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Pokémon The Twins [a Tate and Liza One Shot]

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Just a Torchic

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A Facadeverse fic

Really creative title, I know.

A oneshot/character study I wrote a few years ago for Tate and Liza. After some tweaking, I thought it was suitable for posting. It still probably has room for improvement, though.

Rated Everyone; CW// Implicit Person Disappearing

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Rachel and Jin Hua had always wanted to be parents, so they were beyond excited when they found out they were expecting. What they weren’t expecting is that they would be the parents of two psychic twins.

They weren’t the most financially stable couple in Mossdeep City, but they were more than willing to take care of two children. It was a pleasant surprise for them, and plenty more surprises would come with the twins.

From the moment they were born, Tate and Liza were inseparable. They did everything together. When they were separated, such as when Liza caught a bad cough and had to go to the doctor, Tate would be sad, almost anxious, until they were reunited. They also looked and acted the same: they both loved toys, the starry night sky, and Psychic type Pokémon.

The twins were almost as close to Pokémon as they were to each other. Whether it was calming down two wild Poochyena who were scaring their classmates or helping an injured Swellow, they seemed to be able to understand their feelings in a way that nobody else could.

They were also quite mischievous. One day, when they both wanted one more cookie, they made a line of dancing, levitating cookies right to their mouths, much to the shock of their parents. Jin and Rachel thought it was a one off incident, but it was followed by countless incidents of floating toys, books, and more sweets.

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“Maybe it has to do with your parents,” Jin whispered one night after the twins fell asleep.

“But I never saw them do anything that looked like… this,” Rachel replied.

“Well, your parents certainly have many surprises of their own. Perhaps the twins inherited that… if so, we’re in for quite a few more pleasant surprises.”

-

Rachel and Jin wanted to spend as much time as they could with their children, especially since they were starting to develop mysterious powers, but between full-time jobs and studying to work at the Mossdeep Space Center, neither of them could be full-time parents. Because of this, they hired babysitters to look after the kids. They often hired passing trainers who were staying for a while to challenge the Gym Leader and who needed some extra cash (trainers, of course, that the Gym Leader, Vega, sensed were good, responsible kids). Tate and Liza liked trainers. They liked the stories they told, the Pokémon they travelled with, the candy they brought.

One of these trainers was Steven, a frail, blue haired boy who was most likely in his late teens. He never really talked about where he came from or who he was, but he sure did talk about rocks. Whenever he talked about rocks, his eyes lit up, and his smile was too contagious for it to go unnoticed. He loved babysitting the twins.

Sometimes they would go to the Space Center to learn about astronomy and space travel. Other times, they would play on the beach. One day, Rachel and Jin had to go to Rustboro City to discuss business deals with the Devon Corporation. Steven was available to take care of the kids, but Tate and Liza sensed anxiety in him as the three walked through the city.

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“What’s wrong, Mr. Steven?” Tate asked.

“Oh… it’s nothing. Nothing at all,” Steven insisted, quickly flashing a smile. “Say, do you guys want to go to Meteor Falls?”

“What’s Meteor Falls?” Liza asked.

Steven’s eyes lit up. “You’ve never seen Meteor Falls? You’ll be amazed by how fascinating it is!”

Being two young children, Tate and Liza didn’t understand how Steven could be so interested in Meteor Falls. It was very pretty, but it was also pretty boring. The three wandered aimlessly through the cave, picking up pretty rocks. Steven, they noted, picked up some ugly rocks.

“It’s getting dark, Mr Steven,” Tate said. “I’m scared.”

Realizing that they needed to get back and how stupid he was for wandering so deep into the cave, Steven stopped. “We should be getting back,” he whispered.

But none of them knew which way led to Rustboro City. They tried every way they could go down, but none of them led anywhere.

Liza started to feel a strange presence, as if something was calling for her.

“Mr. Steven?”

There was no one else there.

“Mr. Steven? Tate? Hello?”

Eventually, Liza found her way outside of the cave, but she couldn’t see Rustboro City. She ran down the route with the hope that she would find it. Instead, she tripped on a ledge and fell. As she sat up, she started to cry.

“I lost Tate! I lost Rustboro City! Now I’ll lose me!”

Liza felt something touch her back. She turned around and saw a floating, crescent shaped rock Pokémon. Liza could sense that it was calm and wise.

“Can you help me?” Liza whimpered.

