness. He heightened his voice into a falsetto that she supposed was meant to imitate her own. “Hi, I’m Odette Cinq-Mars, and I’m holding an ancient unknown powerful legendary inside me, fuck around and find out.”

As he finished his little act, his expression fell. He shot her an apologetic look. “Or, you know, something like that, only what you’re comfortable with,” he added quickly.

Despite her inability to handle biting jokes about the matter, she liked his enthusiasm. It distracted her from her unease, if only for a little while. “I wish it were that simple, but there’s…so much this uncovers. Like, does my mum know? Do Grandpa and Nana know? What about Enora? What’s Dorien’s end goal? If Dorien knows my whereabouts, does that mean Florent does too?”

The thought made her dizzy. If Dorien had been harboring his own blood legendary since before Valentin met him, he had to have still had it in secondary school. This meant he would have been in cahoots with Florent at that point, which meant…

More things she didn't want to dwell on. There was a lot she still didn’t know. Still didn’t remember. She’d need the higher antidote before she could allow herself to venture past that gate, lest she give herself more reason to be crazy. Not that she didn’t have one to begin with.

“Not to mention, how do I even access this thing? Talk to it? If it’s just…in me? My soul? Do I even have a soul? I don’t–”

Noel must have sensed her discontent because he started rubbing her shoulder again. “I know, it’s a lot,” he said. “But questioning more without more evidence at this stage is just going to make everything worse. Let Valentin get you that antidote, bring this up to Enora, and maybe…talk to your mum.”

The first one was the easiest, albeit the most nerve-wracking, because there was nothing else to do but wait. Second, slightly less simple, but not anything impossible. Enora was a hardass about opening up, but if Odette could level with her, it would happen. Eventually.

The third thing, though…

Odette had never had any issues raising problems to Vienna in the past. Never struggled with arguing with her over things, big or small. Vienna was never the type to shut her down on the rare occasion she willingly wanted to “discuss feelings” or anything of that nature. But this felt like a whole different beast altogether.

Vienna was minutely unhinged, yes, but she was quicker than a whip on steroids. And that might be an understatement. It wouldn’t take her long to suspect that Odette had ulterior motives for opening up the “Who’s my father?” dialogue after so many years of brushing it aside, which would breach Odette’s personal vow not to get Vienna involved in her sleuthing.

But, if Vienna had known that her daughter was possessed by a Wrath god this entire time, perhaps that vow was as good as null. Odette decided the best thing she could do was sleep on it. The deluge outside kept her from riding home to see her mother right then and there, and it would not be a good conversation to have over the phone at eleven o’clock at night.

“One thing at a time,” she said. “I should probably sleep off this day before I start figuring out how I’m going to proceed.”

“I’m with you on that. Come here, get under the comforter. It’s so soft.”

Odette humored him and crawled her way under the fluffy white blanket while he got up to switch the light off. She soon settled herself at Noel’s side, her head falling against his shoulder as he slung his arm around hers.

He was right; it was comfortable.

“Okay, you got me. Swanna down is nice,” she said.

“I wonder if your boyfriend would let me steal it. I’m sure he’s got twenty of these things lying around,” Noel mused, and she turned her head to glare at the side of his face.

“Keep your goddamn voice down,” she said in a loud whisper. “We’re in his fucking house, this is not the place.”

“Yeah, yeah,” Noel chided. “Speaking of which, I checked for wiretaps and cameras before I went down for my first nap. All clear.”

Her gaze didn’t move off of him even as she furrowed her brow. “…okay.”

Noel sucked his teeth and turned to nudge her with his free hand. “Don’t look at me like that. I don’t know what the man’s into. If he’s gonna watch me sleep, he’s gotta pay a fee.”

Odette opened her mouth to make a snippy comment but decided against it.

“I definitely don’t think he’s like that,” she said. If the conversation she’d just had with him was any indication.

“Yeah, I’m feeling pretty warm about him myself. But you can never be too sure,” Noel said. She supposed that was fair.

Still, even though her talk with him had gone in such a sour direction, she felt…good about it. Once they got past the painfully uncomfortable small-talk wall, they exchanged words like it was nothing. It felt like she was talking to Noel, Acadia, or any of her other childhood friends. Second nature, despite the levels of horniness built up behind every word that came out of her mouth. But, when she didn’t think about it and just rolled with the punches, there was nothing difficult, awkward, or suspicious about it.

At least she could start to be certain that there was someone else, aside from Noel, who was trying to act in her best interest. Just a sliver of good in such a fucked up situation. That was the thought she rode into the sweet embrace of sleep on.
 
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Junebug44

Bug Catcher
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he/him
somewhere in the image of the greavard she had created.
i love the gen 9 reference
I wish you could feel the tip of my tongue, she thought longingly before clearing her throat. So much for having a grip.
LMFAO come on Odette shake it off
I think that means we’re friends, and friends call each other by their first names.”

He blinked at her like he was dumbfounded, but that look soon gave way into a genuine smile.
Aww this is cute, hard launch fr
Rolling her eyes, Odette reached for a couple more puzzle pieces. “Yeah, it was just a superficial cut from some glass,” she said.

“Let me guess, juggling wine bottles?” Valentin said.

She rolled her eyes as she shook her head. “If I’m being honest, I was pretty drunk. But I went out to eat with Dorien and broke a cup. I tried to pick it up…and…”
This is such a seamless transition from the section of the chapter of Odette + Valentin bonding into actual plot stuff. How do you do it???? Give me some of whatever Sacrilege you're taking plsssss I need it
Anger didn’t wear him. He wore anger.
LET'S GET IT NOEL

I loved this chapter! Odette and Valentin getting closer is something I needed. I'm glad we're getting tidbits of his backstory including about his fiance (fuck her). The tension when they accidentally touched each other's hand *scream*

FINALLY Odette remembers the date! Dramatic irony done masterfully that was awesome. I'm glad Odette and Noel finally made up, and they finally came to the conclusion that she's Wrath. I really liked how you built up to it, by giving the characters hints throughout the story. It made the actual moment very satisfying.

It's time to fight back against Enigma. Let's go!
 
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Seren

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  1. sableye
OH BOY OH BOY OH BOY

Chapter 15: Well, Fuck

I knew this was gonna be a banger of a chapter as soon as I saw the title. (And future me was not disappointed, holy fuck)

“I mean, please don’t feel obliged,” he said frantically. “If you want to keep reading, go right ahead, I just figured–”

“Yes!” she replied with a jolt. “I mean…yes, I’ll join you for the puzzle.”

Someone's eager! Honestly adore seeing this side of Odette pop up.

“Indeed, it’s fantastic to pass the time with,” he said. “I take it that you’re a puzzle connoisseur yourself, huh?”

This line made me think of bloody anime Cilan and oh my god I hope I never have that mental comparison ever again

Anything. Something. Say literally anything. Ask him how he’s feeling. Ask him what hair bleach he uses. Ask him if he wants a kiss.

Holy shit, get a
grip.

Holy hell, she doesn't waste any time, does she? Are we sure she's Wrath and not Lust? :mewlulz:

“Perhaps,” he said, “but I’d hate if every conversation we had alone relied on us roleplaying something like that.”

I see that "something like that" tacked on at the end, Valentin, you ain't slick. :copyka:

He paused to purse his lips and shimmied another piece into the part he was building. “Besides, I think I sense something on the tip of your tongue.”

I wish you could feel the tip of my tongue, she thought longingly before clearing her throat. So much for having a grip.

Jesus she is so deep right now. It's a miracle she can contain herself.

“Not sure if I should ask,” she muttered. “Might be crossing a boundary.”
“Uh…who’s Jocelyn?”

AHA THERE IT IS

The more she talked to him, the more his shows of sincerity became obvious. He always made direct eye contact with her when he was trying to make her believe him or get a point across, and he always kept his brow at a neutral, wrinkle-free position while doing so. Sometimes he’d offer a half smile if the topic were light enough. And he never looked tense, even if he had all the reason in the world to be so. Tension only gripped him when he slipped up or was putting on an act.

Odette's crush aside, I really love this bit. In fact, despite Odette's crush (although it doesn't hurt, either), this does a great job of showing how obervant she is. She barely knows the guy, and already she's got his facial tells memorized.

“She sounds like a fucking nightmare.”

“That’s an insult to nightmares everywhere,” Valentin scoffed.

Always love this insult, lmao

The sigh he released was relieved.

Clovis does this a lot. This is at least the second time I've noticed it in this chapter alone, possibly the third. Hinting at his own guarded feelings, without being tainted or clouded by Odette's inner feelings, helps to show how genuine he really is.

“I was…desperate. And that desperation landed me in her bed despite knowing damn well she was sick in the head,” he huffed. “Not my proudest moment. None of it was, really. None of it did anything.”

You know what, I don't even fault him for this. It's really not a great feeling.

That wasn’t what she had remembered. That wasn’t what she’d gone around the past couple of weeks thinking had happened. She’d broken it, tried to do something with it, and gotten cut. Solene had gotten drunk, too, right? That’s what she remembered, right?

But, Solene didn’t drink. So why had she been so convinced Solene was drunk?

OH OKAY HERE WE GO this is where she's going to remember the date, isn't it? She's finally going to remember that crap Dorien covered her with.

“Okay, okay,” he said. Both of his hands were raised now, and it looked like he was going to put them on her shoulders but stopped short. She might have been disappointed if she weren’t so focused on keeping herself together. “Take a breath; you’re okay. Let me go find something, alright?”
You know something's up when Odette's not reacting lustfully to Valentin's touch. :mewlulz: Jokes aside though, I wonder how he's going to help her. I guess if he's taken these willingly before, he recognizes the effects, so he probably knows how to get rid of them, too.

(Ah, antidote, of course. I should have seen that one coming.)

“But, if that’s going to ease your mind, have at it,” he continued with a huff. “Just be sure to aim for my jaw if my face is your desired target. Right side, preferably.” He pointed at the right half of his jaw. “I chew with my left.”

It was unreal how nonchalant he sounded. Her entire being stalled on what to do next, but a wave of exhaustion washed over her and left her feeling winded. There, she managed to start returning to her senses and realized what she’d just done.

Screaming at him, breaking stuff in his room, threatening him; was she fucking crazy?

“I—“

He just gets her to freeze by playing along with it and she stalls, lmao. Shock factor wake-up ftw! I kinda love that dynamic between them.

Before he could fall into another string of curses, footsteps sounded down the hallway to the bedroom. A groggy-looking Noel stepped into view, rubbing his eye as he was coming out of a yawn.

Man, it's about time you got your sorry ass up! Must be a heavy sleeper.

He could barely finish his sentence before Odette rushed to him and hugged him tightly. He didn’t hesitate to return it, resting his chin against the crown of her head. Feeling his arms around her did heaps more for her nerves, and she immediately relaxed into him. Her body quivered against the warring senses of panic and ease she felt.

Earlier argument forgotten. Best friends, love that. That said, if Odette's been super horny this whole time, I wonder how Valentin is internally reacting to this? The whole asexual discussion throws an interesting wrench into my Meta Knowledge, but given the clues from him in this chapter so far, I'd still be surprised if he wasn't at least a little bit disappointed/envious. Even if Odette and Noel are just friends.

“I’d be right there with you if the circumstances were different. We’ve been tailing him for five years, do you really think that’s something that hasn’t crossed my mind?” Valentin asked incredulously. He held his arms out to his sides before jabbing a finger in Noel’s direction. “As much as I’d be overjoyed to pop a bullet in his head, that’s not going to end well for anyone here. Not you, not me, and especially not Odette. You should be mad, terrified even, but don’t let that cloud your judgment. Take a breath, too.”

Mad respect to him for this. He'd literally just gone through this with Wrath Incarnate but then, oops, here we go again! And he maintains his composure the whole time. Kimiko could learn a thing or two from him.

“No fucking way…” Noel muttered through clenched teeth. She felt him bury his face in her hair.

More sad Clovis noises


Okay, so I'm glad they're all on the same page of "time to murder the drug clown king" and glad Clovis has a level head enough to be like "yo we gotta actually plan how to do this first". Odette and Noel would not be in for a good time if they'd managed to go try to start something on their own. (Which would have been fun also, but this way is gonna end up being more satisfying.)
 

K_S

Unrepentent Giovanni and Rocket fan
Hi here for catnip, please pardon any typos as this is done via cell phone.​

Hi here for catnip, please pardon amy typos as this is done via phone.

Prologue reaction/review:

As opening... Holy hades my trick of replying to have the chapter hitch a ride on the screen i am working on so everything is in one spot with me has bit me in realms best left unnammed.

But it does show your dedication for improvment/documentation so kudos for that.

So we're starting with a new team, interesting..

So candidly florent's take child to work day definitly is going to pot. I'm curious as to the time frame of this setting (aka alarm and ship are such sweeping generic terms. For example alarm could be a modernday police klaxon, or someone yowling thier head off, even odds).

Nevermind the echoing segment and server walls gave a general time stamp. I retract and feel notjing for sympathy for the gathered grunts and the fact they are all going to need hearing aids sooner rather than later.

A bit surprised no ones got noise canceling headphones either in hand or doled out.. Especially if this alarm was expected.

Granted if it was never expected to go off or rarely did i might understand the lapse... I wonder who or what is fleeing the coup. Florents words hint its something escaping...

And the pokebal alter being wrecked indicates we got a huge problem.

Confession i looked uo the name
And kept getting routed to spanish's ,to come". While ironic since both the opposite of "coming along" triggered the alarms amd the escapee coming back is setting florent into stroke territory.

Also "majesty" in these times screams of an ghestis like ego.

So definitly more not good there...

That peckish line is definitly alarming.

The mandated groveling aka "appologies" definitly afirm ego. I am surprised they arent being confined while cameras or psychics or search dogs/mon aremt being consulted to find the missing mon.

And as i skipped the notes to avoid spoilers so the Blood Legend is something i'm looking forward explored in full with the cast in the setting.

Whistles... And this is how we traumatize the next generation florentz. He's doing an a plus job in that depo. Definite father of the year material i mean scarring the kid, bonus points for you know... Not keeping track of his descendents/biological responsibilties, especially if theres another ghost type in the wings to latch onto it just digs the hole all the deeper.

so these mon are legends that are bound.. What by blood packs to florents family? And theyre based off the sevem sins? Wonder if it was his conceet of an ancestors? Amd his kid Armel has complete cyclical retrograde amnisia? Ouch i wonder if its from the bond but it does make that jourmal from earleir make sense.

So if florents gluttony... I wonder what armel is? And that leaves 5 mystery slots (well now 4) to be contemplated.

And it looks like the newest soul is vengence...

That leaves lust, pride, envy greed, sloth... I wonder if poor amel would be bound to envy later, his inury fueling that semtiment amd drawing it to him. I'll.leave other guesses for other times.

Ah so envy is bound to him then? Well i'll poke other guesses as it seems apropriate...

Its a bit jarring to see your pov go from planning an infantcide, to (well as much as he can) dote over his son, the history on the kid is interesting amd the tonal whiplash fitting.

Nice build up of florent stalkin/clycling through the area to do the kill. Amd him losing siggt of his own motive from sheer possesive parental instincts... He sees, he wants, while gluttony does dovetail heavily into greed you can see that trait bleeding into almost every action he takes...

A drink or five... Well i suppose the hangover will give his blood legend a means to rachet up the pain with little effort. Though i do wonder how long he's going to be content with letting tje woman who he precieved cheat him keep his youngest kid. Honestly sounds like the poor woman accidentally got pregnant and didnt think of the father... May not of known the father depending how wild the parties were, and made the most of it, and i doubt shes aware of what florent is... Team Enigma being a team and all that...

And so he establishes himself in the kiddos region and the stalkimg continues.... I feel bad for everyone at this point. Also, as envy did massive psychological/brain damage to amal i wonder what damage vengence would do? And how thats going to dovetail
Into the damage being a preme can leave behind.[/SPOILER]
 
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Chapter 16 - I Say Hello

Sinderella

Angy Tumbleweed
Staff
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In Guzma's Closet
Pronouns
She/Her
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Chapter 16: I Say Hello
CWs: Body Horror, Blood, Strong Language, Talk of Sex, Sexual Metaphors
Hey there! This is a bit of an exciting chapter, as I'm introducing a character I've wanted to write for a long time! That said, this chapter was kind of a clusterfuck to write more due to some personal issues I was having. My biggest issue is the length--this is a LONG chapter, and I was looking to cut it in half but wasn't sure where a good cutting point would be. So please let me know how the pacing is if it's good as is, or if it drags a little, and where you think a good stopping/starting point would be if I were to split it into two chapters.

Also, please let me know how the interactions are here. I feel like I rushed through some of them a little bit, and I want to make sure they have the right amount of time to "sit" before moving on if that makes sense!

As always, thank you so much for reading!

When she awoke, she wasn’t in the bedroom anymore.

She wasn’t anywhere.

Blackness engulfed her senses, for a small eternity. As her eyes adjusted, the darkness lightened into an endless, deep red veil. Black, formless matter swirled about in the space above her head like ink moving through water.

Odette sat up, though was alarmed when she was met with resistance. It felt as if she was trying to sit up out of liquid, and her suspicions were confirmed when she was assaulted with the sound of splashing and the sensation of something thick dripping down her body as she lurched upright. Some of it landed on her face, and she sputtered and wiped her mouth.

She could feel her own skin. She could feel her own rear, sitting submerged in something lukewarm. Her mind was clear. She felt awake.

As that thought occurred to her, she pulled her hand away from her mouth. Her chest lurched when she saw it was covered in blood.

To her horror, she looked down at herself and discovered that her entire body was drenched in blood. Hell, she was sitting in it.

Through a panicked gasp, she wrestled herself to her feet, trying whatever she could to clean herself. She shook off her hands, wiped her face, and even tried to wring out her hair. But, upon grabbing one of her braids, she was shocked to find it completely dry. She caught sight of her hands again and found that they were no longer coated either. Looking at her body, she beheld her pristine white tracksuit. No signs of staining. It was as normal as it had been when she’d fallen asleep.

Her shoes, however, which had somehow ended up back on her feet, were still splattered with that disgusting red. In fact, she still stood in it. No matter where she stepped, the puddle never ended. She tried to find something else to stand on but discovered that what she had thought was a puddle was a sea. Miles upon miles of a still, bloody ocean stretched out before her eyes, and it seemed that the lone presence within it was her.

“What the…”

She’d only spoken in a shallow whisper, but her voice reverberated through the space as if she’d spoken at normal volume. It lingered in her ear, like the whispers of a distant specter, before fading off entirely.

“Hello?” she shouted. It echoed along the expanse of the gruesome ocean, vibrating in her core and leaving her feeling perturbed. There was no way she was awake, but she was having difficulty believing she was sleeping, either.

