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Pokémon The End: Rekindled


*Crazy Absol Noises*
Behind a laptop, most likely with tea
A/N - I am so excited to post this, you have no idea. My heart is legit racing.

This story is a rewrite of a Pokemon fanfiction I wrote five years ago called The End. I was pretty stoked at its reception, especially on Serebii's fanfiction forums. However, over the past few years, I feel my writing skills have improved somewhat. This story is pretty special to me, and the concept of rewriting it wouldn't leave my mind. So, I decided to give it a go while my main Sonic 'fic is on hold due to current events. I'm nineteen chapters deep atm, and I've been enjoying rewriting this. I've taken criticism and comments on the old version (as well as taking into consideration comments I've had on more recent works) and been smoothing out the plot, refining areas, and making the main plot-line clearer from the start. I hope everyone reading - those who read the original and those new to this story - will enjoy what I've done here. Please bare in mind that this was originally written during Generation 6 (X and Y), but I've tried to sprinkle in some newer pokemon here and there.

One such comment was concerning the handling of Harlequin's unusual situation. I would like to make it clear from the start that they do indeed have a gender, and their mysterious ambiguity is tied into their own personal plot and backstory.

Blurb: In a world ruled by a wicked hydreigon, the pokemon have been split into groups: Outcasts, Heretics and Darkness. Two Outcasts - a meowstic called Cleo and her small dedenne companion Spark - stumble upon an odd discovery. Something that gives the Outcasts a little hope. Hope that the Darkness will one day be defeated, and pokemon can live in peace once more.

But this discovery comes at a cost. It sends two of Hydreigon's best assassins after them. What unfolds next is a roller-coaster of events that throw our heroes right into the epic battle between good and evil.

(Disclaimer covers the entire story - Pokemon and its characters are (c) Nintendo, Game Freak etc)


Important note to reviewers and readers - Chapter One has been edited and re-posted due to feedback on tone change. All reviews posted before 03/08/2020 will be referring to the original chapter. I've taken feedback on board and improved it for what I hope will be a better reading experience. The 'fun' feeling that was influenced by Slayers and JRPGs has been kept in, while also maintaining the dark overtones of the later parts of the chapter. I hope! XD Happy reading!

Part 1 - Calamity

1 - A World Shrouded in Darkness​

Barely a sound rose from the shadows cast by the trees as the setting sun stretched its dwindling rays through the canopy of the winding woods. Just the soft sound of crunching leaves and brittle twigs as Cleo trudged through the undergrowth, keeping her wits about her as any sensible meowstic should. Every confident step was soft and calculated to avoid drawing attention from the wood’s inhabitants, which were few and far between.

A disgruntled groan came from the long fur around her shoulders, followed by the tiny head of a dedenne. “I’d give my whiskers for a berry.”

“Not far now,” Cleo told her companion. “We’ll be at the Guild before sundown.”

“My poor stomach thinks you might be wrong.”

“Your poor stomach will just have to trust me.”

Cleo was no stranger to the Winding Woods, but as the sun rapidly disappeared over the horizon, it was beginning to look less and less familiar. Not to mention her night vision wasn’t exactly her strong suit. As night drew closer, dangers increased. Assassins or soldiers of the Darkness could be lurking anywhere in the shadows. She tapped her satchel, briefly considering drawing her map and deciding against it. There was no sense in risking a distraction, putting both her and Spark in danger. They just had to keep following the path, or what she could see of it beneath its thick coating of rusty, fallen leaves.

“Oh! Oh!” Spark covered her mouth with both paws, alarmed at the volume of her own voice.

The pair turned their heads left and right, ears swivelling back and forth. Silence.

Spark settled back into Cleo’s fur and pointed, keeping her voice no more than a hoarse whisper. “I can see daylight!”

A trickle of light leaked through the trees ahead of them, marking the end of the path and their trek through the woods. Spark wriggled with barely contained glee.

The leaves rustled above them, and Cleo turned her eyes to the canopy, her relief cut short. She felt Spark sink back into her fur, and the dedenne let out a small groan. Branches bucked and swayed as three lithe figures scrambled across them, crimson eyes trained on the two Guild Warriors below.

“That’s great, Spark,” Cleo said, fighting a half-smile. “But your excitement seems to have attracted some unwanted guests.”

“Well, well, well.” One of the three weavile crouched in the branches above them and grinned down. “I spy… with my little eye… two sitting duckletts.”

“Outcasts, too, by the looks of things.” Another fixed his eyes on the sun-shaped badge pinned to Cleo’s satchel strap. “Pretty bold of you to be out in the woods during sunset, eh, kitty?”

Cleo released her bag strap to ball her paws into fists. It wasn’t unusual for assassins to poke jibes at their targets. But things could turn very nasty in the blink of an eye. Psychic energy hummed in her ears. An impulse.

“What do you say, boys?” said the smallest of the trio. “Make it quick, or have some fun?”

“I dunno,” said the first. “It’s been a bit of a slow day.”

Cleo bared a canine. There wasn’t a whole lot she could do to weavile at this range. She felt Spark shift on her shoulder and the dedenne’s fur puffed out.

“You three have picked a bad day to start with us.” Spark shook her tiny fist. “I’ll have you know I’m hungry! And I’m not very nice when I’m hungry. So get down here so I can kick your feathery butts all the way back to the Shadow Lands!”

The first weavile blinked his large eyes in mock bewilderment. “Hear that, boys? The tiny little rat thinks she can kick our feathery butts!”

He rolled his head back and laughed, joined by the other two.

One of them smacked his knee repeatedly. “Big words from such a tiny rodent!” he wheezed.

“What did you just call me?” Spark dived off Cleo’s shoulder and rose up to her full five-inches of height. “Are you making fun of my size?!”

This only served to make the weavile laugh even harder. The boss pointed a sharp claw vaguely in her direction. His eyes streamed with tears and he had to grip the branch with his other paw before he fell clean from it.

“Please!” he squeaked. “You’re slaying me!”

Not the wisest of words. Cleo took a step back, not from the weavile, but because Spark was beginning to radiate static. Cleo knew what was coming next.

A blinding flash lit up the trees, wiping the smirks clean off the weavile troop’s faces. One by one, the weasel pokemon flopped from the canopy to land in a sprawl in the undergrowth. Their bodies sparked and jerked as electricity danced across their limbs.

Spark placed her paws on her hips and tapped her tiny foot. “Who’s laughing now?”

Cleo rejoined her friend’s side and shook her head slowly. “Couldn’t you have gone a little easier on them?”

Spark quirked an eyebrow at her. “This coming from the meowstic who just laid waste to an army of jangmo-o?”

Cleo shrugged her shoulders. “They had it coming.”

“So did these,” said Spark. “Funny though. Hydreigon’s goons can be mouthy, but they usually just attack us. These guys were all bark and no bite.”

Cleo rubbed the fur between her ears. Spark had a point. The dedenne had a short fuse, but Cleo had expected more of a challenge from the weavile. Her eyes trailed back up to the branches and squinted into the shadows.

“Let’s see what they’ve got on them, then, eh?” Spark rubbed her paws together. “Keep an eye open in case there’s more.” She promptly vanished inside the head weavile’s bag.

Cleo stood beside the bag, watching Spark’s tail swish back and forth while keeping her ears trained on their surroundings. It was likely there was no further threat, given no one came to the weaviles’ aide, but one didn’t take risks when the sun was setting.

“Dang it!” came Spark’s muffled voice. “No berries.”

“Is there any gold?” Cleo ventured.

“Oh, there’s loads of that.”

Spark kicked out with her back feet, sending small gold coins rolling across the leaves. Cleo gathered them up and dumped them into her bag.

“And… and this.” Spark waddled from the satchel struggling beneath the weight of a glass vial. “Dunno what it is. Do we take it?”

Cleo took it in one paw and turned it in the light. It was filled with florescent pink liquid. “What is it? Pecha juice?”

Spark grimaced and twitched her whiskers. “Looks a little too… toxic… to be pecha juice.”

“That might just be the bad lighting.” Cleo popped it into her bag and stood up. “Maybe Tinker will have some idea.”

“Yeah, he knows all kindsa weird stuff.”

With Spark back on her shoulder, Cleo headed towards the light ahead of them before it faded with the setting sun. The woods were rapidly growing darker, stretching shadows far back away from them.

When they finally stepped out onto cool, damp grass, the dwindling light was almost blinding after the darkness of the woods. Cleo had to narrow her eyes to get a good sense of her surroundings. The stretch of grass ended at a low, stone wall. What it had once been, Cleo had no idea, but it stretched away to either side, vanishing over the hills. It was possible to walk around, but vaulting it was much quicker.

Just beyond that was a sprawl of wooden buildings. Not permanent dwellings, but those thrown up in haste by pokemon who were often on the move. They would stay here for a season or two, maybe even more if things stayed quiet. Some of the dwellings weren’t exactly buildings, however. Instead, they were wooden carts with taupe over the tops to keep the rain out. Cleo had seen them many times. They were dragged by strong pokemon, and were designed so those that inhabited them could make a quick getaway. Not every pokemon had warmed to the idea. Too many had been seen being blown away in storms, or dragged away by the Darkness. At least wooden shacks stayed where they were, were easy enough to throw up and tear down if need be, and would even last long enough to be returned to should such times arise.


Cleo lifted her head as a meinfoo rushed towards her. He sported the same sun-shaped badge she wore on her satchel’s strap, indicating he was a member of the Outcasts Guild.

“I’ve not seen you before,” he said. “Where have you come from? What business do you have?”

“We’re travelling warriors.” Cleo motioned to her badge. “We’re hoping to stop by the Guild overnight before we continue our way south.”

“We?” The meinfoo looked past her, standing on tiptoes to see back towards the woods.

“Yes, ‘we’.” Spark poked her head out of Cleo’s ruff, drawing a surprised ‘oh!’ from the guard. “And we’re both very hungry, so if you wouldn’t mind?”

The meinfoo nodded and stood aside. “Of course. The Guild Hall is just that way, in the centre of town. You can’t miss it.”

“Much appreciated!” Spark promptly vanished back inside Cleo’s ruff.

Cleo nodded her thanks to the guard, but as she headed away, something nagged in her mind. “Ah!”

He turned to face her.

“There are three weavile in the woods,” she explained. “They’re only stunned. You might want to apprehend them, find out what they’re doing here.”

The meinfoo sighed and ran a paw down his muzzle. “It was only a matter of time.” He straightened, returning to his professional air. “Thank you. We’ll get on that right away.”

Cleo nodded again and trotted through the town, searching out the familiar banner that marked the Guild. The white flag with its sun emblem waved above the rooftops, a beacon to all who were searching for the Guild for help or work.

“Whew!” Spark declared as they entered the door. “Well, I don’t know about you, Cleo, but I’m heading straight to that dinner hall.”

Cleo absently rubbed her belly. Their rations had run out the previous night, and she was beginning to resonate with her friend’s large appetite. “I might join you.”

As they followed the Guild occupants down the corridor towards the sweet smells emanating from the kitchen, the small crowd parted and a riolu trotted towards them. Tinker, the Outcast Guild’s current leader.

“Cleo!” he said as a smile split his muzzle. “I was actually growing worried. You were expected two days ago.”

“We got caught up.” Cleo paused as the riolu stopped before her. “We actually need to talk to you.”

“Now?” Spark sprawled forwards on Cleo’s shoulder. “Can’t we do this after supper? I’m starting to feel faint.”

Cleo rolled her eyes. “Please excuse her. Food has been a little scarce.”

“Well, dinner is about to start, so feel free-,” said Tinker.

Spark didn’t even wait for the sentence to end. She darted from Cleo’s shoulder and zipped through the crowd, with nothing more than a quick ‘thanks!’ before she vanished amid the masses.

Tinker rubbed the back of his head as he watched after her. “Food scarcity is becoming a growing problem with the cold season closing in. There’s not much left out there for travelling pokemon, as most of it has been harvested before the frost comes.” He turned back to Cleo and met her eyes. “Be sure to take some supplies with you before you leave.”

“I was planning on stocking up.” Cleo kept pace with him as they followed the other pokemon towards the kitchen. “Are you sure you have enough stocks to spare here?”

“We have plenty. It was a good year for the orchard, not to mention the wild fruit and roots growing in the woods. With fewer pokemon living nearby, we didn’t have much competition.”

When they arrived at the dinner hall, Tinker kept moving past it. Cleo faltered in the doorway, and gave a glance inside. Spark was perched on the table, piling up a plate twice her size with a variety of delights.

“Are you wanting to stop here first?” Tinker asked with a hint of impatience. “I’m afraid I can’t discuss your previous mission in there. There are a lot of… local refugees who’ve joined us here. And I fear discussing such matters might upset them.”

Cleo’s ears drooped slightly. She couldn’t deny she was hungry. But… She nodded her understanding and turned from the dining hall. “I can eat later.”

The truth was, the sooner she relayed her mission, the less it would be hovering over her like a dark fog. And the less the chance of Tinker hovering around her like a flea, disrupting her relaxing meal. She followed him through the winding corridor to the end, where one small room sat. The door was ajar, but he still needed to give it a shoulder barge to get it open. The wooden door tore over a wad of discarded paperwork before finally catching on the tattered edge of a cardboard box.

His desk was in an equal state of disarray (or ‘organised chaos’ as he’d call it), and he had to clear a stool of yet more paper for Cleo to sit down.

“Tell me,” he said. “How did things go in Windflower?”

Cleo let out a sigh. “That small town is fine for now. We chased off the jangmo-o.”

“Chased off?”

“A couple were apprehended there,” she explained. “But their Guild is small, you know that. Most of those dragons got away. Although not unscathed.”

“You let them get away?!”

“I was busy helping someone who got hit by a dragon rage,” Cleo explained. “They had no available medic, and they needed help!”

Tinker leant on his paw and tapped his claws on the table top. “The fact those dragons got away unsettles me, Cleo.”

“Then maybe it’s about time Windflower packed up and moved on. They’re too close to the Shadow Lands as it is.”

Tinker rubbed his muzzle and groaned. “That’s not an option I want to enforce on them. You were meant to kill-”

“My job is to look after pokemon who are threatened by the Darkness,” said Cleo. “I wasn’t going to let someone die by giving chase after a bunch of kids!”

“I appreciate that, Cleo,” said Tinker. “But someone else could have done it. Those dragons are a threat.”

“Those dragons are hatchlings.”

“Hydreigon trains hatchlings!”

“Yes, in the Shadow Lands!” Cleo snapped. “He doesn’t send a group of kids off to terrorise a village!” She sighed and dragged her claws through the fur between her ears. “At least having two jangmo-o in custody will hopefully give them much needed information. Whatever they can provide, anyway. At least they’re not terrorising them anymore.”

“If they come back, Cleo-”

“Then they have two of their own as ransom. I’m sure that will terrify those children more than being chased across the town by a pawful of Guild Warriors.”

“Ransom indeed.” Tinker lowered his paw to look at her. “I hardly think Hydreigon will care. If he demands that village wiped out, then it will be wiped out. Just like your home.”

A chill ran down Cleo’s spine and her fur stood on end along it, but she just stared back at the riolu silently. His right eye stared past her, and enough vehemence flared in her to probe him as to how he lost it in the first place. But she swiftly swallowed it down, and the look of surprise and regret that washed over his face made it a lot easier to do so.

“I’m really sorry,” he said. “That was unprofessional of me.”

Cleo just nodded at that and looked away.

“What you did was noble, but you sometimes have to decide if sacrifices need to be made,” said Tinker. “In a war, it often comes to that.”

“Most pokemon wouldn’t call it a war anymore, Tinker. They’d say it’s just the norm. A group of tiny dragons trying to burn down a food storage? They’re just hooligan kids trying to get away with something while claiming they have the authority because ‘their king said so’. Hydreigon hasn’t sent an army onto us in seasons.”

“That’s because we’re losing.”

Cleo fell silent. She rubbed her paw over her face and sank in her seat. Losing… hadn’t they already lost? The Outcasts, scattered across Estellis, struggling to survive in a world where dragon- and dark-type pokemon reigned, ruled over by a horrid pokemon who wanted nothing more than to wipe out every other type completely. No. It was no longer a war. Now it was just survival.

“Outcasts are being picked off day by day, you know that,” said Tinker. “Driven across Estellis while Hydreigon spreads his rule further and further south. I fear you’ve become hardened to this world, Cleo.” He let out a small sigh and his voice softened. “What happened to the meowstic who’d run blindly into an army of Hydreigon’s soldiers just to take out their leader for the sake of a bounty?”

“For one thing, mobs like that are now few and far between,” said Cleo. “I mean, the last assignment you gave me was to take out a group of hatchlings. One blast of my psychic and the lot of them crumpled like flies.”

“Yet still got away.”

“No, those warriors there let them escape. They seemed to have no idea how to handle an event like this! They panicked! That’s how that warrior got hurt in the first place. My job was to take those dragons down and protect other pokemon. I did my job.”

“Your job was to protect Windflower.” Tinker leant against his desk. “And now you’re placing blame.”

“I did my job, Tinker. Those jangmo-o now have a lot to think about.”

Tinker pinched the bridge of his muzzle in two claws. “I’m beginning to think you and Spark may need to consider taking on an extra team member.”

Cleo trapped him in an amber glare. “This again? Tinker…”

“Don’t get me wrong, Spark’s a great ally.” Tinker picked up a small note on his desk and read it. “I’m going to guess she was the one who took out those three weavile in the woods?”

Cleo’s eyes widened. “You heard about that already? That’s why I-”

“Yes.” Tinker wagged the small note at her. “Word gets back to me quite quickly. Anyway, at least consider expanding your team? There are some recent Graduate Warriors who might have actually-”

“What?” She bared a canine. “Picked up my slack and gone after those jangmo-o?”

“To put it bluntly, yes.”

“Well I’m not interested,” said Cleo. “Spark and I work just fine together. She watches my back and covers me against dark-types, especially when I can’t get to them. She watches me, and I watch her. We don’t need another team-mate.”

“And what was Spark doing while you tended to the wounded?”

“Covering me.”

“Precisely.” Tinker sat back in his seat and folded the little note. “I don’t doubt the pair of you work like a well-oiled machine. I’ve seen you do good work in the past. But everyone needs some extra help every now and then. If you take on one of our trainees, it might do you the world of good. An extra pair of paws, and you might learn something.”

Cleo bit her lip and glanced away. “I don’t think so, Tinker.”

Tinker made a thoughtful noise. “Because you fear you’ll need to carry them?”

“Exactly. They’d just be a burden.” She wanted to add ‘just like that group of so-called Guild Warriors who quaked just because a group of hatchlings bared their fangs’ but thought better of it. There was no sense in vexing Tinker any further.

“Well, as far as fighting goes, you two do just great.” Tinker opened a drawer and pulled out a small, brown pouch. “Either way, you defended Windflower, so you still get paid. As for the weavile, there was actually a bounty on their heads. Turns out they’ve been terrorising some of the locals who’ve migrated here. With them out of the picture, the Winding Woods are safe for now.”

Cleo took the pouch gratefully and stuffed it into her satchel.

“I don’t imagine you got any information off the weavile?” Tinker asked. “Any reason as to why they were lurking around in those empty woods?”

“No, unfortunately.” Cleo rummaged in her satchel. “They weren’t in any state to talk. They did have this on them, however.”

She handed the little vial to the riolu and he leant forwards to take it. He turned it in the light, and Cleo noticed even in better lighting the pink liquid was still oddly fluorescent.

“Any idea what it is?” she asked.

“Not a clue.”

“It’s not pecha juice, right?”

“No, I don’t think so. Unless they mixed it with something else.” Tinker popped it on his desk and inclined his head as he stared at it. “I shall have to run some tests on it. Part of me fears it might be poison.”

Cleo’s mouth went dry. She only knew of one pokemon in Hydreigon’s army who used poisons, but that didn’t mean others wouldn’t be inclined to give it a try. Was that why the weavile were lurking around the woods? Were they planning on poisoning the pokemon here?

Suddenly she wasn’t quite so hungry.

Tinker looked up at her suddenly and he trailed his eye over her. “You look positively exhausted. Will you be wanting a room for the night?”

Cleo nodded slowly. “Maybe a few nights. I think, after all that travelling, Spark and I would appreciate staying still for a little while.”

“Very well. Then where will you be off to?”

“New City,” she said. “I don’t have plans to go anywhere else, so we might as well head back home. Unless you have other plans?”

“A rest sounds like a good idea to me. Maybe it’ll help you put things into perspective.” Tinker picked up the vial again, no longer looking at Cleo.

Very well. She could tell when she wasn’t welcome.

She pushed herself from her seat and turned to leave his office.

“Oh, Cleo?”

She froze in the doorway, and flicked both her tails sharply.

“If anything happens to Windflower…” His voice was laced with warning.

She turned her head back towards him. “I shouldn’t even have been needed. They have a slaking there who could pick up two of those runts in one paw. If the Guild there can’t handle a group of kids, then we have a problem.”

She slipped from the room and yanked the door closed. But it didn’t slam. Instead it jammed over a mound of crumpled paper.


Cleo lay on her back on a pile of clean hay. The room had only had one nest, so she’d split it in two for her and Spark. The dedenne lay sprawled out atop it, giving off snores that far exceeded her size.

Cleo couldn’t sleep. She pulled out her map, clutching a red pen in one paw. It was a paw-sketched representation of Estellis, dotted with her own paw print writing. The north was mostly marred with red crosses, former territories that had been overrun by the Darkness. Areas that had seen much war and claimed many lives. They were places that were no longer inhabited by the Outcasts, nor inhabited by the Darkness. Just destroyed, and no longer safe for her or any other Outcast to visit or travel through. The further south they went, the less red crosses they’d find.

The entire northern part of the map was shaded black, stretching down over a third of the western areas. This was the Shadow Lands. A rapidly growing area that was ruled over by Hydreigon, as he stretched his claws across Estellis. It was inhabited only by dragon and dark-type pokemon, and for anyone else to enter it meant death. Death at the claws of his murkrow flock and weavile fleets, or to be incinerated by flames and dragonfire.