The Pokémon made a movement similar to nodding, then it floated back towards the cave. Liza got up and followed it.

-

Meanwhile, Tate and Steven found themselves at a dead end.

“Mr. Steven,” Tate whispered, “I’m scared.”

“It’s going to be okay, Tate. I know we’ll get out of here.”

Tate stopped and stared down a tunnel.

“Tate?’ Steven said.

“There’s someone there. Someone who can help us!”

Tate broke into a sprint.

“Wait!” Steven yelled as he ran after him.

Eventually, Tate stopped in front of a sun shaped rock Pokémon. It looked as if it was waiting for Tate.

“Who are you?” Tate asked. “Why do you want to help me?” After a moment, he said, “Really? But why?”

“Tate?” Steven was perplexed. Who was the young boy talking to? Presumably, it was the Pokémon, but the Pokémon wasn’t talking.

The Pokémon floated towards another tunnel, and Tate followed it.

“Come on, Mr. Steven! We know how to get out of here!”

-

Steven and the twins promised not to tell Rachel and Jin about them almost getting lost, but they did tell them that Tate and Liza caught two Pokémon. The whole situation was mysterious, not just for Rachel and Jin. Rachel finally decided to ask her parents about the twins. They didn’t provide any answers; they simply chuckled to themselves and said, “that’s the joy of parenthood: seeing the surprises your children bring.”

The two started Pokémon battles a little while after that. They weren't old enough to officially become trainers, but there was no harm in a few practice battles (plus the Pokémon Association never busted them, and as Sidney likes to say, it's not illegal if you don't get caught). They mostly battled around their hometown. Alone, they were strong. Together, they were unstoppable.

The twins only grew closer with both each other and their Pokémon. Around the time that the two turned ten years old, the Gym Leader of Mossdeep City vanished without a trace. The Hoenn Champion, Steven Stone, was desperately searching for a replacement when he saw Tate and Liza battling two trainers.

He remembered the day at the cave. He remembered the way they connected to Solrock and Lunatone. And here they were, proving that their potential was more than a one time thing. So what if the Pokémon Association wouldn't allow two Gym Leaders to hold the same Gym? Steven would fist fight Kurogane to get the Mossdeep Gym its rightful Leaders.

Three months after the Mossdeep City Gym Leader’s disappearance, a new Gym Leader stepped up—or rather, two Gym Leaders stepped up. Tate and Liza were the first Gym Leaders in the history of the modern Pokémon League to occupy the same Gym at the same time.
 
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kintsugi

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oh, dare I ask what the difference is between "Just a Torchic" and "More Than Just a Torchic".

Also, hiya! I think we've crossed paths a few times on Bulba but I haven't had the chance to read your work, so when I saw your crossposting here I figured it'd be a great time to drop in. Welcome to the forums.

I like the broad concept of this/some of the other stories you've written--so many of the canon characters are kind of blank slates, and there's a lot of room for just a little more detail in there to make things more interesting. Bear with me since it's been a hot sec since I've played in Hoenn, but in general I liked the additions that you made here, such as Steven being their babysitter and the little levitating cookies. I think there's also something incredibly pure about the idea of them meeting their signature pokemon after being stuck in a cave; it speaks very strongly to the innocence of the games where you can just wander into the wilderness and these unique and otherworldly creatures can be kind and friendly towards you. I also really liked the characterization of Steven through Tate/Liza's eyes, in that he's kind of just this big weirdo who likes rocks and doesn't think of the consequences of taking some pretty young kids to explore a dangerous area--seems very in-character for him to get a little lost in the sauce, as it were. And no harm no foul, right? Overall I really liked the tone you have here, where it's mostly just regular people living regular lives in the pokemon world--and of course it's pretty regular for kids to be psychics and befriend levitating rocks!

A few comments on the prose in the spoiler below. For the most part I liked the more minimalist style you have here; we get impressions of things happening but don't really linger on anything in particular, which I think worked for a shorter story like this that didn't really have a super heavy emotional core (which isn't a bad thing--sometimes we just! go into caves and have quiet adventures that subtly shape us; not everything is a world-endingly focused moment).
What they weren’t expecting is that they would be the parents of two psychic twins.