Being a light sleeper, she’d never been much of a dreamer, let alone a lucid dreamer. At most, she recalled specks of nonsense her brain had come up with throughout the night, but never anything as distinct and vivid as this. She felt as alert and present as she would if she were wide awake and walking down the streets of Lumiose.

But this wasn’t Lumiose. This wasn’t anything that could have been real.

The more she looked around, the less anything made sense. No doors, no stairs, no buildings, no signs of spooky apparitions. Just her. She kicked against the blood pooled at her feet, watching as it splattered up around her and landed in droplets, sending rims of ripples in all directions. That was the only movement she saw, and soon, it all fell still again.

“Nothing?” she called. No response. Nothing changed.

A nightmare. It had to be a nightmare. Barring the odd coincidence of her having such a lucid dream after the day she’d had, there couldn’t have been any more to it. And she probably wasn’t going to get herself to wake up by just standing there.

Adjusting her glasses, she started forward in a straight line.

She wasn’t sure how long she walked on. It could have been minutes, or it could have been hours. All she could tell was nothing changed for a long while. Nothing got closer, and nothing faded out of view. If she didn’t know any better, she would have thought she was walking on a treadmill.

However, when the scenery did change, it was instant.

The bloody ocean beneath her shifted, leaving her on an incline. Sedge grass and cattails began to sprout from the red alongside numerous lanky trees and rotted logs. Small island mounds also came to form, and Odette was sinking down into the blood up to her waist before she had the chance to process what was happening. She tried to kick her way out of it, but all that did was splatter blood onto her face and mouth, leaving her sputtering. She quickly understood that, like before, all she could do was continue forward despite her fight-or-flight reflexes begging for flight.

When she felt her feet touch the bottom, she clawed through the new swamp she found herself in, battling past chewed-up lily pads and piles of gnat-infested algae before she managed to crawl her way out of the hellish lake and up onto land again.

Panting, she looked back over her shoulder to see that the aimless path she’d traveled down was gone. All there was around her was unkempt swampland with no clear sign of a correct direction. However, she’d deduced quickly that walking forward had brought her here, so walking forward would likely get her out. And much to her relief, the blood disappeared off of her person as soon as she was out of it. It was somewhat comforting to know that would be something she wouldn’t have to worry about.

As expected, walking through a swamp–even one in a dreamscape–in nothing more than sneakers and a tracksuit sucked. She tripped, scaled fallen trees, had to wade through more gnat clouds and squelch through bloody mud piles, and was whacked by bush branches and cut by logs. Just when she thought that was all the dream was going to be, she happened upon an eerily neat clearing, one that felt manmade.

Sitting in the middle of it was a simple, standalone full-length mirror. Despite its simplicity, Odette felt the hairs on the back of her neck stand up. Nonetheless, it was the biggest change she’d come upon in gods knew how long. She felt she had no choice but to approach it.

She walked around behind the mirror first, stepping slowly as if she were afraid to startle it for any reason. She had no doubt in her mind that it likely had the capability to get up and chase her if it so desired because nightmares were just that strange. When it didn’t budge, only then did she loop around to the reflective front.

From far away, she could tell she was seeing the shape of her own reflection. Squinting didn’t prove anything different, and the mirror was as still as any normal mirror should have been. She didn’t let her heels touch the floor as she approached, cringing deeper and deeper every time she heard a leaf crack or a twig snap under her weight.

She soon found herself directly in front of it, and it was only there she got a full look at what the reflection was actually giving back to her.

It was indeed her likeness but…it also wasn’t.

She recognized the curve of her rounded jaw, the shape of her eyes, and the pink hue of her lips. But, she didn't recognize the black-sclera eyes just slightly too big for her head, the razor-tooth grin reaching slightly too far up her cheeks, or the tracksuit as black as the sky above…

Wrong. Run away. Run away, FAST.

But she couldn’t. Despite what her mind was screaming at her to do, something kept her rooted in place. Something compelled her to lean in, just to see…

“B̵̎̒O̴̕͜O̸̍̕.̷̏̎”

The reflection jerked forward, protruding out of the glass. Its face came so close that Odette felt its nose bump hers, and the abruptness of it forced a jolt through her body.

“Fuck!” she involuntarily cried out as she stumbled back and crumpled over her wobbly knees, grasping her chest in onset fright.

Now, the reflection was laughing. Then, it stepped out.

“Oh gods, is that all it took? Some baby shit like ‘boo’?” it cackled. “I guess it probably helped that you weren’t expecting it, but shit, I wasn’t expecting it to be that easy!”

The voice. Odette recognized that voice. It was so distinct, there was no world she could have ever forgotten.

The static-laced voice she’d heard in the garden.

“You…” she said through her calming breaths, “...you’re…you spoke. In my head.”

The reflection, now more of a doppelgänger since it was no longer inside the mirror, was now examining its nails. They were long, sharp, and were just as black as the tracksuit.

“Yeah, that fucked you up for a few days,” it said. “I almost felt bad. But that desmocula would have gutted your ballsy stupid ass, so I had to do something.”

Odette watched, both awestruck and puzzled, as the mirror sunk into the swampy earth, and a path took form through the thin trees. The doppelgänger took off down it without as much as another word.

“W-wait, where are you going?” Odette called, scrambling back to her feet. She hesitated at first but ultimately decided to follow far behind.

“To commit war crimes against dyslexic toddlers,” it yelled back, not turning around. It had shoved its hands into its pockets. “Where the fuck do you think I'm going? I'm walking. We have a whole bloodstream to take up; might as well use it.”

“Bloodstream?” she asked numbly.

That was enough to make the doppelgänger stop abruptly. So much so that Odette nearly slammed right into its back. It turned to shoot her a quizzical look; long lips tightened into a frown. “Yeah? Come on, there haven’t been pools of blood this big in your world since Pokemon used to try and gut each other for sport.” It spoke like Odette was simply supposed to know this.

Soon, however, it was walking along again. “Did you know entrails were, like, the big fashion statement back then? I was the one who made them big, not to toot my own horn. Fleshy things look really good when you know how to style them.”

Odette could not believe the thing was still going on about the topic. At that point, all she could do was stare.

“That aside,” the doppelgänger continued, turning its head to look over its shoulder, “I figured you’d recognize your own blood by now; it’s only…well…your fucking blood. Do you like what I’ve done with the place, though?”

Odette blinked out of her stunned trance. “Wait. We’re…inside me?” she said.

The doppelgänger grunted in annoyance and stopped walking again, this time turning its entire copied body to face Odette.

“Some rendition of that, yeah, but you’re not answering my fucking question. Did you like the decor?It spoke with a new level of forcefulness that Odette decided was meant to be intimidating. While she was indeed unsettled, she mostly felt herself getting more annoyed. How was she supposed to respond? Lie? Tell the truth? Spew some nonsense?

"It's...something," she said, hoping that would be good enough to end the conversation and not anger the thing. She had a feeling the latter would be futile.

"'Something's' not an answer, fuckhead."

Odette darted her eyes around. Part of her was waiting for a camera crew to jump out and bum-rush her. "I'm not a huge outdoorsy person, so it's whatever. Needs more...development?"

"For fuck's sake, the question wasn't meant to be open-ended," the doppelgänger groaned. "Yes or no. Pick one before I start gnawing on your temporal lobe."

Odette's light annoyance quickly blossomed into something far more concrete, and she sucked her teeth. "Okay, no. I thought it was really fucking obnoxious. Happy?"

The doppelgänger inhaled deeply. Its gold pupils picked up a baleful glint as it sucked on its lower lip. It released the lip with a loud 'pop!' before crossing its arms defiantly. “A word of advice: nobody likes a dirty cunt. So why don’t you clean yourself up a little before we continue this conversation, hm?”

It turned on its toes and rushed ahead, like a toddler trying to get away from a parent who’d just scolded them. Odette watched, too aghast to say anything.

Every part of her being was warring with each other. She was suddenly ready to get into a no-bars-held fistfight with the doppelgänger. But, she was still perturbed by her current dream state, and still unsure if she wanted to get any closer to it. Even so, while she watched the scene of the swamp literally disintegrate around her, she wasn't as afraid as she had been at the start. As the dirt, the trees, and even the gnats sunk back into the blood with the same consistency as a melting popsicle, it all felt expected.

She’d been so certain she knew the doppelgänger's voice. More specifically, she’d been so certain she knew its true identity. But did legendaries normally act like this? Then again, she’d never actually met a legendary, so what the fuck did she know? Still, the question fell out of her mouth before she could think too hard about it.

“What the hell are you?”

The doppelgänger stopped again, but it took a while for it to turn. When it did, a dubious grin had twisted its way up its cheeks. “You haven’t figured it out yet? I didn’t take you for a jackass,” it said tauntingly.

That was the only confirmation Odette needed. But the taunt had left her with a sense of defiance.

“I want to hear you say it.”

Odette could have sworn she saw the doppelgänger smile wider, and it approached her with an ominous weight in its step. As it neared, and Odette was able to see the thing’s uncanny face in more detail, her throat started to tighten. She gritted her teeth as it slapped its hand against the small of her back, the very part of her that let her know when her Wrath was coming on.

“I’m this,” it declared. “Well. Kinda. I’m tethered to your existence by this. I didn’t have a lot of time to pick a spot, so I hope you’ve been enjoying the tingly tramp stamp. If not, well, sucks to suck limp dick, I guess.”

It was squinting at her as if trying to gauge a reaction. Odette decided not to give it one, though she’d be surprised if it couldn’t hear the shake in her exhale.

“You’re Venira,” she said.

The vast expanse was abruptly engulfed in colorful lights. Fanfare trumpets sounded from every direction and yet nowhere at all, so loud that Odette doubled over to cover her ears. Through the cracks between her fingers, she swore she could hear the sounds of cannons popping off and looked up in time to see confetti falling from above.

Venira now stood atop a flight of stairs that ended in a balloon arch. Every single balloon was inscribed with the words, “You stated the fucking obvious!”

“Congragulfuckinglations, we have a fucking winner winner cannibalism dinnerrrrrrrrr!” Venira hollered over the commotion, holding her hands up in a triumphant pose. She looked to be waiting for some sort of response, but when she finally met Odette’s perplexed gaze, her stance started to deflate.

“What?”

Odette tried numerous times to form some sort of sentence. All that initially came out were a couple of sounds that barely counted as words.

“Oh, come the fuck on, are you having a stroke on me now? After two fucking minutes? What kind of pussy shit is this?” Venira spat, her hands settling on her hips. “At least wait the standard five, then I’ll give you the floor.”

That was enough to force something coherent out of Odette. “No, you–” she started to say. A brief surge of anger pulsed through her and snapped her back to full attention. “No. This is just fucking weird.”

Now, the words were gathering in abundance, and she gestured up to her otherworldly twin. “You’re Venira, clearly, but you don’t look anything like what I was shown or even fucking imagined. I didn’t even–”

She clawed her fingers through her bangs, exhaling harshly. “You look like me. Why? How?

Venira was chuckling now. She practically danced her way down the steps of her grand perch, her movements the perfect mixture of fluid and rigid. Odette wanted to liken them to some variation of a strange contemporary style.

When she made it to the bottom step, she leaped off and landed lightly. The blood barely rippled under her step. “That’s me doing you a favor, dear darling schmucko,” she declared, tapping Odette on the nose. She flinched against the sudden gesture and swatted Venira’s hand away.

What favor?”

“I figured I would be polite in presenting as a human form that you could identify with, but if you’re not into it, I can always go back to one of my ancient shapes.”

“Ancient sha–” Odette started to repeat, but she dragged her hand down her face to stop herself. “Do you not always look like a branch dragon?”

Venira chuckled again, louder this time. The sound gave Odette the same uneasy feeling she got when she heard the Kalos emergency signal test on the TV. “I could. I could look like that. But that’s some basic bitch bullshit, and I don’t roll that way.”

“So…” Odette breathed. “You’re like a ditto of sorts?”

“Oh gods, no. I have all the ditto goodness without the slutty undertones. Ah, well.” She raised her hand as if she were trying to be reassuring. “I don’t slut shame here. But in comparison, I’m definitely not as loose with who I’d sleep with. In fact–”

“Where are you going with this?” Odette queried in bewilderment.

“Watch your fucking tone, ma’am,” Venira scoffed, sounding offended now. “I’m just trying to explain my goddamn case here, but since you’re too good for that, I’ll cut to the demo. Get a load of this.”

Without a warning, she fell into a heap of jagged limbs, each contorting in ways Odette didn’t think a human, even an insanely flexible one, could manage. If she didn’t know any better, she’d think she was watching some spacey weirdly-targeted rendition of The Ring.

At that moment, she decided she wanted to wake up. But the longer she tried to convince herself to do so, the more she was certain that she couldn’t do anything to make it happen. All she could do was step back. And maybe prepare to run.

“I don’t know what I’m getting a load of, but cut it out,” she warned.

No sooner had she spoken did the discombobulated human form twitch. Then it lunged at her.

It ran on all fours, its bones cracking and popping with each eerie stride forward. It moved like somebody caught in the area of a strobe light, yet managed to close the gap between them in no time flat.

Odette stumbled backward, trying to break into a sprint. Her brain was trying to decide if it was only obnoxiously startled or scared out of its wits, and the break in judgment caused her to lose her footing. She fell rear-first to the ground, blood splashing up around her as she landed. She didn't have time to process her disgust before she found herself nose to nose with a form of abject horror.

In the time it had taken Venira to sprint toward her, her form had shifted tenfold. No longer was she an uncanny reflection but a ghastly exaggeration of it.

Thin, ghastly skin stretched over the skeletal contours of unnaturally long limbs that defied all laws of human anatomy. Her smile now served as a wicked gash, slicing her grotesquely large head from ear to ear. Her eyes, which had grown into enormous, bloodshot saucers, leered down into the dark recesses of Odette’s soul and gleamed with an unearthly malevolence.

The creature's nostrils flared with every giggle-laced breath, and Odette felt all the hair on her body stand on end, sent up by how fast her blood started to curdle. Panic threatened to speed up her breathing, but she managed to keep herself steady by reminding herself that this was her dream. Her bloodstream, specifically. She couldn’t wake up for whatever reason, but she realized she might have had more control than she was led to believe.

Even though Venira looked like she would hurt her, she wasn’t going to. She wouldn’t have scared off desmocula if she wanted to see Odette hurt for any reason. That was logic she could utilize.

“Don’t,” Odette said breathlessly, building up a curt edge behind her following words, “do that. What's the point in trying to scare me to death if you've already gone out of your way to protect me once?"

The smile didn’t leave the creature’s face, even as it started to shrink. Odette cringed through the sounds of bones and tendons popping back into place as it morphed, but her chest settled upon seeing the more familiar yet still-uncanny clone form. Far easier to look at in comparison, but not by the biggest of margins.

“Because it's funny? Does there have to be a point? Who shoved that fucking stick up your ass?" Venira sniggered. "I’ve been looking forward to this meeting for a long fucking time, and you can’t even indulge me in some tag? You’re not a very gracious host."

Odette's temper quickly overshadowed her ease. “I–what?” she fumed.

The sound of her onset rage prompted Venira to cackle outright, her head tilting backward at a barely unnatural angle as the sound rose from the deepest recesses of her stomach.

“You’re so godsdamned precious when you’re pissed off! I can’t stand it.”

“Yeah, considering it’s your fucking fault it happens so easily, can’t say I’m shocked it tickles you so,” Odette retorted. “I didn’t come here to play tag with an infernal…cryptid…thing. In fact, if I had it my way, I wouldn’t have come here at all. This seems to be more your doing than mine.”

“Gods, you’re a fucking stick in the entrails,” Venira scoffed, kicking at the blood that surrounded them. That’s when Odette noticed the stairs, confetti, and lights had disappeared.

“It’s a good thing you’re cute. I like this face,” Venira continued. She brought her hands to her copied cheeks and began to pat them. “I like this body.” Her hands traveled down to her hips, where she set them and began to wag her tailbone back and forth. “You’d never think short and fat go well together, but moving in this skin is as eeeeeeeeaaassssyyyyyyyy as it comes.”

Odette bristled, reaching her hands up to cover her stomach as she was pelted with a feeling of self-consciousness. “What the fuck; I’m not fat!” She was a little rounder yes, but certainly not fat.

“Oh, right, I guess not. Gulattive was fat, but you’re more...thick. Like a peach. No!” Venira gasped, black eyes sparkling. “You’re a pear. You’re a cute little itty bitty little pear-shaped soft little angry cute midget thing.”

If someone had told Odette she was going to wake up just to be bullied by a demonic Pokemon, she’d have assumed they were high off their ass on sacrilege. Truth be told, she was worried she was already at that point herself. Maybe the antidote Valentin had given her was actually spiked.

“Are you quite finished?” she asked.

“I’m just trying to emphasize that I genuinely don’t think you’re fat; you’re just soft. Soft, short girl. Soft, short, pear-shaped, teeny tiny little–”

“I get it,” Odette seethed. The response left Venira a giggling mess, and she covered her mouth as her eyes crinkled under the force of her grin.

Odette decided there was no reason to keep instigating the beast and took another long, hard breath. She supposed since they were here for whatever reason, it was the best time to unload whatever questions she had. Because gods knew there were a lot. And questions meant that the God of All Things Anger couldn’t make more bizarre comments about her weight.

She stood up and brushed herself off. “Okay…Venira…I–” she started slowly before being cut off.

“Stop there.”

Odette clenched her fists. “What now?”

“Don’t call me that,” Venira said.

“Call you, what Ven–?”

“Shut.”

She felt a tantrum brewing in her gut and forced another breath to numb it. “So then, what the actual fuck am I supposed to call you?”

Another wry smile curled over Venira’s perfectly fanged mouth. "You tell me, bitch," she shot back in a snicker. “Just something that isn’t that. I like your nicknames, so I want you to give me one. As a first meeting present.”

Crossing her arms, Odette shifted her weight to her left foot. She didn’t need to feign her curiosity. “Do I get anything as a first meeting present?”

“Mmmmmmmm, I’ll tell you if I like the nickname,” Venira mused, copying Odette’s stance exactly.

Odette beheld the sight of her wrong-yet-right mirror image again, still finding herself put off by the sight of it. She was getting more used to it the longer she was in its presence, but she devolved back into unease every time she stared at the face for too long. That uncanny valley sense came on slowly, but when it hit, it hit with a heavy hand.