The rest of the western area, and a huge portion of the south was shaded purple. Heretic territory. Those who revered the Darkness and wished to appease Hydreigon, although that had only meant they’d been used before now. Used, then destroyed. Yet the Heretics tried to find new ways to appease him. Cleo didn’t understand it. Desperation to survive, or did they really believe themselves inferior and want to be servants to the horrid dragon?

The rest of the map showed areas still safe for the Outcasts. A small patch of scattered towns and villages, some of which she’d not seen yet to mark them on her map. Her eye fell to a spot just a two day walk from where they were. A huge moorland, trimmed on one side by a forest while the other side was dominated by a mountain that curled around the moors before it stretched away towards the north.

New City.

It wasn’t marked on her map. Even breathing its name outside was a risk. The Darkness didn’t know about it, nor did the Heretics. It was only known to the Guild and those who inhabited it. Only those trusted would be taken there, and those who lived there weren’t allowed to leave without reason. Not that most of them even wanted to. The pokemon were happy to live there, in safety. Unseen, hidden beneath the surface.

She sighed and folded away her map, tucking it away in her bag. She let her arm flop over her face as she stared at the ceiling.

What were those weavile doing in the woods? And why just the three of them? They’d been causing problems, apparently. Had they really been planning to poison this small town?

Just three of them alone wouldn’t have stood a chance against the Guild and all its forces. They must have known that. So it was either a sneak attack, or they were waiting for reinforcements. Or this town wasn’t their target at all?

No, it couldn’t be the latter. Pokemon were terrorized everywhere, the Outcasts just fought back to try and remain safe for as long as they could.

But if the little town was being targeted, it may very soon become nothing more than a red cross on her map.


Harbinger trotted along the rocky outcrop of the Silent Mountains, keeping impeccable balance. His snowy white paws moved one in front of the other, the back ones falling in the footprints of his forepaws making nary a sound. Behind him, the two pawniard twins took more wary steps, jogging to keep up with the absol’s quick pace.

He’d seen it. About a mile back he’d caught glimpse of a village ahead of them, formed of stone buildings nestled around a lake. They hadn’t been there two years before, so they were definitely recent. It had been hard to gauge how many pokemon lived there, but going off the number of houses alone, he guessed around fifty.

Fifty what? Pokemon hadn’t lived in the Silent Mountains in years. Not that it mattered what faction they fell under. All pokemon were the same. All hated and feared absol.

He paused just behind a rocky mound, lowering his head to see past the spray of dried branches poking from it. There it was. The village. Clean, white stone reflecting the moonlight. The lake glistened with stars, rippling and disturbing them as the breeze washed over it.

A couple of pokemon hovered around the lake, gathering water into clay jars. A zangoose and a linoone. In the doorway of one of the houses stood a zigzagoon on its hind legs, steadying itself with its paw. Clearly trying to imitate its parent.

It certainly looked peaceful enough. Well… it was time to introduce himself.

Harbinger crept from beneath the rock, catching the twigs with his bony tail. The rustle was enough to cause the zangoose’s ears to twitch. He looked up from the lake and met Harbinger’s crimson eyes. The zangoose stiffened, his fur flaring along his bushy tail.

Harbinger paused on the edge of the outcrop, his front paw raised. He was looking right down at the zangoose. Unafraid, unlike the feral-looking pokemon beneath him. The linoone had spotted him and let out a wail. She dropped the clay jar, shattering it over the rocks and spraying water everywhere. She dashed back to her house, scooping her curious child into her forearms before slamming the door behind her.

The zangoose flashed his canines. “Get out of here, you omen!”

Harbinger sighed inwardly. It was always the same.

He raised his head high. “I’m only here to warn you of a disaster.”

“Yeah, and you probably brought it yourself!” The zangoose flexed his claws, and the moonlight glinted off them. “I’m not afraid, absol. I’ll carve you up right here.”

It was always the same.

“Fine. Have it your way.” Harbinger turned to duck back beneath the mountain shrub.

Something sharp struck his heel. He stifled a yelp, skittering along the outcrop. The tell-tail clatter of stone told him the zangoose had thrown something. Harbinger didn’t glance back until he was on the other side of the shrub. The zangoose still glared after him, poised to leap into action if Harbinger retaliated.

He had every intention to retaliate. But not in the way the zangoose expected.

Harbinger pushed himself along the outcrop, nudging Scratch and Claw ahead of him. The ground widened out just ahead of them, before moving into a gentle incline further up the mountain. Harbinger sat down and stretched out his back leg to examine his paw. No blood, just a muddy scuff where the rock had struck him.

“So what are we going to do?” It was Claw who’d spoken.

Scratch stood beside his twin, rubbing his pointed limbs together. The sound it gave off was akin to a metal kricketune who hadn’t quite mastered the art of serenading just yet.

Harbinger lowered his leg to sit better and looked at each of the pawniard in turn. Patient, waiting. The dim light reflected off their metal hides, yet they still managed to blend to the shadows. The pokemon in that village probably hadn’t even noticed them.

Harbinger glanced back at the way they’d come. Those pokemon around the lake. He’d told them disaster was coming. He was going to make sure it did.

“Look around you,” he told the pawniard. “What do you see?”

“Mountains,” said Claw. “But what does an avalanche have to do with those pokemon in the valley?”

“I’m not going to start an avalanche,” said Harbinger. “What else is here?”

Claw tipped his head back in thought, and Scratch twitched as he looked at his brother expectantly.

“Rivers,” Scratch finally said, trailing one of his claws over his arm. “And the lake.”

A smile split Harbinger’s muzzle. “You remember those pokemon we saw in the valley?”

Claw nodded, and Scratch stopped his fussing, waiting for instruction.

“Good.” Harbinger stood, stepping gingerly on his bruised foot. “You know what to do.”

The twins saluted and turned, zipping along the mountain slope towards the other side.

Harbinger gave another glance back towards the village. He couldn’t see it anymore. The pokemon there would either flee, or stick around to see if he brought any threat.

A harbinger of disaster. That’s all they saw him as. Just like everyone else. If they were going to accuse him of disaster, then he’d make sure they received it.

Another smirk tugged at his lips, and he followed after the pawniard twins, bounding nimbly over the precarious rocks.
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Whoa, this story was well worth the wait. I'm glad I haven't read the original version so I can get into this blindly and enjoy it more since it'd be an entirely new experience for me.

I really like our protagonists so far. Cleo and Spark have a very good synergy between them and you can tell easily from their interactions that they've been partners for a long time at the very least. I should've gotten the hint from the title that this story would be somewhat dark.

The fact that it takes in a world with a quickly growing tyrannical empire sure sets the tone really quickly. Cleo's interaction with Tinker in the office does show the contrast between the two in that Cleo would prioritize saving anyone at arm's length while Tinker kinda only looks at the big picture while fully willing to make sacrifices along the way. It does make me wonder what choice either of them would make in the trolley experiment lol.

That cliffhanger at the end really makes me want to know what happens next. That Absol seems a bit like a dick if not outright petty. He goes around foretelling disasters he himself causes which ain't cool. I wonder, or hope rather, that not all dark types in this world are evil and racist/typist(?) towards other pokemon. After all there are still a few nice peeps in oppressive regimes irl as most just want to live their lives comfortably.

This story was pretty well done, barring a few typos I spotted here and there. I'm excited to see where this goes, and it's great that it's basically a soft rewrite of an already finished fic, so updates may very well be regular.
Chapter 2


*Crazy Absol Noises*
Behind a laptop, most likely with tea
Whoa, this story was well worth the wait. I'm glad I haven't read the original version so I can get into this blindly and enjoy it more since it'd be an entirely new experience for me
Thank you so much! =D I'm hoping I've added enough changes and plot smoothing so that older readers can enjoy, too. Some have already returned on FFNet and I am super stoked about that!

I really like our protagonists so far. Cleo and Spark have a very good synergy between them and you can tell easily from their interactions that they've been partners for a long time at the very least.
Fantastic, thank you =D Cleo and Spark's relationship is pretty heart-warming, and I love writing the pair. They even have their own backstory I plan to share at some point further down the line, as the original has its own collection of back-story one-shots which need some serious fine-tuning. This is so much fun work for me, I love it!

Cleo's interaction with Tinker in the office does show the contrast between the two in that Cleo would prioritize saving anyone at arm's length while Tinker kinda only looks at the big picture while fully willing to make sacrifices along the way.
I'm really glad to read this. Tinker and Cleo's relationship is one of the aspects I've altered in this re-write. They weren't as conflicting originally, and Tinker was rather fond of Cleo.

That Absol seems a bit like a dick if not outright petty. He goes around foretelling disasters he himself causes which ain't cool. I wonder, or hope rather, that not all dark types in this world are evil and racist/typist(?) towards other pokemon. After all there are still a few nice peeps in oppressive regimes irl as most just want to live their lives comfortably.
You'll have to wait and see about Harbinger ;) you've only had one perspective on all of this so far.

This story was pretty well done, barring a few typos I spotted here and there. I'm excited to see where this goes, and it's great that it's basically a soft rewrite of an already finished fic, so updates may very well be regular.
Thanks for pointing that out. I think it was down to me using the American spell-check which was defaulted on Scrivener. There are spelling differences between some UK and American words. I've switched this to UK now, given I use a lot of British idioms and spellings by default. Hopefully this will fix things, but I apologise to my American readers if anything looks odd from here on out!
2 - Mischief​

The dining hall was bustling as it always was first thing in the morning. Cleo slid through a group of nattering pokemon to join Spark at the table. The small dedenne was sat beside a snubbul who, despite being too involved in his breakfast, took the time to look up and smile warmly at the meowstic. Cleo returned his greeting, then flopped down beside Spark.

“Great spread today!” said Spark just before taking a bite out of an oran berry.

Cleo couldn’t agree more. To look at it, one wouldn’t think the cold season was drawing in. It looked like the Guild had just had a fresh harvest.

She reached for a plate and grabbed a few slices of dried fish to add to it. Coupled with a savory root gravy, it went down a treat.

Spark wiped her whiskers and looked up at Cleo. “So what’s the plan for today?”

“I thought we’d finally head out,” said Cleo. “I think five days is a suitable enough rest.”

“Yeah, I’m starting to get itchy feet.” Spark reached for another berry. “I’d better fill up though if we’re gonna be travelling a while.”

“It’s a two day walk to New City,” said Cleo. “You won’t be struggling. I’ll restock our supplies before we leave.”

“Fantastic!” Spark punctuated that by stuffing an entire cheri into her mouth.

It was little wonder the dedenne didn’t choke. Cleo stifled a laugh and tucked into her own breakfast.

“Oh, I should let Tinker know we’re heading off, too,” said Cleo.

“Can’t,” said Spark. “He’s apparently already left.”

Cleo let out a small sigh of relief. She hadn’t really spoken to him since they’d arrived. In fact, she’d actively tried to avoid him. The only other contact they’d had was small-talk over dinner two evenings prior, when they’d found themselves sitting next to each other. Things had seemed a little tense.

“Did he say where he was going?” Cleo ventured.

Spark shrugged her shoulders and swallowed her mouthful. “Nope. He didn’t speak to me. I heard it off JuneBerry.”

Cleo didn’t know who JuneBerry was, but Spark’s answer didn’t exactly solve anything. If Cleo was to guess, Tinker had probably headed back to New City. Cleo hadn’t heard any news about locals in trouble, and Tinker didn’t often venture outside. He just sent out his own Warriors while handling affairs from his desk.

Cleo wiped her paw across her mouth and scooped up her empty plate. “I’ll meet you back here after I’ve grabbed supplies, okay?”

Spark gave her a thumbs-up then returned to re-stocking her plate. Cleo had long since stopped questioning where Spark put it all. She left the dining hall, pausing only to place her plate on the shelf beside the door.

The store room wasn’t far away. A wooden elevator box hung inside the wall, and she lowered herself using its creaky pulley system. The sides of the box scraped along the chute, occasionally snagging in place. It was somewhat unsettling, and a clear sign that the Guild Hall, despite appearances, was as hastily built as the rest of the town.

It finally opened up into a dark room. She could already smell the ripe berries, guiding her nose towards the wooden boxes at the back of the room. Dim light flickered from torches high above her by the elevator, but yet more danced around amid the boxes, casting erratic shadows across the walls. A charmander poked his head up and staggered beneath the weight of an overflowing basket. He set it inside another pulley system, smaller than the elevator, then poked his head inside.

“Sending them up!”

The dumb waiter creaked, lifting the basket out of sight. The charmander returned to his task, gathering berries one by one and examining them, before deciding which ones to put into another basket for the kitchen. He looked up when Cleo made her way towards the supplies.

“Oh hi!” he said. “Are you here for supplies?”

“Yes,” she replied. “Just stocking up for a two day journey.”

“Going to New City, huh?” He smiled warmly and lowered what he was holding into the basket. “I can help you pick things out if you like?”

Cleo eyed him curiously, assessing him. Her claws twitched at her sides and she bit her lip absently.

“No thanks,” she said. “I know what I’m looking for. I won’t disturb you.”

“It’s no problem, honest!” He straightened to look at her, and his eyes widened briefly. His face fell slightly, but he tried to mask it with a smile. “Oh. Right, I understand. Sure, help yourself.”

Cleo nodded stiffly and clambered amid the boxes. Trusting others was always something she’d struggled with. Sure, she could put her life on the line for innocent pokemon, but would turn down help for a simple task like this… She shook her head at herself and began sorting through the varied selection of berries.

Pokemon often used berries, not just for food but medicinal reasons too. Oran and sitrus berries were a frequent go-to, although both Cleo and Spark preferred oran to the bitter tang of sitrus. She made sure to stock up on enough oran berries to see them though more than two days. On top of that, she made sure to grab a couple of cheri berries for Spark. A personal favourite of the dedenne’s.

As well as a couple of pecha berries, and rawst perchance they needed them, Cleo also restocked her dried fish. Spark didn’t touch the stuff, but Cleo had been raised on it. It was packaged in brown paper, and slotted in nicely at the back of Cleo’s satchel, behind her map. That way, it wouldn’t turn the berries salty.

Satisfied, Cleo headed back towards the elevator.

The charmander gave her a friendly ‘bye!’ as she entered it. She returned it with a polite wave, and dragged herself back out of the storage room.

Spark was waiting by the dining hall door, and her long whiskers twitched in a happy smile. She bounded across the floor and scrambled up Cleo’s leg to her shoulder.

“So what didja get?” she asked.

“Now that would be telling,” Cleo teased as they left the Guild.

“Aw! Come on!”

The sun beamed down on the little town, baking the dirt streets until they were almost too hot to walk on. The town was bustling with pokemon, most of them keeping close to the walls. Cleo followed the path through the buildings towards a small market. She quirked an eyebrow at it, then looked down at her bag.

She’d managed to amass some items during her last job that she’d successfully buried beneath all the berries, but unloading them off on the market might not be a bad idea. She didn’t use items in battle herself. Iron thorns were a simple means to peg her tent into the ground, as opposed to something to throw at her foes. She was clumsy with them, and had never mastered the art of throwing them straight.

She passed by a table that specialised in such items, but the seller was deep in debate with a skarmory. The metal bird had recently shed some feathers and was trying to get a good price for the material, which the graveller who owned the stall was desperate to underpay for.

Cleo decided to take her wares elsewhere, following the stalls around to another filled with battle items. Normal and water gems were the main focus, and to no surprise of Cleo’s, there wasn’t a psychic gem in sight. Typical. That was one item she might have actually considered.

“Can I help you?” The seller was a cinccino.

“Yes, actually.” Cleo fumbled through her bag for the small paw-full of iron thorns. “I was wondering if you were interested in these?”

The cinccino gathered them up and examined them with intense scrutiny. “I think two gold coins would be enough?”

Cleo shrugged. “I’ll take-”

She staggered forwards as someone bashed into her, her words cutting off as she reached out to steady herself on the table. Two of the gems fell off to the floor, rolling away beneath the feet of a passing ursaring. She turned her head towards the sound of scampering feet, but whoever it was had slipped away unseen.

“Little toe-rag,” Spark scoffed.

Cleo muttered an apology to the cinccino and stooped to grab one of the gems. The other had been picked up by the ursaring. Cleo’s heart sank when she noted the crack in the surface of the water gem in her paws.

The cinccino’s lips turned down in a sad frown. “I’m afraid I’ll have to charge you for that.”

“Will the thorns be enough?” Cleo asked.

The cinccino shook her head. “They’re three gold each.”

Cleo sighed and reached into her bag for her coin pouch, but her claws closed around something hard and round. She pulled it out and her eyes widened. A rock?

“What are you doing with a rock?” Spark asked.

Cleo’s heart sank even further and she dropped her paw, searching the crowd of busy pokemon. “I think whoever bumped me robbed me…”

“We were robbed?!” Spark twisted on her shoulder and shook her fist at the air. “Get back here, you thief!”

“It’s a little late now.” Cleo turned back to the cinccino. “I’m really sorry, I-”

The cinccino lifted her paws and shook her head. “It’s fine. Don’t worry about it. It’s just one coin. I’ll keep the iron thorns, though.” She closed her eyes in a smile. “Just… catch that thief before he robs anyone else?”

“Thank you so much.” Cleo turned from the table and dashed through the crowd.

It didn’t surprise her. Even amid the Outcasts there were dishonest pokemon. Yet another reason not to trust so blindly. She cut hastily through the crowd, trying to spot anyone who looked remotely suspicious.

Spark tapped Cleo’s ear and pointed straight ahead. “Is that the thief?”

Cleo narrowed her eyes at the retreating fluffy back of a whimsicott. His running gait was almost as if he were in slow-motion, rising daintily into the air as the breeze carried him further along.

“Oi!” Spark shouted. “Stop right there, you thief!”

The whimsicott looked back at her, and his orange eyes widened. He turned and picked up his pace, galloping towards the edge of town.

Spark bailed off Cleo’s shoulder and took off after him, screeching at him to stop.

Cleo shook her head sharply and raced after him. Spark was alarmingly fast, outrunning Cleo and almost snapping at the whimsicott’s heels. He gave another glance back and let out a ‘yikes!’ before desperately trying to speed up. The wind was no longer in his favour, having dropped and leaving him to outrun the speedy dedenne alone.

Spark’s whiskers lit up with electricity and she fired a thunderbolt at the whimsicott. It staggered him, slowing him down enough for Cleo to come within striking distance.

The meowstic unfurled her ears, and a blast of purple light struck the thief. He yelped and stumbled forwards, but he didn’t hit the floor. Instead, Cleo lifted him in her psychic attack and turned the fluffy pokemon around to face her.

She came to a stop beside Spark, panting to catch her breath. “You’re fast, I’ll give you that.”

The whimsicott touched a thumb-claw to his chest. “Are you talking to me?”

“Do you see any other thieves in bubbles?” Cleo scoffed.

The whimsicott turned his head left and right, straining to see behind him. Then he turned back to Cleo and shook his head. “Nope.”

Cleo and Spark exchanged glances. It had been a sarcastic and rhetorical question, and Cleo wasn’t sure if the whimsicott was returning the jest or being serious.

She turned back to him and held out her paw. “Now. Give back what you stole from me, and I’ll let you go without any fuss.”

“Oh darn it!” His face fell and his arms flopped at his sides. “I can’t! I need it. At least… I think I do.”

“What kind of answer is that?!” Spark squeaked, rising to her hind legs. “You can’t just go around stealing things because you need them!” She paused and her nose crinkled. “Especially if you aren’t even certain you need them!”

“Exactly,” said Cleo. “And replacing it with a rock? It’s not as if I didn’t notice you’d bumped into me.”

“I switcheroo’d!” he explained. “It’s all I know for pick-pocketing.”

Spark looked up at Cleo. “He’s rather honest for a thief.”

Cleo stared up at the levitating whimsicott. Spark wasn’t wrong. He was being oddly honest. Something didn’t smell right.

“Spark’s got a point,” she said. “Why would you explain yourself? Most criminals I pump for information are so unwilling to give it up that I have beat it out of them.”

The whimsicott paled. “That sounds rather unnecessarily violent.”

Cleo and Spark both turned slack-jawed.

The whimsicott raised his paws in a shrug. “What can I say? You caught me.”

“But…” Spark stuttered. “But you’re the bad guy!” She lowered her head into her paws and groaned. “What a cheesy line…”

“Hey, I’m not a bad guy!” said the whimsicott. “I’m just lost!”

“Then you’re in the same situation as all of us,” said Cleo. “Most pokemon these days are lost.”

“Are they?” He glanced back at the town and made a thoughtful noise, before returning to Cleo. “You two don’t look very lost. You seem to know where you’re going.”

Cleo blinked a couple of times, then sighed. “I give up. You’re not making any sense. Just give back what you stole from me, and we’ll be on our way.”

The whimsicott scratched his fluffy head. “Okay. I’ll give it back, but… can you please help me?”

“That depends,” said Cleo. “You said you need that money pouch, so I’m going to hazard a guess you don’t have anything on you?”

“Nope!” He shook his head sadly. “Just fluffy little me.”

He reached into his cottony down and pulled out Cleo’s brown money pouch. He tossed it towards her, sending it straight through the bubble and into her waiting paws. Immediately, Cleo dropped her psychic and the whimsicott dropped onto his bottom with a grunt.

He stood up and dusted down his behind. “So… are you going to help me?”

“Sorry.” Cleo stuffed her pouch back into her bag and marched past him with Spark on her shoulder. “I don’t help strange pokemon, especially not if they’ve just robbed me. You don’t know who to trust in this day and age.”

“But you can trust me.” He trotted to keep up with her. “I just want you to keep me company for a while.”

“Company?” Cleo twirled on the spot to look back at him.

“Yes!” he said with a smile.

“I’m afraid I don’t do that either.” She turned and marched away, picking up pace to try and lose him.

“Why not?” he asked.

“Because you never know who’s going to turn around and stab you in the back.”

“Or steal from you,” Spark added. “Or ‘switcheroo’.”

“Oh.” The whimsicott looked downcast. “But I gave it back, right?”