Of course, they were surprised when they found out they were going to have not one, but two children.
I think these lines are similar enough that you don't need both--the only information that the first sentence has that the second does not is that the twins are psychic, which seems to be undercut by the next paragraph anyway (which instead focuses on the fact that they are twins/two). I would probably cut the first line so that you can save the psychic reveal for the next paragraph.
When they were separated, such as when Liza caught a bad cough and had to go to the doctor, the other would be sad, almost anxious, until they were reunited.
I think using "Tate" instead of "the other" would be a little more clear here.
The twins were almost as close to Pokémon as they were to each other. They seemed to be able to understand their feelings in a way that nobody else could.
I was curious how this would get set up in your world: are toddlers of non-trainer parents often exposed to (psychic) pokemon? What kind of pokemon are common in Mossdeep, and what does it look like to understand a pokemon's feelings? I think, specifically because the climax of this story hinges on Tate/Liza's bond with pokemon, it'd be helpful to show them being kind/empathetic to pokemon when they're younger--maybe they like to feed swellow in the park, or their are a bunch of poochyena in an alley behind their school that all the other kids are afraid of but that they befriend and feed snacks or something!
One day, when they both wanted one more cookie, they made a line of dancing, levitating cookies, much to the shock of their parents.
I thought this was a cute detail, but I'm also impressed with the self-control of making a line of cookies to ask for more cookies instead of ... eating a cookie. Self-regulation (understanding that it's sometimes better not to take all the good things in front of you) is a skill that develops relatively late in toddlers.
However, the two were studying and training to work at the Mossdeep Space Center, so neither of them could be full-time parents.
I think "the two" is a little tricky here since I was expecting that to refer to Tate/Liza (since they're also notably two). Maybe something like:
> Between full-time jobs and studying to work at the Mossdeep Space Center, neither of them could be full-time parents.
Because of this, they hired babysitters to look after the kids. They often hired passing trainers who were staying for a while to challenge the Gym Leader and who needed some extra cash.
It's usually pretty difficult to use rotating babysitters for kids, since kids prefer routines and familiar faces + it makes them feel a lot more safe. Plus, hiring strangers to babysit your kids would probably be a pretty daunting prospect, since you don't really know them and they don't know you--what if they did something ridiculous like take your two kids into a waterfall?

(In cases like these, I find it pretty helpful to pre-empt these kinds of concerns and just explain why these abnormal changes are being made. Re: hiring trainers--trainers in this world are actually seen as super trustworthy and responsible compared to other people their age, or maybe the twins just like trainers more because they get to interact with the trainers' pokemon (and since they almost seem to prefer pokemon to humans, this is the ideal balance for them)).
Steven and the twins promised not to tell Rachel and Jin about them almost getting lost, but they did tell them that Tate and Liza caught two Pokémon.
Ha, I wonder who's promising who here--feels a little irresponsible for Steven to sweep almost losing two kids in a cave under the rug.
Around the time that the two turned ten years old, the Gym Leader of Mossdeep City vanished without a trace. The Hoenn Champion, Steven Stone, was desperately searching for a replacement when he remembered Tate and Liza.
I thought this one felt a little abrupt, since as far as I understand he mostly just saw them as kids and recognized that this Solrock/Lunatone befriending thing was pretty neat. He doesn't seem to have an understanding of their current battling capabilities, or even if they/Solrock/Lunatone are interested in competitive battling--are there other skills required to become a gym leader?

@Panoramic_Vacuum guess who!?
He never really talked about where he came from or who he was, but he sure did talk about rocks. [...] Being two young children, Tate and Liza didn’t understand how ??? could be so interested in Meteor Falls. It was very pretty, but it was also pretty boring. The three wandered aimlessly through the cave, picking up pretty rocks. ???, they noted, picked up some ugly rocks.
Joking aside, I think you and Pano would really like each other's work! Pano's got a collection of stories called Hoenn Short Stories Collection: The Elite that's all about fleshing out the backstories of the Hoenn E4, and I think this sort of pure/whimsical story you have here would fit right in. She's also got The Long Road, a loving anthology-style story about Steven getting lost in caves over and over again, which features lots of very good moments about pure-hearted kids befriending big ronks.

And if you're interested in more gym leader backstory, I think you might appreciate a quick foray into Kanto/Johto with Pen's Dragon's Dance (the story of Lance; there is a lot of rhyming in this sentence).

Thanks for sharing, and I hope you enjoy your stay in the forums!
 