Why did Venira even want a nickname in the first place? Unknown or not, she was still a legendary. Odette had a hard time grasping why a Pokemon of her caliber would want to be called by a different name, which she supposed was why she was struggling to come up with something. When her teammates had joined up with her, she'd come up with their names on the spot. They were based on feeling, and she would just roll with it. When she looked at Venira, all she felt was a mixture of apprehension, annoyance, anger, and maybe awe. Curiosity, even. But none of that produced nicknames.

Thinking harder, she started scratching at her cheek. What would anyone want to call the God of Wrath? Something related to rage? Destruction? The occult?

Somewhere in her thought process, she started thinking about her own name. Vienna had the idea to name her after the main character of the Swanna Lake ballet, the white swanna herself. Vienna thought the name was pretty, and it coming from a show she liked so much made it better. Odette supposed she had her family's overall fixation with that ballet to thank for her decision to start dancing.

As she started recalling the plot of Swanna Lake, she remembered how the white swanna eventually came into contact with another woman named Odile, who ended up being transformed to be a copy of her. Her doppelgänger.

Odette paused for a moment before dragging her shoe against the standing blood at her feet. She then let out a scoff, it coming out a deflated chuckle. It was good to know she had a sense of humor, even in the face of so much utter bullshit.

“Odile,” she said simply. “Your name is Odile.”

Venira’s—Odile’s, now—face lit up. Something about it might have been cute if it weren’t so demonic to start.

"Clever," Odile cracked. "Not gonna lie, I was hoping for something like 'Consuelo' or 'Syphilis' or 'Little Sweetmeat', but that's really smart."

Odette squinted in disbelief. “Why the fuck would you want your name to be Syphilis?"

"Because?" Odile wheezed. "It rolls off the tongue so elegantly, and I think it embodies my high-class pedigree and the state of my manners."

Odette suddenly felt tired. It transcended every other sense of exhaustion she already felt. She had an inkling of a feeling that the sensation wouldn’t go away any time soon.

“Okay,” she said evenly. “You got your gift. Give me mine. As long as it’s not another game of tag.”

Odile shifted her weight back and forth between her legs before sighing deeply. “Okay, fiiiiiiiine, I guess now you’re allowed to ask me some questions. That is the whole reason I’m here now, truthfully. I feel like you’re about to explode.”

She smiled again as a thought seemingly occurred to her. “Not that that wouldn’t be funny as fuck to witness, but, actually, I think you’re more fun together than in a million pieces. You’d just be like–”

She reached up to grab her right bicep, and with a loud, wet 'pop!' she pulled it clean off and tossed it aside. A dramatic cry of anguish soon followed as every other one of her copied body parts began to detach themselves, falling to the blood with meaty thumps and the most sickening splashes Odette had ever heard in her life. Odile’s head continued to let out some obnoxious groans, even as it flipped off her torso and rolled to a stop several paces away.

Odette felt bile rise in her throat. Her vision clouded with a feverish blur while nausea clawed at her stomach. Her mouth began to salivate like it usually did when she was about to vomit.

“Okay, stop. Stop! This isn’t working,” she shouted, raising her hands as she turned her head away.

“What isn’t? I thought this was a fantastic conversation?” Odette could hear Odile fiddling with her dismembered limbs, somehow, and cringed through the fleshy squelching.

You,” she hissed, bringing her hands up to rub her eyes underneath her glasses. “That body, your presence right now.”

“Too hot to handle?”

Odette snapped her head around, facing her doppelgänger’s torn-up body while she sputtered over her words, trying to ignore her body's need to puke. “Wha—no. You’re fucking...freaking me out with this uncanny valley mirror image body horror shit,” she managed, gesturing wildly to the mess. “Can you turn into something else? Literally, anything that doesn’t look like a fucking hellspawn? Preferably something you can’t make fall apart like that?”

Odile’s stolen features crinkled with mock concern, and she reformed into a functioning body in a single instant. “Aw, honey, you’re not a hellspawn. Do we need to have a talk about your self-image?”

Exhaling in aggravation, Odette began to flex her fingers as a means to keep her threatening fit and illness in check. “I think, considering I have you in my bloodstream, I’m as close to a hellspawn as anyone can get,” she jeered. “Can you please humor me? Blood type to…vessel?”

Gods, that’s what she was. A vessel. A host for an eldritch parasite. How the hell was she ever going to get used to that?

Odile stuck out her lower lip in a pout before crossing her arms. They crackled with the movement, and Odette grimaced in disgust. “And here I thought I was being hospitable. No good deed goes unpunished, I fucking guess.”

With a wave of both hands, she shrunk down from her humanoid form into what looked to be a tumbleweed with wings. Like some strange woobat variant. Or, rather, a woobat-brambleghast hybrid.

The weight immediately lifted from Odette’s chest, as now she was beholding something that was no spookier than any of the rambunctious ghost-types at Vienna’s lab. If she squinted, it was even kind of cute despite its wide glowing eyes.

Odile flapped up to Odette, who outstretched her arms to give her room to land. “How’s this, you pansy?”

“Much better,” Odette said, breathing in as her stomach settled.

Odile made a sudden sweeping gesture with her wings. “Well then, get on with it. Start the Q and A before I get bored and chew your fingers instead."

Right. That is what Odette wanted to do. She’d nearly forgotten that while she watched a copy of herself dismember itself. She’d have to add that to the list of things she never wanted to dream about again.

She opened her mouth to speak, but the realization of just how many questions she had brewing in the center of her mind caused her to freeze. She didn’t know how long she stood there with her slack jaw, but when she tried to move her tongue after a while, it felt dry.

“Are you trying to catch a fly? I prefer fruit flies; the big black house ones are fucking vile,” Odile said.

“I just…I don’t even know where to start," Odette said, ignoring the comment.

“That is a problem, isn’t it,” Odile said. Odette watched her nod, momentarily expecting her to add in something insightful. That never happened.

It was there that she decided that her best course of action was just to ask whatever came to mind, rapid-fire style. Odile seemed like the type of character to respond well to that.

“So you’ve just…been inside my body this entire time?” she said.

“Eeeeeyup,” Odile replied.

“And you’re Wrath, so…you’re the reason I’m so pissed off all the time.”

“Eeeeeyup.”

“And when the hell were you planning to let me know about all of this? Was I just supposed to go my entire life just assuming I’m some temperamental freak?”

She broke her gaze away from Odile’s, momentarily finding herself more interested in the blood around her feet. The thoughts continued to wash over her like rough waves over an unsuspecting surfer, and she scrunched her brows in frustration.

“All my health problems, everything, it’s your fault,” she said.

She heard the tumbleweed inhale and looked up in time to see that the slightest of grimaces crossed Odile’s branch-like features. She raised a wing to scratch her spherical head. “Yeeeeaaaaaah, look,” Odile said tentatively, “I didn’t show up in you with intent to fuck your immunity; it just happened like that.”

For the first time since they started talking, she looked serious. Solemn, even.

“I am sorry. And I want to emphasize that I mean that. And I don’t ‘mean’ apologies very often.”

The sincerity behind her words threw Odette off. She wanted to overanalyze them, poke holes in the delivery, and look closely for any signs of deception. But there was nothing to look for. It was as plain and bare as it could have been. Somehow, some way, Odette just knew.

Venira, the legendary Pokemon of Wrath, had apologized to her. And wasn’t pulling her leg about it, either.

It felt…nice. It felt nice to finally hear somebody apologize to her for her shit hand and having it actually mean something.

“Sure,” she murmured after a while. She mindlessly began to sink into a sitting position and was startled when her rear met the cushion of a recliner. But, if fanfare trumpets and unkempt swamplands could be conjured here, she figured a recliner was a welcome change. It was better than sitting in the blood.

She continued as she leaned back into the leather. “But if you’re that sorry, why didn’t you rear your head earlier? We could have figured something out,” she said. “Valentin told me there was a way to keep the illnesses under control if you had a grasp on it. Unless he was lying.”

“Why? Because safety and info gathering, you sweet summer shit,” Odile said. “And your little wannabe fucktoy? He’s fucking brilliant. Even if he trains ice types.” She visibly shuddered, then recovered as if she hadn't. “Pretty much everything out of his mouth was spot-on true. The stuff about us blood types, the other legendaries, the Vice Dust…”

Odette’s jaw tensed. The confirmation of the truth bomb was eclipsed by Odile’s choice of label for Valentin. “Don’t call him that.”

“Fine, your 'wittol gorl cwush,'” Odile mocked, flapping her wings for added effect. “Regardless, you should keep him. And I have no reason to yank your dick about that either; we have the same goal in mind, so you’re best off staying under his ‘fuck me’ eyes. You can yank his dick whenever you want to, though.”

“He’s asexual,” was all Odette managed through the mortified haze that started creeping in through the cracks in her mind.

“Yup, and I used to get my asshole waxed with holy water,” Odile scoffed.

Odette tried to think of a quick comeback but came up ridiculously short. “I...I’m not sure how to respond to that.”

“Congrats, you’ve sharpened my fucking point,” Odile said, rolling her eyes. “Would you like a lollipop? Or perhaps a lollipop-flavored condom you can use when you two inevitably–”

“Oh my gods, enough,” Odette spat. She snatched her arms back to slam her hands over her ears while she squeezed her eyes shut. Her face felt so unbearably hot that she swore she could feel sweat beading up on her forehead. “That’s not what we’re fucking here to talk about, so why–”

“We might not be here to talk about it, but you certainly like thinking about it,” Odile retorted. Odette heard her land on the chair’s left armrest and had a sudden desire to take a swing at her. But the flood of unbearable embarrassment blocked her from doing so.

“What, so you just read my fucking thoughts all day?” Odette groused, dipping her chin toward her chest, trying to scrunch herself up into a ball as a means to escape her own shame.

“Kinda. Sorta.” Odette could hear the stupid, snarky smile in Odile’s voice. “I can sense changes in your feelings. When the changes are really intense, I’ll go poking around your brain for the specific thoughts. You have a very vivid–”

“Ah, please, please, please, shut up,” Odette whined. She moved her hands to cover her eyes as she slumped in the recliner and tucked her knees into her chest. “I don’t even know why I asked, for the love of fucking…”

“No need to get so worked up,” Odile cooed. “I’m just trying to make things a little more comfortable for you while we chat.”

Odette’s left eye snapped open in time with the resentment that took hold of her, and she moved the corresponding hand off of it to stare at the tumbleweed. “Oh yeah, dismembering yourself while in your little look-a-like form was really meant to be comforting.”

“I could name ten people off the top of my head who would have been very comforted by a similar image; thank you very fucking much.”

Forcing another breath into her lungs, Odette lowered her hands and legs. “We’re not here to talk about my relationship with Valentin,” she said evenly. “This is purely a conversation about me and you.”

“I mean, technically this does involve me and you; it involves you thinking about jumping that man’s bones and me–”

“What is this about safety?” Odette sputtered, lurching up to glare down at Odile and effectively cutting her off. “Was I safer living life with a violent temper and sickness spells that almost fucking killed me a few times? Let’s get back to that.”

Odette watched with a clashing mixture of solace and unease as the glee drained from Odile’s eyes. She broke her gaze to look at the ground before suddenly taking flight.

“You like stories? Of course, you like stories; you took fucking acting classes,” she said as she landed in the blood. “Let me tell you a story, then.”

Without warning, any light that was within the realm faded away, and Odette found herself engulfed in darkness. Before the dread could set in, a screen flipped on in front of her. Its light cast some illumination on her and the hundreds of empty theater seats she now sat among. Looking around, she couldn’t find any physical signs of Odile. All she heard was the beast’s static-y voice.

“A looooooooong, long, long, long, long, long, long, long time ago, before you were even a speck of dust on the cosmos, I came to be among some other legendaries you might be more familiar with.” A crudely drawn image of Odile as a flying tumbleweed flashed across the screen. In fact, it was so crudely drawn that Odette would have assumed a toddler had made it. But it got the point across.

More crudely drawn pictures slid in to join the Odile doodle, and they were silhouettes and colors Odette immediately recognized.

Giratina. Yveltal. Solgaleo. Eternatus. Rayquaza. So many legendaries she knew by name. All standing around the Odile doodle. They all had smiley faces.

“However, it wasn’t just me. There were also my bitch ass cohorts,” Odile went on. The drawings of the familiar legendaries suddenly disappeared, only to be replaced by shapes she didn’t recognize. They were smaller forms that looked to be the same size as the Odile drawing. After squinting at them for a moment, she realized that they were just the shrunken versions of the forms of the Blood Legendaries she’d seen in Valentin’s office. They all had angry faces that Odette could tell were meant to be derogatory.

“Without getting into the gory details, as much as I usually like those in particular, our shitty creator kinda treated us like garbage, so I got mad and left.” The other doodles dropped away, leaving the Odile doodle wandering among poorly drawn stars. Soon, Odile landed on green lines, presumably grass, and a dismembered arcanine surrounded by red scribbles popped into the frame.

“I came across your world, and this substance you mortals call blood,” she said fondly. “I drank it, and it changed me.”

The Odile doodle moved toward the red scribbles, then suddenly sprouted into a poorly drawn version of that branch dragon drawing Odette had seen before. The angry-faced doodles of the other six legendaries popped back into view.

“At the time, my cohorts hadn’t given me much reason to hate them, so I invited them to do the same. They changed too.” All six doodles sprouted into the forms Odette was more familiar with despite the childish level of the art.

“Some of the other legendaries didn’t like what we’d become, and we had a big fight about it. During that fight, I learned the power of vessels. I also created an army of other Pokemon like me–like us–that thrived on blood just as we did. I taught my cohorts to do the same, too. From there, I became known as The Mother of All Blood Types.”

Throughout Odile’s narration, Odette watched as the doodles of the Blood Legendaries and some of the others she’d seen smiling earlier quite literally smashed into doodles of different legendaries she recognized. For a moment, she saw Dialga flash on the screen, but his head and neck looked as if it had drawn like a penis. Palkia looked to have been drawn as morbidly obese. She wanted to laugh at how absurd it was, but she had caught on to something else.

"Wait, you created the blood types? Shinies? That was all you?" she said.

The animation paused, as did Odile's voice. She spoke again after a while, but the animation remained stalled.

"Yeah, yeah, it was a big thing I figured out. Game-changing, really. They all thought just seven of us were bad, but try like...seven gazillion. We almost wrecked the population here, though..."

Odette frowned dubiously, eyes roving around the theater on the hunt for the tumbleweed form. "Go on."

"Well, if you think about it, there's not much to explain. A bunch of bloodthirsty 'mon going on a war-fueled tirade? We needed blood, mortals had it, so we just hunted and slaughtered a whoooole bunch of them."

The animation abruptly switched to a group of doodles, presumably Odile and the other blood types she'd created. Odette recognized a few of their shapes from Valentin’s analog blood type Pokedex. The doodles proceeded to fly at drawings of stick figures and other Pokemon shapes, yanking them apart and sending red scribbles all over the scene.

"Now I understand what you meant by Pokemon maiming each other for sport," Odette said, grimacing.

"Yeah, why do you think you all evolved with the uncanny valley?" Odile said. A smiley face appeared on the screen, but its wide eyes and wide grin sent a cold, prickly feeling through Odette's body. It was the exact sensation she got when she looked at Odile's copied face for too long. "We wrecked you all so badly that you evolved to be more aware of when we were coming. How about them leppas?"

The explanation had Odette gritting her teeth again, and she shifted in her seat uncomfortably. "So, is that why you didn't end up killing everything? We beat you back?"

"Oh, don't flatter yourself," Odile snorted. "It was all my genius that saved you; let's be perfectly clear there."

The scene on the screen swapped into an image of the Odile doodle dressed in a graduation cap and holding a diploma. That got a derisive chuckle out of Odette, but she kept her comments to herself.

"I quickly figured out that killing all the mortals on this planet wasn't going to be feasible in the long run, and soon discovered that the best and most powerful way to get blood is to partner with mortals, not kill them," she said. "Partnerships led to a longer supply and way more power. Something about bonds or whatever, that's a whole 'nother story."

She stopped to laugh to herself while Odette made a mental note. "So I got my fill by picking and choosing vessels that worked well with me. So did my cohorts. So did the other blood types."

A diagram popped up on the screen, showcasing the Odile doodle being connected to other Pokemon shapes by arrows. The same was shown for the other sins and other blood type doodles.

"This eventually led to some blood types jumping between Pokemon offspring, which--"

"Resulted in the first shinies," Odette finished, moderately dumbstruck by the revelation. That meant Enora likely had descended from the first Pokemon who had made pacts with blood types. Or came from some other Pokemon who had done it more recently.

"See, you're not a jackass when you choose not to be."

Odette scrunched her nose in irritation. "Continue, please."

Odile's voice took a breath. “In the end, the war came to a draw. My cohorts and I decided to settle down in one particular world so as long as we and those who had helped our side could be left alone. I didn't want anything else; I just wanted to be left. Alone. Me, myself, and I, with nothing more than a couple million mortals to mess around with idly. But that's it."

There was a sudden surge of stress in her tone that stroked at Odette's sympathy. She had to wonder what could have happened to the embodiment of Wrath that made her so serious about not being bothered.

"Things were okay for a while, but as I said earlier, my cohorts are bitchasses. Namely, Gulattive.”

The doodle of Gulattive’s grotesque form flashed up on the screen. His angry face was now more defined. “Gulattive is a bit of a loaded schmuck, you see. He’s Gluttony, so he’s impulsive, never sated, and always wants more. He wasn’t happy with the terms of our war-ending agreement because wanted to keep fighting. He wanted to have a pissing contest with everyone, but he wanted to ensure he was always the one pissing the furthest. More than that, he wanted to be in my position, the leader of our stupid group, because he thought everything was about him. He’s a fucker. But nobody would fuck him because he’s fat and ugly and–”

“Odile,” Odette called. She listened to the voice clear its throat.

“Anyway.”

Gulattive suddenly produced a Pokeball, and other five gathered around him and approached the Odile doodle.

“So, unfuckable Gulattive convinced the unfuckable quintet that the agreement sucked and why doing the most to be the big fat dick on top was the way to go, and they sucked me into a little ball, and locked me up. Because they knew I'd stop them from whatever idiocy they wanted to get into.”

A scribble of purple shot out from the Pokeball in Gulattive’s hand and engulfed Odile. Her doodle disappeared, and the other six doodles were left cheering before a poorly drawn clock cut onto the screen. The hands began turning.

“I wasn’t sure how long I was in that ball. It’s safe to say it was thousands of years, maybe more. But, Gulattive took over the group and led us all into a contract with this family called the Lambournes, all for the sake of having consistent vessels and a means of manipulating a group of power-hungry humans into doing his power-hungry bidding. They all seemed to be on the same braindead idiotic dumbass page.”