“Sure,” said Cleo. “But you wouldn’t have needed to if you hadn’t stolen it in the first place.”

“Well you have my full trust that I won’t do it again!” he said, rushing to keep up with them. “And I won’t stab you in the back either. My claws aren’t even that sharp!” When Cleo didn’t respond, he went on, “I’ll just follow you. You won’t even know I’m here! My name’s Mischief by the way. What’s yours?”

Cleo grit her teeth together, biting back the urge to retaliate. Spark sank down on her shoulder so far she couldn’t even make out the bump under her fur. If he was going to insist on following them, the best thing they could do would be to remain silent in the hopes he’d grow bored and go away?


The Outcast town was well behind them now, and the sun was high in the sky, baking the ground and scorching the dry plants. Tough weeds and young trees rose around them, casting shadows that provided some temporary relief from the sun. The ground had grown much more hostile, hard and rocky with large jagged crags that rose up around them, shoved out of place by trees and brambles that had exploded through once-small cracks. Tufts of grass sprouted along stretches of the rugged landscape, dotted by delicate wildflowers that struggled against thorny brambles.

Spark poked her head out of Cleo’s fur and twisted to look behind them. “We’re still being followed…”

“I’m aware.” Cleo didn’t look back, not wanting to prompt conversation with their tag-a-long thief.

“Yes, but I’m getting hungry,” said Spark, “and I’d really like to stop soon for lunch.”

Cleo sighed and slowed to a stop beside a young berry tree. Its sparse branches were rapidly losing their leaves, and overripe berries lay scattered along the floor, many of them dried up from the heatwave. Cleo flopped against its trunk and began rummaging through her satchel.

Spark dropped beside her, glaring at Mischief as he approached them.

“Is it lunch time already?” he asked with a friendly smile. “Time sure flies with company, doesn’t it?” He skipped over with the typical whimsicott gait and examined the canopy.

Cleo and Spark remained silent, cautiously tucking into their berries and deeply wishing the whimsicott would just leave them alone.

He gave a little hop and drifted up towards the branches, scrambling around above their heads. A few yellow leaves drifted down, almost blanketing Spark. They were soon followed by a wrinkly oran berry that hadn’t decided to vacate its home yet. Within moments, Mischief was beside them again, clutching another overripe berry in his paw.

“Argh!” Spark abandoned her lunch and leapt to her feet, sparking vehemently. “I can’t take it anymore! I’m gonna have to say something!”

Cleo watched Spark out of the corner of her eye. Mischief took a wary step back, more-so to avoid the electricity that was dancing over the dry ground.

“Why are you following us around like a growlithe pup?” Spark demanded. “What do you want?!”

Mischief glanced up at the sky then shrugged. “Company.”

Spark placed her paws on her hips. “Seriously?!”

“I think what Spark is trying to say,” said Cleo slowly, “is that first you rob us, and then you follow us around claiming to be lonely. It doesn’t make any sense.”

“Well…” Mischief scratched his fluffy head and leant back against the slender trunk of a young tree. “You see… thieving isn’t really my style. At least, I don’t think it is. I didn’t like it, anyway. It felt wrong, and you two are really unhappy about it so… I’m gonna guess it’s bad?”

“Of course it’s bad!” Spark snapped. “A hatchling could’ve told you that much!”

Mischief just nodded and juggled his berry between both paws.

Cleo inclined her head on one side. “So you’ve never stolen anything before today?”

“I don’t think so,” he said. “I mean… you see, I don’t really know why I am, to be honest. I just woke up outside this morning. Around here, actually.” He waved a paw at their immediate surroundings. “I think… I’m lost. I dunno…”

Cleo and Spark stared at him, dumbfounded. Something was very off about this whimsicott. A lot of pokemon slept outside (although it wasn’t recommended given the state of the world) but the more he said, the more strange he seemed.

“Where are you from?” Cleo ventured.

“Oh that I know!” Mischief’s face lit up with a smile. “I’m from the Clean Place!”

Cleo and Spark blinked.

“The what?” Spark asked.

“The Clean Place!” he repeated. “They were really nice there! Those I remember, anyway. Although I only remember being surrounded by other pokemon, and called Mischief. Then I woke up here.” He waved at the ground again.

“You woke up here?” Cleo pointed at the floor between her feet. “This spot, right here?”

“Kind of.” Mischief extended his arm towards the surrounding rugged ground. “I woke up, then headed towards the town because there were pokemon there and I was hungry. Although this tree has berries.” He looked up at the branches above Cleo’s head then took a bite out of his oran berry, sending tangy juices over his chin.

“So where is this Clean Place?” Cleo asked.

“I don’t know,” he answered. “I’d never been outside. At least… I don’t think I did. I really can’t remember.”

A brief silence washed over them, broken only by Mischief slurping berry juices off his paws.

Spark looked up at Cleo and said in a hushed whisper, “I think he’s had his memory wiped.”

Cleo shook her head. “He remembers too much for that.” She turned back to the whimsicott. “Mischief… your story doesn’t settle well with me. But I’m starting to think you’re telling the truth.”

“Of course I am,” he said. “Why would I lie?” He then inclined his head on one side and his eyes became distant. “At least… I don’t think I’m lying.”

“Your memories seem to have been tampered with. Can you remember any pokemon from this Clean Place?”

He shook his head. “Sorry. All their faces are blurry. But I remember they were nice to me! And excited, although I can’t remember why.”

“This just cements my fears,” said Cleo. “Why would someone want to tamper with your memories?”

Mischief finished licking his paws clean then gave another shrug. He then dropped to all fours and began examining the berries on the floor.

Spark sighed into her lunch and looked up at Cleo. “You’re thinking of helping him, aren’t you?”

“Not so much ‘helping’,” Cleo replied quietly as she watched Mischief sample one of the dried and rotten berries with some level of disgust. “But I think it would be a good idea to have him with us.”

Spark crinkled her nose in a frown. “Why?”

“So we know where he is,” said Cleo. “I have a funny feeling…” She scratched her head and sighed. “Mischief, if you really want company, then you can tag along with us for a while.”

He stood up and beamed at them. “Really? You’re going to be my friends?”

Spark scoffed a little too loud.

“That’s stretching it a bit.” Cleo gathered up her bag and lowered an arm for Spark to climb back onto her shoulder. The dedenne stuffed the rest of her oran into her cheek pouches before scampering up onto her usual perch. Cleo then turned back to Mischief. “Let’s just say ‘companion’ for now, okay?”

“Okay, Companion For Now!” He bounced lightly on his feet. “So where are we going?”

“Spark and I are on Guild Business,” said Cleo.

“Important Guild Business,” Spark said, puffing out her chest.

“You can follow us for a bit,” said Cleo, “but we’ll part ways when we reach the moors. Maybe you’ll regain your memories before then and can return home.”

“That would be nice,” he said. “But if we’re going to be Companions For Now, I need to know your names. You know mine, I’m Mischief. You are Spark and…” He pointed from Spark then to Cleo.

Cleo grimaced. She hadn’t been planning on giving out their names. “It’s Cleo.” She moved past Mischief to follow the dirt track towards the moors. “If you’re going to tag along, then you’ll need to keep up. We’re on a tight schedule, and we won’t be slowing down for you.”

“You already know I’m quick on my feet!” he said as he skipped lightly after them. “I mean, you had trouble catching me before, right? Wow, I think this is gonna be fun!”

Spark tensed and swished her long tail. “I’m beginning to think Mischief is less his name and something the Clean Place called him for being a nuisance.”

“Ooh look! There’s more berries over here!” Mischief skipped away from them to gather up some fallen berries from beneath a razz bush. Each one had clearly seen better days, and left a purple residue on his paws. “Would you like me to gather some for you?”

“No, no…” Spark’s nose crinkled with distaste. “We’re really fine.”

Cleo grimaced and lowered her head into her collar. If Tinker could see her now, the meowstic who refused to take on an extra companion, he’d roll onto his back laughing.
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I should've reviewed the second chapter days ago, but things got in the way but here I am now.

This was a really fun chapter for me to read personally, and we also got a bit of worldbuilding in how local trades worked and their currency, and we also got introduced to a brand new character.

Mischief is honestly such a lovable riot. When it was revealed he was the thief, I was expecting him to be well... mischievous, but he turned out to be a fluffy goofball who just kinda clung to Cleo and Spark.

I wonder how he lost his memories and where the clean place really is and whether it even exists to begin with. I look forward to learning more about this enigmatic fella and what kind of adventure he's probably going to end up pulling Cleo and Spark into.
Chapter 3


*Crazy Absol Noises*
Behind a laptop, most likely with tea
Mischief is honestly such a lovable riot. When it was revealed he was the thief, I was expecting him to be well... mischievous, but he turned out to be a fluffy goofball who just kinda clung to Cleo and Spark.

I wonder how he lost his memories and where the clean place really is and whether it even exists to begin with. I look forward to learning more about this enigmatic fella and what kind of adventure he's probably going to end up pulling Cleo and Spark into.
I'm glad you like Mischief! =D I love his naivety and goofyness XD Answers will come in time, and I hope you enjoy his antics as the story unfolds.

3 - Noivern at Noon​

A soft breeze rustled the trees, whipping up the dry leaves and whisking them through the canopy. Cleo’s ear twitched towards them, and she sniffed the air cautiously. An impulse. She gave a huge, loud yawn and continued tucking away her tent. It was nothing more than a blue sheet coated with combee wax for weatherproofing, but, with the help of a low tree branch to toss it over, it did the job.

As she lifted it off the floor, she spotted Spark lying on her back in the debris. Cleo gave the dedenne a nudge with her foot, eliciting a disgruntled grunt.

Spark swatted with her paw and cracked one eye open. “Cut it out, Cleo.” She promptly rolled over and tugged a leaf over herself.

“Come on, Spark.” Cleo yawned again. “We have to move.”

“Urgh, why? I didn’t sleep a wink.”

“Neither did I.” Cleo cast a glance over her shoulder.

Mischief was crouched beside a brook, scooping up water to throw over his head, and scrubbing his face with his paws. They hadn’t managed to lose the whimsicott. The small group had been forced to camp out, taking turns to keep watch. But with a suspicious pokemon tagging along, neither Cleo nor Spark had got a wink of sleep. A surprise, given Spark usually conked out like a light. Mischief had offered to keep first watch, allowing the two girls to sleep before taking over. But Cleo had been unwilling, feigning sleep to keep an eye on him. Even after she and Spark took their turns, neither could rest thinking he might be plotting something. His ‘damaged memories’ could easily be a ruse.

Cleo tossed her satchel over her shoulders and joined the whimsicott by the brook. She dropped to her knees and took a good long drink before copying him and giving her tired eyes a rinse. A loud, squeaky yawn beside her indicated Spark had decided it was a good idea, and the way she flopped onto the bank gave Cleo a start, bracing herself to whisk the dedenne out of the brook. But Spark didn’t fall in. She wrapped her tail around a tough reed stem and gulped noisily, her head almost entirely submerged in the shallow water.

Mischief let out a satisfied sigh and stood up, drying his paws on his stomach. “Well I feel refreshed! How about you?”

Cleo bristled. Would it really be bad Guild etiquette to blast Mischief to the other side of the brook with her psychic?

She stood and flicked water off her paws before turning to address him. But she was cut off when he gasped.

“Yikes!” he said. “You look older! What happened?!”

Cleo’s ears hummed with repressed psychic energy and a canine poked from her lips. “We move. Now.”

She turned sharply to march away, leaving him to follow behind.

Spark scurried along beside her feet, casting a sharp glance back. “I can shock him if you want?”

“No, leave it,” Cleo muttered. “If he really does have some level of amnesia, then I can let that comment slide.”

Spark grunted at that and scrambled up onto Cleo’s shoulder. But not without another glare back at Mischief. If he noticed, he didn’t say anything.

The pair pressed on, desperate to reach New City. They were almost at the Moorlands Forest, a huge spread of trees that went on for miles. Ordinarily, Cleo would want to move in silence, but it was impossible with Mischief’s ramblings. Random ‘knowledge’ about berries and bark, and whatever else caught his eye. Stuff that she’d expect a hatchling to come out with. At one point, she was pretty certain he’d wittered on about an oddly shaped cloud. Once they reached the forest, his constant ramblings would become a beacon to any waiting Darkness.

Her eyes flit about the sky and she slowed, creeping towards the thick trees ahead of them. She paused, catching a raised eyebrow off Mischief.

“This is the Moorlands Forest,” she said quietly. “We have to be very quiet in here.”

He looked up at the dark trees and nodded, as if he’d completely understood. She hoped desperately he had. If any of Hydreigon’s troops were lurking inside, they’d have all ears and eyes open. And they’d hesitate at nothing to attack. Cleo was not in any shape or mood to fight.

She shook her head and ducked into the trees. Darkness enveloped them as the canopy blocked out most of the sunlight. The forest was yet to shed all its leaves, but the floor was already blanketed with them. They crunched beneath their feet, and the occasional twig snapped. Each one put Cleo’s fur on end, and Spark tensed on her shoulder, poking her head out to twitch her nose at the air. Cleo trod lightly, trying to avoid making too much noise.

Mischief, however, trampled along behind them, his usually light footwork sounding deceptively loud as the finest of twigs snapped beneath his feet. Cleo gave a glance back to berate him, but he stared at his feet, his expression calculating. Cleo’s lip twisted and she bit back her retort. It didn’t seem like he was deliberately trying to get them attacked, but…

A branch ahead of them bucked and swayed and she tensed, fixing it with wide eyes. A flutter of wings broke the air, and a pair of pidgey took off to the east, their necks sporting matching blue scarves. Outcasts. Probably looking for New City.

She let out a sigh of relief and forced herself on. Straight ahead. Keep heading north, and they should reach it by the time the sun was high above them.

New City… what was she meant to do with Mischief when they got there? She grit her teeth and balled her paws into fists. She couldn’t take him inside, not without clearance. It was much too risky. Guild members couldn’t even breath the name ‘New City’ outside. Its very existence was kept secret to all except those who inhabited it. Mischief could easily be an infiltrator or a spy, sent by Heretics, or even Hydreigon, to fool the Outcasts and feed back their secrets. If the Outcasts’ top-secret safe-haven was leaked, their last swing at an attempt to recover, then that would spell disaster for all who were left.

No, they’d need to find a way to lose Mischief before they got there. Make sure he was okay and send him on his way. All he’d wanted was company, or so he claimed. If his memories didn’t return, then he’d be left to deal with it on his own. She’d just have to hope he survived.

The Clean Place… what was that? It didn’t sound like any location she knew of, although the name he’d given it was vague. ‘Clean’ could be anywhere, provided those who cared for the place put the effort in. Even New City, an underground location, was kept clean.

An odd sound snapped her out of her thoughts. It wasn’t so much a sound as a sensation, pushing every single hair on end. It thrummed through her body, shaking her very bones. She froze, turning her eyes to the canopy. It was growing stronger, causing the very branches to tremble. Now she could hear it. A deep, pulsing noise. Rapid, like the frantic pecking of a pikipek.

She knew that noise.

“You have to be kidding me.” She threw her arms out to the side, stopping Mischief before he could overtake her. “Get to cover! Now!”

His eyes widened and he stared at her as she ushered him off the path. “Cover?”

“Yes! Hide!”


She shoved him ahead of her, and he went sprawling into a thorn bush. He whined with protest and stood, dragging fine thorns from his shoulder. Cleo didn’t care. It was better to be pricked by a few thorns than face the nightmare that was descending on the forest.

The pulsing noise pressed at her ears, causing her to squeeze them shut with both paws. Frantic cawing had joined it, just audible over the hum. She could make out the oily black wings of hundreds of murkrow as they shot over the canopy. Each one heading north, the same way they were.

A dark shadow followed after them, drawing across the floor. Huge, wide wings that were held steady, occasionally flapping as their owner forced themselves on.

Then they did what Cleo feared. They faltered.

Beating steadily, whipping up debris as that awful noise passed over the forest floor. She could feel it beating down on her, taking in her size and posture and feeding that information back to the dragon hovering above them.

She could see it now, just through the branches. The purple and black scaly body, long whip-like tail, and two huge disks that formed its ears.

A noivern. What was one of those doing out during daylight? They usually stalked the night, picking off their targets. No one survived an encounter with a noivern. All that was passed back to the Outcasts were tales. Horrible tales, and she didn’t want her or Spark to become one.

They’d just have to sit still and hope it passed. Hope that it hadn’t spotted them.

That hope was rapidly failing the longer it hovered there, surrounded by a growing army of curious murkrow flocking into the trees. Their heads twitched side to side as they aimed their beady eyes towards the forest floor, searching the foliage for whatever had piqued the noivern’s interest.

A deep chuckle left the dragon’s throat, and he lowered himself onto one of the large branches. “I’m right.” Steadying himself with his wing-claws, he leaned forwards, aiming his echolocation into the bramble. “There’s some little pokemon down here.”

The murkrow broke out into excited caws, rustling their feathers and scurrying side to side along their perches. Yet more joined them, scrambling to fit amid their kin.

Cleo’s blood turned to ice in her veins. Say nothing. Don’t make a sound. Don’t even move. She glanced Mischief beside her, but he was staring up at the dragon in transfixed awe. He was breathing heavily, his fine brown fur on end.

The noivern squinted his yellow eyes as he strained to see in the sunlight. But he still found them, his pupils dilating with excitement. His pink tongue poked out and flicked across his lips, and Cleo could make out two rows of sharp teeth.

“I thought this place was empty.” His voice came out as a purr, but it was amplified by his huge, dish-like ears. “But I guess I was wrong. We’ve found ourselves some stragglers.”

One of the murkrow waved a wing towards Cleo. “This one has a Guild badge.”

“Guild members?” The noiven threw his head back and laughed, causing the trees to shake. Once he’d regained himself, he sneered at the Outcasts. “I guess you’re out causing more trouble for Hydreigon, eh? Well, I think you two will make tasty little hostages.”

Two? Cleo glanced between Mischief and the dedenne on her shoulder. Had he overlooked Spark? Unless… She edged away from Mischief.

That was it. All the noivern needed. He shot from the branch and spread his claws, snatching at her. She rolled and uncurled her ears, firing a blast of psychic at the dragon.

It struck his underbelly, sending him crashing back into the canopy. Branches shattered, raining down splinters onto them. One bough smashed down from above him, but he slipped away, narrowly avoiding it. Several of the murkrow weren’t so fortunate, however. They lay crumpled and broken beneath it, their beaks open in a permanent silent scream.

The flock was in a frenzy, circling above as they looked for a way in. Spark leapt around in the branches, discharging her electricity. Stunned, black bodies rained down onto the forest floor.

Cleo leapt aside, bracing herself for the dragon to retaliate. He turned his head to the canopy, a look of surprise on his face. Then he turned his sneer back onto Cleo. Thick smoke curled from his nostrils and a low growl rumbled out between his teeth.

“I’ll make you regret that, little kitty. You, and your friends!” He opened his mouth wide and sent out a purple spray of flames.

Cleo dived out of the way, but stumbled as the hot flames skimmed her tail. She swiftly uncurled her ears, throwing a psybeam at the noivern’s head. He flicked his wings, knocking her attack away and rendering it useless. He lunged at her, his fangs glinting in his mouth. Cleo threw herself sideways, and his jaws snapped shut over thin air.

She sent out another psybeam, striking him in the side of the head. He staggered, twisting on the spot to lash out at her. But his wing struck his own ear, knocking himself off balance.

Mischief shot out from beneath the falling dragon, drifting lightly and twirling as he dodged the noivern’s flailing wings.

Great. If he was just going to stand around, he was going to end up getting hurt. Cleo wasn’t willing to go easy on the noivern for his sake, otherwise they’d all be killed.

She shook her head and rushed between him and the noivern, throwing Mischief aside.


Spots danced across Cleo’s eyes as the noivern’s wing struck her across the face. She flew backwards, landing on something soft. Her heart froze and she looked back, expecting to see black feathers. But instead she saw brown and cream fur. Mischief lowered her to the floor and stepped over her, his claws twitching as he stared up at the bat-like dragon. The noivern clawed at its face where a soft, green shimmer faded away. Evidence it had been suddenly struck by an unexpected elemental attack.

“You’re not being very nice,” said Mischief.

The noivern jerked his head back as his eyes widened. He chuckled, lowering his wings. Then he threw his head back and laughed, causing what remained of the murkrow to join him.

“Nice?!” He snapped a glare back onto Mischief. “I don’t do ‘nice’, CottonPuff. Not to you Outcasts.”

“Well I’m not about to let you hurt my friends anymore!”

Cleo stared at Mischief, dumbfounded. Spark stood in the branches above him, her body covered with red welts where the murkrow had got in some lucky shots. This could only end badly. What was he thinking?

“I was gonna take you all as hostages,” said the noivern. “But now I think I’ll kill you all right here! Then… I’ll have a little feast.” He inclined his head on one side and grinned. “I quite like my grass-types roasted.”

He opened his mouth wide, and a torrent of purple flames spewed out, engulfing the whimsicott. Cleo let out a yell, unable to close her eyes. This was her fault. She’d let him follow them, rather than sending him back to that town. If she hadn’t-

The flames petered out, and a look of satisfaction crossed the noivern’s face. Then it fell as his jaw went slack.

Mischief stood there, completely unharmed. He looked down at his body, then up at the dragon. He didn’t look surprised, or confident. Instead, he threw his paw and sent a glowing green energy ball at the noivern’s face. It struck him on the chin, dazing him for a fraction of a second.

He shook his head and fixed his glare back onto Mischief. The whimsicott had adopted a battle stance, bouncing lightly from foot to foot.

“Very well,” the noivern muttered. “We’ll do this the easy way.”

A deep rumble left his throat, filling the entire forest. His ears began to vibrate, amplifying the sound even further. The air filled with flapping wings and frantic caws as what was left of the murkrow fled from the canopy.

Cleo closed her eyes and retreated into the bramble. This was it. No one survived a fight with a noivern. All that would be left of them would be scattered throughout the forest.