Just a Torchic

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Hey there! I've seen you on Bulbagarden before, and thanks for the review!

oh, dare I ask what the difference is between "Just a Torchic" and "More Than Just a Torchic".
I originally changed it to MtaT on Bulbagarden, but for some reason, I'm JaT almost everywhere else. Maybe Ill change it to MtaT across the board to be more consistent.
Also, hiya! I think we've crossed paths a few times on Bulba but I haven't had the chance to read your work, so when I saw your crossposting here I figured it'd be a great time to drop in. Welcome to the forums.
Thank you.
I like the broad concept of this/some of the other stories you've written--so many of the canon characters are kind of blank slates, and there's a lot of room for just a little more detail in there to make things more interesting. Bear with me since it's been a hot sec since I've played in Hoenn, but in general I liked the additions that you made here, such as Steven being their babysitter and the little levitating cookies. I think there's also something incredibly pure about the idea of them meeting their signature pokemon after being stuck in a cave; it speaks very strongly to the innocence of the games where you can just wander into the wilderness and these unique and otherworldly creatures can be kind and friendly towards you. I also really liked the characterization of Steven through Tate/Liza's eyes, in that he's kind of just this big weirdo who likes rocks and doesn't think of the consequences of taking some pretty young kids to explore a dangerous area--seems very in-character for him to get a little lost in the sauce, as it were. And no harm no foul, right? Overall I really liked the tone you have here, where it's mostly just regular people living regular lives in the pokemon world--and of course it's pretty regular for kids to be psychics and befriend levitating rocks!
I'm glad you liked it : ). I really like the Gym Leaders/E4/Champions/etc., and it's always fun to write about them.
I was curious how this would get set up in your world: are toddlers of non-trainer parents often exposed to (psychic) pokemon? What kind of pokemon are common in Mossdeep, and what does it look like to understand a pokemon's feelings? I think, specifically because the climax of this story hinges on Tate/Liza's bond with pokemon, it'd be helpful to show them being kind/empathetic to pokemon when they're younger--maybe they like to feed swellow in the park, or their are a bunch of poochyena in an alley behind their school that all the other kids are afraid of but that they befriend and feed snacks or something!
Oh shoot that's a good point. Thank you for pointing it out!
I thought this was a cute detail, but I'm also impressed with the self-control of making a line of cookies to ask for more cookies instead of ... eating a cookie. Self-regulation (understanding that it's sometimes better not to take all the good things in front of you) is a skill that develops relatively late in toddlers.
I was trying to go for an image of "a line of cookies right into their mouths", but I should have made that more clear.
what if they did something ridiculous like take your two kids into a waterfall?
What if they do something ridiculous like take the kids to a cave?
feels a little irresponsible for Steven to sweep almost losing two kids in a cave under the rug.
He's young and doesn't want to lose his job. Very irresponsible, though.
I thought this one felt a little abrupt, since as far as I understand he mostly just saw them as kids and recognized that this Solrock/Lunatone befriending thing was pretty neat. He doesn't seem to have an understanding of their current battling capabilities, or even if they/Solrock/Lunatone are interested in competitive battling--are there other skills required to become a gym leader?
I should probably add to that. Thank you.
Joking aside, I think you and Pano would really like each other's work! Pano's got a collection of stories called Hoenn Short Stories Collection: The Elite that's all about fleshing out the backstories of the Hoenn E4, and I think this sort of pure/whimsical story you have here would fit right in. She's also got The Long Road, a loving anthology-style story about Steven getting lost in caves over and over again, which features lots of very good moments about pure-hearted kids befriending big ronks.
Funny enough, when I was first reading Pokémon fanfic, two of my first fics were Pano's ("Deal With The Devil" and the short stories collection). She was one of my biggest inspirations when I was first starting.
 
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Hey, Torchic! You've been posting a lot of stuff around recently, and it's high past time that I have a look at it for myself. In the mood for something lighthearted tonight, so this one-shot felt like a good bet.

The second sentence of this story really summed things up for me: "they weren't expecting to be the parents of two psychic twins." Like, twins in and of themselves can be a huge handful, but psychic twins? That's definitely a graduate-level parenting assignment for sure. I'm glad it ended up working out for everybody, though! For the most part it seems their parents took things in stride.