At the sound of Florent’s surname, Odette perked up. She watched as the six Blood Legendary doodles spoke with stick figures in bowties before cutting over to a drawing of a Pokeball. It lingered for a beat before popping open.

“However, at some point in time, twenty-two years ago, a Lambourne child was born, and my prison had been unlocked. I escaped without a second thought and ended up with none other than you. Odette. Free for the first time in gods know how fucking long.”

The final scene of the “movie” ended with a horrible drawing of her. But Odette could tell it was her by the braids, the white tracksuit, and the strange childlike emphasis on how red her eyes were. The screen cut to black after that, and Odette found herself sitting back on the recliner in the middle of the same bloody ocean. It took her eyes a moment to adjust back to the change in light, and she gave them a good rub while Odile kept talking.

“I was just excited to be free, even though I’m not sure how it happened. I didn’t want to ask questions; I just wanted to enjoy being away from those backstabbing dickshits for however long I could.”

Upon opening her eyes again, Odette could see the tumbleweed was still sitting in the blood, but her back was turned. Her tone had taken on a far more sardonic weight. “So, to answer your question, I don’t know. At the moment, yes. It felt safer to lay low with no indication I was with you aside from your anger and shitty health. But now that I know how things have progressed outside my fucking sightline, I might have misjudged.”

She looked back over at Odette, her eyes hard now. “I knew it wasn’t going to be quiet forever, but I just craved a few years of peace and freedom.”

For a moment, Odette had no words. It was so much to digest in one go that she was once again left unsure of what to address. However, as the two decades of strife that her anger and health had caused her came rushing back with the weight of an aggron’s stomp, it didn’t take her long to figure it out.

“Am I supposed to feel bad for you?” she said thinly. “You craved a few years of peace at my expense? Knowing there’s a genocidal legendary out there? Newsflash: I didn’t ask for any of this.”

Odile was suddenly in front of her, having morphed back into her doppelganger form. She grasped both armrests and hovered her face so close to Odette’s that their foreheads touched, effectively trapping the latter in her seat.

“Congratufuckinglations, because neither did I,” she menaced over Odette’s surprised gasp. “You think it was all sunshine and ponyta guts having the very beings I gave power to shrink me down to a speck inside a Pokeball? Maybe if you’d let me finish, you would have heard me tell you that I’m grateful for you.”

Odette blinked, her expression falling along with the shaky breath she exhaled. “You–”

“I was locked away in that fucking ball for thousands,” she raised a hand for emphasis and lifted her knee up onto the armrest as if set to climb into Odette’s lap, “of years. I don’t know how, and I don’t know why, but your bastardly teeny existence got me out. And I guess I was just riding the last two decades on the high of freedom and didn’t want to fuck it up. Despite what you might think, we gods are far from perfect. Believe me.”

Now stunned into silence, Odette kept her eyes on Odile’s face. She watched the fiery passion drain from her eerie features, only to be replaced by wrinkles of doubt as she slowly stepped back. She stood there for a while, staring at nothing in particular in a tense, heavy silence.

“I just didn’t want to be caught like that again. I was–” She frowned like she was struggling to finish the thought. “I also didn’t want to know what they would do to you if–”

She cut herself off with a single, rough jerk of her head. She trained her eyes back onto Odette’s, causing Odette to hold her breath in anticipation.

“I know you know a thing or two about letting trauma dictate what you do,” Odile said.

Something Odette could only describe as defensiveness walled up within her. “Don’t…leverage that against me,” she said, standing up to emphasize the severity of her words. She stopped short as another realization hit her, and that wall was toppled by distress.

“Wait. Wait,” she said breathlessly. She settled her hand over her chest as if that would somehow calm her heartbeat, which was now pounding against her eardrums. “Gods, you were…you were there…for that…”

Odile’s face twisted into a look that matched what Odette felt. She would have been jarred by the change were she not so consumed by the thoughts of that thing that had shown up to make the dream worse.

“Don’t,” Odile said quickly. She reached out a hand like she wanted to make some sort of comforting gesture but stopped short. She appeared to stumble over her words before dropping her hand. “I’m sorry.”

For a second, she almost looked entirely human.

“Just…don’t do that to yourself right now. Please.”

Odette exhaled sharply. Odile’s mannerisms were strange, so the fact she felt somewhat comforted by them was equally as strange. Still, nobody needed to tell her twice not to allow herself to sink into that buneary hole. Especially not now.

“Okay,” was all she said.

Odile released a huff, her eyes slipping shut for the briefest of seconds. “Whether you want to believe me or not,” she went on slowly, “even if I hadn’t somehow ended up with you, you were involved in this shit the moment you were born. The Lambournes don’t take kindly to people walking off with their property, and you, Odette Harmonie fucking Cinq-Mars, are Lambourne property, despite whoever's uterus you were prematurely cut out of.”

That was something far more pressing to think about. Something that hadn’t truly struck her yet until that moment. “So it is true.”

Odile answered with a single nod. “Allow me to be the paternity test you so desperately wanted,” she said, sarcasm lining her tone. “Filthy Lambourne blood flows in these veins, so you better start getting used to the shit that comes with that territory. You come from a line of power-hungry, nasty human beings. I’d actually be impressed if I didn’t want to see every one of them burn to death in a blaziken’s gaping cloaca.”

Odette replayed Odile’s words over and over again in the second of downtime she had. Filthy. Power-hungry. Nasty. That’s what she came from. She was directly descended from a familial line that was set on making a deal with a dangerous legendary for the sake of causing problems.

The fact that she wasn’t surprised didn’t just startle her. It frightened her.

“But despite all of that, I see your bitter fucking malice at the way those Lambourne whores are existing right now. With the sacrilege shit happening, and all that,” Odile said. “You would want to stop them, wouldn’t you? Even if they are your blood?”

Yes, was Odette’s immediate thought. She wanted no part of a family that could help commit gods knew how many atrocities. She didn’t have to think twice about that.

Odile seemed to know her answer without her having to say it. She kept talking, sauntering closer with a little more gusto in her step. “Guess what, bitch? You have that edge.” It looked like a grin was tugging at the corners of her lips now. “They want you; they want us. Now that I’m out with a vessel, we have the capability to fuck. Them. Over. That was the one thing they and the other six were afraid of happening, and it did. And we can wreck them for it.”

All of it sounded tantalizing. All in one day she found out about the story behind sacrilege, the Shiny Trade, Dorien, her own past, her unknown paternity, and how it all just seamlessly fit together. How her existence was intertwined with the very thing she had set out to get to the bottom of. How her existence probably had a larger hand in what was happening in the first place. And now, she was being met with the pretty words from the very being who might be able to ensure she saw victory, and who could give her an edge she didn’t have–or at least didn’t know she had–previously.

“Why now and not twenty years ago?” she asked.

Odile raised a brow and recoiled slightly. “The fuck was I gonna do with a two-year-old?”

Point taken, she realized. “Then in general? Why now? Why haven’t you been preparing me for this?”

Odile paused, a vacant yet charged look settling in her dark eyes. “I don’t know. Like I said, imperfect. Now that there are signs that they’re moving, I have to move too.”

She paused again, that time to cross her arms and look at Odette with a little more bemusement. “And don’t start with me about the ‘preparation’ shit. You’ve prepared yourself plenty,” she scoffed. “You’ve been learning deductive reasoning since you got out of your fucking incubator, you’re armed, you’ve got better metaphorical eyes than a fucking claydol, and that acting training got you built enough to mack on a man you’d rather bury in a shallow grave,” she explained, raising a finger with each passing point. “You were capable from the get-go. So shut the actual fuck up.”

Despite the overall curtness of the delivery, the stream of compliments left her feeling rather good, as much as she didn't want to admit it. They were compliments from a god, after all. A god with a really fucked up sense of humor and shitty art skills, but a god no less.

“Okay,” she said after hesitating. “That doesn’t change my disdain for how long you took to present yourself to me,” she added sternly, trying to make herself forget that she'd been complimented at all. But, she softened her gaze as she crossed her arms. “But…better late than never, I guess.”

Odile was grinning now. “I got you all buttered up just like that? Noted.”

Odette licked her teeth, deciding to bite back the quip that threatened to spill out. “How would you recommend we proceed, then?”

She wasn’t exactly sure what had changed throughout that speech, but she was suddenly far more privy to Odile’s wide smile. Something about it carried an air of determination she hadn’t seen before, making it seem more amicable than eerie.

“Your future 'Baby's First Shallow Grave' occupant, Dorien. Inviderus' fuckhead,” Odile said. Her nose crinkled in disgust. “I’m sure I don’t need to tell you this, but keep your wits about you with him. He’s trying to get a rise out of you to get me to rear, most likely to get me back to that ball and to get you to follow.”

Now, his reaction to her warding off desmocula in the garden made all the sense in the world. Paired with his previous blatant attempts at pissing her off, she now understood his angle. She was briefly thrilled to know that she hadn’t been crazy for initially thinking that’s what he was doing. Then she realized what a fucked up thing that was to be happy about.

“If I’m under Gulattive and you’re under Florent, that makes it more likely that they can succeed in their world domming shit. I’m not stupid enough to fall for low-hanging nipples like that, provided it's not Inviderus saying it directly, because that guy could go fucking die in a hole for all I fucking cared, since he's such an insufferable buttmunch."

She stopped to take a breath. "But your own bodily anger might be enough to expel me,” she explained as she jabbed a finger into Odette’s shoulder, causing her to flinch back. “You need to watch it. You’ve been good about it so far, but desmocula was a close call.”

Odette quietly rubbed her shoulder. “What, you don’t cause my bodily anger?” she asked.

“Our partnership instilled it in you, and I might exacerbate it by being within you as I am, but your anger is still your own.”

Frowning, Odette nodded along despite not particularly liking the answer. And Odile calling it a “partnership” felt wrong somehow, but she left that part alone.

As Odette was starting to think of ways to ensure she kept herself sane with her newfound knowledge, a different question came to mind. “Do you…know about any of the other things I forgot? Because of the Dust?”

Flexing her lips, Odile released an irritated sigh. “I couldn’t say. We’re not separate entities right now, so Vice Dust does to me what it does to you.”

“How could we be separate?” Odette queried, tilting her head.

“A formal catch.” Odile pursed her lips and started to pace slowly. "Teeeeechnically, even though I'm living in you, tethered to you, I'm still wild. Catching me would give us that 'official' partnership and separate me from your body, so to speak."

Odette blinked in surprise. Was it that easy? “I have a spare ultra ball–”

Whoa,” Odile yelled through a deep chuckle. She raised her hands up as if she’d just heard an offensive joke. “Don’t get ahead of yourself, dipshit. That wasn't me telling you to do it now." She started shaking her head. "Do you know how easy it would be to swipe a ball from someone? With me in here, you’re still the obstacle they need to get through. This gives us time to infiltrate and ruin them. And maybe I can figure out what caused my little jail cell to malfunction upon your arrival.”

Odette had to resist the urge to groan. Of course Odile had a point, but gods forbid that Dust was used on her again. Then what? She’d have to wait for another round of antidotes? Provided she even managed to have a jog at all? That was still reigning as the only solution, and all it did was supercharge her anxiety.

“And what if that doesn’t work?” she heard herself asking. “There are things I don’t know about all of this, which means I can’t imagine you know anymore, being limited to my eyes and ears. Should I just sit back and let it happen if we get blindsided?”

“If we get blindsided, I’ll handle it,” Odile answered so quickly that Odette barely had time to process if she’d been heard or not.

“You’ll handle it?” she repeated.

“That’s what I said,” Odile snapped. “Do you need a godsdamned hearing aid to go with those glasses?”

Rolling her eyes, Odette exhaled sharply. “Fine. Continue as normal. Stay with Valentin. Mind Dorien even more. You’ll intervene if you see fit.”

“Atta girl.”

“Can I tell him about this?” Odette said. “Can I tell Noel?”

“It’s your fucking mouth, I sure as hell can’t stop you,” Odile said, shrugging. “Well, I probably could, and it’d be funny as shit, but I won’t.”

Raising a brow, Odette tilted her head again. “You can control my mouth?”

“I’ve never tried, and it’d probably be harder without the bond of an official catch. If I could I would just have you confess your undying horny for your wannabe fucktoy and save you the aggravation and mental strife. You’re not you when you’re freaking out over your Lusty Lusty Lusty thoughts,” Odile said. She grinned in a manner that indicated she knew the commentary was going to make Odette mad. Catching that intent was what kept Odette from actually losing her shit.

“You know what? Point doubly taken. We can wait a little longer before I officially catch you,” she said drily.

If I even want to catch you, she thought.

She didn’t dwell on that too much because now she was trying to think too far ahead. At the moment, she needed Odile if she wanted to keep going on this sacrilege bust. And Odile needed her. That’s just how things were, and for her own sake, they needed to stay that way for a little while longer.

But when the time came, would she even want to officially partner with Odile? What would that entail?

Did she even have a choice?

“I’m sensing your nervous system’s starting to jingle back to life,” the eldritch terror said, shimmying her shoulders excitedly. “Better get a move on, cutie patootie.”

Odette stared at her negative mirror image again before furrowing her brow. “What are you talking about? I’m not–”

Before she could finish her thought, her eyes opened. Her vision was blurry at first, but it came to focus on a smooth white ceiling. The overhead fan was spinning quietly, and she could hear the muffled sound of chatot singing just outside. A swanna down comforter had been tucked up under her arms.

Awake. She was awake.

“Fuck me,” she said out loud. Her mouth felt dry, and she could taste the morning breath on her tongue. But, hearing her voice under normal, awake acoustics was something she'd never take for granted again.

As soon as the words left her lips, her thoughts sprung to life, but they weren’t her own.

That’s what she said.

Crude. Laced with threatening giggles. Static-y.

Odette lurched up, her eyes darting around the room. She’d been so caught off guard by the casual intrusion of Odile’s voice in her brain that it took her quite a while to realize Noel wasn’t in the bed anymore. But all she could focus on was her own mind.

“Odile?” she said in a whisper.

Yes, but maybe don’t talk out loud when you need to respond to me like this, dumbass, Odile said. That’s a one-way ticket to a padded cell and a straight jacket, and while those are a fun time, save it for later.

Odette slowly settled back against the pillows, feeling herself sink into their plush material as she brought her hand up to cover her mouth. Her own thoughts raced over the sound of Odile’s voice, but she could somehow still hear the Wrath god giggling through them.

“Oh no,” she murmured.
 
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YEEEEEEEEEEE IT'S TIIIIME!!


[Quick thoughts while reading the Venira Origin Story:

You mentioned the length of this chapter. I feel like you probably could have worked in the opening scene with Noel and Odette into the ending of the previous chapter and started this one with Odette waking up in her dream world. Or maaaaybe cut this one off somehow just prior to Odile telling her origin story and shifted that segment into the following chapter; it feels like there's enough meat left in both halves from that point to count as a chapter on their own. It's a lot to cover, though, and honestly I feel like having it all in one chapter is the way to go, length or not.]

Post-read thoughts: Loved this a lot! It's everything I could have hoped for from the first meeting. I do feel like the tonal shift was... somewhat jarring, between the cutesy cuddling between Noel and Odette then diving into the Blood Swamp, and I think that might have been better served, as I said above, by shifting the cuddling scene into the ending of the previous chapter and leaving this one purely the Odette/Venira interaction. But with that said, I do understand (I assume) why you felt you should have that lighter scene in this chapter, just prior to the sheer weirdness of the rest of the chapter, and I don't think it's harmed by including it here, either. Mostly I think it would have trimmed down the length a bit, since you were concerned about that, but given the whole Blood Dream sequence is long even without that, I'm not sure if it would have made a huge difference.

Anyway, lots of good info revealed here, and finally adding that new element we all knew was coming eventually into the game, and I am so excited to see them working together going forward, and especially how Noel (and possibly Valentin?) react to this news!

She stopped talking when he abruptly grabbed her wrists. Not roughly; it was more of a tender, reassuring hold. “It’s okay,” he said, an easy grin gracing his lips despite the notch in his brow. “We can go back and forth about it all night, but really. I appreciate it, but you do not owe me an apology. It’s okay.”

I love these two so much. Something tickles me every time I see this quieter, softer side of Odette, even having seen it several times by this point. And Noel already comes across as the ultimate ride-or-die best friend, and you do all of this without even a hint of romance between them. It's genuinely impressive!

“Odette, someone would have to literally kill me to get me to stop being friends with you,” he said, his cheek falling against the side of her head. “And even then, I’d come back as a drifloon or something and just bother you some more.”

She melted into his hug. Noel always had the best hugs, only second to Vienna’s, and maybe even Bernard’s or Marieanne’s. But her eyes snapped open as a question occurred to her. “Why a drifloon?”

He scoffed, though he didn’t release his hold on her. “Ghost? Flying? Good hair? Come on, man, it’s like you don’t know me at all.

Further examples; massive fight, and they can just go right back to joking about each other. And Noel's sense of humor is hilarious. Characterization is easily your strong point, 1000%.

…did Venira know what she was thinking? Always? The thought mortified her. An eldritch beast having a front-row ticket to every unsavory thought she’d had about Valentin so far? Ever?

Because that's what any cosmic horror is truly invested in; a tiny horny girl's love life. :mewlulz: (This is made all the funnier with the meta knowledge that I know Odile and, actually yes, this absolutely is something she'd tease Odette about.)

“No,” he said tentatively. “But, they’re after you.” He let the words hang for a while as if he were trying to give her time to sit with them. “If the roles were reversed, would you be bowing out?”

“Absolutely the fuck not,” Odette declared. She didn’t even need to think about it. And it was there that she realized his point.

I fucking love these two. These are prime friendship goals right here. You do such a great job showcasing just how close they are without like, spelling it out directly.

“Not to mention, how do I even access this thing? Talk to it? If it’s just…in me? My soul? Do I even have a soul? I don’t–”

I do like this part here. It's a little detail I hadn't considered, but also that's probably because I have ooc knowledge. But yeah, before they become buddies, it makes sense for Odette to be wondering how the hell this whole thing works.

Odette humored him and crawled her way under the fluffy white blanket while he got up to switch the light off. She soon settled herself at Noel’s side, her head falling against his shoulder as he slung his arm around hers.

Fuuuuuck this is so cute! Platonic cuddling, fuck yeah! This gave me such a big stupid smile on my face. Want more of this.

When she awoke, she wasn’t in the bedroom anymore.

She wasn’t anywhere.

Ahh, so that's how we're handing first contact. Almost feels... out of character for Venira, in a way, but I know this isn't about to go down how one would (normally) expect it to.

To her horror, she looked down at herself and discovered that her entire body was drenched in blood. Hell, she was sitting in it.