The noise pressed down on her ears, shaking her bones. She clenched her teeth and dug her claws into the soil.

It stopped as suddenly as it had started.

When she opened her eyes, the dragon was recoiling backwards. Spark let out an exclamation of surprise as she watched, standing on tiptoes on a high branch.

The noivern righted himself, beating the air with his wings. He swooped towards Mischief for a counter attack, but the whimsicott leapt back, twirling in the air. A bright flash of purple and pink light washed over the dragon, blasting him back the way he’d come. He landed in a crumpled heap on the forest floor.

Cleo’s amber eyes widened. What on earth was going on?

The murkrow, seeing their leader had taken a nasty hit, shot back down through the canopy like oily darts. Their talons spread, and beaks wide open, they aimed their attacks right at Mischief. He twirled towards them, catching them in his dazzling light attack. Each one struck by it dropped like ripe berries. Those left rethought their actions and turned back towards the canopy.

The murkrow gone, Mischief turned his attention back to the noivern. The dragon scrambled to his feet, his mouth opening and closing as he tried to work out how on earth the tables had turned so suddenly. A look of terror filled his eyes and he inched back from Mischief.

Cleo crept from the bramble, watching intently. A quick glimpse of Mischief’s face answered her unasked question as to what had unnerved the dragon. A creepy grin had replaced the whimsicott’s usually docile smile. A chuckle shook his body, then he leapt straight at the noivern, striking him in the chest.

The noivern fell backwards, flailing his wings. His teeth snapped at Mischief, falling short. The dragon was pinned beneath the whimsicott’s frantic paws. Each one struck the dragon repeatedly as Mischief laughed like something gone wrong. He was oblivious to the wings beating at him, trying to dislodge him. He struck the dragon on the chest, nose, neck, head, ears. Bloody welts rose where his claws scraped, and deep bruises appeared beneath the dragon’s scales.

Orange flames spewed from the noivern’s mouth, singing Mischief’s fluffy fur and lighting the canopy aflame. He didn’t care. He just continued laughing. Shrill hysterical laughter that chilled Cleo to the core. Smoldering leaves fell down around them, and Cleo’s heart sank as she looked over at the burning branches. The dragon was trying to take them all with it.

She rushed towards Mischief, barking at him to stop. But her pleas fell on deaf ears. His orange eyes were frenzied, and that sinister grin was still on his face. His paws were coated with blood, which spattered his entire body as he continued to pulverise the noivern.

The dragon’s attacks grew weaker until his wings fell uselessly at his sides. His head flopped to the floor as his eyes rolled back, and blood trickled from his mouth as he gave one final breath.

“Mischief… Enough.” Cleo reached out a trembling paw to the still-frenzied whimsicott. “Stop! It’s over…”

Spark crept along the branches above her, cautiously dodging the smoldering leaves. They needed to get out of the forest, and alert the Guild before the entire place went up in flames. If it spread across the Moorlands, then the pokemon sheltered beneath it may be in trouble.

The noivern was barely recognisable. Cleo couldn’t help but feel sorry for the dragon. Mischief refused to let up, lashing at the fallen noivern’s face.

“Mischief!” she snapped. “Stop! Please!”

He jerked his head towards her, fixing her in that sinister grin. Her heart froze and she took a step back. He shot from the dragon’s body like a furry cannonball, knocking her nose over tail into the ferns. All wind left her body as he bounced onto her chest, his paws raised to lash her face. There was that laughter again, his eyes blazing with blood-lust.


A jolt of electricity coursed through his body, and he spasmed, falling off her. Cleo leapt to her feet and stood, ears humming, ready to blast him.

When his orange eyes met hers, she saw what she could only describe as madness. He tried to force himself up, but his body jerked as Spark’s thunderwave took over him. In a few moments, that madness melted away into confusion. He opened his mouth as if he were about to say something.

It never came.

All strength seemed to leave his body, and he collapsed into the undergrowth.


Mew specialist
Whoa, things sure escalated pretty quickly this chapter. It got out of hand pretty fast with Mischief going all sicko mode on the Noivern.

Past chapters gave me an impression that the path leading to New City was an uncharted territory that none of Hydras troops knew the way to, but it seems it's still possible to encounter his scouts on the path. I imagine that won't bode well for New City, and their secrecy may end sooner or later if they're not extra careful.

Though Noivern was trying to take them hostage at first, I wonder if it was to know the location of the guild as it doesn't seem like they know New City even exists. Good thing he failed by getting beaten to death by the most adorable looking maniac in town 🤣.

Another fun chapter. I look forward to next week's. Here's hoping Mischief can explain what happened back there and if Cleo and Spark won't eliminate him just to be on the safe side. Though he technically saved their lives, so who knows?


golden scars
hi there, here on chapter one for catnip!

I admit when I read the summary I expected something super YA-dystopia and dark (which is honestly my guilty pleasure so i was still pretty excited), but I was surprised at how light-hearted this first chapter was! I liked how you set up the characters very vividly from the onset; I left having a pretty good impression of Cleo, Spark, Tinker, and Harbinger, which is a lot to establish in the first chapter. I think their dialogue flowed really well and in general I liked all their interactions.

Sometimes I feel like some of your sentences could be combined to make things flow a little better -- take the first paragraph for example:
Barely a sound rose from the shadows cast by the trees as the setting sun stretched its dwindling rays through the canopy of the winding woods. Just the soft sound of crunching leaves and brittle twigs as Cleo trudged through the undergrowth, keeping her wits about her as any sensible meowstic should. Every confident step was soft and calculated to avoid drawing attention from the wood’s inhabitants, which were few and far between.
First line establishes that it's quiet, and the sun is setting. Second line establishes that there's just very soft sounds (re-iterating that it's quiet), and then we see our main character. Third line establishes that she's being quiet on purpose, because being quiet is good. Almost all of the vital information of this paragraph is actually in the last line -- I think you could rephrase it to something like "Cleo's confident steps were soft and calculated to avoid drawing attention from the wood's inhabitants, which were few and far between." Then you could add some of the extra details back in, like the crunching leaves and brittle twigs (although that seems like a contradiction to the quiet! and cats can be practically soundless), but I do think it helps to set the scene here by having some of the more relevant information first instead of the background sights/sounds.

“My poor stomach thinks you might be wrong.”

“Your poor stomach will just have to trust me.”
Really loved the dialogue here! Went a long way in setting up this duo very strong from the start.

army of jangma-o
I wasn't sure if this was on purpose, since the canon spelling is "jangmo-o"?

They were dragged by strong pokemon, and were designed so those that inhabited them could make a quick getaway. Not every pokemon had warmed to the idea. Too many had been seen being blown away in storms, or dragged away by the Darkness. At least wooden shacks stayed where they were, were easy enough to throw up and tear down if need be, and would even last long enough to be returned to should such times arise.
This, too, is another area where I think some of the sentences could be combined. I liked the ideas that were here in broad strokes (apocalypse is scary! people are adapting), but I also struggled with some of the details because of the order. "designed so those that inhabited them could make a quick getaway" at first gave me the sense that the pokemon inside were making a quick escape from inside of the wagon, but I think you wanted to say that they/their houses could run away very quickly -- but that seemed paradoxical to me, since if the threat is really bad, you probably wouldn't want to saddle yourself with a house, even if it's light.

Tinker rubbed the back of his head as he watched after her. “Food scarcity is becoming a growing problem with the cold season closing in.” He turned back to Cleo and met her eyes. “Be sure to take some supplies with you before you leave.”
A bit of tricky phrasing here as well -- "food scarcity is becoming a growing problem" made me think that Tinker was referring to food in general, instead of food out in the wilds, so when he mentions that they had a good harvest a few lines later I was a bit confused!

“I’m really sorry,” he said. “That was unprofessional of me.”
I liked how you set this conflict up. Cleo and Tinker's reactions here felt very genuine.

Cleo fell silent. She rubbed her paw over her face and sank in her seat. Losing… hadn’t they already lost? The Outcasts, scattered across Estellis, struggling to survive in a world where dragon and dark-type pokemon reigned, ruled over by a horrid pokemon who wanted nothing more than to wipe out every other type completely. No. It was no longer a war. Now it was just survival.
I got varying levels of severity for how dark the environment was here, and it was kind of tricky to gauge how people were actually feeling about this situation. Compare the grimness of "it was no longer a war / now it was just survival" with the relatively lighthearted way that Cleo/Spark treat the weavile earlier, since they're clearly not worried -- as a result, it was hard as a reader to understand how much tension you were trying to build here, how seriously screwed the setting was, etc. The summary made it sound very serious but the tone ended up being very warm.

Tinker made a thoughtful noise. “Because you fear you’ll need to carry them?”

“Exactly. They’d just be a burden.”
For the most part your dialogue read really smoothly, like two friends were talking, but this line felt a bit forced.

Death at the claws of his murkrow flock and weavile fleets, or to be incinerated by flames and dragonfire.
I think "flames and dragonfire" is a bit redundant? I get that on the type-level they're different, but if I'm afraid of being burned by flames or dragonfire I don't really think it makes a difference which is which.

In the doorway of one of the houses stood a zigzagoon on its hind legs, steadying itself with its paw. Clearly trying to imitate its parent.
This was a really cute detail!

The second part with Harbinger was also really fun. I liked the twist you gave -- I thought this was going to be a another misunderstood absol (which I'm always here for tbh), but it wasn't at all! The interpretation that they warn about disasters and then, out of spite, cause them anyway when they aren't listened to was a really fun chicken-and-egg idea, and I really like how you set up that scene. We get the sense that something is going to go wrong, there's bad things happening, and then we realize! oh shit! the viewpoint character is going to cause it. Really fun. I just wish it had a bit more of a direct tie-in to the first half of the chapter? I did appreciate the concrete references to what kinds of disasters were going to befall people on the outside of the safe regions, but at the same time it felt a bit disjoint from Cleo's struggle bits, both in terms of setting/tone and also the character realizations that they're making -- almost like it's an entirely different chapter.

All that aside, this was a really fun story about a cat and mouse haha! The characters were definitely my favorite part, and while for me the tone of the world was a bit more vague, I really enjoyed reading about it!
Chapter 4


*Crazy Absol Noises*
Behind a laptop, most likely with tea
Past chapters gave me an impression that the path leading to New City was an uncharted territory that none of Hydras troops knew the way to, but it seems it's still possible to encounter his scouts on the path.
Hydreigon's troops are - usually - pretty much everywhere. Particularly the more occupied areas, as he tries to spread his reign. New City is pretty hidden, as you'll soon find out ;)

I admit when I read the summary I expected something super YA-dystopia and dark (which is honestly my guilty pleasure so i was still pretty excited), but I was surprised at how light-hearted this first chapter was!
Oh, it gets dark. I try to keep some light-heartedness in my writing. I know from experience I struggle to write really dire, dark stuff as it emotionally affects me. Which is why, as of now, there is no third instalment to my cyberpunk-dystopian System universe. I had to set it aside, sadly.

Sometimes I feel like some of your sentences could be combined to make things flow a little better -- take the first paragraph for example:
Thanks for pointing this out. That opening paragraph received a lot of positive praise in the past, so I decided to keep it in. I'm a bit reluctant to change it, but I'll keep what you said in mind =)

Really loved the dialogue here! Went a long way in setting up this duo very strong from the start.
Thanks =D I love writing these two, and their friendship is very warm and sweet. Spark's comic relief is so much fun, too.

I wasn't sure if this was on purpose, since the canon spelling is "jangmo-o"?
Totally accidental. I often check Pokemon spellings, but this one slipped by me!

A bit of tricky phrasing here as well -- "food scarcity is becoming a growing problem" made me think that Tinker was referring to food in general, instead of food out in the wilds, so when he mentions that they had a good harvest a few lines later I was a bit confused!
They may have had a good harvest, but the next one will be a long time off. Wandering pokemon will struggle to find food, but the Guild has a good supply (which will most likely be rationed so it lasts!)

I liked how you set this conflict up. Cleo and Tinker's reactions here felt very genuine.
Thank you. Their relationship was re-worked for the re-write so I'm glad this came across. He was originally much warmer to her, and sang her praises a lot. I wanted to change that.

Compare the grimness of "it was no longer a war / now it was just survival" with the relatively lighthearted way that Cleo/Spark treat the weavile earlier, since they're clearly not worried -- as a result, it was hard as a reader to understand how much tension you were trying to build here, how seriously screwed the setting was, etc. The summary made it sound very serious but the tone ended up being very warm.
I had a think over this after reading this part of your review. When I first began writing this story, it was heavily influenced by JRPGs and the anime series 'Slayers'. (Which is why Spark, in my headcanon, is voiced by the same actress who does Lina Inverse XD ). Spark and Cleo are pretty confident, but throw them in a situation where they are overwhelmed our outmatched by a foe and things can take a dire turn. Cleo knew Spark could handle those weavile, even if she was at a type disadvantage. Never call Spark 'short'! XD It pays to be cautious, however.

The second part with Harbinger was also really fun. I liked the twist you gave -- I thought this was going to be a another misunderstood absol (which I'm always here for tbh), but it wasn't at all! The interpretation that they warn about disasters and then, out of spite, cause them anyway when they aren't listened to was a really fun chicken-and-egg idea, and I really like how you set up that scene. We get the sense that something is going to go wrong, there's bad things happening, and then we realize! oh shit! the viewpoint character is going to cause it. Really fun.
Ahh, I'm glad you liked this! Harbinger has a lot of backstory. His part isn't especially big in the beginning, but you'll learn a lot more about him as time goes on!

Thanks for the reviews guys!

4 - A Worrying Development​

Flames crackled across the canopy and crept over the leaves, gradually encroaching on the fallen noivern. Cleo and Spark had swiftly moved away from it, dragging Mischief’s unconscious body with them. The pair were stunned, unable to form words. Unable to take their eyes off the dragon. Both of them weren’t entirely sure of what they’d just witnessed. A whimsicott taking down a noivern? It was impossible! Grass attacks were feeble against dragon-types at best. And what was that purple light? The closest thing Cleo could liken it to was her psychic, but it was much too dazzling for that.

Spark stepped back from embers that had claimed the dry leaves a couple of feet away. “I think we need to get outta here. I don’t wanna be caught in another forest blaze.”

“Agreed.” Cleo uncurled her ears and trapped Mischief in a purple bubble. “Hopefully the Guild will send some water-types to deal with this blaze before it gets out of control.”

“Yeah, but uhm… wait a second.” Spark scratched her nose as she watched Mischief drift ahead of them. “Why are you bringing him?”

“I don’t feel comfortable leaving him here,” Cleo replied. “What if those murkrow wake up before he does? It’s hardly fair.”

“I get that, Cleo. But we can’t take him with us. It’s against regulations.”

“You saw what he just did,” said Cleo. “I think Tinker will want to see him. In fact, scratch that. I think Tinker would be very excited to meet him.”

Spark scoffed and scampered on ahead of her. “Hardly. Tinker doesn’t strike me as the social type. I mean, he stays holed up in his office most of the time, and rarely ventures outside. I don’t think I’ve ever seen him on the road travelling from Hall to Hall. He just… shows up.”

Cleo made a thoughtful noise and watched the whimsicott bob freely in her psychic bubble. Spark had a point, but Cleo couldn’t help but think Mischief would intrigue him. Any pokemon that could withstand a dragon pulse without even taking any damage? It was unheard of. Was there a possibility he was actually immune to such an attack, like the dark-types were immune to her psychic?

No. No, it couldn’t be. How would that even be the case? New typings didn’t just crop up like that. Maybe whatever had taken over him had merely rendered him unable to feel pain.

She shook her head and picked up her pace, almost taking over Spark. They needed to get back, before the noivern’s reinforcements showed up. Some of those murkrow had escaped, she was certain of it. Word would spread, and soon the Moorlands Forest would be teeming with the Darkness.

Spark scampered over the grass beside Cleo’s heel. “What happened to him, anyway? Why did he turn on you like that?”

“I don’t know,” Cleo answered. “Whatever it was, it didn’t last.”

“Sure, cos he passed out,” Spark scoffed. “What if he wakes up and lashes out at us again, huh?”

Now they were out in the open, Spark wasn’t willing to elaborate, but Cleo knew what she was getting at. If he turned hostile in New City, then so many pokemon would be at risk. Cleo considered just leaving him. Hiding him somewhere so he could come-to in safety. Then he’d be on his own, and they’d be rid of the weird pokemon. But it didn’t settle well with her. Not after what she’d seen. Something was screaming at her to take him to New City. That if she didn’t, they’d be losing something crucial.

Besides, Spark clearly hadn’t seen what Cleo had. That look of confusion on Mischief’s face, right before he lost consciousness. It was as if he was two different pokemon trapped in one body. One that was wild and reckless, and the other some lost and confused drifter. Perhaps it had something to do with his memory loss?

Despite the high sun, the grass spreading across the rocky Moorlands felt cool beneath her paws. She could still hear the crackle of flames from the forest over the hum in her ears, and the smell of smoldering bark made her nose crinkle. A few voices rose above the flames, and she ventured a glance back. She couldn’t see them, but New City’s aquatic soldiers had already noticed the blaze. Two spouts of water reached over the canopy, fighting back the flames. Relief flooded through her and she turned back the way they were heading.

Cleo looked up to take in the landscape. It wasn’t long now. Brambles scrambled over the Moorlands, their branches picked clean by the harvesters. All that remained were jagged leaves. Not so much as a single rotten razz berry lay on the grass. Beyond them rose the rocky peaks of the Silent Mountains, stretching on for miles and obscuring the view beyond them. The very tips were usually coated with snow, but in the heatwave it had long since melted away.

Cleo gave a quick glance around, making sure there were no lurking pokemon watching them. Then she made for the thickest of the brambles, shoving Mischief ahead of her through the prickles. She ducked in after him, leaving Spark to close the rear. From the outside, it looked like any old bramble bush. But inside was a small, rocky mound with a huge stone disk in the middle of it. It sported a groove shaped like a sun, the perfect fit for her Guild badge. She slotted it inside and turned it anti-clockwise. There was a faint click, then the door slid sideways, grating along its runners. She sent Mischief in first, slipping in after him. The door was on a timer, and didn’t remain open for long. It rolled shut behind her, and Spark let out a small squeak of surprise.

“It almost claimed my tail!” she said, clutching her thin, black tail in both paws.

“Then you should have ridden on my shoulder,” said Cleo.

“I don’t like being so close to your ears when they’re open, Cleo, you know that.” Spark shuddered. “What if I get caught in a crossfire or something?”

The dedenne scampered on ahead of her, bounding down the winding staircase towards the faint light below.

Cleo rolled her eyes and followed after her, keeping Mischief between them. Torches adorned the walls, casting flickering shadows along the dry surface. Eventually the stairs levelled out into a wide tunnel. Voices filled the air, reverberating off the cold walls. Huge, stone arches arced above them every few meters until the tunnel finally opened out into a huge market place.

The place was bustling with pokemon rushing back and forth, visiting the various stalls. Parents holding their hatchlings’ paws or carrying them on their backs, soldiers off-duty as they gathered their meals to take home or nattered with their friends. A few nods were cast in Cleo and Spark’s direction, which were swiftly followed by looks of confusion or curiosity towards the whimsicott bobbing before them. A fallen ally? Or a newcomer she’d been tasked to bring?

“Get your pastries! Bluk berry pastries!”

“This just in! Fire in the Moorlands’ Forest!”

“Recruiting now! Warriors needed in Rock Quarry!”

Cleo slipped past all of the vendors, keeping her focus on her task at paw. Spark couldn’t help but meander to the pastry stall, but when Cleo didn’t stop, she let out a groan of disappointment and followed her towards the tunnels leading off the market.

Due to its confusing layout, each tunnel was clearly marked. The left and right ones lead to the nest rooms, and further along they forked off into two tunnels, one curling further underground. Cleo knew the left one well, given it lead to her and Spark’s home. The other tunnels lead to various locations - a training hall, nursery, school…

The one she wanted lead to the Guild Headquarters. It was home to many facilities. Warrior Team base, item shop, the Guild food hall, the medical ward, and of course Tinker’s office. The latter stood before them at the very end of the tunnel in all its glory.

The wooden door sported a sign that read ‘knock before entering’, so Cleo obliged.(In the past, she’d often ignored it, each time receiving a berating from a disgruntled riolu who was desperately trying to hide his inventions beneath a pile of papers.)

After a brief pause, Tinker replied with a cheerful “Come in!”

“See?” Spark said quietly. “He just… shows up.”

Cleo chuckled at that and nudged the door open. It glided smoothly past Tinker’s ‘organised chaos’. Tinker gave them both a warm smile, but it was swiftly distorted as his eyes flashed with enraged confusion.

“What is this?” He waved a hand at Mischief.

“This-” Cleo dropped the whimsicott unceremoniously onto his untidy floor, “is a fuzzy nuisance.”

Tinker shook his head as he rose to his feet. “I think more of an explanation is in order here, Cleo. You can’t just come dragging random strangers into New City!”

“I’m aware of that,” Cleo retorted.

Spark leapt up onto her shoulder and folded her arms, but she wasn’t sure if the dedenne was on her side or Tinker’s.

“His name is Mischief,” Cleo explained. “He forced himself on us just after we left the other Outcast town to come here.”

Tinker narrowed his eyes at her. “And you brought him here because…?”

“We were attacked by a noivern in the Moorlands Forest,” Cleo explained. “Mischief fought him off. Killed him, actually.”

Tinker’s eyes widened, and he placed a paw on his chair before he lost his footing. He scratched behind one of his ears and looked down at Mischief. “He… this whimsicott… killed a noivern?”

“Not only that,” said Cleo. “He also took a dragon pulse head on and didn’t even flinch.” She met Tinker’s surprised look with a nod. “It just washed over him like water off a ducklett’s back.”

Tinker flopped into his seat and ran his paws over his face. “You’re telling me that this whimsicott withstood a dragon attack? That he was immune to it?”

“I don’t know about ‘immune’, but the possibility did cross my mind.”

“And why is he unconscious?” Tinker asked.