The idea of having traveling trainers babysit the twins is an interesting one--I could see how that would be an attractive option for people without a lot of money for childcare, assuming that trainers are probably happy to scrape whatever small amount of extra cash they can. Probably not something that would work well in our world, where leaving your kid with someone who rocked into town yesterday and intends to leave again in a week would definitely be a dangerous situation, but if the idea is that trainers often stick around for a relatively long time while working to challenge the gym/explore nearby wilderness and candidates have been screened by a psychic, it might work out okay. And it gives you the delightful option of putting the twins in Steven's hands for a while, which is super cute! I love how you drew on the connection between Steven and Mossdeep here--I guess he likes the place so much he eventually decides to settle down there? (If trainers are routinely going to be taking "babysitting" duty to mean "bring kids with me into the wilderness," maybe that does highlight a way in which hiring traveling trainers to look after your kids might not be a great idea, lol.)

Anyway, rock nerd Steven who just wants to (unwisely) share his love of geology with small children is definitely the highlight of the story for me! It was fun to see him caught out of his depths with the twins, as well as his earnest nature and clear passion for cave exploration. I could 100% buy Steven getting so caught up in the fun of spelunking that he doesn't notice he's lost one small child and is also, himself, lost with the other until much too late. The fossils were just more interesting! Once again the connection between Steven and the twins isn't one I would have really thought about myself, but when you bring it up here it feels perfectly natural and obvious.

The only thing I find myself really wanting at the end of this one is more! In particular, I'd love a little more interaction between the twins and their new partner pokémon. Tate and Liza's meeting with Solrock and Lunatone was the main focus of this piece, but once each twin finds their pokémon, it felt to me like there's just a quick notion of a bond being established, and then we're on to the next scene. It would have been more fun for me to see e.g. how Tate and Lunatone actually guided Steven back out of the cave. A little more of the twins working together with their new partners, and perhaps even coming together as a team themselves, the way they fight in their gym, would have made the story feel a little more complete to me. As it is, you kind of gloss over the twins' birth through their appointment as gym leaders, with most of that story being described in summary--maybe focusing down to some of the events in the twins' childhood would give you the space to elaborate more. In general I think this story is strongest when it's using specific anecdotes (like the levitating cookie thing) rather than when it's taking a broad-strokes view of events.

Some quick notes:

They thought it was a one off incident, but it was followed by countless incidents of floating toys, books, and more sweets.
Because of the way the previous sentence is constructed, "they" here is actually Tate and Liza! Also, one-off would generally be hyphenated here.

I did think it was pretty cute that the parents had started out at "maybe that thing with the floating cookies was a one-time thing! weird air currents or something! haha!" They knew they were hosed, heh.

Steven’s eyes lit up. “You’ve never seen Meteor Falls? You’ll be amazed by how beautiful and fascinating it is!”
Steven's dialogue feels a little stilted to me here; it's the beautiful and fascinating, I think. Too many superlatives, maybe. Just one or the other would work better for me.

and as Sidney likes to say, it's not illegal if you don't get caught
Loved the little call-out to Sidney here.

Three months after the Mossdeep City Gym Leader’s disappearance, a new Gym Leader stepped up—or rather, two Gym Leaders stepped up.
It has nothing to do with this one-shot at all, but I'm now deeply curious about what happened to this guy, heh.

I went into this hoping for a quick, fun story looking at some oft-overlooked characters, and it didn't disappoint! Nice work, and since I know you enjoy writing angst and drama, it was cool to see that you're comfortable working with more lighthearted stories as well. Great work so far this Blitz, and it's awesome to see you making such headway on your stories!
 

Just a Torchic

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Hey, Torchic! You've been posting a lot of stuff around recently, and it's high past time that I have a look at it for myself. In the mood for something lighthearted tonight, so this one-shot felt like a good bet.

The second sentence of this story really summed things up for me: "they weren't expecting to be the parents of two psychic twins." Like, twins in and of themselves can be a huge handful, but psychic twins? That's definitely a graduate-level parenting assignment for sure. I'm glad it ended up working out for everybody, though! For the most part it seems their parents took things in stride.

The idea of having traveling trainers babysit the twins is an interesting one--I could see how that would be an attractive option for people without a lot of money for childcare, assuming that trainers are probably happy to scrape whatever small amount of extra cash they can. Probably not something that would work well in our world, where leaving your kid with someone who rocked into town yesterday and intends to leave again in a week would definitely be a dangerous situation, but if the idea is that trainers often stick around for a relatively long time while working to challenge the gym/explore nearby wilderness and candidates have been screened by a psychic, it might work out okay. And it gives you the delightful option of putting the twins in Steven's hands for a while, which is super cute! I love how you drew on the connection between Steven and Mossdeep here--I guess he likes the place so much he eventually decides to settle down there? (If trainers are routinely going to be taking "babysitting" duty to mean "bring kids with me into the wilderness," maybe that does highlight a way in which hiring traveling trainers to look after your kids might not be a great idea, lol.)