Somewhat closer to what I'd expected now. :mewlulz:

The more she looked around, the less anything made sense. No doors, no stairs, no signs of spooky apparitions. Just her. She kicked against the blood pooled at her feet, watching as it splattered up around her and landed in droplets, sending rims of ripples in all directions. That was the only movement she saw, and soon it all fell still again.

I know you've seen Soul Eater, so... this reminds me a lot of that sort of not-quite-alternate-plane-of-reality thing that they had going on when Tsubaki fought her brother in the enchanted sword. Not really real but definitely not not real.

When she felt her feet touch a surface of sorts, she clawed through the new swamp she found herself in, battling past chewed-up lillipads and piles of gnat-infested algae before she managed to crawl her way out of the hellish lake and up onto land again.

This whole scene is a showcase of almost-dreamlike imagery, but with a very something-is-wrong-here vibe to it. No wonder Odile liked Orzo's realm.

“B̵̎̒O̴̕͜O̸̍̕.̷̏̎”

The reflection jerked forward, protruding out of the glass of the mirror. Its face came so close that Odette felt its nose bump hers, and the abruptness of it forced a jolt through her body.
“Oh gods, is that all it took? Some baby shit like ‘boo’?” it cackled. “I guess it probably helped that you weren’t expecting it, but shit, I wasn’t expecting it to be that easy!”

The perfect introduction, honestly.

“Somewhere, anywhere,” it yelled back, not turning around. It had shoved its hands into its pockets. “That mirror’s pretty cramped, so let's walk and talk. We have a whole bloodstream to take up, might as well use it.”

This first line ("Somewhere, anywhere") feels oddly ooc for Venira, very... vague, cryptic, unhelpful. But again, this is me and my meta knowledge of her and her personality at work. Still, I do think, for setting the scene here plus given the fact that this is our first encounter with her proper, it's not likely as jarring as it would be to anyone who's not me.

“Did you know entrails were, like, the big fashion statement back then? I was the one who made them big, not to toot my own horn. Fleshy things look really good when you know how to style them.”

Aaaand we're immediately back into "yeah that's Odile" territory. :mewlulz:

“Wait. We’re…inside me?” she said.

The doppelganger grunted in annoyance and stopped walking again, this time turning its entire copied body to face Odette.

“Some rendition of that, yeah, but you’re not answering my fucking question. Did you like the decor?

Oh, I wasn't expecting this to actually be like what it felt like. Which I guess is kind of dumb of me to not have jumped to this as my first conclusion, really.

“You mean this swamp shit? No, I thought it was really fucking obnoxious.”

They literally have been like this since the beginning, omg. :copyka:

I will say that it does feel... somewhat odd for Odette to be 'leaning into her annoyance' here, if only because she's kind of unsure of what to make of this body double at the moment. Up until now, she's been mostly confused, but here she just flat out decided it was trying to intimidate her the paragraph before, so she opts to react more combative...? I guess it's in character, to a degree, but I'm not sure I would have expected this reaction this early into their very first encounter.

Most of all, she’d been so certain she knew the doppelganger’s voice. In fact, she’d been so certain she knew what the doppelganger was. But, did legendaries normally act like this? Then again she’d never actually met a legendary, so what the fuck did she know?

The above point aside, when not taken out of context and read all at once, this whole scene does flow together very nicely, as Odette eventually works up to being less uncomfortable and more open to probing at what the hell is happening around her.

“I’m this,” it declared. “Well. Kinda. I’m tethered to your existence by this. I didn’t have a lot of time to pick a spot, so I hope you’ve been enjoying the tingly tramp stamp. If not, well, sucks to suck limp dick, I guess.”

Great positioning, I hadn't realized there was a designated 'spot'. :mewlulz:

“You’re Venira,” she said.

The vast expanse was suddenly engulfed in colorful lights. Fanfare trumpets sounded from every direction and yet nowhere at all, so loud that Odette doubled over to cover her ears. Through the cracks between her fingers, she swore she could hear the sounds of confetti cannons and looked up in time to see some colorful streamers falling from above.

The doppelganger–Venira–now stood atop a flight of stairs that ended in a balloon arch. Every single balloon was inscribed with the words “You stated the fucking obvious!”

:ROFLMAO:

“I figured I would be polite in presenting as a human form that you could identify with, but if you’re not into it, I can always go back to one of my ancient shapes.”

Looks like this part here was meant to be bolded, since it's Venira talking, and it was at this point I realized we aren't getting her deformed speech text. 🤔 Which I think is intentional, given that we got it in the "Boo" but nowhere else.

Thin, ghastly skin stretched over the skeletal contours of unnaturally long limbs that defied all laws of human anatomy. Her smile now served as a wicked gash, slicing its grotesquely large head from ear to ear, while her eyes, now enormous, bloodshot saucers, leered down into the dark recesses of Odette’s soul. They gleamed with an unearthly malevolence.

Actually fucking horrifying, this whole segment, my god. Wish we could get this in a visual. WSBS anime, anyone?

“Odile,” she said simply. “Your name is Odile.”

Venira’s—Odile’s, now—face lit up. Something about it might have been cute if it weren’t so demonic to start.

I'm actually a little disappointed we didn't get more here. Where did 'Odile' even come from? I feel like I've asked before but I don't remember the answer... is there some meaning behind it that went over my head in this scene?

Odette felt bile rising in her throat. Her vision swam, her stomach lurched with a violent bout of nausea, and her mouth began to salivate like it usually did when she was about to vomit.

I'm with Odette here, ew. We can cut this part from the anime.

Odette’s jaw tensed. The confirmation of the truth bomb was overshadowed by Odile’s choice of label for Valentin. “Don’t call him that.”

“Fine, your 'wittol gorl cwush,'” Odile replied mockingly, flapping her wings for added effect.

Called it.

I can sense changes in your feelings, especially when they involve other sins.

Hmm. Was Valentin confirmed to be hosting a blood legend too? That doesn't feel right. I'd have to go back and look...

Unless Odile doesn't literally mean her siblings, but just the feelings they represent. Most people can still feel lust, even if they're not possessed by the legend representing it, after all. Now that I think about it, that's probably what she means... Valentin hosting the legend of lust is a laughable concept. (Although I honestly would not put that passed you, either LOL)

“A looooooooong, long, long, long, long, long, long, long time ago, before you were even a speck of dust on the cosmos, I came to be among some other legendaries you might be more familiar with.” A crudely drawn image of Odile as a flying tumbleweed flashed across the screen. It was so crudely drawn, in fact, Odette would have assumed a toddler had made it. But it got the point across.

I've probably mentioned this before too, but you manage to mix the perfect amount of horror, humor, and general "what the fuck is happening?" vibes together very well.

“Some of the other legendaries didn’t like what we’d become, and we had a big fight about it. During that fight, I learned the power of vessels. I also created an army of other Pokemon like me–like us–that thrived on blood just as we did. I taught my cohorts to do the same. From there I became known as The Mother of All Blood Types.”

This whole scene does a good job of condensing down the origins of Venira, her siblings, and blood types in general from that one-shot into something simple and easy to follow.

That said... I don't think I ever realized that Venira essentially created blood-types. Feels like a big revelation to me. And it doesn't answer why only shinies have the gene capable of it, like... is that also something Venira meant to do or was it purely a limitation she was forced to abide by? Like she literally tried and could not create one otherwise or something?

“I was just excited to be free, even though I’m not sure how it happened. I didn’t want to ask questions; I just wanted to enjoy being away from those backstabbing dickshits for however long I could.”
“I was locked away in that fucking ball for thousands,” she raised a hand for emphasis, lifting her knee up onto the armrest as if set to climb into Odette’s lap, “of years. I don’t know how, and I don’t know why, but your bastardly teeny existence got me out. And I guess I was just riding the last two decades on the high of freedom and didn’t want to fuck it up. Despite what you might think, we gods are far from perfect. Believe me.”

I'm glad Odile herself mentions that even she's not sure how exactly she got free or how she got to (or into) Odette, because I was kind of expecting that answer to crop up here too and was a bit disappointed when it didn't.

“How could we be separate?” Odette queried, tilting her head.

“A formal catch.”

I have so many thoughts about this. Like, I want to write a fanfic about a fanfic levels of thoughts. I had the idea way back during AQ and I suspect you probably knew what I was getting at even then because I know I poked you a couple times about what would happen if they were somehow split up.

That aside but somewhat related, I reeeeally can't wait to get more on how this works, specifically the pokeball bit in this case. How would Odile fight and battle if she's got inside (or linked to?) Odette? Back in AQ she had the lancet to draw blood, but I guess I was still under the impression that they were still linked. Odile still relied on her to battle, or just to change form, even. I am so intrigued by this.

Nothing else to say from here except moar plz. (Totally joking, of course, write at your own pace, but I will be here like a baby bird waiting to be fed until the next chapter.)
 

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dette quirked a brow. She exchanged looks with Noel, who shrugged as soon as their eyes met.

“No,” she replied. “Is that name supposed to mean something regarding the shinies? He the person who started all of this?”
A passing thought I had here is that even though most people might read pt 1 & 2 soon after the other, as someone who apparently didn't I had to go back and see what name was said because I straight up forgot.

I kind of think that a sort of

'Florent Lambourne' at the open might be worthwhile. Idk might just me. Not a big deal
That’s why the wealthy hoard and hide them from the general public. They want these crazy powerful Pokemon for themselves.”

His loose frown gave way to a subtle smirk. “And I’m blessed that the two of you aren’t braindead.” He turned on his heels and moved toward his filing cabinets.
I did wonder to myself briefly what they wanted to do with it keeping it for themselves but lets be real, people like that don't usually have any truly rational reason to behave like that.

Alphabetized names, blurbs, and even photographs of these Pokemon. As Odette flipped through them, she did manage to locate the summaries for hiruition, lophious, and desmocula, among hundreds of others.
Where's my blood-type pokedex, smh.
“He has a son named Armel who holds Greed. No clear photo, unfortunately. The guy might as well not exist. We only know what we know from other operatives and what I’ve managed to finagle out of Dorien.”
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Armel will never stop looking like this in my head now, sorry. There's no reason for this.

I previously thought he was a spindly sickly child like this kid?
Until we talked and you said he was a BIG guy. Sorry but he's ^ that now
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Valentin shot her a look, one that teetered on the line between unamused and exhausted. "Well, it's all there. But, to put it in layman's terms, he disappears. Not figuratively; literally. Gone with the wind. Which leads us to believe Enigma operatives have means to access their point of operations from wherever they may be, even if it's kilometers away."

"Like...teleportation," Noel declared.

"That's the hypothesis we have, yes. Or, much less probable, there's just Team Enigma bases everywhere that we don't see. We've lost him in a multitude of locations, though, and swept the areas after. Unless they're pulling a fast one on us, we're assuming some sort of remote access point."
Oh boy that would be very inconvenient...

She was perplexed to find herself drawing blanks.
:copyka:

"That's lovely," she whined.
The use of the speech tag 'whined' felt a bit weird here for some reason? Normally I'm pretty whatever on these as they're character dependent but I noticed it and it felt odd I guess? Based on the conversation I think I might have expected more of a 'groaned'? Idk, perhaps its merely me, so take my thoughts with a grain of salt.

She could never get through a Unitas service without breaking into a fit of nausea. Of course, that had to be a terrible coincidence or something in the building her family had gone to for services.
uh oh spaghettio

Dorien won't go near an Arcean church; he gets visibly aggravated at the idea.

Something about him always getting a stomach ache.

No way. No way, no way, no--
UH OH SPAGHETTIO

However, as the thought occurred to her, something spilled out of her mouth before she could think about it.

“Or maybe they don’t have access to it,” she said blindly.
I have to say, I really do dig the extended throughline of Odette slowly coming to that awful awful realization. It was satisfying both narratively and in an angsty kind of way.

I think any eagle-eyed reader would slowly be amassing the dots even without the prologue, so its refreshing that Odette is making those same uncomfortable leaps. Yet at the same time, its also big oof times. Odette is trying to deny it to herself but being the problem solving detective type, the evidence lines up way too much.

Also I've mentioned this before but this is honestly a nicely constructed info scene. Its not really a dump so much as a slowly developing 'oh shoot' but I think it all flows pretty naturally. The pacing flows quite nicely for me, even having read this before (although, was there edits? my memory is bad but it felt different?) and all the logic basically made sense, as far as I can tell. Also there's a ton of lore in this but it mostly all was quite clear.

The only part that caught me up was the distinction between vice dust and sacrilege I guess? (take the following with a grain of salt, I can be a bit slow and dense lol). Basically as I understand it, sacrilege is a drug made from the blood-type legendaries that gives you a high of that legendaries affinity? But Vice dust is made from Avareed specifically, and more of a highly concentrated substance that can cause amnesia? Do other blood legendaries also can make vice dust from them....?

Anyways other than that, I'm able to follow the developments quite well!

What exactly is your taste in men? Are you sure you don’t like them psychopathic? Because I think you like them psychopathic.

ODETTE
NO, I’M JUST SAYING, ON SHEER EYE CANDY ALONE–
Oh my gosh

Well why not I guess, in April Fools universe lol

as some royalty-free instrumentals play in the background.
I'm so glad you specified royalty free instrumentals i was gonna file a lawsuit :mewlulz:

I’m the shorter, thicker knockoff of Wednesday Addams, or in some cases, Bayonetta, Odette Cinq-Mars.
This self description is killing me oh my gosh

degenerates call a “Tumblr Sexyman,” Clovis LeClair.
OH NO HE WOULD BE

I hate to be cursed with this knowledge

I’ve never been with a cast that I’ve felt so friendly with, like—all four of us hang out after shooting, all the time.
Man what an image that is

I can at least remind myself that he’s still my friend and we’re playing parts.
Man this makes me feel kind of sad for some universe where they are friends. Oh man if there's a a canonical multiverse in pokemon bc of Hoopa/ Ultra Wormholes this is canon to them right

Sometimes I read the script and feel like I have to lie down. And whenever I think it can’t get any worse, the writers send me the next episode, and SURE ENOUGH!

NOEL
It ALWAYS gets worse!

DORIEN
He claps in time with the first three words.
EVERY. SINGLE. TIME. It always gets worse! I gave up hope for a redemption ten episodes ago because, holy fuck, there is no return for him.
RIGHT ON

Its also pretty funny to imagine some actor having to play this wildly depraved character lol. And hime thinking 'yup, no hope of a redemption arc'

Absolutely not. You cannot under any circumstances dwell on how much you love your significant other than also debate beating the shit out of them out of jealousy on the same train of thought.
Idk I find it soooo romantic

For the love of god. Get yourself a Clovis, get yourself a Noel, but JEEZE, why would you EVER want a Dorien?
Clearly if a character is hot they can't be responsible for their actions come ON???? Who wouldn't want a rich psycopath who tries to give you amnesia

I mean this with no offense intended, but I would SWAN DIVE–

He pauses and looks back at the camera.
Ba-dum tss.
🫥

And Bernard’s so nice, too, man. What a gem. I love when he’s on set, we can shoot the shit with that man for hours, and he’s so fucking talented.
WE STAN BENARD IN THIS HOUSE

It makes me happy that in April Fools verse Bernard the actor is also nice and beloved.

If you’re tired of waiting for new episodes of “White Swan, Black Swan,” we also invite you to check out our new prequel series, “Poison and Pecha Berries,” which is premiering soon on Thousand Roads as well.
Oh my gosh this is grand

ngl I do love me an April Fools chapter that an author took a little too seriously. It was absolutely hilarious to read through this whole alternate verse where they're just actors and they're all friends. You're quite good at write banter that feels natural and characterful, and even in this 'joke' chapter that bleeds through. It reads very authentic to how a friend group would talk.

It actually made me sad for a second too though lol? not like , super sad but just a teensy bit where im like... Clovis and Dorien bros if one wasn't a deranged psycho? Odette probably with way less trauma? alas!

Anyways, absolutely exquisitely hilarious AFD chapter, good stuff.

Valentin had suggested they follow him back to his apartment but realized about halfway out of his office that he was too inebriated to operate his car responsibly. So he made a call, and within ten minutes, a dark blue Mazda SUV was waiting outside for him.
I have to admit I spent a hot minute desperately trying to invent a pokemon-ified variant of 'mazda' but nothing stuck. Disappointing
“I think you look pretty handy on that thing, I must say,” Valentin complimented. “It’s cool. It suits you.”

The warm way he said it caused her lower gut to vibrate, and she had to stop to collect herself. Did he just call her cool? Was that flirting?
Oh odette, you're hopeless (you too valentin/Clovis)

Valentin had several filing cabinets in his office back at the rink. Here had entire shelves and locked dressers. Books upon books took up the shelves, while stacks of files sat haphazardly on the desk that was pushed up against the back wall. Above it was a bulletin board, so full of sticky notes and thumb-tacked pictures and documents it was a wonder it hadn’t fallen off its hanger. There were actually multiple boards, all sporting equal amounts of notes. There was even a whiteboard with leftovers of a poorly erased list of bullet points pushed into a corner.
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Are you okay?” he repeated.

No, she thought. But everything within her protested that answer. She couldn’t think clearly about the evidence she was looking at if her mind was muddled with thoughts of being anything but fine.

She blinked slowly at him before lightly shaking her head. “Why wouldn’t I be?”
Has anyone in the history of fiction ever answered this honestly? :mewlulz:

Fuck, no, I’m sorry. I know. We are, she wanted to say. She never wanted to see him make such a face. But her lips were still running on their own, she still felt like she wanted to break something. She still felt enraged.
So one small crit here, in comparison to CH 13 compared to the emotions surrounding Odette's dawning revalation that she is maybe hosting a blood legend, this part felt a touch stiff? Not her being irrtionaly mad at Noel, thats understandable. But specifically the way the emotions were reading here felt a bit... plain?

It definitely gets the point across. But it also didn't elicit a emotional reaction from me the way I was really vibing with the ansgt of the emotions in the previous scene. 'She felt enraged' is definitely accurate but even if she was disasscoiating that usually involves a different feeling. Since this is kind of an important surfacing of wrath for her I'd personally hope for a slightly richer description of the emotions and the sensation of anger.

“Care to join me?”
Awwwww this was sweet though, offering to do a puzzle.

It was nice to get what was ultimately a bit more chill chapter after the last Lore Time. I mean, its not that chill considering she gets in a fight with Noel, but there's no huge developments or reveals, just some quiet bits of Valentin's team and some important discussions.

Despite my crit earlier, I overall really liked the beats of the chapter and the arguement with Noel. There's bits in-between that can be strengthened narration wise, but I think its becoming increasingly clear that Wrath is influening Odette, especially here. Blowing up was "irrational" but it makes sense. Odette is totally strung out emotionally from all this, and is hosting wrath and on edge. Rough luck.