“I was hoping you could tell me that.” Cleo pulled up a stool beside Tinker’s desk. “He seemed to snap when fighting the dragon. He just lost it, and waled on the noivern repeatedly. I think it’s safe to say the noivern never stood a chance…”

Tinker lowered his paws enough to see over them, but he wasn’t looking at Cleo or anyone else. “I’m guessing this is why the forest is ablaze?”

Cleo nodded stiffly. “After he defeated the noivern, he fell unconscious.”

“Nice little dodge there, Cleo,” said Spark. “You’ve completely missed out the part where he attacked you!”

Cleo hissed at Spark, but Tinker leapt up so quickly his chair clattered to the floor.

“He attacked you?!” he barked. “And you brought him here?!”

Cleo sank in her seat and ran her claws between her ears. “He seemed friendly enough beforehand, Tinker. And I wouldn’t have brought him here without good reason!” She waved a paw towards Mischief and met Tinker’s glare with one of her own. “He withstood a dragon pulse! There’s something strange about that, Tinker! No one can! We’ve been looking for a way to recover from the Darkness for years! If he can take down a noivern-”

“He can destroy New City,” Tinker finished.

Cleo’s jaw snapped shut. She had nothing to add to that.

Tinker flopped back into his seat and reached for a brass tube protruding from the wall. “Melody? Could you come in here please?”

“Melody?” Cleo gasped. “You’re calling the nurse?”

“If he’s wounded, he needs seeing to,” said Tinker. “Then after that, he’ll be thoroughly vetted and confined to cells if need be.” He leant back in his seat and shook his head slowly, catching Cleo’s eye. “You’re making some really questionable decisions lately, Cleo.”

She stared down at the whimsicott, her mind replaying that battle and not for the first time. “If it weren’t for him, Spark and I would have both died in that forest.”

Tinker inclined his head on one side.

“It was a noivern,” Cleo went on. “In a way, Mischief actually saved our lives.”

“Then attacked you,” said Tinker.

“He’d lost it,” Cleo explained. “I don’t know what happened to him, but the pokemon that attacked us wasn’t the whimsicott who’d followed us all that way.”

“How can you be so certain?”

“I can’t,” said Cleo. “It’s just a feeling I have.”

“Yeah, I can see that, too,” said Spark. “He was like some kind of wild animal. Not a civilised pokemon at all. He just went nuts.” She paused and huddled down into herself. “I’m still not sure about him, but… Cleo’s right. He did save our lives back there.”

The door creaked open and an audino shuffled inside. She spotted Mischief and stopped beside him. “I assume this is my patient? What happened to him?”

“Exhaustion, I assume,” said Tinker. “Please take him to a private ward and keep him away from others. We don’t know where he’s come from. Also, please don’t be alarmed when I assign guards.”

Melody looked a little taken aback, but said nothing against him. Instead, she gave a curt nod and waved a paw. Mischief was engulfed in yet another purple bubble and carried from the room behind Melody.

“Ahh,” said Spark. “It’s so nice when pokemon can use psychic abilities without risking blasting you with their ears.”

Cleo gave the dedenne a playful shove.

Tinker was still silent, only causing the tension in the air to feel even heavier. Cleo turned her head back towards him, catching his stare. He lowered his paws from his muzzle to absently toy with the everstone hanging around his neck.

“I have a few concerns here, Cleo. I have to tell you.”

“I’m aware,” she said. “I brought a strange pokemon here without first warning you.”

“Not only that,” he said. “But what you’ve described has puzzled me. A pokemon that doesn’t take any damage from a dragon-type attack - at least, no damage we can see, anyway. Also a noivern, a nocturnal dragon, out during the day? Over the Moorlands Forest? Did you happen to notice where he was actually headed?”

“North,” said Cleo. “I’m guessing back towards the Shadow Lands?”

“During the day?” Tinker shook his head. “This doesn’t settle well with me, Cleo. None of our warriors have trouble with noivern during the day. Those who do travel at night take specific training to deal with them, and it usually involves a lot of running and hiding. No one survives an encounter with a noivern at night. During the day, you might stand more of a chance. But… I’m very unsettled by all of this. I want to investigate your friend further.”

“Mischief is not a friend,” said Cleo. “He’s a fuzzy tag-a-long who tried to rob me at the market.”

“So you know nothing about him?” Tinker asked. “No idea where he’s come from? Why he’s following you?”

Cleo and Spark both shook their heads.

“He claims to have no memories at all,” said Cleo. “When we asked him where he came from, all he said was ‘The Clean Place’.”

“The Clean Place?” Tinker scratched his nose and lowered his head in thought. “That doesn’t ring any bells.”

“As for what he wanted,” said Spark. “He just wanted ‘company’ apparently.”

“This just gets more and more strange.” Tinker looked up at them and his expression softened. “Very well. We’ll keep your friend - I mean Mischief - here for the time being while I investigate him. I’ll ask Grey to probe his memories and see if he proves any risk.”

“So we’re off the hook?” Spark asked.

Tinker chuckled and folded his paws together. “Hardly. You two will stay here until we discern whether or not Mischief is a threat.”

Cleo grimaced. Great. So she was really in trouble now.

“You can tell me more about him and your encounter with the noivern later, over dinner.” Tinker turned away from them and reached for a blank sheet of paper. “For now, go and get some rest. The pair of you look positively exhausted.”

Cleo’s eyes widened and she pawed at her face. It wasn’t that obvious, was it?

Spark yawned widely and hopped up onto her shoulder. “Food and sleep. There’s a plan I can get on board with.”


Cleo’s dreams were filled with frightful images - dragons spewing flames over villages, the shadows of other pokemon scattering as screams filled the crimson sky. The faces of pokemon she knew were filled with panic as they fell to the ground, maimed beneath the rending claws of the Darkness. Cleo cowered in a bramble bush as she watched the chaos unfold. Hundreds of dragon pokemon of various species flocked before her, scrambling over the fallen bodies of her comrades. Druddigon, zweilos, garchomp, fraxure… too many to count.

Then something else caught her attention, drawing her eye from the massacre. A scream… no, not a scream. A laugh. Then in the distance she could make out the form of a whimsicott bouncing from dragon to dragon, scattering them like they had the Outcasts. Each dragon was reduced to a blooded mess of shattered flesh and bones, turning the landscape a dreaded scarlet. It snaked and coiled down the rocky hillside like a river, and Cleo staggered back from the bush to avoid it.

“You need to be careful.”

Her head snapped around, and she spotted Mischief leaning against a tree. A lush green thing that looked wildly out of place in the war-torn landscape. Yet she could still hear that hysterical laughter, and the frightful screams as the victims desperately tried to flee to safety.

He nodded back towards it and gave her an unnerving smile. “It might be you next.”

Cleo sat bolt upright, sending her sheet cascading off her body. She could still hear that hysterical laughing, but it faded away into soft snores as the nest-room came into focus. Cleo’s breath came in fitful bursts, and she fought to steady them as she ran her paws over her damp face.

She lay back down on her hay with a flop, and her arm fell over her eyes. Nightmares… She should be used to those by now.

She turned her head towards Spark, who was sleeping on her back with her arms splayed out at her sides. Loud snores unfitting for her small size filled the room, causing a smile to tease the corner of Cleo’s mouth. Regardless, the room felt wildly unwelcome now. Each shadow flickering over the wall from the torchlight outside her door seemed to resemble a dragon or some other pokemon of the Darkness.

And only a short walk away, lying in the medical ward, was the core element of her nightmare.

Someone who she felt should be fighting against the Darkness could well threaten the safety of her friends in New City.

She turned to find a window to give her some idea of what time it was, but the walls were just bare stone. Of course, they were underground. No such thing existed here. She let out another sigh and rubbed her paws over her face. There was no way she wanted to sleep after that nightmare. She knew from experience they just kept coming, repeating themselves unless she took her mind off it. A walk was what she needed.

She clambered from her nest and plodded towards the door.

“Where you goin’?” Spark sat up in her nest, groggily rubbing a paw over her black eyes.

“Just for a walk,” Cleo explained. “You go back to sleep.”

“Iss mornin’?”

Cleo shrugged at that and glanced back into the hallway. “No idea.”

“I’m comin’.” Spark waddled from her nest to join her.

Oh well. The company was welcome. Cleo stooped to scoop up the dedenne in her paws and set her on her shoulder. Spark snuggled into her fur, and almost instantly, soft snores could be heard from Cleo’s ruff. She rolled her eyes and strolled out into the corridor.

As expected, the corridors were void of any other life. Pokemon dozed in their nest-rooms, snoring softly or muttering to themselves. Cleo took comfort from it, assured that they were safe and comfortable. A shadow crossed the wall before her and she froze for a moment until the familiar form of a breloom shuffled by. One of the guards stationed to watch over New City perchance the unspeakable happened. He gave her a friendly nod and continued on his way, not venturing to ask why she was up. Maybe it was later than she thought?

She didn’t know where she was going. She had no destination planned. Just a stroll to clear her head, maybe venture into the market and find one of the news articles to read. Perhaps find the baker setting up stall and take the chance to buy a pastry fresh out of her oven.

So why had she stopped at the elevator to the medical ward?

She let out a sigh of frustration and leant her forehead against the wall. That nightmare had really struck a nerve. It was almost as if she’d made her way here for some level of reassurance.

Reassurance that Mischief was still held securely behind doors, guarded so he couldn’t wreck havoc on the pokemon here. Or was it something else?


She looked up to see Tinker strolling towards her, a look of concern on his face.

“You’re awake?” he asked quietly.

She nodded and pushed herself back from the wall. “I needed a walk.”

“A walk? Or are you visiting your friend in the dead of night?” He cut before her and leant his shoulder against the wall as if to block her entry to the elevator.

Cleo groaned inwardly. So it was still night?

“No,” she said. “I… just happened to stop here.”

Tinker grunted and glanced back at the elevator. “Well, you can rest assured. He’s still out. Melody gave him a sedative, he’ll be out cold until morning.” He stepped inside the wooden box and, much to Cleo’s surprise, gave her a smile. “Would you care to join me? Since you’re awake, I’d like to tell you what I’ve found out about your friend.”

Cleo shifted from foot to foot, and glanced back the way she’d come. She warred with the idea of going back to bed and abandoning her walk, or shrugging off Tinker’s offer to continue her stroll. But curiosity got the better of her and she found herself joining Tinker in the wooden elevator.

He gave her a friendly nod and lowered the box on its pulley system. It didn’t so much as squeak, well oiled to preserve the rest of those who might be recovering in the ward. The tart smell of medicinal berries flowed into the box and it opened up into a wide room. Several nests raised on wooden tables stretched across the room, all empty which was a nice surprise. Two pokemon sat in the far corner by a door, their eyes glinting in the dim light. A pikachu and a growlithe.

Cleo nodded at them, receiving one in return. They must be the guards, although she was surprised Tinker hadn’t assigned more than two.

“I smell berries.” Spark poked her head out of Cleo’s fur and twitched her nose at the air. “Hang on, this isn’t the dinner hall…” She rubbed her eyes and yawned. “What are we doing in here?”

Cleo didn’t answer. She followed Tinker to the back of the room where there were two doors that lead into the private wards. When he opened the one beside the guards, the first thing Cleo noticed was a raised bed where Mischief lay, covered up to his chest with a thin sheet.

Tinker moved to stand beside the bed and motioned Cleo to join him. “You told me of him mentioning a ‘Clean Place’?”

“Yes.” Cleo shifted uneasily beside him, trailing her eyes over the whimsicott. “It puzzled us.”

“Well I think I might have solved that mystery.”

Cleo looked up at Tinker with a start. “How?”

“Simple. Look at this.” The riolu brushed aside the creamy fluff over Mischief’s right shoulder.

Cleo let out a gasp, and Spark had to cover her mouth to stop herself from shouting. There, emblazoned beneath his tan fur, was the black outline of a crescent moon, surrounded by tapering spikes. A crude contradiction to the Outcasts’ sun symbol.

“That’s the Heretic mark,” said Cleo. “So that means-”

“He’s a Heretic?” Tinker nodded slowly. “Yes, it would seem so.”

“But he seemed to have no memories of it,” said Cleo.

“I’m curious about that, too,” said Tinker. “But we won’t know much until Grey probes his mind to find out whether or not he’s telling the truth. As for the Clean Place, that may well refer to one of their many laboratories throughout Estellis.” He let Mischief’s fur fall back into place and turned fully to Cleo. “You recall that pink liquid you took from those weavile?”

Cleo’s eyes widened. “Oh yes! I’d almost forgotten about that.”

“Come to my office.” Tinker placed a paw on Cleo’s back to steer her from the room. “I’ll explain everything there.”

They returned to his office in silence, leaving Cleo and Spark’s minds to reel over what he might have discovered. Was the pink liquid related to Mischief in some way, or was he simply taking out two birds with one stone?

He went into his office first, if only to clear his sketches and notes off the only other stool beside his desk. He fell into his chair and motioned for Cleo to sit.

She obliged, and Spark bailed from her shoulder to perch on the desk.

“That pink liquid,” he began, “has turned out to be pokerus.”

Cleo’s eyes widened again.

“What?!” Spark squeaked. “Isn’t that, like, super rare?!” She turned to Cleo and waved her arms. “Imagine how much we woulda got for that if we’d known?!”

“Unadvised.” Tinker raised a paw to silence the dedenne. “As it turns out, this form of pokerus is a mutated strain.”

“Oh great.” Spark flopped onto her belly. “Way to take the wind outta my sails.”

“What do you mean mutated?” Cleo asked. “Does it only affect dragon and dark-type pokemon?”

“No, it’s worse than that,” Tinker explained. “Whereas pokerus would be a beneficial condition that could help a pokemon to grow stronger, this particular strain pushes a pokemon’s abilities far beyond what it would normally.”

“So why on earth did the weavile have it?” Cleo asked.

“Man, I hope Hydreigon isn’t amassing an overpowered army,” said Spark.

“Let me get a word in?” Tinker shook his head and swivelled his chair towards them. “I had the same concerns as you at first. But Melody ran some tests on Mischief per my request. She found that he is actually infected by this form of pokerus, although it’s not contagious. It would seem that this form of pokerus isn’t contagious at all, actually, which makes me think that this isn’t a final result, and Mischief may be nothing more than a beta-test for this virus. If my theory is right, and going off the evidence I am ninety-five percent certain it is, then this pokerus is being created in a Heretic Laboratory somewhere. Most likely the one your friend has come from - this ‘Clean Place’.”

Cleo was speechless. She stared down at her paws, running Tinker’s words through her mind. Tinker was silent, giving Cleo the chance to find her voice.

“So… that explains why he managed to defeat the noivern?” She looked up at the riolu. “And withstand the dragon pulse?”

“That’s a possibility,” said Tinker. “One I am still musing over. But what this has really told us is that the Heretics may be involved with the Darkness in some way. Maybe they’re testing this pokerus to perfect it, in order to boost the strength of Hydreigon’s army? Or perhaps some of his followers have deviated and are working against him? What, I do not know. But something is going on, and I don’t like it.” He paused and sat back in his seat, idly toying with a quill he’d plucked from the chaos of his desk. “It is a good thing this information has fallen into our laps. It means we can research it, and prepare for the worst should it come to light. I just hope Grey can find something in Mischief’s memories that would point us in the right direction.”

Cleo nodded her head as she let this all sink in. It didn’t settle well with her at all. That nightmare roared to the front of her mind, blinding her for a moment.

Tinker’s voice snapped her out of it. “Can you tell me exactly what happened to Mischief during that fight, Cleo?”

She gave a weak shrug. “I’ve already told you about it.”

“In more detail,” said Tinker. “Did Mischief transform in any way?”

She lifted her paws and shook her head. “Not exactly. He just… well, he looked… deranged.”

Tinker nodded slowly and twirled the quill in his claws. “I am starting to wonder if this strain of pokerus can actually drive a pokemon to madness.”

Cleo looked up at him, meeting his eyes.

“Although I could be wrong,” he said. “His reactions during that battle could have been some kind of external influence. A fight or flight response, perhaps. I’d quite like to know what he remembers of that attack, and quiz him on it.”

“You haven’t had the chance yet?” Cleo asked.

“No. He did come to when Melody was treating him, and he seemed as placid and as friendly, even as innocent, as you described. He never even mentioned the fight in the forest. He didn’t even say anything about the fire, and any pokemon who would have been there would have wanted to know if the blaze had been dealt with. This is what makes me believe it is a triggered response. I’d like to run some tests, but I don’t wish to endanger anyone here in New City.” He paused to take in a long breath, and stared down at his quill. “But what I fear is that what we have in our paws is in fact a biological weapon.”

Cleo stiffened and exchanged glances with Spark.

“I don’t like that,” said Spark. “I don’t like that one bit! What are they doing?”

“I’ve no idea at present.” Tinker tossed the quill back onto his desk. “But I’m avoiding relaying any of this to him until I know fully what it is we are dealing with.” He paused and took in a breath. “Melody did, however, find something on your friend’s fur.”

The tone in Tinker’s voice turned Cleo’s blood to ice. “What was it?”

“A tracking device.” Tinker watched her face turn pale, and steepled his paws together. “Don’t worry. It was destroyed, and it wouldn’t have worked underground anyway. It does mean, though, that whoever sent him has been following his every movement. Until he disappeared off their radar, that is.”

“But…” Cleo’s voice wavered. “If it just vanished here in the Moorlands, wouldn’t they assume there was some underground hideout?”

“You brought him here, Cleo.” Tinker sighed and shook his head. “Besides, this place is inaccessible to anyone who doesn’t possess a Guild badge. With so few pokemon freely coming and going, it won’t be immediately obvious that we’re even here. However, as a precaution, I’ll be increasing guards at every gate.”

Cleo lowered her head into her paws. Did Mischief even know he had pokerus, or was being tracked? Was his innocent act nothing more than a ruse? Urgh, how could she have been so foolish?

No… no one would have left a pokemon in his state in the open like that. He’d have been slaughtered.

“For now, Cleo, I don’t want you to speak to Mischief,” said Tinker. “Not until Grey has investigated him. At the moment, we don’t know what we’re dealing with.”

“And if he proves to be a risk?” Cleo didn’t look up.

“Then he’ll be dealt with the same way we deal with anyone who works with the Darkness.”

Cleo nodded her understanding. Part of her didn’t like it. He’d fought off a noivern. Surely he wasn’t working for the Darkness? Suddenly, she felt very tired.

“What time is it?” she ventured.

“The sun hasn’t risen yet,” said Tinker.

“Then I think I’ll head back to bed.” She rose and lowered her arm for Spark. “Thank you for explaining all this to me. It was… playing on my mind.”

“I can understand that.” Tinker looked up at her, but there was no anger in his eyes. Instead, he looked concerned. “I just want you to know, Cleo, despite what I said, if I was in your situation, I’d have wanted to do the same thing.”

“Wanted to, or would have done?” she asked.

He shrugged and swivelled towards his table. “That’s a tough question, but I think, without any knowledge of who I believed I was saving, I’d have actually done the same. You wanted to rescue another pokemon, and I understand that completely.” He paused and looked away from her. “I’ll see you in the morning.”

Cleo slipped from the room, bidding Tinker ‘goodnight’ as she closed the door.

“That was rather humbling,” said Spark quietly. “But I think he’s still annoyed with you.”

“I can’t say I’m surprised.” Cleo gave one glance back at the closed door and made her way back towards their nest-room. “I’m annoyed with myself.”
Chapter 5 New


*Crazy Absol Noises*
Behind a laptop, most likely with tea
5 - A Lesson in Evolution​

Cleo and Spark were both feeling groggy from a bad night’s sleep, but the breakfast alarm had rang out loud and clear, summoning New City to breakfast. Cleo’s nightmares had been wrought with bloody images of dragons, fire and biological weapons, mixed in with Tinker’s words which warped and twisted until they accused her of bringing disaster on the remaining Outcasts, and the world at large.

By morning, her dreams had become so mixed in with reality, for a moment she wasn’t even sure what was real anymore. The fog of sleep had lifted, but she still felt very unsettled.

She needed to speak with Tinker again and gain some clarity on the situation. Hopefully Grey had already had the chance to speak with Mischief and uncover the whimsicott’s true motives. At least then, if he turned out to be innocent, she’d be off the hook… right?

“Hey. Hey.” A soft paw nudged her arm and she looked down into Spark’s wide eyes. “You’ve put sweet berry sauce on your fish.”

Cleo followed Spark’s nod to her plate. The fish she’d picked out were barely noticeable beneath a sea of pink berry sauce. She let out a small sigh and set the jug back beside a heaped stack of berry pancakes, which were swiftly snatched up by a rather perky-looking slakoth.

Cleo resigned herself to her unfortunate mistake, flicking as much sauce as she could off a piece of fish before taking a bite out of it.

“That looks about as appetising as swamp muck,” said Spark. “Are you feeling okay?”

The combination of sweet and salty that filled Cleo’s mouth did wake her up a bit. Rather too abruptly. She took a swig of her sitrus juice to wash it down and sat back on her stool.

“Not really, no,” she said. “I’m still a little confused.”

“Tell me about it.” Spark picked up a plump oran berry and took a bite out of it. “I’m so confuzzled I can’t stop eating!”

Cleo ventured another of her pecha-coated fish. “That’s the norm for you.”

“Oi!” Spark dropped her berry and placed her paws on her hips. “Are you callin’ me fat?”

“No, I’m calling you a bottomless pit.”

“Oh.” Spark nodded and returned to her breakfast. “That’s okay then.”

Cleo cringed as she took another bite of fish, swiftly washing it away with a few swigs of her juice. She considered shoving the plate aside, but her gut told her not to waste a decent meal. So instead she forced herself to swallow down another slice of dried fish before calling it quits.

“I don’t really wanna discuss last night in here,” Spark said quietly. “But do you think Tinker wants to see us again this morning?”

“I don’t care what he wants, I was planning on going to see him anyway.”

“Eh. I don’t think he’ll mind too much if you just show up.” Spark clambered onto the table and rummaged amid the berry platter.

Cleo’s nose crinkled and she lowered her paw from her mouth. “What’s that supposed to mean?”