Anyway, rock nerd Steven who just wants to (unwisely) share his love of geology with small children is definitely the highlight of the story for me! It was fun to see him caught out of his depths with the twins, as well as his earnest nature and clear passion for cave exploration. I could 100% buy Steven getting so caught up in the fun of spelunking that he doesn't notice he's lost one small child and is also, himself, lost with the other until much too late. The fossils were just more interesting! Once again the connection between Steven and the twins isn't one I would have really thought about myself, but when you bring it up here it feels perfectly natural and obvious.

The only thing I find myself really wanting at the end of this one is more! In particular, I'd love a little more interaction between the twins and their new partner pokémon. Tate and Liza's meeting with Solrock and Lunatone was the main focus of this piece, but once each twin finds their pokémon, it felt to me like there's just a quick notion of a bond being established, and then we're on to the next scene. It would have been more fun for me to see e.g. how Tate and Lunatone actually guided Steven back out of the cave. A little more of the twins working together with their new partners, and perhaps even coming together as a team themselves, the way they fight in their gym, would have made the story feel a little more complete to me. As it is, you kind of gloss over the twins' birth through their appointment as gym leaders, with most of that story being described in summary--maybe focusing down to some of the events in the twins' childhood would give you the space to elaborate more. In general I think this story is strongest when it's using specific anecdotes (like the levitating cookie thing) rather than when it's taking a broad-strokes view of events.

Because of the way the previous sentence is constructed, "they" here is actually Tate and Liza! Also, one-off would generally be hyphenated here.
Steven's dialogue feels a little stilted to me here; it's the beautiful and fascinating, I think. Too many superlatives, maybe. Just one or the other would work better for me.
Thank you for pointing these things out! I'll fix them ASAP.
I did think it was pretty cute that the parents had started out at "maybe that thing with the floating cookies was a one-time thing! weird air currents or something! haha!" They knew they were hosed, heh.
Deniallllllllll
Loved the little call-out to Sidney here.
Sidney being a little shit for eleven minutes.
It has nothing to do with this one-shot at all, but I'm now deeply curious about what happened to this guy, heh.
Wait until I write about her, hehehe
I went into this hoping for a quick, fun story looking at some oft-overlooked characters, and it didn't disappoint! Nice work, and since I know you enjoy writing angst and drama, it was cool to see that you're comfortable working with more lighthearted stories as well. Great work so far this Blitz, and it's awesome to see you making such headway on your stories!
Thank you for the lovely words!
 

Pen

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Hi Just a Torchic! I've been seeing a lot of your oneshots floating about, and thought I'd check one out for Blitz. This one caught my eye, since I realized that I haven't see much written about Tate and Liza. And really, there's so many unanswered questions in canon there. Just how do two little psychic kids become gym leaders, anyway?

This was a cute oneshot and a pleasant read. One of my favorite parts was how accepting and almost nonchalant Tate and Liza's parents are about the whole psychic twins thing. It can't have been easy (I'm shuddering at the thought of their temper tantrums!) but Rachel and Jin seem to take it in stride, levitating cookies and all. Them enlisting trainers as baby sitters was a bit of worldbuilding that made this world feel very communal.

We also get a guest appearance from Steven and Getting Lost in Caves (TM). Not Steven Stone's most responsible moment, dragging two young kids (how old are they at this point--7 or 8?) all the way to Meteorite Falls. I did wonder how they were able to get there, which considering the distance from Mossdeep would probably involve teleportation, but then not be able to get out. Was Steven all out of escape ropes? Lunatone and Solrock appearing was a nice moment. I found it interest that, after the narration emphasizing the twins' closeness and how they do everything together, Lunatone and Solrock appear to them separately--perhaps an important moment in their growth? It might have been nice to show some differences in how the twins react to getting lost in the cave as a way to flesh out the differences between them as well as the similarities. Another place it would have been nice to see more was how they got into double-battling and learned to connect with their new friends.