I'm finally catching up to where I was slowly, which means soon I can get to the actually legendary appearance, ohohoho.

Say something else, quick, she thought.
This is just me with social anxiety at the bank, trying to talk to the teller :mewlulz:
Small talk is the worst, why can't I just skip straight to real talk like 'how many chuggas come before a choo choo'
He paused to purse his lips and shimmied another piece into the part he was building. “Besides, I think I sense something on the tip of your tongue.”

I wish you could feel the tip of my tongue, she thought longingly before clearing her throat. So much for having a grip.
Odette get a grip oh my gosh

“Read her mind, of course. I hear it’s easy.”

“She definitely thinks it’s something I know how to do,” Valentin said. “Except, even if I could, I still don’t think I could keep up with her nonsense. She expects me to be unconditionally in love with her. But she continuously acts like the world revolves around her and throws a fit when I can’t be bothered. Mind reading wouldn’t make her shit attitude any better.”
Lol what a mood, she sounds annoying

“It’s okay, I got what you meant,” she said.

“I swear I wasn’t calling you stupid, I just–” he insisted.

“I know you weren’t calling me stupid, you’re–” Odette tried to assure him.

“--find it remarkably easy to explain these things–”

“--more than welcome to discuss this–”

“--to you.”

“--with me.”
eheheh i liked this little bit. it can be hard to pull this off in narration but it works well here.

No sooner had she thought that did she reach over to grab another puzzle piece, only for her hand to meet Valentin’s as he reached in the same direction. They lingered there together before Odette came back to her senses and hastily pulled it away.
Hallmark moment

Odette bared her teeth at him.“What makes you think I want to calm down? What about this is calming?” she questioned, her voice rising again as she closed the already tight gap between them. “Dorien screwed with my head; how do you expect me to sit here and let that slide?”

Her glare bore into him with the might of a rabid mightyena, but Valentin stood his ground. He held her gaze as he crossed his arms, his eyes twinkling with a puzzled light.
See like this whole exchange and description throughout felt quite snappy and visceral. Good stuff

He could barely finish his sentence before Odette rushed to him and hugged him tightly. He didn’t hesitate to return it, resting his chin against the crown of her head. Feeling his arms around her did heaps more for her nerves, and she immediately relaxed into him. Her body quivered against the warring senses of panic and ease she felt.
Awwwwww glad they made up

Anger didn’t wear him. He wore anger.
Ouohohoho idr if I said this before, but what a great line.

“Why a drifloon?”

He scoffed, though he didn’t release his hold on her. “Ghost? Flying? Good hair? Come on, man, it’s like you don’t know me at all.
HA Drifloon!Noel when?????????

Oh man though, this chapter went right back to maximum spicy. Riddled with lots of emotional tension and angst. I've been waiting for the reveal of the Vice Dust and it does not disappoint. I truly cannot blame her and I wish she could just go right over there and kill him. Sheesh. I wonder if Florent knows... I can't remember if its alluded to in the Dorien POV chapter but I wonder about the eventual stuff if Florent will be unhappy to find out what Dorien has done...

Also I liked that Noel and Odette made up pretty quick. I think it would have felt silly for that to last long at all if they've really been friends for this long, and it was refreshing to see a little friend apology. All the awkward tension and poor conversation and weirdness between her and Valentin was great, and it was actually interesting to see a frank discussion of his experiences too.

Also Im glad everyone acknowledged the elephant (or in thise case, wrathful tree dragon) in the room. The connections are too apparent. She's got Wrath.

One thing of note I found a bit odd but aside from the mention of the realization her and her partner had been drugged there wasn't any apparent desperation to go and tell Solene? Its possible this will come up in a later chapter (or if it doesn't I assume its just a rational slip) but I'd definitely expect her to have a conversation with Solene at some point.

Other than that, good stuff. Great emotional writing.

FINALLY CAUGHT UP

Miles upon miles of a still, bloody ocean stretched out before her eyes, and it seemed that the lone presence within it was her.
What a nice landscape! Charming

“B̵̎̒O̴̕͜O̸̍̕.̷̏̎”
SHE'S HERE
Venira chuckled again, louder this time. The sound gave Odette the same uneasy feeling she got when she heard the Kalos emergency signal test on the TV.
Oh this is great comparison

No sooner had she spoken did the discombobulated human form twitch. Then it lunged at her.

It ran on all fours, its bones cracking and popping with each eerie stride forward. It moved like somebody caught in the area of a strobe light, yet managed to close the gap between them in no time flat.
Yike.

“Oh, right, I guess not. Gulattive was fat, but you’re more...thick. Like a peach. No!” Venira gasped, black eyes sparkling. “You’re a pear. You’re a cute little itty bitty little pear-shaped soft little angry cute midget thing.”
odile is so kind and thoughtful
Somewhere in her thought process, she started thinking about her own name. Vienna had the idea to name her after the main character of the Swanna Lake ballet, the white swanna herself. Vienna thought the name was pretty, and it coming from a show she liked so much made it better. Odette supposed she had her family's overall fixation with that ballet to thank for her decision to start dancing.

As she started recalling the plot of Swanna Lake, she remembered how the white swanna eventually came into contact with another woman named Odile, who ended up being transformed to be a copy of her. Her doppelgänger.

Odette paused for a moment before dragging her pearly white shoe against the standing blood at her feet. She then let out a scoff, it coming out a deflated chuckle. It was good to know she had a sense of humor, even in the face of a very bloody nightmare.

“Odile,” she said simply. “Your name is Odile.”
And thus, white swan, black swan. ROLL CREDITS

“Are you trying to catch a fly? I prefer fruit flies; the big black house ones are fucking vile,” Odile said.
SAME
“So, unfuckable Gulattive convinced the unfuckable quintet that my ideals sucked and why genocide for the sake of genocide was the way to go, and they sucked me into a little ball, and locked me up.”

A scribble of purple shot out from the Pokeball in Gulattive’s hand and engulfed Odile. Her doodle disappeared, and the other six doodles were left cheering before a poorly-drawn clock cut onto the screen. The hands began turning.

“I wasn’t sure how long I was in that ball. It’s safe to say it was thousands of years, maybe more. But, Gulattive took over the group and led us all into a contract with this family called the Lambournes, all for the sake of having consistent vessels and a means of manipulating a group of humans into doing his power-hungry bidding. They all seemed to be on the same braindead idiotic dumbass page.”
So this did give me pause, trying to untangle the exact timeline and goals here
- Venira and her army of blood types wreak havoc, but get fed up and decide partnering with beings is easier
- Gullattive is unhappy with this and tries to revolt
- To get Venira out of the way he gets a special pokeball and captures her for thousands of years
- During this time he just.... still makes a contract with the lambournes for a slow moving genocide? doing nothing? Partnering with more humans? I thought he hates that idea
- venira escapes into Odette

I guess I'm just wondering why if Gulattive says he wants to do genocide for fun whats he waiting for? There probably is a good reason but it didn't seem to come up. Why just sit around with the lambournes? Between locking up Venira and those thousands of year why hasn't he snacked on all life?
“Your future 'Baby's First Shallow Grave' occupant, Dorien. Inviderus' fuckhead,” Odile said. Her nose crinkled in disgust. “I’m sure I don’t need to tell you this, but keep your wits about you with him. He’s trying to get a rise out of you to get me to rear, most likely to get me back to that ball and to get you to follow.”

Suddenly, his reaction to her warding off desmocula in the garden made all the sense in the world. Paired with his previous blatant attempts at pissing her off, she now understood his angle. And was thrilled to know that she hadn’t been crazy for initially thinking that’s what he was doing.
Actually, even though its not mentioned, it makes sense that he's part of the reason Venira didn't reveal herself, its easier to stay hidden from Dorien and Inviderus

You’re not you when you’re freaking out over your impure thoughts,” Odile said, pursing her lips in a manner that indicated she knew the commentary was going to make Odette mad.
eat a snickers
“Odile?” she said in a whisper.

Yes, but maybe don’t talk out loud when you need to respond to me like this, sis, Odile said. That’s a one-way ticket to a padded cell and a straight jacket, and while those are a fun time, save it for later.

Odette slowly settled back against the pillows, feeling herself sink into their plush material as she brought her hand up to cover her mouth. Her own thoughts raced over the sound of Odile’s voice, but she could somehow still hear the Wrath god giggling through them.

“Oh no,” she murmured.
Uh oh Spaghettio!

So I see you mentioned being worried about the overall length and pacing of this chapter. At this point I can't tell if I have a bias or not but I thought it was great. Sure it was long and I could tell it was long, but it certainly wasn't boring nor did it drag. I think I briefly found myself surprised she wasn't more shook in the opening sequence with the lake of blood but then again, its a dream and I could buy that she might be observing things with a very detached air.

There are a ton of questions to be asked and information to be delivered so all things considered this is great imo. I think this covers a lot of important information and aside from the confusion I mentioned about what Gulattive is waiting for, I think it answers a lot of questions.

Theorycrafting moment.... my memory of the opening is fuzzy but I wonder if Armel's legendary helped Venira break free. Sher herself doesn't know how she escaped her ball, but maybe she had help?

Anyways, I think this was a great chapter overall and even though by now I feel so used to Odile, it was great to actually see her get introduced in fic. She's such a ray of sunshine, very polite and thoughtful, so considerate and compassionate. Truly and benevolent and lovely entity.

I actually can't think of more to say than 'gud fic pls update' lol. really and truly though, man what a CHAPTER.
 

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WHEW LAD did I just blaze through 4 chapters of WSBS? Why yes, yes I did. And I’ve got a nice little stack of notes and quotes to comment on!

Chapter 11:

I could really feel just how tired and done with everything Odette was this chapter. Bad enough that you slip up bad enough to disrupt rehearsal, and get called out on it in front of everyone but then you’ve got your well-meaning yet overbearing friend nagging you, and obsessive boyfriend who embarrasses you with the gaudiest get-well gift of all time, and tons of things on your mind that you can’t share with anybody. Yeah, I’d be pretty Done With Things, too.

Ange was the absolute highlight of this chapter for me, and I’m so glad we got to see lots of his adorable antics.

Odette didn’t realize she had zoned out until she was jolted from her haze by a disturbance on the stage. Her eyes were quick to lock on the left entrance, just in time to catch a couple of dancers tripping and stumbling over each other as they collectively tried to wrestle their way past some props. Props that shouldn’t have been in the way in the first place.

Abruptly sitting up in her chair, Odette frantically flipped through her clipboard as her eyes shot between the stage and her notes. She scrambled for her pen but soon found that she’d misplaced it.
Oh man, my inner theatre kid SHRIVELED at this. I never even was a tech crew or backstage person, but I still cringe at this and at Odette’s embarrassment. Yikes. I feel for you, girl.

“They’re supposed to be stage right,” she said, trying to confirm she knew where everything was supposed to be. His expression didn’t change too much.

“Are you sure you’re feeling better, Odette?” he asked.
Oof. Glad he didn’t totally grill her in front of everyone, but that’s still a rough question to be asked…in front of everyone.

“She's right, she really is fine! I helped break her fever myself” Ange said for good measure.
Aw blessed Ange. I bet he was the cutest little nurse to Odette the whole time.

“You should also try to concentrate more of focusing,” Ange hummed.
I think there’s a typo here? “Of” should be “on”

She felt RotomPhone vibrate and couldn’t help but groan. She fished it out and was as dismayed as she was unsurprised to see yet another text from Dorien. The third one since she woke up that morning and maybe the thousandth that week.


I hope you’re having a good day so far! I have a little something headed to you that’ll hopefully make you smile 💝
Ew. Gross. Go away, creep.

Even if there was a way for Enora to produce something like that, there’s no way she’d use such vile language. Enora was a sassy little thing, but she was no potty mouth.
No potty mouth, indeed! Why, Enora is a proper and distinguished lady, and she would never utter such foul language! How uncouth!

They were so thick the thieves were jealous.
Ahaha I love this expression

“If there were ever a time for you not to skip lunch, it would be the week following a visit to the ER. After just insisting you haven't had any hypotension issues for a while,” she said earnestly as she took a spoonful of soup out of the thermos she was holding. "
Acadia is THE mom friend of all mom friends. Such a concerned mother hen.

What could she even do from halfway across the world? Gods, what if Dorien followed her there? What if she never saw Clovis again? That was a sad thought.
Oh yikes Dorien totally IS gonna follow her when she moves, isn’t he? I don’t think Odette even realizes just how unhinged he is, yet.

The giant bush of roses, fit with an equally as giant pink ursaring toy and a bouquet of heart-shaped balloons, that had been unceremoniously left by the will-call windows, looked extremely tacky against the décor. Odette figured it was the ‘I Love Odette,’ which had been spelled out with white roses against the red, that really did it in.
Oh BARFFF. That’s so beyond obnoxious and over the top, ugh no I hate it!! The note is even WORSE. Gross. Throw the whole man away.

Did he think this was somehow supposed to glaze over how he’d acted in the garden? How he’d raised his voice and grabbed her? Above all, why did he feel the need to do this while she was at work? He had to have known something like this was impractical, yet he went through with it anyway.

It felt like an attempt at marking territory. The thought made her shudder involuntarily.
Yyyep, that’s exactly what it is. A message that’s more to her coworkers than to her: “She’s mine.” Also, classic love-bombing and trying to make up for that “tiny” mistake of grabbing her and yelling at her. I’m so glad Odette is having absolutely none of it.

When she didn’t immediately hear the sound of a shower running, a toilet flushing, or tittering voices going back and forth, she screamed.

It was guttural; it tore through her throat with such an animalistic force that Odette could only contain herself by grabbing one of the shower stall curtains and tearing it clear off the wall bar and all. As they collectively clattered to the floor, she arched over and grabbed hold of her head as if that would somehow alleviate the undiluted rage pulsing through her brain.
oof, there it is. I think I’d said a while back that I wanted to see Odette actually lose her cool more often? Well, this delivered. Glad that she managed to make it somewhere private before letting it all out. Which begs the question: what happens when she doesn’t have a place to go to let it out? Or if she can’t make it there in time?

“Was it from Dorien?” Ange asked after a few more seconds of quiet.

Odette took a while to respond. “Yeah, it was.”

Another pause. “I can burn it if you want.”
Ahahaha bless Ange. Yes, please burn it.

The chandelure suddenly appeared in front of her again, and this time, he was wearing the fallen shower curtain like a cape. As for the rod, he held it up as if it were some sort of staff. He puckered his lips in a pompous fashion, and his eyes drooped to match.

“I am the king of the women's dressing room,” he said, deepening the sound of his voice as if he were trying to do an imitation. "And I declare that you're not allowed to be upset anymore. Smiles only."

ANGE IS THE BEST LITTLE CUTIE I LOVE HIM SO MUCH. ANGE FOR PRESIDENT

She was about to send it when she stopped herself. Was the smiley face too much? They were just two acquaintances trying to set up a date to discuss confidential information, so why the hell would she bother sending a smiley face?

But on the other hand, would he think she was being too stiff if she didn’t? They seemed to have a repertoire of joking around whenever they came face to face…at least, she judged that much from the two times they’d talked in person, so perhaps it wouldn’t be that out of place?

She felt a bead of sweat forming on her forehead. When the fuck did texting become so hard?
Ahahaha this was so REAL lol. I felt that classic text overthinking in my soul.

Chapter 11.5:

Wow, you were not kidding with those chapter warnings. This was a brutally creepy and unsettling chapter—I thought I was already more than well aware of how slimy Dorien is, and I was still shocked and creeped out by his inner thoughts. Good gravy, this man is truly disturbed. I’d say he needs therapy, but I think he’s beyond help, tbh. Big yikes.

Strip clubs didn’t really do it for him anymore.
Somehow I IMMEDIATELY knew this was Dorien POV with that sentence alone. Also, the music accompanying this chapter? PERFECT fit for the mood and vibe.

He sighed deeply into the plastic of the lip balm tube as he allowed his eyes to slip shut. This keepsake had long lost its scent of her, but it still brought him a sense of comfort to know that there was a time when she applied its contents to her beautiful lips on the daily. Perhaps that was how she kept them in such pristine condition–-he always had to wonder how somebody managed to have such flawless lips like that.

Such flawless, kissable lips. These strippers could never.
I’M SORRY WH—? WHAT THE ACTUAL—?

That’s so freaking CREEPY omg I hate him so much, I didn’t think I could hate him more but I was WRONG? Jsbdjsksjdjkdd heebeejeebies. What a slimy, ratty snotfungus.

He settled for the lip balm on that occasion; not as disposable as the pencil she used to tap against her cheek in chemistry but not as desirable as the sports bra she apparently kept on hand for her dance practices after school. It was a happy medium.
BRUH IT GETS EVEN WORSE? It’s like…I know people like this exist irl, but seeing it written out inside their own head this way just makes it ten times more disturbing. He is so out of touch with reality on so many levels.

Besides, taking somebody's undergarments would have been too weird, even if it did smell entirely of her. He would never stoop himself that low.
Oh, gee, oh wow, how chivalrous of you. What high standards. Such a gentleman. 🙄

In thinking about that, he was certain that that might be more effective in getting Venira to rear her head than he had been doing. Just getting aggressive in battle or talking her ear off about touchy subjects wasn't enough, and the latter had even cost him some of his Vice Dust. Only the first-degree strain, but it was a loss nonetheless. He really needed to watch how much he used on her. She'd taken enough of it as it was.
Uhhh so how much HAS he used on her?? And how often?? Yikes???

Perhaps he could hit her just once. Release some tension and maybe, just maybe, lure Venira out. Kill two birds with one stone. Besides, a smack wouldn’t break skin. It would just leave a welt; one that would most likely heal in a day as long as he was careful with how hard he went for it. It wouldn’t be that awful, right?
Gosh this guy is genuinely PSYCHOTIC

No, that wouldn’t do. He couldn’t afford to harm her himself, not after past events.

But…god, it felt like she deserved it at least a little bit. Perfection shouldn’t be allowed to exist if it wasn’t on him.
Wow that last line is so raw. Basically Dorien’s whole personality in a nutshell. The vessel for Envy, indeed.

Nobody had their Pokemon out, so it was apparent that no drug-induced battles would occur.
Oh jeez the sheer implications of this. People with addictions forcing their mon to battle while high as a kite or drunk off their gourd? Absolutely awful to think about. These poor Pokémon, man.