“Well, he usually seems so happy to see you. I’ve often wondered if he treats all Guild Warriors the same way, or if it’s just favoritism.”

“Not recently,” said Cleo. “And after the mess I’ve caused recently, I highly doubt he’ll be too happy to see me at all.”

Spark’s eyes twinkled and she stumbled back from the berry pile with a cheri clasped in both paws. “Jackpot!”

“Spark,” said Cleo, bristling.

“Oh. Right, yeah. Dilemma.” The dedenne plopped down on the table and tucked into her prize. “I hardly think he’s gonna shun you. I mean, your rash actions may actually have given the Guild a jump-start on what could have become a dire situation. If anything, Tinker should be giving you a pat on the back.”

Cleo snorted and stared down at her plate. A jump-start… sure, her black cloud may have a silver lining. But it was still a black cloud. If Mischief proved to be a risk, if anything went wrong then it was on her head for bringing him into New City. But if it did give the Guild a jump-start on whatever crazy thing the Heretics were doing, then was it actually a blessing in disguise?

She didn’t want to finish her breakfast.

She scooped up her plate and motioned for Spark to follow her. The dedenne returned briefly to the berry stack, popping an entire oran berry into her mouth. She scurried after Cleo with her little cheeks bulging.

The riolu’s office door was ajar, a clear indication he was at least expecting somebody. Maybe he had been expecting Cleo and Spark? The meowstic lifted her paw to knock, but the door opened wide. A tall pokemon stood over them, obscuring the view of the office. Cleo lifted her head back until she was looking into the wizened eyes of an alakazam with long grey whiskers that trailed to the ground. He didn’t need to introduce himself. Everyone in New City knew of Grey, the oldest and most reliable Warrior in the Guild, long since retired from combat duties. Now he spent his time probing the minds of the reluctant dark pokemon in their custody.

‘His attacks may not damage them, but a brain is still a brain,’ Tinker had told her when she’d enquired about this, many years ago when she was new to the Guild.

Grey gave them a nod and strolled past, leaving the door open for them. Cleo slipped inside, closing it behind her.

“Oh, good timing.” Tinker didn’t look up from whatever notes he was reading. “Grey was just here, as you know. He’s managed to probe the mind of your whimsicott companion.”

When he didn’t elaborate, Cleo tipped her head on one side. “And?”

“He does indeed have a damaged memory, so he was being truthful about that.” Tinker lowered the sheet of paper and turned to face them. “Confound it, Cleo, why are you standing by the door like some unwanted stranger? Sit down.”

“Sorry, I wasn’t sure if I was welcome or not.” Cleo relocated to a stool, and was swiftly joined as Spark hopped up onto the table.

“Despite the problems brining Mischief here may have caused, you are still one of the Guild’s elite Warriors.” Tinker swivelled back towards his desk and retrieved Grey’s notes. “Now. Grey has confirmed one of my speculations. This ‘Clean Place’ is indeed a laboratory. It wasn’t especially clear. There were other pokemon in this memory, but their faces were all blurred out, and their voices distorted. But the scenery had every essence of a lab about it, which solidifies my theory that Mischief is in fact a biological weapon.”

Cleo felt her heart sink. “Does that mean-?”

“He’s a risk?” Tinker shrugged. “That remains to be seen. The full effects of the pokerus, such as whether or not it can cause madness, is still as much a mystery as ever. Mischief’s memories contained no knowledge of this virus. He also has no memories of his assault on the noivern. All we have to go on there is what you’ve told me. All memories surrounding the laboratory are so severely fragmented that he has clearly had them tampered with. Not just tampered with… removed. All that remains are the hazy image of the laboratory, then it all leaps to his encounter with you. Then… blinks back out again after he leaps into battle with the noivern.”

Cleo scratched her head as she tried to take all this in. “He’s had his memories… removed? Is that even possible?”

“If a powerful enough psychic-type did it, then it is entirely possible,” said Tinker. “Grey would be capable of such a feat, but it’s not easy.” Before Cleo could pry as to how he knew this, he waved a paw. “I’ve had the same questions myself. Grey didn’t go into the grisly details. Either way, the fact remains that Mischief has no idea of where he’s come from. There are no memories of his birth place, his parents, or even of the pokemon that did this to him. One thing we can rest assured with here is that he couldn’t even make his way back to the Heretic lab if he tried. It’s as if they didn’t want him to come back to them, and went to great extremes to ensure that he wouldn’t. Cast off, left to go berserk like some ticking time-bomb of disaster.”

“So they abandoned him?” Spark huffed.

“I believe ‘discarded’ would be the more appropriate term in this scenario.”

“Dude, that’s harsh,” said Spark.

“So it’s like he’s become too problematic for them?” asked Cleo.

“Or a failure.” Tinker shrugged. “My first thought was that they left him there to target a settlement. But… what target? That little unnamed temporary town? It’s hardly worth it even for a test-run. It would just ring out that the Heretics had some plan up their sleeve. No… those scientists are too crafty to pull a stunt like that. It’s safe to say that Mischief has been shrugged off by the Heretics.”

“Then why tag him with a tracking chip?” Cleo asked.

“I’m beginning to think leaving it was an oversight,” said Tinker. “They likely tag all their experiments, and just forgot to remove his. Melody says it was hidden well in his fur. Either way, on the off-chance he has been unleashed as some sort of deadly weapon to target the Outcasts, guards are being stationed at every town in the surrounding vicinity, as well as New City. I really want to know what the actual situation is, but the Heretics have covered their tracks efficiently with this one. I believe they didn’t even want to leave any hint of his location intact at all, and that little blurry image - one that is enough to answer the question to this virus’ origin - was a mistake.”

“Huh!” Spark stood up straight. “Maybe it’s because he attacked them?”

“That’s a possibility.” Tinker set Grey’s notes aside and reached for another rather crumpled sheet from beneath his juice glass. “This now leads me into the other little puzzle Mischief has created. I’m still rather perplexed about your fight with that noivern. How, exactly, did he manage to take a dragon pulse without taking any damage at all?” He looked up at them both. “Melody has confirmed this, by the way. There wasn’t so much as a scuff on his fur. The only singes were from the embers in the forest. No trace of dragonfire at all.”

Cleo’s jaw went slack. So he actually had taken no damage? Or was Melody mistaken?

Tinker turned back to his notes and pawed his right ear. His muzzle crinkled slightly and he let out a flustered sigh. “Cleo… you know about evolution?”

Cleo started slightly and exchanged puzzled glances with Spark. “This might come as some surprise to you, Tinker, but I used to be an espurr once. And you yourself wear an everstone around your neck.”

He scoffed at that and waved her off. “Not that kind of evolution! No, I’m talking about the other kind. The one pokemon use to adapt to changes in their environment.”

Cleo shook her head slowly. “You’ve lost me.”

“Well.” Tinker twirled his chair around to face them. “This might surprise you, then. Take magnemite, for example. Many years ago, it used to be a pure electric type, but its defences were weak. It could be taken out by so many different moves, making it an easy target. Pokemon would drive it out of its habitat, pushing it to the far corners of Estellis until it was on the brink of extinction. There were so few places left for it, and it struggled to spread out over the surrounding swamps, which were chock full of poison-type pokemon. But over time, survival kicked in. Magnemite began to adapt, taking on a new type, making it part steel-type. Not only did this increase its defences, giving it more resistance to other pokemon’s attacks, it also developed an immunity to poison-type attacks. This allowed it to more freely spread out over the swamps, and over time increase its numbers, bouncing back from the brink of extinction.”

Spark’s eyes widened. “Amazing! I’d never heard of that before. What a little fighter!”

Cleo made a thoughtful noise and scratched behind her ear. “It’s not something I’ve ever really thought about, if I’m honest.”

“It was well before our time,” said Tinker. “But as a scientist, I like to think about stuff like this. It’s made me wonder if it’s happening again, before our very eyes.”

Spark’s jaw went slack, and Cleo narrowed her eyes slowly.

“Hang on,” said Cleo. “You’re not suggesting…”

“That Mischief has adapted a new typing?” Tinker nodded his head. “That is exactly what I’m suggesting.”

“But it’s crazy!” Cleo snapped.

“Is it?” Tinker jabbed his claw into his notes. “Was it crazy back then, when magnemite bounced back? Not only that, but also gained a new evolution in its line in the form of magnezone? Around the same time onix began to evolve into steelix? The world is constantly changing, Cleo. For years, we’ve been persecuted by the Darkness, driven across Estellis until our numbers are dramatically falling. Dark and dragon-type pokemon are reigning, and we are falling. Is it really crazy for a new pokemon type to arise? One that can actually help us stand a fighting chance?”

Cleo sighed and ran her paws through the fur between her ears. “It sounds more like wishful thinking to me.”

Tinker was silent, only occasionally rustling his paper as he rifled through his notes. But she could feel his eyes on her, waiting for her to add something, anything.

Spark shifted in her spot. “I like it. It doesn’t sound… too crazy. More like hope?”

Tinker scoffed and tossed his notes back onto the table. “Hope indeed? This is science, Spark. Recently, stuff has been happening here in New City. Something I think will back my theory. New moves have been demonstrated in the training room, ones that we’ve never come across before. Pink and purple flashes that sparkle.”

Cleo raised her head to look at him, but he was flicking through his notes as if he wasn’t really seeing them.

“They do a number on the fighting type Warriors,” he went on. “At first we thought it was a new psychic-type move, especially since it barely dents our steel-type Warriors. But it also doesn’t do much to the fire-type pokemon here either. This, to me, suggests it might be something new entirely. And with Mischief now in our care…” A huge smile spread across Tinker’s face and he spread his paws wide. “This is big, Cleo! Can’t you see it?”

She nodded stiffly, her mouth open as she tried to process what he’d just said. A new move… she’d seen that move. Mischief had used it. It was how he’d fought off the noivern.

She cleared her throat and folded her paws in her lap. “Did I tell you Mischief had used a similar attack?”

Tinker blinked a few times. “No, I don’t believe you did.”

“No… I was more distracted by how he pulverised that… Never mind.” She shook her head and met Tinker’s eyes. “He did use some strange sparkly attack that sounds like the one you described.”

Tinker’s mouth opened and closed a few times and he retrieved his notes and quill, jotting something down. “These new attacks haven’t been tested to their fullest. As you know, we don’t have the full spread of pokemon typings in New City. In the Guild at all, actually. I’m yet to thoroughly see what this means to us.” He sat back in his seat and set the quill neatly on his desk. “I’ve been working on a new machine that I was tweaking last night. A battle simulator. I actually intend to use it to test Mischief’s resistances. Hopefully this will tell us exactly where this new type stands in the battle against the Darkness.”

“You’re going to put him in one of your crazy experiments?!” Spark gasped.

“It’s not crazy!” Tinker barked. “It’s science!”

Spark huffed and flopped onto her bottom. “Still! It’s a bit extreme just to see if he resists dragon-type attacks.”

Tinker was back at his notes again. “I’m not suggesting he resists it, I’m suggesting he’s immune to it.”

Cleo felt her fur prickle. Immune? She’d wondered that herself, but hearing it so potentially cemented in reality brought a whole new meaning to the word. If Tinker was right, and there was a new pokemon type, then this was huge.

“But it must be a slow process,” she said. “If it does turn out he’s immune to dragon-type attacks, then how are we going to find more like him? It won’t have just exploded across Estellis overnight, right?”

“Let’s not be too hasty, Cleo,” said Tinker. “I’ve not had the chance to test him yet.”

“When do you plan to run these tests?” Cleo ventured.

“Why, right now, of course.” Tinker shoved his chair back from his desk and stood up. “Wait right here. I’m going to fetch your friend.”

Cleo and Spark watched him leave, the pair of them wearing matching expressions of surprise.

“I really don’t know how to take all this,” said Spark.

“Me neither.” Cleo rubbed her paws over her face. “I’m beginning to think I’m still stuck in one of my crazy dreams.”

Something sharp stabbed her arm and she yanked it into her body. “Ow!”

Spark stared up at her from her lap. “Sorry. Just wanted to check.”

Cleo rubbed her forearm. “So you bit me?”

Spark raised her paws in a shrug.

Cleo smirked and gave her friend a playful nudge. “You know that hurts, right?”

“Yeah, well.” Spark puffed herself up to her full height. “Us little mice had to evolve some way to defend ourselves against you psychic cats.”

Voices reached their ears before Tinker’s door opened again. The riolu strolled in with a rather talkative Mischief in tow, his eyes scanning over everything he saw. When his eyes fell on Cleo, they lit up with glee.

“Cleo! Hi!”

Cleo gave him a small smile. “Good to see you back on your feet.”

He looked like he was about to respond, but he spotted the dedenne perched on the edge of Tinker’s desk.

“And Spark! Hi!” Mischief continued gazing around the office, then tilted his head back towards the thick roots knotted across the ceiling. “Are we underground?”

“You sound surprised,” said Spark. “How’ve you not noticed?”

Mischief shrugged. “I’ve been asleep a lot. I’ve not really had the chance to look around.”

“And that chance may be a long time coming.” Tinker tapped his desk impatiently with a claw. “You three can have your jovial reunion later. Right now, I have some questions to ask you.”

Cleo’s ears turned back and she dug her claws into her knee. Jovial? Sometimes she felt like Tinker deliberately said such things to mock her.

“Now, Mischief.” Tinker gestured to a stool buried in the corner of his chaos. “I’m of the understanding you have very little of your memories left? Namely no idea where you came from, how to get back there, or even what your birth name is?”

Mischief finished dragging the stool back towards Cleo, leaving a trail of papers and doodles behind him. Once he’d sat himself upon it, he shook his head quickly.

“Nothing leading up to your meeting with Cleo and Spark?” Tinker went on. “No idea why you woke up outside that Outcast town, out in the open where anyone could find you?”

Mischief shook his head again. “Nope!”

Tinker spread his paws. “And this doesn’t bother you, even in the slightest?”

“Why, should it?” Mischief asked. “I mean, it’s not like I miss them or anything. Although I would like to know why I suddenly woke up here, when I last remember being in the forest with… what was it…?”

“A noivern,” Cleo said bluntly.

“Yes, Cleo said it attacked you on your way here.” Tinker leant back in his seat and twirled his quill between his claws. “Can you tell me exactly what happened there, Mischief? Namely how many attacks you used, and what?”

“Huh!” Mischief rocked back on his stool as he gazed at the ceiling. “I can’t remember how many. Maybe three or four? I did save Cleo with a glowing green ball, though!”

“Energy ball.” Tinker scrawled on a notebook with his quill and ink. “Any other attacks?”

Mischief shrugged. “There’s a nice, sparkly one. They’re the only two I know, I think.” When Tinker stared at him blankly, Mischief turned his head away and his voice came out oddly small. “I’m sorry, I don’t know what they’re called.”

“Well, as useful as it would be, it doesn’t matter.” Tinker rose from his seat and set his pad on his desk. “I’d like to run some tests on you, if you don’t mind?”

“Are they fun?”

“They’re certainly interesting.” Tinker turned his back to head towards a little door at the back of his office. “Although I’ll probably find this much more fun than you.”

Mischief turned to Cleo and Spark for some kind of reassurance.

Spark stood on her tiptoes and said, in a loud whisper, “He likes science.”

“Ohh!” Mischief nodded and pursed his lips. “What’s science?”

Cleo groaned and lowered her face into her paws. That kind of question could set the riolu off on a ramble for hours, but fortunately he was too involved with dragging his contraption of a machine over the floor to have heard it.

It was an imposing machine that seemed to make the office look a lot smaller. It had a wide platform at the front, fenced in by iron rails that formed a dome over it like some kind of enclosure. At the back sat a concave disk propped atop a metal box covered in switches and levers. Behind all that was a piston, that at the moment was still.

“This is a combat simulator,” he explained. “It is programmed to recognise all known pokemon moves, and their effectiveness against a set number of pokemon. It’s very much in its beta testing stages, although I’m the only one who’s tested it.”

“Question!” Spark raised a paw. “If it only knows all known pokemon moves, how is it going to help us exactly?”

“It is also programmed to recognise the energy that makes up pokemon moves, giving them their type effectiveness,” Tinker explained. “And, as you know, I have had some samples to hand in order to test this.”

Mischief couldn’t have looked more confused. He clutched the edge of the stool between his legs, eyeing the machine as if he expected it to leap to life. Although there was no hint of fear or apprehension in his eyes. Just curiosity.

Tinker turned to address him and pulled open the gate to the platform. “Could you please step inside? Don’t worry. It won’t hurt you.”

Mischief slipped from his stool and obediently climbed onto the platform. Tinker immediately set about strapping him in, fastening a harness over his shoulders. Each one was attached to the platform, and covered in flashing doohickeys that Cleo couldn’t even begin to identify. She found herself wondering if the whimsicott’s lack of memories made him much more naive than he should be.

Satisfied, Tinker made his way to the back of the machine and pulled on one of the levers. The machine let out a hiss as the piston pumped to life, and a small blue light inside the disk lit up.

A smile spread across Tinker’s muzzle and he tapped on a small screen Cleo hadn’t seen straight away. “Well, it’s identified you. Whimsicott, type: grass!”

“Huh.” Cleo folded her arms. “Then I guess it’s blown you theory that he possesses a new type out of the water?”

Tinker didn’t look up from the array of buttons and levers. “Not exactly. I said this is programmed to identify the energy of moves, I haven’t extracted any DNA samples from a living specimen.” Then he added under his breath, “Yet.”

The light inside the disk flared, and before it appeared a poochyena. The black dog-like creature lowered its head, and the fur along its hackles rose. It bared its teeth, letting out a low growl. Mischief took a step back, and Cleo leapt from her seat with her claws out.

“Calm yourselves,” said Tinker. “It’s only an image, it isn’t real. Now, Mischief. You mentioned knowing an attack you described as ‘sparkly’?”

“Oh yes!” Mischief beamed. “You want to see it?”

“I do, but not just yet.” Tinker waved a paw. “Allow me to explain what I’m doing here. I’m conducting research, and I wish to know how your… sparkly attack… affects dragon and dark-type pokemon. Having none in the Guild, I’ve had to come up with other means to test different attacks on such pokemon. So, I constructed this battle simulator.” He gave the machine a fond pat. “It projects an image that is also capable of firing its own attacks, although they have a much lower damage output to avoid harming those I am testing on it. It’s enough to log a pokemon’s endurance against such attacks, however, which is recorded in the harness you are wearing. Have no fear, it won’t hurt at all. But you will still feel it.

“When an attack is fired at the image, this huge disk records the damage output and the effectiveness on the pokemon it’s simulating. It can also detect whether the attack was fired with vehemence, so don’t be worried about confusing the machine with a critical hit.”

Cleo exchanged worried glances with Spark.

“Hang on, Tinker,” said Cleo. “Are you really sure this is such a good idea?” She gave him a look that prompted him to remember what they’d been discussing the previous night.

“Don’t worry,” he said. “I’ve given this plenty of thought. I know exactly what I’m doing.”

As if on cue, a loud snap came from the gate as the lock fired into place.

Mischief glanced back at it and scratched his fluffy head. “What’s that for?”

“Security reasons. Now! Shall we start? The simulation will attack you. When it does, you hit it back with your sparkly attack.” Tinker hit a button and stood back from the machine so he could see inside the cage.

The poochyena opened its jaws and spat out a black, pulsing beam. It struck Mischief in the stomach and he chuckled.

“That tickled.”

“Hit it back, Mischief,” said Tinker with some level of impatience.

Mischief obliged, spreading his arms and sending out that pink and purple light, shimmering with stars. It struck the poochyena head on. A look of surprise crossed its face and it blinked out of existence.

Tinker rushed back to the machine and doubled over the screen with his paws either side of it. “It’s registered as incredibly effective! And as for you, Mischief, the dark pulse has registered at half its expected rate.”

“So he resists it?” asked Cleo.

“Yes… Which is not normal for a pure grass type.” Tinker stood up straight and jabbed at one of the buttons. His eyes widened and he rubbed his snout in thought. “It’s… updated his information. Given him a second typing, although of course it’s got no identification.”

Cleo rose from her seat and went to join him. She didn’t know what she was looking at, she knew nothing about machines, that was Tinker’s forte. But she just had to see it for herself. A silhouette of a whimsicott graced the black and white screen, and beside it were the words ‘grass’ and something she couldn’t make out.

Spark appeared on Tinker’s shoulder and frowned at the monitor. “What am I looking at?”

“That… is just error code.” Tinker shooed the dedenne onto her partner so he could work the machine. “Now to test it against a dragon.”

Cleo placed a paw on his shoulder. “Tinker. We need to be careful. We don’t-”

“This test is going ahead,” he said in hushed tones. “If you’re worried, then you’re welcome to leave. But I actually want you here for this. If things work out as I’m expecting them to…” He looked up at Mischief, who was waiting patiently. “The same again! Okay?”


Tinker stood back and a fraxure manifested before Mischief. It threw its arms out to the sides and opened its jaws wide, baring its sharp fangs. A pulse of purple energy sped towards the whimsicott, striking him in the chest. It washed over him like water, not even eliciting a chuckle like the previous attack.

Mischief raised his paws and sent out another flurry of sparkling light. It struck the fraxure, and it fell back with a grunt before blinking out just like the poochyena.

Tinker raced back to the machine with such enthusiasm he stumbled over his own feet. He clutched onto the monitor and stared down at it, unblinking.

“It… it’s registered as extremely effective!” He took a few breaths to steady himself and ran a paw between his ears. “And it’s had absolutely no effect on Mischief.” He shook his head, stuttering slightly. “It… could be an error. Did it…” He looked up at the whimsicott. “Did you really not feel it?”

Mischief shook his head.

Tinker looked back down at the monitor. “I… I want to check how it works against a hydreigon.”

Cleo grabbed his paw before he could bring up the simulation. “We’ve seen enough. We know it works now.”

“But the simulation-”

“It’s a simple case of maths,” said Cleo. “If it’s effective against both dark and dragon types, we already know what the result will be!”