I was quite intrigued by the former gym leader just suddenly disappearing. The narrative was very nonchalant about it! What happened to him? Did anyone ever find out? This is really a fic for Steven Stone being stressed out--I can't imagine putting two ten-year-olds in charge of a gym happened on much sleep. I'm curious if there were any growing pains from two young kids dealing with such a big responsibility. How did they react when they found out? Some additional details would have fleshed the story out a bit more for me, but I enjoyed what I read and had fun experiencing your take on the Terrible Twins.

What they weren’t expecting is that they would be the parents of two psychic twins.
"What To Expect When You're Expecting" didn't cover this!!

Steven, they noted, picked up some ugly rocks.
The shade, lol.

“I lost Tate! I lost Rustboro City! Now I’ll lose me!”
This felt appropriately like a kid's voice.

They weren't old enough to officially become trainers, but there was no harm in a few practice battles (plus the Pokémon Association never busted them, and as Sidney likes to say, it's not illegal if you don't get caught).
Makes a lot of sense that it would work that way, considering all the underage trainers we see in canon.

Around the time that the two turned ten years old, the Gym Leader of Mossdeep City vanished without a trace.
Ominous.

Steven would fist fight Kurogane to get the Mossdeep Gym its rightful Leaders.
Kurogane?
 

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Hi Just a Torchic! I've been seeing a lot of your oneshots floating about, and thought I'd check one out for Blitz. This one caught my eye, since I realized that I haven't see much written about Tate and Liza. And really, there's so many unanswered questions in canon there. Just how do two little psychic kids become gym leaders, anyway?
Hello Pen!
This was a cute oneshot and a pleasant read. One of my favorite parts was how accepting and almost nonchalant Tate and Liza's parents are about the whole psychic twins thing. It can't have been easy (I'm shuddering at the thought of their temper tantrums!) but Rachel and Jin seem to take it in stride, levitating cookies and all. Them enlisting trainers as baby sitters was a bit of worldbuilding that made this world feel very communal.
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We also get a guest appearance from Steven and Getting Lost in Caves (TM). Not Steven Stone's most responsible moment, dragging two young kids (how old are they at this point--7 or 8?) all the way to Meteorite Falls.
This is just part 27/333 of Steven being an irresponsible teenager.
I did wonder how they were able to get there, which considering the distance from Mossdeep would probably involve teleportation, but then not be able to get out. Was Steven all out of escape ropes?
Steven flew them there in part part 26/333 of Steven being an irresponsible teenager.
Lunatone and Solrock appearing was a nice moment. I found it interest that, after the narration emphasizing the twins' closeness and how they do everything together, Lunatone and Solrock appear to them separately--perhaps an important moment in their growth? It might have been nice to show some differences in how the twins react to getting lost in the cave as a way to flesh out the differences between them as well as the similarities. Another place it would have been nice to see more was how they got into double-battling and learned to connect with their new friends.
Really good points. I might get around to adding more to this oneshot, but that's low priority atm, and I'm more focused on trying to make my future works/oneshots expand more on little moments.
I was quite intrigued by the former gym leader just suddenly disappearing. The narrative was very nonchalant about it! What happened to him? Did anyone ever find out?
I'm certainly going to be writing about the Gym Leaders before Tate & Liza/Wallace/Winona/Roxanne/Brawly/Flannery/Norman. For some context/sneak peek stuff, there was a lot of social upheaval and stuff in the ~5 years before ORAS, and a lot of this affected the Hoenn League.
This is really a fic for Steven Stone being stressed out--I can't imagine putting two ten-year-olds in charge of a gym happened on much sleep.
"Wallace! Mom says it's my turn to be stressed out!" - Steven
I'm curious if there were any growing pains from two young kids dealing with such a big responsibility. How did they react when they found out? Some additional details would have fleshed the story out a bit more for me, but I enjoyed what I read and had fun experiencing your take on the Terrible Twins.
I might write a thing to expand on this one day.
"What To Expect When You're Expecting" didn't cover this!!
Damn it how are we going to take care of two psychic twins
The shade, lol.
"Steven, this rock looks like poopy!"
This felt appropriately like a kid's voice.
Good. I got the dialogue right.
Makes a lot of sense that it would work that way, considering all the underage trainers we see in canon.
Ikr like what the heck is the deal with preschoolers
g a s p
Kurogane?
Kurogane Cockburn. Head of the Hoenn League in this verse. Massive prick, as future fics will show.
 
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