Sure, some people might have called him an asshole for letting another woman crawl on him while he had a loving girlfriend at home by herself. But this was only for the moment. Besides, maybe if Odette had quenched him once in a while, he wouldn’t feel the need to do something like this.
What a healthy and loving boyfriend! So normal, so sane, not at all entitled, uwu :3

He supposed he understood her reservations, what with her past sexual trauma, but they’d been dating for over a month, and nothing had come of it. She never invited him inside, and she never took him up on his offers to go home with him after their dates.
Bruh it’s barely been a month??? Lol??? AND she’s got severe sexual trauma?? The entitlement is off the CHARTS with this guy. Wow.

There wasn’t anything wrong with it if he was just thinking about Odette the entire time anyway.
You, sir, are so sick in the head. Bruh.

“Please,” Clovis snickered. “I think all you’ll do is further remind me how asexual I truly am, high or not.”
Ahaha what a great burn.

“Funny, my mum’s younger than you,” Adam spat.

“Yeah, she told me while she was in my bed last night.”
KEK. The crude banter in this chapter was fantastic tbh. Love how Clovis just casually owned them all.

It’s not like he had any more Sin Titles to appoint.
Sin Titles? Like, the vessels for the big seven?

“I had a crush on her myself in secondary school. Didn't get very far, though. She was such a prig,” Denis suddenly said as he held his drink to his lips. He opened his mouth to continue, but something of a dubious chuckle made its way out before the words did. “How is she now, Dory? I'm sure she’s way more broken in after what happened, right? Was it worth waiting around for her prude ass to open up?”
Hooooly crap I did not think I would hate anybody more than Dorien in this scene and I was so freaking wrong. “Broken in”?! Are you KIDDING ME. I know Dorien got riled up for all the wrong reasons (possessiveness, basically), but I was still so on board with him decking Denis in the teeth. What a prick.

“What the fuck?” Denis yelled.

“Whoops,” Clovis said as he tucked an empty wine glass back toward his chest. He was standing behind Denis’s chair now.
Still wanted to see him get slugged in the face, but this was satisfying, too, heh.

Sin Title holders always had more visceral reactions to sacrilege, no matter how light the dose.
Interesting tidbit, there. Sure hope this doesn’t become relevant to give Odette a Very Bad Time later. [copyka]

Nobody else could love Odette like he did either, even if there were moments he wanted to take her head off.
Man, you really illustrate Dorien’s unhinged hot-and-cold obsession so well. Guy is off his rocker even when he isn’t high on drugs.

Chapter 12:

This one has a bit more levity than the previous two, which makes it a nice little breather. As always, I enjoy the banter between Odette and Noel—they have such a sibling type of relationship, almost. It’s freakin great. And their solidarity in simping over the ice skaters was great. 😂
Looks like this is leading up to lots of information next chapter! Honestly, I am so ready. Very excited for the information fam to break so all the pieces can start coming together and everyone can officially be on the same page!

“A little cluttered for my tastes, but it's certainly an aesthetic,” Elton chirped from his perch on Noel’s shoulders. As the bird spoke, Odette reached into the side pocket of her backpack and grasped Isaur’s ball.
Lol for some reason this made me wonder: do ice rinks have regulations on allowing fire-types in the building? Or near the ice? 😂 (I’m pretty sure Elton is a Talonflame—correct me if I’m remembering wrong.)

From their vantage point at the entrance to the rink, Odette could see the rink was definitely in use. A group of seven men and some assorted Pokemon, all mostly dressed to practice some skating, were gathered toward the center of the rink, chattering about gods knew what. The room was empty otherwise.

“I’ll start off by saying that I’m all for this,” Noel said under his breath as they let the doors slip shut.
Lol of course you are, Noel. I’d expect no less.

In other words, she'd be better off not drilling him until they were in private.
Hmm but that’s not the only kind of private drilling you’d like to do with him, is it, Odette 😏

As they slipped shut, his demeanor change was instant.

His shoulders deflated, and he hunched over tiredly as an exasperated sigh clawed out of his throat. He sat on the edge of his desk and aggressively tugged at the knots on his skates before kicking them off unceremoniously. Now barefoot, he stomped his way to the far corner of the office, where a mini bar—stacked to the brim with bottles of varying liquors—stood, flanked by numerous filing cabinets.
Ahahaha as someone who has worked too many customer service jobs, this is a mood and a HALF.

“J.L. Ménétrie—” Noel gasped. The loudness of his voice caused Odette to jump, and she flailed toward him just in time to slap her hands over his mouth.

“I’m sorry, what?”

For the second time, Odette felt her blood run cold. She watched as Noel’s eyes danced with a mix of embarrassment and fear as her look hardened into a glare. They exchanged something silent--something that said "do not say another goddamn word"--before simultaneously turning toward Clovis.
Noel. Dude. Buddy. My guy. This is why we can’t have nice things. 😂 It’s a good thing I already know Clovis/Val is a good guy, so I know that no actual harm is gonna come from that slip up.

As he spoke, he set down the empty glass he was holding and kept his eyes on them as he wrapped his fingers around the neck of that same whiskey bottle. He effortlessly popped the cork off, then held it to his lips to chug whatever was left.
Val has a perfectly healthy relationship with alcohol, I see. Solid coping mechanism, to be sure. Nothing to be concerned about here.

“Right. Because Clovis LeClair actually is a real person,” Odette surmised. She wouldn’t admit she had about 20 pages of notes about him in her backpack because nobody besides Noel and her Pokemon team ever needed to know that.
Lololol I’m just picturing a classic school notebook filled with notes and doodles of his name with hearts for some reason, like a 13 year old girl would do

“What about your boyfriend?” Valentin said quickly. Nevermind how it seemed like he had that question on standby this entire time, but she had to refrain from growling.

“I know he’s up to something.”

“I’m aware of that much, but what are your actual thoughts on him?” he pressed. He sounded tenacious.
Lol Val sure knows where his priorities are. “I know I gathered you here to talk about this super powerful, corrupt, widespread criminal organization, but first: u happy with ur bf or nah?”

“At first glance? No,” she assured him. That was the truth. “But, the more I stared at you two? Absolutely.”

Her response didn’t appear to help, and now Odette was starting to panic herself. She stumbled over what to say next until Noel cleared his throat.

“I was none the wiser if it helps,” he said. That was also true. “Dee has an unmatched ability to read people. Don’t feel bad.”

Valentin eyed her warily, and she shrugged.
Hmm I wonder if Odette picked up on this because of Wrath? Like, she was able to innately sense the anger and animosity the two have against each other?

“And I’ll counter you,” he said. “Do any of you know of a man named Florent Lambourne?”
Eyyy here we go. Does Val know Florent is her father? Is he going to tell her if he does? Hmmm

Chapter 13:

AKA, the chapter where it all comes together! Or, starts to come together, anyway. I know you were worried about it feeling too exposition-y, but I thought it was a lovely balance. The dialogue and responses to new information flowed naturally, so even though we did get a LOT of new information, it didn’t feel like a drag or confusing or all over the place. Nicely done! It’s not easy to juggle and deliver so much information all in one chapter, but you did it very well.

Also: headed to Val’s apartment and there’s a big storm coming? Please tell me they end up stranded at his place for the night ahahahah yes PLEASE

You saw firsthand how nasty those two were at the gala. I can tell you that was only at minimal power. They certainly get far worse.”
Oh boy. Very eager to see the absolute worst a blood mon can do.

Non-legendary?” Noel inquired in disbelief. “The ones we saw weren’t legends?”

“No, I’d say hiruition and lophious are rather mid-tier. Desmocula, probably the same.”
Oh snap okay, I thought the 7 deadly sins were the only blood mon, but I guess this makes the gala chapter make a whole lot more sense. I wonder how many there are in total?

He dug out a thinner folder, pulled it open, then took one piece of paper from the corner and slid it down onto the table. On it was a drawing of what Odette supposed was meant to be a Pokemon, but it didn’t look like one she’d ever seen. Maybe it vaguely resembled a dusknoir in shape but was certainly not one. If anything, it looked like a lantern, plated in gold, with a head that looked reminiscent of a candelabra.
Right, didn’t you commission someone to draw all of them?? It would be really cool to have those images shown right here in the chapter, I think! Or in an author’s note at the end.

As she handed Valentin back the picture, she was taken aback to find him staring at her. Hard. The look only lasted for a second once they made eye contact, but he had for sure been staring at her.
Does…does he know she’s Wrath? Or does he just have a hunch?

“He has a son named Armel who holds Greed. No clear photo, unfortunately. The guy might as well not exist. We only know what we know from other operatives and what I’ve managed to finagle out of Dorien.”
ARMEEEELLLL I can’t wait to see him come into play!

She tried to think further back to their time in school together and if she’d ever had moments where she genuinely felt scared around him. She was perplexed to find herself drawing blanks.

She really had put much of that time out of her head. It was starting to freak her out.
Bruh? Has Dorien been using Vice Dust on her since high school???

“But, in Dorien’s case, he’s also just like that. He’s an obnoxious yet eerie little asshole. If he’s committed homicide by his own free will, I wouldn’t be shocked in the slightest,” Valentin continued.
Lol what an accurate and fitting description of the little weasel.

Dorien won't go near an Arcean church; he gets visibly aggravated at the idea.

Something about him always getting a stomach ache.

No way. No way, no way, no--
Oh dang, I did not expect her to start piercing it all together quite so quickly, but here we are! Yeah she’s in for a fun time.

“The real reason is the blood types,” Valentin said. “They're very rare, and they’re only known to spawn in, you guessed it, blood. Entirely random, there’s no pattern, and sometimes it simply happens. But when it does, it causes a change in a Pokemon’s coat color, creating what you know as a shiny. Hence, Kalos’s lovely shiny trade still exists despite nobody really wanting it to.”
Huh, so does this mean every shiny Pokémon is blood type? Without fail?

“Sometimes, depending on the species, blood types prefer to remain docile. They occasionally won’t even present themselves unless their host is in severe danger. If that never happens, a host could live a full life completely unaware they’re possessed but be susceptible to those aforementioned health issues. They’d just be completely unaware of why it was happening,” Valentin explained, shrugging.
Oh jeez okay so…it’s not that Enora herself is blood type, but rather that she has…a…blood type parasite within her? That’s horrifying. Eeeek.

"A shiny could have its original blood 'mon removed and be forced to help create another. A human could make one, too, but we've found it's a little more difficult. They basically have to use sacrilege to a point of sheer, brain-has-melted-and-you-might-as-well-be-dead overdose even to get close to forming one within them.”
Oh gosh the removal process sounds horrifying, actually. Is that what happened to Enora?? Poor baby. I really want to know more about her backstory, even though I’m sure it will break my heart.

"Indeed. Armel most likely was, too, being that he is a biological descendant of Florent. Florent made it clear to my father that they pass naturally between Lambourne blood--provided that they are available to do so, as in, not already with another vessel--though he never really explained how that happened."

"So...how did Dorien get one? Is he a Lambourne?"

Valentin paused to chew on his words. "Florent told my father that, as overseer of them, he also has the power to bestow them upon whoever he picked. If he never ended up having children, which is evidently a different story. Dorien is, from our understanding, not related to Florent whatsoever."
So is anybody descended from Florent guaranteed to be born with a deadly sin attached?

“We believe it has something to do with Avareed’s passive effects. According to my father’s notes, Avareed was, as Florent described, a mind eater. ‘Greed for knowledge,’ so to speak,” Valentin said. “From our understanding, they’re using the same essence they’ve used to create sacrilege to also come up with this substance capable of this kind of nonsense.”
Ahh this explains Armel’s memory problems. Also uh, yikes? Literally how does he manage to function?

That was fucking rich. Bernard was getting more date time with Valentin than Odette figured she ever would. She exhaled evenly to keep herself from making a face that would make her envy obvious.
LOL Odette now is not the time to get jealous of your grandpa 😂

“But why even tell us this?" Odette spoke up again. "Why not just tell us we’re way too over our heads and to fuck off? You’ve clearly got the authority for it.”
Honestly, this is a very valid question. I feel like it would be more likely that Virtue Corp would swoop in and push them into some kind of protection program, since neither of them have any credentials to be doing this and are just normal citizens. (Well…Odette isn’t normal, but she doesn’t fully know that yet, lol)

Such simple words hit so much harder than she ever thought possible. Learning that Dorien had a powerful legendary in his possession, that Enora might have one herself, that she happened to slip under the radar for Enigma’s gatekeeping, the weird parallels about her poor health and the health of shinies, that Enigma has ways to wipe people’s memories, and now something even more fucked?
Yeah jeez she really got absolutely slammed with so much brain-breaking bombshells this chapter. She’s taking it all in like a champ, though!
 

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Heyo, here for chapters 9 through 11 as part of our review exchange! Where I left off last year (...christ, I've gotta get better at committing to stories on here), I remember being most intrigued about Clovis and his role in the story — as he had just been introduced, I recall being struck by how swiftly Odette struck up such her own little friendship with him, how strange and eminently unknowable he came off as being at first (with his unclear but present ties to this underworld of blood pokémon and sacrilege, an underworld that lies beneath a surface of opulent wealth and only marginally less fucked up shiny trading), and how neatly he fit into this social setting while somehow not quite belonging, or at least not fully anyway.

This conspiracy deepens over these three chapters in a very fun way; a lot happens in these 25,000-ish words, but the part that most engaged me was Clovis's conversation with Bernard over the phone in chapter 10. Having so much of chapter 9 dedicated to that tense exchange between Odette and him works very well as a lead up to that reveal, I think, because it becomes clear at this juncture of the story that Clovis never quite seems to say what he really means even if you don't know what he really means. He spends so much time prodding about for Odette's "angle" while in turn defending his own that you get the sense he's an outsider to her world, just as she is to this setting; given as well the lack of clarity surrounding his identity (i.e. the mystery about his figure skating or the life he leads outside these walls, his uncharacteristic discomfort with having any of this expressed when he puts his hand over Odette's mouth), you do a very good job of his answers always feel a little too perfect and then some time later revealing some new piece of information that puts all of this in a new light. Given the information divulged in chapter 8, Bernard was always going to factor into this eventually and she was always destined to stumble onto that, but it's nevertheless fascinating that he and Clovis are simultaneously in cahoots and approaching this from such different angles — Bernard takes such a clear concern in Odette's wellbeing, while Clovis always seems a little tentative about it; when Bernard says "it happens to all of us", Clovis pointedly distances himself from "us" despite the fact they evidently know each other. What is clear by this point is that Odette has eyes on her, that a few of the people in her life are invested in keeping those eyes on her, and that this runs much deeper than she'd previously anticipated; the lines between her personal life and the "act" she's putting up to further gain access are blurring hard by this point, and given the impending move to Alola, I'm intrigued to see how these things unravel. (Though, even in the much shorter term, Odette and Clovis have some questions for each other! They're putting up so many layers of abstraction between each other while simultaneously attempting to find understanding; it's a great bit of quasi-romantic intrigue, even if I remain firmly convinced that Clovis doesn't really need a queer awakening. I'm still sure that this guy is so closeted, he's in fucking Narnia by now.)

I sat with chapter 9 for a while, though, and I think my biggest note here is still the pacing of a few of these chapters; trying to pin it down specifically I think there's a disproportionate amount of focus dedicated to depicting the huge events that Odette attends to further hunt for clues. Having this one arrive so soon after chapter 7, which is another huge ball for socialising, did make things feel a little repetitive in terms of showing that these rich people are often tasteless and incapable of regarding anything beyond its transactional value — which isn't inherently a negative thing, mind you, but this time around I didn't feel like I was being given much more information about the world or its characters in how it played out for much of the first part of the chapter. As previously mentioned, I think things step up once Clovis gets back into the frame; the ending of the chapter is also very good in how it builds on Odette's moral qualms towards the mistreatment of pokémon. This is another brutal and unfair fight for no other reason than the short-term gratification of someone with power; it's cathartic to see her step up and say something about it, and you do a good job of showing how perilous the situation is once the desmocula turns on her, which in turn leads to Venira taking hold of her (at long last; it's a good reveal!) and fighting off her attacker. It is cool as fuck seeing her going demon mode on some asshole and especially intriguing that she doesn't seem to be aware of it; naturally, this'll resurface later in the story (especially given her blood condition). Excited to see where that leads!

Chapter 11 felt like the most low-key of this bunch, and I've the least to say on this one other than that I generally enjoyed it. The fun thing about Dorien as a character is that, being an amoral dickhead who cannot perceive the world beyond himself, he has such a strange idea of romance that it leads to him playing the most needlessly elaborate social games with Odette. It seems more like he's carrying out a show of dominance than being genuine by gifting her a huge plushie right in view of so many people, because that's how the slanted power dynamics in these relationships exert themselves — even when there is the real intent to display affection, it's filtered through a lens of control and deterring any alternatives — but here, removed from any immediately visible danger (especially given that Odette has much more control in this situation than she needs Dorien to believe), it just seems a bit ridiculous. It's a funny little moment in a fun little chapter, and it leads us nicely into what I assume will be her round of questions with Clovis later.

...All my notes went towards writing those paragraphs, in any case, so these line-by-lines will be brief and mostly pointing out typos/word choices that threw me off. Nonetheless!

Odette anxiety subsided, and she
missing apostrophe/s

He looked at you like he would melt when we sat down for dinner the other night.
"he would melt" feels off here, would go with "he was going to melt" or somesuch but YMMV

But she couldn't do that. They were way too deep.
"in way too deep" maybe? again, feels like YMMV here

"Oh, I love young love!" a man piped up. "You're both in your prime, though. No better time to start thinking about building your family. Every big fortune needs an heir."

"And you'd both make such beautiful babies, my gods," somebody else interjected.
okay I lied: this got an audible laugh out of me. people saying such socially acceptable and yet deeply unhinged shit in these settings consistently gets me

She had to wonder if they worked on the monstrous Pokemon too, but was far to stuck on the heartbreaking scene
should be "far too stuck"

I helped break her fever myself”
missing punctuation to end this quote

You should also try to concentrate more of focusing
should be more on focusing

I had fun with this as ever! Hopefully I'll get around to catching up with this one one of these days; I keep saying this (and it is unfortunate that these last two Blitzes have been so busy for me personally) but this is a high priority for me to finish as far as TR fics go. I'll have to try and tune in as soon as possible to see whether Odette can somehow fit even more weird and sad men in her life. (Don't think it's escaped my notice that Guzma isn't even in this yet. This is less of a harem and more a really tense clown car.)
 

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Striking while the iron's hot for chapters 11.5 through 13, which should permit me to finally catch up in the next batch of chapters. And just at the right time, too! It seems like the core mysteries of the story are really starting to coalesce right in front of Odette and Noel.