Tinker flexed his claws then sighed, relaxing his arm. He knew she was right. If they kept pushing Mischief, there was a possibility he might lose control again. Sure, confined to a cage, he posed less of a risk. They could even hide from his elemental attacks. But was it really fair on him?

“I don’t mind fighting something else if it’s for research!” he said, rather too keenly. “But I do want to know why you’re all so excited about this. What’s it for, exactly? Am I being trained for something?”

Tinker looked up at him slowly as though seeing him for the first time. Cleo and Spark followed his gaze, and it became increasingly obvious what it was that had struck the riolu.

That question…

Mischief had no memories.

That meant he had absolutely no idea of the state of the world he was living in.


Never not editing
Hi! I don't think we've officially met or interacted yet, even though I've seen you around, so consider this a handshake.

Overall, this was a fun read, and I enjoyed the interactions between the characters. There's some avoidable wordiness in a few places and a bit of world-building I want to poke at in the line-by-line comments below:

A disgruntled groan came from the long fur around her shoulders, followed by the tiny head of a dedenne. “I’d give my whiskers for a berry.”
I'm surprised Spark is sitting on her shoulder if she's trying to sneak around! Five inches is pretty small compared to me, but it's not that small compared to someone who's only two feet tall.

They just had to keep on going, following what she could make out of the path beneath its thick coating of rusty, fallen leaves.
Those two propositions right next to each other is a little clunky. Maybe instead: They had to keep following the path, or what she could see of it beneath its thick coating of rusty, fallen leaves.

Not to mention her night vision wasn’t exactly her strong suit.
"Strong suit" for me implies that it's a skill that can be improved with practice rather than something biological. I wouldn't word it this way, personally.

Branches bucked and swayed as three lithe figures scrambled across them, crimson eyes trained on the two Guild Warriors below.
Ooh, I like the visual of the weavilles creeping along the branches. Great entrance. Though, I think this is an odd time to let the reader know that Cleo and Spark are classified as Guild Warriors. I would either find a way to do it in dialogue or make it part of the initial scene-setting.

“I have you know I’m hungry!
*I'll have you know

Cleo knew only full well what was coming next.
Wordy. Flows much better as "Cleo knew what was coming next."

I also wish we had a moment of Spark hopping off her shoulder or something, because if they're touching when she lets off that attack ....

, but one didn’t take risks when the sun was setting
Hmm, I think this element of danger could've been clearer earlier. I didn't realize they were trying to get out of the forest before night falls, but knowing that ahead of time would add extra stakes and would clarify why Spark is so excited to see daylight still peeking through.

Spark kicked out with her back feet, sending small gold coins rolling across the leaves. Cleo scooped them up and popped them into her bag.
This feels like it would make it harder for Cleo to gather the coins, Spark scattering them like that.

a town built up of wooden buildings.
Double built! Maybe instead: A collection of wooden building peeked through the trees. A town? No, not quite a town. These were temporary structures that ... Etc.

He sported the same sun-shaped badge she wore on her satchel’s strap, indicating he was a member of the Outcasts Guild.
Again, this might've been nice to get as part of her initial description. Otherwise, it feels like the badge has popped into existence just because it's being looked at now. I also find it kinda funny that they have membership badges for showing they exist outside of normal society. They do, in fact, belong to a society.

back inside Cleo’s collar.
Inside her collar? I'm having trouble picturing that since a collar is by definition usually a tight fit. A collar also feels out of place in a world without humans in it, since collars usually denote ownership and are for connecting to a leash, which I don't think pokemon are going to do to each other.

You might want to apprehend them,
Maybe collect them? Bring them in?

Their rations had run out the previous night,
Then that means they've missed at least two meals if night is falling now! The dismissive attitude towards Spark's hunger and the "maybe I'll go eat too, I guess" feels out of place.

so feel free-,
You want an em dash here. (—) Hyphens are for connecting two words that together act as one concept. Em dashes are for separating clauses abruptly and cutting sentences short.

“Food scarcity is becoming a growing problem with the cold season closing in.” He turned back to Cleo and met her eyes. “Be sure to take some supplies with you before you leave.”
This juxtaposition was a little jarring. It seems like what he's actually saying is that foraging is scarce and they should load up accordingly.

And the less the chance of Tinker hovering around her like a flea.
This image doesn't work for me--fleas don't hover. No wings.

“That small town is fine for now. We chased off the jangma-o that were terrorizing it.”
The rest of the conversation makes me think Tinker already knows what she's talking about and maybe even sent her on that mission to begin with. I think it would be enough to say "We chased off the jangmo-o." It makes Cleo seem more blasé, too.

“That’s not an option I want to enforce on them.
This felt a little stiff. Maybe instead "I don't want to force that on them." I'm having trouble understanding what his role and responsibilities are--he could force them to move? How so? What are the consequences of not listening to his orders, being cut off from that orchard supply?

“I hardly think Hydreigon will care.
Evil Hydregion doesn't get a name?

dragon and dark-type pokemon reigned
*dragon- and dark-type--they're both modifying "pokemon."

“Outcasts are being picked off day by day, you know that,”
Hm, again, I wish we would've gotten more of a sense of the danger in the forest scene. Maybe some of Cleo's internal monologue belying the causal way they talk to the weavilles and highlighting her care to walk quietly?

And now your placing blame.”

Cleo trapped him in an amber glare. “Unacceptable.”
I wasn't really sold on this "I work alone" turn. After all, Spark can hit dark-types, but it's hardly proper type-coverage. It seems like something has happened to make her distrust others on a team. If that's the case, again, I think some internal monologue backing that up and hinting at a later backstory drop would help this moment feel more earned.

“If anything happens to Windflower…” His voice was laced with warning.
Then what? Again, it's not clear what powers he does have. I also have zero idea what speicies he is at this point.

dotted with her own paw print writing.
Since she's able to hold a pen in her hand ... does this mean she's literally drawing little pawprints to represent words?

His snowy white paws moved one in front of the other, the back ones falling in the footprints of his forepaws making nary a sound.
Again, this felt unnecessarily wordy.

Behind him, the two pawniard twins took more wary steps, jogging to keep up with the absol’s quick pace.
This was another moment I wanted some kind of emotional response. Is Harbinger frustrated with them for being slow? Are they hissing at him to wait up? Has he all but forgotten they're there?

Fifty what? Pokemon hadn’t lived in the Silent Mountains in years.
This didn't seem to fit, since the previous sentence tells us it has to be a pokemon settlement, since it's been built recently. Is the question more of what kind of settlement it is?

Clean, white stone reflecting the moonlight.
Ah, not nomadic folks then.

A couple of pokemon hovered around the lake, gathering water into clay jars. A zangoose and a linoone.
Again, these aren't pokemon that can hover over the water, so this was a weird mental image.

In the doorway of one of the houses stood a zigzagoon on its hind legs, steadying itself with its paw. Clearly trying to imitate its parent.

“Get out of here, you omen!”
Hm, this one didn't ring true for me.

I’m only hear to warn you of a disaster.”

and he stifled a yelp, skittering along the outcrop.
I think these two actions want to be separated, because they can't be happening at the same time. He gets hit, and as a response is either going to check the wound or speed up--there's a cause and effect that needs to happen to be able to picture the scene clearly.

The sound it gave off was akin to a metal kricketune who hadn’t quite mastered the art of serenading just yet.
It was a little odd to me to compare one pokemon to "another pokemon, except metal." I don't know what this means--melodic, screeching? It could be either by this description.

So Harbinger goes around looking for settlements to get rejected by so he can justify revenging himself on them? I'm wondering what causes him to do that.

All that said, I did enjoy the obvious friendship between Spark and Cleo. And I appreciate how quickly we get to see them face a challenge in a way that has nothing to do with the standard PMD opening. They've already got a place and a purpose in this world ... but it's complicated! I wonder how their paths with cross with Harbinger's.


*Crazy Absol Noises*
Behind a laptop, most likely with tea
Thanks for reading =) I wanted to respond to this pretty quickly, given it'll be a few days before the next chapter drops.

This feels like it would make it harder for Cleo to gather the coins, Spark scattering them like that.
This is a carry-over from the original. Spark pushed the coins out in a pile, and Cleo scooped them up. I probably need to re-word it slightly.

Again, this might've been nice to get as part of her initial description. Otherwise, it feels like the badge has popped into existence just because it's being looked at now. I also find it kinda funny that they have membership badges for showing they exist outside of normal society. They do, in fact, belong to a society.
I'm conflicted here, since I was always told, in many many writing guides, not to describe things all at once. (Particularly by looking at one's reflection! Never. Never. Never... XD ) This felt like the best way to do it for me, and avoids info-dumping. Until it came up, I didn't mention it, since Cleo already knows it's there and it's set from her POV. Perhaps the weavile could have mentioned it, since they knew they were Guild Warriors? I'm musing over adding that in. Thanks for pointing it out, though.

Inside her collar? I'm having trouble picturing that since a collar is by definition usually a tight fit. A collar also feels out of place in a world without humans in it, since collars usually denote ownership and are for connecting to a leash, which I don't think pokemon are going to do to each other.
'Collar' was referring to her ruff. Looking it up, it's not used as that! Sorry for the confusion.

Evil Hydregion doesn't get a name?
By choice. He has a 'Legend Complex'. Not something that ever came up in the original, but I may decide to add in at some point for clarity. I'd rather leave it to the reader's interpretation at this point, than revealing key things at such an early stage.

*dragon- and dark-type--they're both modifying "pokemon."
Thanks. This is a new way of writing these, as I liked it in the one-shot I wrote 'Of Light and Darkness' (which is also getting re-written).

Again, these aren't pokemon that can hover over the water, so this was a weird mental image.
I'm not sure if it's just a British English thing? Either way, it's accurate:

'to stand somewhere, especially near another person, eagerly or nervously waiting for their attention:
A waiter hovered at the table, ready to take our order.
I could sense him behind me, hovering and building up the courage to ask me a question.'

So Harbinger goes around looking for settlements to get rejected by so he can justify revenging himself on them? I'm wondering what causes him to do that.
Oh, he has a lot of back-story!

As for other things you mentioned, I'm surprised you forgot what species Tinker is. It does mention he's a riolu when they first meet, and I do refer to the characters by species a fair bit throughout the story. I'll have to look over that and amend things. Tinker is a bit of an enigma even to Cleo and Spark, but he's the current Guild Leader and has a lot of power over the Outcasts. He could definitely make someone move to safety, given he'd be offering it. But things are a bit enigmatic early on.

When I re-wrote this, the dark overtones from later in the story leaked into the first chapter. Given there's been a fair bit of mention of this on here so far, I may need to re-visit chapter one again =/ I'll wait on that for now, since I'm not sure how many committed readers would actually re-read it, and I don't want to slow down my momentum.
Chapter 6 New


*Crazy Absol Noises*
Behind a laptop, most likely with tea
6 - The Quest​

Yurlik strutted across the courtyard towards Hydreigon’s castle, his talons scraping over the dry earth. The honchkrow’s entire body ached as he struggled to drag the mangled carcass with him. He occasionally clicked his beak in frustration, beneath the odd mutter as he silently cursed whoever had done this to the dragon. More-so because the body was rapidly rendering his glossy black feathers into a sticky mess. He’d need a jolly good bath and a preen after this…

The patter of stampeding feet rumbled through the air, and he looked up just in time to see two deino rushing towards him, snapping at each other with their jaws. The one in front jerked its head up, sniffing at the air.

“I smell blood!”

“Huh?!” The one chasing it seemed to have difficulty getting the message to ‘stop’ from its brain to its feet, and instead crashed right into its brethren.

The pair rolled towards Yurlik in a bundle of fangs and claws and angry snarls, rapidly encroaching on the honchkrow and his ‘bad news’.

Yurlik let out a startled caw and the carcass slipped from his back onto the dusty floor. He lashed out with his wings, sending the two deino away from him towards the lake. After a few moments, there was a satisfying splash, followed by the startled cries of the two dragons.

Being blind was one thing, but being stupid was another entirely. It was baffling to thing that Hydreigon had evolved from such a creature. Yurlik shook his head and lowered himself to drag the mangled carcass onto his back once more. A struggle when one doesn’t have four sets of claws.

The castle was only a few feet away. A huge stone building that towered over the Shadow Lands. Jagged, ebony spines jutted out of it from various angles, arcing up towards the sky like a twisted thorn bush. A herd of deino flocked before it, bumping into and snapping at one another, and stumbling over their dozing siblings. Yurlik marched through them, trying his best not to pay them any heed. Each one he passed lifted its head to sniff the air, and he soon had an entourage of curious, wingless dragons marching after him.

He snapped his head around towards them and barked, “Will you lot leave me alone and go about your day!?”

The dragons muttered to one another and turned, although some bumped their snouts on tails, causing a whole other ruckus that left the smell of blood abandoned for the sake of drawing more. Thankfully the herd moved away from the burdened honchkrow.

When Yurlik reached the first of the stone steps, he lifted his head towards the door and sighed. One clawed foot after the other, carefully. Otherwise he’d send both himself and his unfortunate charge tumbling back down the stairs towards the deino.

“You look like you’re having problems, fatso!”

Yurlik’s red eyes shot up towards the roof of the castle. Grinning down at him was the shadowy form of a banette, sporting a heavy black scarf around his neck. Yurlik had to steady the carcass with his wings before it slipped off his back again.

“You know, Enigma…” Yurlik said through a clenched beak. “Rather than sitting there smirking at me, you could help me carry it?”

Enigma laughed and flopped forward, leaning his head in one paw. Each small movement created a jingle from some unseen bell. “I don’t think so. I’d get my claws dirty.”

Yurlik muttered something incoherent under his breath, and hoisted himself up another few stairs. He could feel the banette’s crimson gaze burning into his feathers as the ghost sat there, clearly mocking him. Yurlik feared if it kept on like this, he’d put a foot wrong and go tumbling back down the stone steps, carcass and all. Right into the deino herd. That would give the stupid banette something to laugh about.

Yurlik clenched his beak shut and kept on going. Just a little further… there. He stopped before the door and shifted his weight left and right as he fixed the iron door with each eye. With both his wings holding his ‘bad news’ in place, he had no other choice than to strike the door with his beak.

“Yes?” Enigma’s grinning face appeared over the edge of the roof.

Yurlik tutted and rolled his eyes. “Let me guess. You’re the one on door duty?”

Enigma nodded rapidly, creating a series of jingles.

“You’re forgetting I have a type advantage, ghost! Get down here and let me in!”

Enigma chuckled and leapt from the roof, vanishing into thin air. He reappeared beside Yurlik and slipped through the door like a grey mist. There was a loud click, and the double doors opened inward.

Yurlik fired Enigma a glare and strode into the hall, the body’s claws scraping over the tiles and leaving an unsightly trail behind it.

“You know…” Enigma fell into step beside Yurlik, his bell echoing off the bare stone walls. “The boss isn’t going to be very happy when you march into his throne room carrying that.”

“I’m aware.”

Enigma chuckled and tucked his paws behind his head. “It would seriously suck to be you right now.”

Yurlik said nothing, marching silently down the hallway listening to that irritating jingle. Where did Enigma even hide that bell? His tail? Yurlik made a mental note to bite it off later and see.

A pair of ebony doors stood at the end of the corner, with an intricate design carved into them. Dragon and dark-type pokemon flew around the image of a hydreigon, posed to resemble a trident.

Enigma cut before Yurlik and threw the double doors wide open, striding in with a phenomenal amount of confidence.

“Boss! The fat bird’s back with a delivery for you!”

“Don’t you dare address me like that, you insolent ghost!” The voice rumbled off the walls. “If you dare do that again, I’ll grind you down into dust!”

Enigma bust into fits of hysterical laughter and shot off towards the far corner of the room, where he blended seamlessly into the shadows. The only sign he was even still there was that irritating jingle.

Yurlik glared into the far corner, wondering how someone could have such pompous confidence to remain in Hydreigon’s throne room. He then looked up at the huge hulking dragon lying by the far wall.

“Come in, Yurlik.” Hydreigon’s voice was softer this time, but carried the warning that this had better be worth his time. “What is it you’re wanting to show me?”

Two candles burned above the door, leaving most of the room in darkness. Hydreigon’s shadow flickered across the back wall, making him look a lot larger than he was (which was already large enough.) Yurlik crept warily into the middle of the room and shed the carcass, where it landed with an unsatisfying splat. He then cleared his throat and spread his wings in a bow as he stepped back from it.

“What is this?” Hydreigon spat.

“This is Boomer, my lord.”

Hydreigon lurched forward, the jaws of his two smaller heads snapping. Yurlik leapt back in a flurry of feathers, letting out an embarrassing caw. Hydreigon paid no notice. He stared down at the body, his nostrils flaring as he sniffed around it, just to be certain what he was seeing.

“This is my top ace?!” he roared. “I thought no pokemon could beat a noivern!”

“I thought I was your top ace!” Enigma whined from the shadows.

Hydreigon’s right pincer-like limb turned towards the banette and fired off a dark pulse. It hit the wall with a splat, followed by a surprised jingle that suggested Enigma had done the wise thing and leapt out of the way.

Yurlik cowered by the door, his sticky feathers puffed up entirely against his will. He watched as Hydreigon took in Boomer’s mangled form before settling back against the far wall.

“So tell me,” Hydreigon began. “Where did you find him? What exactly happened for him to be reduced to…” He waved a pincer at the body, “this.”

Yurlik cleared his throat and strutted back into the room. “I didn’t, my lord. Two murkrow arrived back here in a shocking state. They told me Boomer had been killed just inside the Moorlands Forest, a two day’s flight from here.”

“Two day’s flight?” Hydreigon asked, eerily softly. “He’d been missing for two seasons!” The final sentence was spoken with such ferocity, Yurlik keeled backwards, almost stepping through the door.

“Yes, they… a flock of murkrow found him. He’d been… kept by the Heretics, my lord.”

“The Heretics?” Hydreigon paused, rubbing one of the smaller heads beneath his chin. “What would they want with him?”

“I’m afraid I can’t answer that,” said Yurlik. “We don’t know for certain. He was apparently being held there, but not out of malice. Once they were done with him, they asked the murkrow to accompany him back to the Shadow Lands and be his eyes during the day. It would seem he was sent back here with some haste. Apparently he had some information to give you, which wasn’t disclosed to my flock. But of course…” Yurlik waved a wing at the noivern’s body, “he cannot do that now.”

Hydreigon was silent, his red eyes no longer on the noivern but fixed on some vague point across the room as they glazed over with thought.

“If you’re looking for a plan of action, we may be able to track down who did this to him,” Yurlik suggested. “You see, the murkrow stopped by the outskirts for help, since they couldn’t carry Boomer back by themselves. It was Ripwing who brought him back here.” He paused an gave a nervous chuckle as Hydreigon’s eyes flashed. “You know how fast salamence can fly-”

The large dragon lurched towards him, bowling the honchkrow onto his back. He let out a loud caw, which was cut short as his head struck the tiles. Hydreigon’s nose pressed against his beak and he could feel his hot breath on his face.

“Don’t you ever mention that name in my presence!”

Yurlik’s heart hit his throat and he swallowed audibly. He tried to apologise, but all that came out was a strangled squeak.

Hydreigon gestured to the fallen noivern with one of his smaller heads. “Who did this to him?” His warm breath washed over Yurlik, and sent cold shivers of fear through his hollow bones.

“Th-that I can answer,” Yurlik stuttered. “It was three pokemon. A meowstic, dedenne and whimsicott. The… the latter is the one who reduced Boomer to such a state, my lord.”

Hydreigon’s body stiffened and he met the honchkrow’s eyes. Something seemed to pass over his face that Yurlik wasn’t able to place. Recognition? Fear? Whatever it was, it was fleeting. The dragon fell back from him, allowing Yurlik to struggle back to his feet.

“I need to have those three eradicated,” Hydreigon said quietly, almost to himself. Then he looked up at Yurlik again. “I shall send out my next trump card.”

“Ooh!” Enigma jingled excitedly in the corner. “What do you want me to do?”

“Not you!” Hydreigon roared. “I have another tool in mind for this task.” He leant his head on one of his pincers and fixed the corner of the room with one eye. “Enigma, remove this mess and fetch me Harlequin.”

Enigma stepped out of the corner, a disappointed frown replacing his former grin. “You want me to clean this up? Me?”

“Do you have a problem?” Hydreigon’s voice was coated with a deadly layer of ice.

Enigma faltered and his shoulders sagged. “No. Leave it to me.” The banette grabbed Boomer’s body by the legs and lugged it after him. “I’ll find a mop and bucket or something.”

Hydreigon watched him leave then turned back to Yurlik.

“Close the door.”

Yurlik obeyed, bowing before throwing both heavy doors closed with his wings, silencing the rhythmic chime of Enigma’s bell. He turned back to Hydreigon and cleared his throat before saying, “Please pardon me for saying this, my lord, but I don’t understand why you won’t just kill the wretched creature.”

“Enigma is the best at gathering intel,” Hydreigon said through a growl. “You know that.”

“But he’s neither dark nor-”

“Don’t question my motives, Yurlik.”

Yurlik lowered his head and muttered, “Sorry, my lord.”

“Now.” Hydreigon leant his head on one of his pincers, and eyed the other like a child with a sock puppet. “After this little event, I think this is a wake-up call to pick up pace with my plan.”

Yurlik looked back up at him, trembling. “You don’t mean-”

“I want every pokemon with wings in my army to spread out across Estellis.” Hydreigon fixed one eye on Yurlik. “That includes your flying mob. Double up on their duties if you have to. We’re going to find that cocoon before this… incident… expands into a much bigger problem.”


Cleo slept much better that night. The previous day had been exhausting, explaining to Mischief about the state of Estellis. They’d covered everything - Hydreigon’s fierce rule, how only dark, dragon and ghost-type pokemon were part of his vision for Estellis and if you didn’t fall into any of those typings you were wiped out. They’d explained how the world was divided into three: Outcasts, Heretics and Darkness, and what each of them did; how the Heretics were foolish, trying to win over forces that would exploit them, and how they were swiftly disposed of once their use had run out; the gradual spread of the Darkness across Estellis; and the formation of the Guild to protect the vulnerable members of the Outcasts from being eradicated by the Darkness.