11.5 is naturally of great interest given the Dorien POV. It's as gross as I'd hoped; as you noted, it serves more to add context to a few things than progress the plot, and to that end I think it works well as a lurid little interlude that elaborates further on his whole deal: his association with Inviderus, the scale of his involvement with Team Enigma, and the extent of his infatuation with Odette. There's little that caught me off-guard here and little that I felt I'd already been told, which is a good sign; it feels like a natural step in his arc that confirms the suspicion of a reader. It's impressive, given the amount of moving parts and massive wordcount we're working with in this story. I found the most explicitly notable part of the chapter to be his interactions with Clovis, of course; this is the first time we see them speak without Odette around, and it's the first time we see Clovis so actively engaging in Team Enigma activities, so it's striking that Dorien is so fundamentally incapable of figuring out his deal; there's that envy (of course) about how these two people get in the way of his strange mentee complex with Florent, and there's that level of uncertainty that Dorien is just about sapient enough to recognise that he should hold here, but he cannot seem to conceptualise that Clovis might be deceiving him in any other way than a nebulous interest in getting in the way of his relationships with Odette and Florent, or his need to have control over a totally submissive hot wife and his need to receive affection from a paternal figure, even one who sucks. He's down so horrendous that he's always contemplating some kind of violence over it, and I also find it difficult to escape the vibe that he kinda wants to fuck Florent, too; whatever's going on there would likely require the efforts of a team of psychologists to figure out, and probably the kind they had in mid-20th century Switzerland. Inviderus is fun to read, too. I like that not even the strange creature that lives inside his blood has any ounce of respect for his host.

12 and 13, meanwhile, do progress the plot: Clovis makes revelations, lots of them, and Odette starts to put a few pieces together. The twist regarding Clovis's true identity is very fun, because it really is not that shocking to the reader (or at least, not to this reader; I jokingly alluded to it when I discussed chapter... seven, I'm pretty sure, but right from the outset we learn he's a renowned shut-in who also figure skates and has a lot of secrets he will not allow to be discussed in public, "imposter" ranks high on the list of plausible explanations for these contradictions) but Odette and Noel are absolutely the types to be thrown for a loop by it. From the distance I have from them as a reader, it's easy to joke about how the economy is so bad for artists that they can only afford one brain cell between them, but it must also be strange to go through that with a guy you know and I can't say I'd have figured that one out in that situation myself... then again, I like the idea that his contact lenses and wig are enough to make his disguise completely plausible.

That being said! The information regarding the original Clovis is certainly interesting, as is all the news about Virtue Corp; I'm still firmly disinclined to believe that this is the whole story, given Cl-- er, Valentin's track record for honesty thus far and the fact that the forces involved in taking down Team Enigma are either incredibly wealthy white-collar types or the cops. The world that Team Enigma flourishes in is one that requires the complicity of so many people, and although it would be awfully convenient for the rampant mistreatment of shiny pokémon and the spread of dangerous narcotics to be attributed solely to one really bad set of guys motivated solely by their own power, the involvement of the police specifically leads me to believe that this is more about upholding the interests of the wealthy class and hiding the skeletons that lie in the closets of all these other old money families than it is about sheer benevolence. To that end, Valentin would hardly be able to say anything to Odette that might incriminate him? He needs to be trusted for all this to work. I am intrigued to see how this unfolds as we progress through the story.

I found chapter 13 to be a little iffy on the structural side of things, though, because it felt like large chunks of the information that should have been the most shocking -- specifically, Odette's status as host of Venira and her relationship with Florent -- is stuff that was already conveyed much earlier in the story; it makes the moment lose a little bit of impact when we already know these two things, and I don't necessarily know that enough is done with her reaction here to make this recurrence of information more novel or interesting when conveyed to the readers here. It's one of those things that puts me in two minds because, as much as I think the prologue is great for other reasons, I don't know if its presence justifies taking so much of the weight out of what could otherwise be an earth-shattering reveal. I'm also in two minds about the decision to make these into two chapters, as the cut-off point in chapter 12 felt strange; the conversation regarding Clovis's true identity starts near the end of that chapter, cuts off at the mention of Florent's name, and then resumes where it left off for another 12,000 words. I don't know that it's necessarily a length issue, because other than my previous piece of crit there wasn't much in chapter 13 specifically I found extraneous or unengaging, but when taken as a whole it threw me for a loop a little.

Naturally, I enjoyed these chapters on the whole, and I'm eager to get caught up hopefully sooner rather than later. I've become attached to the inscrutable conspiracies and countless tugs-of-war at play here; for a while I get to escape into a world where everyone is either incredibly sexually frustrated, involved in at least three distinct threads of political or legal intrigue, wealthier than any human should really be, a crucial player in the trade of drugs that are also demon blood, or at least two of the above. It's always so fascinating. None of these people are seeing heaven <3
 

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“What, you’re some sort of Germanian connoisseur?" Max queried. He was obviously entertained. "Noel, was it?”

“If I may be so blunt, feel free to call me anything you want.”
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We're caught up! This review covers chapters 14 through 16. The situation is extremely abnormal but nevertheless clear to Odette by now; she at least has something to latch onto now with regards to Valentin's identity, and it feels pretty surreal even from my vantage point as a reader learning that this guy actually lives in a building made of concrete as opposed to a nebulous money pit or the concept of wealth itself, somehow. It's a fun detail that he lives inside what appears to be a normal flat within an unassuming building, until you go inside and he can afford a tank big enough to keep a lapras and you learn he's only moved here to get a little more room for his aurorus. It's the sort of setting that lends itself well for shelter in a storm with a handsome acquaintance and your bitchy friend while you attempt to process the fact that you're probably the vessel of an incredibly powerful blood demon and the spawn of the biggest crime lord and most wanted man in all the land (and, later, the fact that the terrible guy you're pretending to date for the sake of your investigation into his company is so terrible that he drugged you so hard that your memory has been thrown all out of shape — I had been waiting to see how this one would pay off, and I'm glad to see that it makes enough of a mess of everything).

I think these two chapters in conjunction lend themselves well to Odette's headspace and general situation here: these chapters are simultaneously quite fun and incredibly on-edge, balancing a romantically charged jigsaw puzzle and a lot of flirtatious banter with a nervous breakdown over how much of her life to this point has been built on deceit and subterfuge. To this end, I thought Noel's somewhat off-colour efforts to make light of the situation in chapter 14 were fun, and I think it's a good touch that you allowed this to blow up so drastically in his face; Odette's capacity to outwardly function while losing her shit internally is formidable but not perfect, and that she flips her shit at him here both makes the scene as tense as it needs to be and underscores the bitter humour of the situation (the circumstances of her birth and her discovery of them now, of all times, combine to feel like she is the victim of some gruesome cosmic practical joke).

Likewise, for as cool as Valentin is (and I say this of his temperament more than I do any respect for him, that guy is -- with all due respect -- a gigantic dork), I think his inability to process Odette's incandescent fury upon learning of the drugging is a very organic source of conflict that reflects his limitations as a person: like many people in Kalos his gut instinct is to take concern with harm to material goods and the disruption of his nice, clean, bougie aesthetic, and the fact that the person in his house has been psychologically abused and is only now processing it barely even registers until after the fact. It works out eventually once he gets a hold of his senses, in any case, and I'm naturally intrigued to see how the gang responds to Dorien once he reappears in the story... it feels like the Kalos arc of this one is really coming to a head, given the looming move, the fact that we know the global scale of the sacrilege trade, and the fact that everyone hates Dorien enough to want to nail him to a cross.

...and then there's Odile, huh. As a little-known aficionado of weird dream sequences and psychological torment caused by introspecting with some strange powerful beast who has become part of you, the oppressive vibes in chapter 16 really ticked a few boxes. It's interesting to get so much blood legend lore so directly from the source, just as it's fascinating to see how the scope of this story has been expanded into such a head-spinning, almost cosmic scale. It's neat to see our long-awaited venira finally make an appearance, and it's fun that she's a massive drama queen who seems to have millennia-long beef with her offspring; it is so awesome that Odette is straight-up cursed in so many different ways, and I'm excited to see how she makes this everyone else's problem going forward with the help of her new old friend.

Very glad to finally catch up on this one. It's always a lot of fun, and I'm naturally always down to see what's next for everyone here. Delightful stuff as ever. :>
 

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I’m returning for Review Blitz! I remember really enjoying this fic last time, so I’m excited to jump back in and continue. I read four chapters this time, so let’s get to it!

Thoughts on Chapters 3 to 6
  • Chapter 3 starts on the note of a mass sacrilege overdose at a warehouse. As Odette notes later on, that’s not just something that happens. It definitely looks like there’s something more intentional going on…

  • I feel the need to appreciate RotomPhone being an actual character here, and a fairly charming one at that. It always weirds me out how mainline handles the concept.

  • Dorien enters the scene! You did a really good job of portraying Odette’s perception of him here. He starts out nice, there’s a hint of old romance, the conversation is amicable. And then he drops that line, and the way the interaction shifts into something uncomfortable as Odette remembers and Dorien reveals how much of a douche he is very well handled. And he just gets worse as the scene goes on, almost like he enjoys tormenting her. Creepy.

  • This leads directly into the battle, and it’s a pretty good one! There are a couple points in terms of action where I had a hard time envisioning things (specifically Excadrill’s Super-Earthquake on Ange. There wasn’t really a sense of how it hit him or how he recoiled from it), but the buildup, tension, and sense of stakes and emotion were all perfect. I want to see this guy go down, but he has a legitimate advantage, but Odette proves quickly that she knows what she’s doing in a battle, but Dorien becomes downright disturbing, and Ange going down hurts. You can feel every up and down of the emotional rollercoaster this battle takes Odette on, I was fully invested.

  • Also I didn’t take note of it last time and forgot it was mentioned as a result, but the idea of an astral shrine that grants benefits depending on offerings is a cool idea. Very occult, fitting with some of the themes at play. I find myself curious about what the story behind it is, though a later comment makes me wonder if it has something to do with the subject of Vienna’s research?

  • I liked the dynamic between Odette and her grandfather: I get the sense he acted as a father figure for her, and their interactions in this chapter were cute and genuine. He definitely seems like someone who’s been worn down by his role, and that perhaps explains what was implied by the other thing we learned in this chapter…

  • I like how Odette’s reaction to the letter is pretty much the same as the reader’s is likely to be. It’s a bombshell of completely new information with completely unknown significance, and while it’s hard to say what it means yet, the implication that Bernard may have just lied to her is definitely felt. A lot of things are up in the air with this Virtue Corp, but I wouldn't be surprised if they're promising him a breakthrough in the sacrilege case.

  • And so Odette plans to get closer to Dorien to find out how he fits into this. It's a very dangerous plan given the side of himself he let slip in the battle, but I can see how her investment in this has started to become something personal.

  • Most of Odette’s team is laid-back enough to go along with her plan, and Solene eventually comes around. Enora’s reaction is interesting though. Obviously she doesn’t want to help, yet on some level she feels pressured to and won’t elaborate as to why. I'm definitely curious to know what happened to her in the past and why she feels that way.

  • holy shit Dorien is such a piece of shit you wrote him perfectly it's terrible.

  • Dorien goes for the throat with that question. It's unfortunate we had to learn this way, but this explains why she fears the stage now. Meanwhile Dorien continues to show that uncanny ability to go from “suave air-headed douche” to “what the fuck” and back again with little issue.

  • And then he mindwipes her. I was wondering if he was going to take advantage of her being trapped with him, but this throws a lot of things into question regarding Odette’s confidence in having this under control. He’s playing the manipulation game too, trying to get something out of her, and given the jump in time between chapters, it's not impossible this isn't the first time he’s pulled this… My first thought is that he's trying to get to Wrath, though that would raise the question of how he would know about that, unless he has connections to Team Enigma. Yet there isn't any other reason he would ask that question of her. I imagine, at least, that was the first time he had asked about it, as he was very brazen with it and the setup seemed tailored to account for a bad reaction exactly like what happened. He really seems to think little of her, given how much more direct he’s being, trying to get what he wants at her expense.

  • Another thought I had is that all of this has been taking a toll on Odette, in the sense that she's been getting angrier and angrier (just a couple steps away from killing him a few times in this chapter). I wonder if this'll cause Wrath manifest in the long run. i also wonder if that's what dorien is trying to accomplish, if that really is what he's after.
Only one, lone typo/prose comment:
As it fell back toward the ground, it rolled out of the way Loïc.
Missing "of," I think.

The plot has started moving now, in a slow burn kind of way, and the mysteries are starting to mount. Odette's in over her head, but you did a good job of writing her perspective in a way that colors things as if she isn't; for a while I was just nodding along to Dorien just being dense like she clearly thinks he is, only for the end of that chapter to reveal he’s anything but. In general the tension surrounding their “relationship” together is palpable in every scene, even when Dorien’s just being a misogynistic asshole I can't look away. I also think the buildup for this mystery has been very well handled so far, and now that we're in the process of trying to uncover it, I'm interested to see where things continue to go from here and how these characters manage to navigate and figure it out even with their only lead actively working against them.

All of that to say that I want to read more, and I will! I will see you here again for when I next get around to it!
 

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Hi! This has been on my to-read list for a while and so I'm here to get stuck into the intro for the evening. Everything about it really does seem up my alley, maybe slightly darker than my usual tastes but I'm confident I'll enjoy it regardless!
I tend to jot my thoughts down as I read so they may be a little scattered, hopefully they're entertaining though.

Prologue

I have a bit of contextual knowledge about the fakemon in this series being based off the seven deadly sins, and I like how unique they feel already. Gulattive has a very corruptive influence, and it's interesting to see the tug-o-war between Gulattive and Florent in terms of who's in control. I like that you haven't described what Gulattive looks like right away, because at this point my imagination is kind of running wild with it.

And so it's the Wrath Pokemon that was stolen, which is probably the most portentious. I have to wonder at this point if there was even a concentrated effort by Vienna to steal Venira in having a baby, or if it were something outside of her control; Florent is obviously giving a very biased report about what he thinks happened, so I'm taking it with a grain of salt.

The Blood Legendaries is such a cool moniker, too.

It's interesting to see Gulattive consider Venira a tyrant given how Florent behaves (and how Gulattive encourages it), so I'm curious to see just what Wrath truly has to offer.

It's really tragic to read about Armel's situation, with the Greed Pokemon eating away at his own identity. And if there is a more productive way to satiate it, Florent is clearly a terrible enough father that finding a solution is on the bottom of his list. I do hope Armel can get away from him, but I guess we'll see.

So, distance apart can lessen the Blood Legendaries' influence? (Of course it doesn't occur to Florent that Armel could probably use some time apart from Avareed). The Birth Curse is an interesting lore drop, and it's curious that an exception seems to be made for Wrath.

It's clear that Florent is the leader (or at least in a very high position) of Team Enigma, but it's interesting that he's referred to as "your majesty" here. I wonder if it's just a title thing or if the Lambournes are a royal family of some kind. I guess it goes hand in hand with the whole inherited Blood Legendaries thing, haha.

It's amazing how quickly Florent goes from "rat of a child" to "perfect" after seeing Odette, which I'm sure isn't just natural fatherly love. That all his wrath melts away when he looks at her, is a potentially ironic twist to the power of Wrath. This is the power of a tyrant, it would seem. I'm very glad for Odette's sake that he didn't get to take her, though- for as devoted as Florent may now be to her, I'm sure it would be a very precarious childhood.

This is a really interesting hook for the story, and I'm excited to dive deeper into it!

Chapter 1

Starting off with an immediate hook for a mystery and Cats- sorry, Purrloins- two of my favourite things. Crazy January weather being caused by the mating season of Castform is simultaneously very funny but also a nice worldbuilding touch. And of course, Team Enigma mention

"2020's got some shit in store for us, I swear." oh boy

I'm enjoying Noel and Odette's banter so far, and I like how they're delivering information about this sacrilege substance and its connection to shiny Pokemon without it feeling too expository. Odette mentioning that her Grandfather is a policeman is reminding me that we got that information in the prologue but I hadn't thought much of it at the time– I have a feeling it's going to be pretty relevant, and not just for the mystery case at hand.

Team Enigma makes sense as the source of the sacrilege, but of course they are... an enigma. I do have to wonder what Florent's end goal is here, and knowing who's behind it just makes the mystery of what they're up to more enticing. And of course, "why was the majority of affected Pokemon shiny?" is the million dollar question.

Enora is very cute so far, and of course the fact that she's shiny does raise a few concerns. At this point I'm wondering whether Odette can understand her, but whether she can or can't it's nice to get a glimpse into her thoughts.

I think the way the story introduces Odette's trauma is very tactful, showing her complicated relationship with the dreams she once had and the reality she lives now. I'm glad her friends are looking out for her, though. It's interesting to learn that being born premature (Birth Curses, am I right?) means Odette has some chronic health issues, which makes sense.

Okay, so confirmation here that Odette can hear Enora's speech, which is interesting! Interesting as well is that we haven't heard from Venira yet...

I'm curious to learn more about what exactly Odette's mother's "base of operations" is for, now. At first I thought the move to Alola meant putting a timer on solving this mystery, but knowing that Guzma is likely going to play a big role in the story, perhaps not. (This is mostly just context I've gleaned from stuff in discord, I could be totally wrong).

I liked the cosier feel of this chapter straight after the portentious prologue, even if it doesn't shy away from some heavier stuff. A clean slate, indeed.

Chapter 2

I'm loving the glimpse into Odette's analytic mind here, it really gets across that she's thinking a mile a minute, even for something so mundane (and yet so dangerous) as driving. And just as well, too. I see some of those Wrath issues are starting to pop up now, though.

I appreciate her falling back on the comforts of the theatre for a coping mechanism, I really do find that singing can help in those moments when you need to distract yourself and get your breathing back under control. I am wondering how long she's been having to manage these rage issues though. It's nice to see that Noel is willing to be patient with her, and that even through her anger Odette can recognise this.

I wonder if the rage hangover is something to do with Venira, or if it's just a usual side-effect of staving off the influence of a Blood Legendary. It's a dangerous game to care about things so much that you get angry with those side effects, but it definitely makes Odette's character more compelling for it.

I like the glimpses into the consequences of Odette's trauma that are still lingering, even if she seems to have moved past it by now. It's nice to get some of the details in hindsight without having to linger too long, and the story of Loïc helping with her depression fugue by being a little shit is a nice segue in and out of delivering that information.

The chaotic introduction to Odette's other Pokemon makes a very strong impression. The dynamics are very fun, particularly with Odette being able to speak back and forth with them too. Except for Loïc, at first.

The astral shrine is a neat worldbuilding touch, and I hope I'll get to learn a bit more about its significance soon. It's a very melancholy place for the chapter to end, but of course I'm sure the emotional rollercoaster has only just begun.

I'll be back to read more again soon! It takes me a bit longer to read and write down my thoughts, but I'm definitely keen to continue from here.
 
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