By the time they’d finished covering everything, dinner had long since passed and each one of them was exhausted. Mischief had turned a pale colour, staring at the floor between his feet silently for a long, painful moment until Tinker finally dismissed him. He was taken by Melody back to the medical ward for a rest and another check over (although Cleo knew it was to keep a watch on him perchance he decided which of those factions he wanted to belong in, and rejected the Outcasts). Cleo, being too tired to eat, went straight to her nest, while Spark declared ‘explaining stuff was hungry work’ and took a detour by the kitchen to see if she could rustle up something to eat.

It was now morning, and Cleo lay on her back on her nest, staring at the ceiling as she recapped the previous day. She wasn’t prepared to go downstairs to see what happened next. She was too afraid to discover Mischief had turned to the Heretics and was threatening New City. But after hunger gnawed at her stomach for the umpteenth time, she gave in and followed her appetite down to the dining hall.

Spark was already there, tucking into an overflowing plate of berries. Cleo had fallen asleep no sooner had her head hit the hay, and she found herself wondering if Spark had been in the dining hall all night. She took a perch beside the dedenne, receiving a warm smile.

“Good mornin’!” said Spark. “Sorry I scooted off, I didn’t want to wake you. You were snoring like an ursaring during the cold season.”

A large bear-like pokemon looked up, startled, from opposite them, shrugged then returned to his meal.

Spark returned to her plate with all the intensity of a half-starved tyranitar.

“It’s good to see you have an appetite,” said Cleo.

“Well, yeah!” Spark swallowed her mouthful and wiped her paw across her whiskers. “Don’t you?”

“Yes, actually.” Cleo heaped her plate with dried fish and berry toast, coating the latter with cheri jam.

She ate in silence, savouring her meal and trying desperately not to re-live the previous day yet again. She tuned in to the conversations around her, instead, picking up various exploits of the Darkness and what the other Guild Warriors had been up to.

Murkrow sighted in the Moorlands Forest, along with strange noises reported from deep within.

A pair of sneasel apprehended on the other side of the Silent Mountains.

No sign of rain any time soon.

“Good morning!”

She looked up with a start as Tinker flopped down beside her and began piling up his own plate.

Cleo swallowed her mouthful and licked jam off her claws. “You seem cheerful!”

“I have reason to be,” he said. “I was actually hoping to find you both in here, actually.”


“Yes.” He met her curious gaze and smiled. “Would you both mind joining me in my office again?”

“What for this time?” Cleo returned to her plate. “More experiments? Found out something else new? Or did we forget something yesterday?”

“I actually have a request of you,” he said. “But it’s not something I wish to discuss here. If you don’t mind?” He stood and lifted his plate in one paw.

Cleo watched him for a moment, realising she didn’t actually have any say in the matter. She let out a small sigh and licked her paw clean.

“Sure,” she said. “I’ve finished here anyway. Spark?”

Spark clutched a berry in both paws and her eyes widened so much they took up most of her face. “But… but I’m not finished!”

“Bring it with you.” Cleo picked up Spark’s plate, much to her protests, and turned to leave the dining hall.

“Actually, if you don’t mind…” Tinker lifted a paw to stop her. “I don’t allow food in my office. Berry juice makes an awful mess, and I have important documents everywhere.”

Cleo gave Spark an apologetic look and shrugged her shoulders. “Sorry, Spark.”

Spark threw her arms in the air and wailed. “Aww, you’re slayin’ me!”

Mumbling incoherently under her breath, the dedenne followed them through the corridors towards Tinker’s office.

The riolu nudged his office door open and faltered in the doorway. “Oh…”

Mischief looked up from Tinker’s desk, clutching a few sheets of paperwork in his paws. “Hi there!”

“What are you doing in here?” Tinker swiftly abandoned his plate on his desk to take the papers from Mischief.

“Melody let me in,” he explained. “She said you wanted to see me?”

Tinker muttered something about ‘rules’ and ‘boundaries’ that went mostly unheard by Mischief as he turned to address Cleo and Spark.

“Are you feeling any better?” Cleo asked, somewhat relieved her fears had been nothing more than just that.

“Oh yes!” Mischief closed his eyes and nodded. “I think I’ve understood it all.”

“Good,” said Tinker before Cleo could respond. “Now sit.”

Mischief flopped onto the nearest stool, while Tinker nudged over his seat beside Cleo, sitting - she thought - unnecessarily close to her. He rifled through the papers he’d managed to rustle off his desk and relaxed back in his seat.

“I have a small request for you,” he explained. “All three of you, actually.”

Cleo looked over at a rather curious Mischief.

“Yes, I’m sending him out with you,” said Tinker. “But I’ll get to that in a moment. You see, I need you to do some investigating for me. I’m very curious, and concerned, as to what a noivern was doing hovering around here during the day. As you both well know, noivern are nocturnal by nature and cannot see very well during daylight. Which would explain why you all came off better than expected in that fight.”

Cleo grimaced at that, and decided to push the horrible thought aside. She deeply felt, if not for Mischief, neither her nor Spark would have come out of that battle alive.

“I’m wondering if it was sent to snoop around,” Tinker went on. “My biggest fear is it was seeking out New City, that perhaps a Guild Warrior didn’t keep his vow of secrecy, as you well know that each Warrior in the Guild are sworn to secrecy even to death. This is unlikely, but not impossible. However, I want to make sure this isn’t the case. If word gets back to Hydreigon about New City, then it could spell trouble for each and every one of us.”

“And you need us to take Mischief for this?” Cleo scoffed.

“Yes. I wish to test his skills in this area. If any more of the Darkness are hovering around here, then his ability to combat them is second to none.”

“Does this mean I’m a Guild member?” Mischief asked, a little too happily.

“No, just a tool I am using,” Tinker said bluntly. “You’ll be leaving here blindfolded, and once you are far away from New City only then is Cleo permitted to remove it. And, like everyone here, you must swear never to even breath the name ‘New City’ above the surface. Understood?”

Mischief nodded so quickly little white tufts fluttered from his fur.

“Now,” Tinker went on. “I sent out a search party to recover the noivern’s body. I wanted to be sure of the dragon’s identity, since… well, Hydreigon does have a noivern ace in his team.”

“Boomer,” said Spark.

“Precisely. Of course, no one has fought him and survived, so it would be difficult to discern who he is without the aide of any of the Darkness to confirm. We do have some in custody who would be more than willing to tell us the noivern’s identity given the right incentive. However, once the search party reached the area you gave me, the noivern’s body was gone.”

Cleo felt a chill travel down her spine. Gone?

“I doubt they were in the wrong place, since the floor was a mess of blood and feathers,” Tinker went on. “So either the noivern survived and recovered enough to crawl away, or someone has been to collect it. This deeply worries me, as it may confirm my fears. So I want you to investigate the surrounding area to see if you can find any reason as to what a noivern was doing flying over the Moorlands, and if possible, where it came from.”

Cleo nodded. “Sure. We can do that.”

“I have a question.” Mischief raised a paw. “Who killed the noivern?”

Tinker looked over at the whimsicott, and Cleo braced herself for Tinker to bluntly tell Mischief exactly who killed the noivern.

“It was killed in battle,” Tinker told him. “As you are now aware, this world is a live or die one at the moment. These things, sadly, do happen.” He turned back to his notes, and Cleo stared at him dumbfounded, prompting an explanation. But she didn’t get one. “Now, I would like you three to set off as soon as possible, if you don’t mind?”

It wasn’t a question, it was an instruction.

“Sure.” Cleo rose from her seat. “I’ll just go and grab some extra supplies.”

“No need.” Tinker waved a paw. “All of that has been dealt with for you.” He leant across his desk and pushed a button on the wall that triggered a faint chime in the room.

Within moments, the two guards who had been assigned to Mischief - the growlithe and pikachu - strolled through the door. The pikachu handed Cleo a paper bag.

“You will find everything you need in there,” said Tinker. “Now boys, could you please escort this fine fellow from New City? Don’t forget the blindfold.”

The guards motioned for Mischief to follow them, leading him from the room. Cleo got up to follow them and stopped at the door, closing it silently. She turned her head towards Tinker and bared her fangs.

“Would you mind explaining why you didn’t tell him he killed that noivern?” she hissed. “And why you’re still holding from him the fact he has pokerus?!”

“Simple,” said Tinker. “We told him in great detail what the world is like only last night. That’s a lot of information for him to take in. If we were to tell him now that not only has he contracted a mutated strain of pokerus, but that he also killed another pokemon with no memory of it, how do you think he’d react?”

Cleo blinked a few times and leant back against the wall.

Spark looked up at her sadly then turned back to Tinker. “It would break him.”

“Precisely,” said Tinker. “He may also decide to abstain from any mission I wish to send him on, and despite his condition, he is a very capable fighter and one of very few chances - if not the only chance - we have of turning this war in our favour. Perhaps even going so far as to defeat Hydreigon! I want Mischief to find his feet before I tell him any of this.”

Cleo made a thoughtful noise, but she wasn’t convinced. “And what of him being a Heretic? No one has told him that yet, and I think it’s within his right to know.”

“You really think it’s wise to impart that?” Tinker scoffed. “What if he decides to return to them in a bid to discover more about himself, and turn on us?”

“Yeah!” Spark snapped. “What if he does turn on us, Tinker? Like when he attacked Cleo? And you’re sending us off on some quest with him!”

Tinker smiled at that and leant against his desk. “Spark, my friend, if he does happen to lose control again, I think you two are more than capable of handling him. Just like you did the last time.”

Cleo and Spark exchanged glances and sighed.

“Fine,” said Cleo. “We’ll comply with you this time. But I think you’re being cruel not to tell him everything, Tinker.” She turned to leave the room.

“There’s such a thing as being cruel to be kind, Cleo.”

She faltered with her claws on the doorknob, and her fur bristled along her back.

“He’ll find out in due time,” Tinker went on. “I won’t keep it from him forever. Now take care, and I’ll see you all back here soon.”

She glanced back at him, but he’d returned to his desk, scratching away with his quill and ink. Dismissed. She motioned for Spark to get onto her shoulder, then she closed the door behind her and followed the corridor towards the exit.

The two guards were stood waiting with Mischief at the end of the corridor. Mischief was sporting a red blindfold which he appeared to be willing his paws to keep away from. The pikachu clutched his arm firmly and nodded when he saw them.

“This way,” he said.

The guards didn’t lead them towards the market hall. Instead, they followed a winding tunnel that was only used as an exit. It was narrow, forcing them into single file, and was lit up every few feet by a candle held in an iron beam. They walked in silence, to Cleo’s surprise. She’d expected at least some questions from Mischief.

The tunnel wasn’t alien to Cleo. She’d used it once before. It led to one of New City’s many exit hatches that was set up in such a way it could never be used as an entrance. Only two of New City’s gates could be used as both, and the general rule was that you never left the same way you came in. If one of Hydreigon’s soldiers saw you vanish and reappear again in the same place, then they’d likely assume that something was hidden there and New City may be found. So leaving by a different point greatly reduced that risk.

The pikachu stopped at the end of the tunnel and reached up to unlock the stone slab in the ceiling with his badge. It rotated to the side on its timed mechanism, and they helped Mischief through onto the surface. Cleo followed behind, setting Spark on the ground before clambering out just in time. The slab slid back into place, almost invisible in the stone floor.

Cleo stood and dusted herself down. They were now in a cave lit up by a trickle of daylight ahead of them. A faint drip echoed from deep within, the only sound save for the odd rustle of dry leaves from the wind outside. She took Mischief’s paw and led him out of the cave onto a mountain path.

She stopped to take in her surroundings, squinting against the dazzling sunlight. It was a lot brighter than initially lead to believe. She strained her ears, listening for any sounds on the wind, but as she expected there was nothing. They were called the Silent Mountains for a reason. The pokemon that had inhabited them had long since left, save for those who inhabited New City well beneath the surface. Even the wind made very little noise, and no pokemon had been sighted in the mountains for many years, save for the very occasional Guild Warrior. Cleo hadn’t marked it as a red cross on her map, since it was still safe for the Outcasts to step foot on. None of the Darkness had been sighted there… yet.

She moved them along until the cave mouth was well behind them. The mountain path was treacherous, littered with loose rocks that threatened to throw off their footing. A few slid away to clatter down the mountain side, making more noise than Cleo felt was necessary. Once the ground had widened out onto flatter land, they could finally spread out, and Cleo stopped to remove Mischief’s blindfold.

“Wow!” he exclaimed, rubbing his eyes with both paws. “It’s so bright!”

Cleo stiffened, glancing around them. Mischief’s voice echoed through the emptiness and she snapped back towards him, shushing him harshly.

“Keep it down!” she hissed. “We don’t want any unwelcome visitors.”

He nodded his understanding and placed a claw over his lips.

Cleo sighed and shook her head, continuing to lead the way along the path to the forest. He barely made any sound behind her, treading lightly… and a little slowly.

Cleo groaned inwardly and balled her paws into fists. This was going to be a long mission, if not a potentially fatal one.
Chapter 7 New


*Crazy Absol Noises*
Behind a laptop, most likely with tea
This chapter gets a little gruesome towards the end

7 - Disaster in the Mountains​

Hydreigon watched the throne room door close behind Harlequin’s black tail, and leant his head on one of his pincers. A long moment passed, but it was pretty evident the large dragon was listening from the way his head inclined on one side.

Finally, he said, “Enigma?”

The banette smirked from his corner. He leant back against the wall, trailing his fingers through the end of his long mane.

“I know you’re still here,” Hydreigon said. “It’s been a long time since I heard your bell.”

“Of course,” Enigma replied. “You usually send me out with Harlequin. I wanted to know what was so important that you had to send him out on his own.”

Hydreigon turned his head slightly to fix one red eye on Enigma. “Few pokemon would have such audacity to lurk in my throne room and eavesdrop.”

His voice sent a chill through the banette, and for a brief moment Enigma considered reducing his density enough to slip through the stone wall to safety. But Hyreigon turned away again and exchanged a silent conversation with his left pincer. Enigma thought he saw him make it nod.

“I want you to put that audacity of yours to good use, Enigma,” the dragon went on. “I have a special assignment for you.”

“Ooh?” Enigma pushed himself back from the wall to follow it around towards the door. “And what might that be?”

“As you well know, due to the incessant need you have to listen in on the conversations I have with your superiors,” Hydreigon said slowly, “Boomer was sent back here with information from the Heretics. However, that information never reached me.” He finished whatever silent conversation he’d been having with his pincer and rested his head on it, while the other traced the tiles on the floor. “Apparently it was from some Heretics deep in the Moorlands Forest. I want you to seek out those Heretics and retrieve that information for me.”

“By any means necessary.” Enigma nodded and turned towards the door. “Got it.”

“No!” Hydreigon’s roar shook the walls, freezing Enigma to the spot. “This is an intelligence mission, not an assassination! You gather the information and bring it back to me. That is all.”

“But what if they don’t speak?” Enigma feigned a pathetic expression that caused Hydreigon’s lip to curl. “They’re so much more willing to talk when I scare them a bit.”

Hydreigon’s voice rumbled through the air. “If you leave a trail of blood, Enigma, then I’ll leave a trail of yours all the way back to the Shadow Mountains! I want this information, and the dead don’t talk.”

Enigma raised his paws in defeat. “Okay, okay. I’ll do it the hard way.”

He grabbed one of the door handles to yank it open.

“Oh, and Enigma…”

A chill ran down the banette’s spine, and he fixed one eye back on the dragon. “Yes, boss?”

“Don’t mess this up.”

The warning note in that statement turned Enigma’s blood to ice. He swallowed around a lump in his throat and slipped through the door, closing it behind him.

Out in the hall, the air felt a lot lighter. He straightened out his scarf and let out a small chuckle as he headed for the main doors. So he got to play with the Heretics. This should be fun. He couldn’t deny that he was curious what information they were so desperate to get back to Hydreigon.

Maybe he’d even run into the three pokemon Harlequin had been sent out to assassinate.

He paused at the top of the castle stairs, high enough to see over the treetops of the Border Woods. He could just make out the vivid blue markings he was so familiar with just before they vanished into the trees. A chuckle escaped his throat and he leapt from the steps, vanishing in mid air. He reappeared at the edge of the courtyard, landing neatly on the stone wall. Another leap and he materialised on a sturdy bough of an ancient tree. He couldn’t teleport like psychic pokemon could. This method allowed ghost-type pokemon to cover ground more quickly, from one point to another provided they could see it from where they stood. It was efficient, but tiring.

He came to a stop in the canopy just inside the Border Woods and settled back against its trunk. He toyed with the tattered hem of his scarf, smirking to himself as he listened to the crunch of fallen leaves as Harlequin drew closer.

“If you’re thinking of pranking me, you’ve got another thing coming.”

A small, shaggy zorua rounded the bend in the path and fixed a pair of blue eyes on him briefly. Enigma tutted and rolled his eyes.

“That bell of yours might unnerve your targets,” Harlequin went on as they passed by beneath him. “But to me it’s like a siren. That’s why you’re so terrible at hide and seek.”

“You ruin all my fun.” Enigma stood and leapt across the treetops to keep up with the zorua. “Can’t you just play along?”

“What, you want me to act surprised?” Harlequin grinned up at him. “You’re an idiot.”

Enigma gave the zorua a playful glare. “The last pokemon to call me that didn’t even get the chance to apologise, Harle.”

Harlequin laughed and shook their head. “So… I guess Hydreigon has sent us out together again?”

“Not this time.”

“Really? Then why are you following me?”

“Argh!” Enigma clasped a paw to his chest and stumbled back into the trunk of a tree. “You seem unhappy to see me!”

Harlequin shook their head again, leaving Enigma to his melodramatic whimpering. Enigma warped two trees ahead and kept pace with the zorua.

“Hydreigon has sent me on an intel mission,” he explained. “So you’ll have to do without me this time.”

“I’m sure I’ll be fine,” said Harlequin. “It’s not the first time I’ve gone without your help.”

“Then hopefully you won’t mess up.”

“You have that little faith in me?” Harlequin gave him a playful grin.

“No, no!” Enigma tucked his paws behind his head, moving along the narrow branches with impeccable balance. “You’re a pro.”

“Sarcasm?” Harlequin raised an eyebrow. “Who bailed you out when we had to take out those outlaws?”

“I wasn’t expecting them to have an obstagoon in their ranks!” Enigma scoffed. “Any other day, I’d have fared just fine.”

Harlequin didn’t laugh at that, instead diverting their gaze to the shadows beyond the path. There was nothing there, it was just a means to hide their face.

Enigma decided it was probably best to change the subject. “So, are you heading to the Moorlands, or do you have another trick under your collar?”

“I plan to head to the Moorlands, unless I get wind of something else,” Harlequin answered. “That’s where those three pokemon were spotted last. I’m hoping I can pick up their trail, since it’s not rained in a few days.”

“So we’re going the same way?” Enigma chuckled. “That’s convenient.”

“Well, you might not want to stick with me,” said Harlequin, drawing a confused look from the banette. “I’m taking the river.”

Enigma’s heart sank. “The river?”

“I’m hiring a boat,” Harlequin explained. “It’ll get me there much faster, and I don’t want the trail to run cold.”

Enigma dragged his paws over his face and groaned.

“Like I said.” Harlequin grinned up at him. “You might not want to stick with me.”

“I hate boats!”

“Then you’re on your own!” Harlequin skipped on ahead, casting a sapphire glance back in the banette’s direction.

Enigma shook his head as he mused over his options. Travelling alone was so frightfully dull, and it was a long way to the Moorlands Forest. He watched after Harlequin for a little while, then resigning himself to his options, he kicked off the branch to land in the canopy just above Harlequin.

“I’ll stick with you as far as the river,” he said. “After that, we part ways.”

Harlequin tipped their head back and laughed. “Oh, you shadowy mess. We all know you’re going to get on that boat.”

Enigma mumbled under his breath, “We’ll see about that.”


“I don’t like this!” Spark squeaked. “I don’t like this one bit!”

Cleo couldn’t agree more. The mountain river had been reduced to a dry gorge. It wound its silent way down through the mountain slope, through the edge of the forest. The trees alongside it were almost entirely bare of their leaves. Not unusual at this time of year, but what was left of the leaves were shockingly dry. The low-growing plants and shrubs that surrounded them, along with every bulrush, drooped sadly, brown and withered. The further away from the river they plants grew, the greener they looked, while those in between were a sickly yellow.

“How on earth does an entire river just dry up like that?” Spark shook her head. “I don’t get it.”

“Neither do I,” said Cleo. “It’s unsettling. I can think of a couple of reasons, but the emptiness of these mountains debunks them all.”

“What? Like a snorlax fell asleep somewhere and blocked it?” asked Spark.

Mischief gave the dedenne a confused look then returned to gazing at the river.

“Kind of,” said Cleo. “But if that were the case, some water would still get by. A bibarel dam was my main guess, but… it doesn’t make any sense.”

“It’s not rained in a while, has it?” Mischief asked. “Maybe that’s the case.”

“No. If it was drought related, more damage would have happened inside the forest,” Cleo explained. “This looks almost deliberate.”

“A fire, maybe?” Spark suggested. “Maybe… I don’t wanna say it, Cleo, but…” She lowered her voice to a near-whisper. “The Wildfires?”

Cleo’s fur stood on end and she clutched her satchel strap, digging her claws into her fur. She didn’t want to think it could be Hydreigon’s ‘howling inferno’.

“I don’t know. Could they have dried up an entire river?” Her voice wavered at the thought. She paused to clear her throat. “But wouldn’t there be blackening on the trees? We’d need to get closer to investigate.”

“We’d need to find a way down first,” said Spark. “That slope is mighty steep.”

Cleo took a step back from the outcrop and nodded. “I kind of want to go back and see if the Guild is still getting water. But… no.” She shook her head. “I think we’re best trying to find the river’s source. That way, we can find out if something’s blocking it. It’s not entirely impossible there’s been a land slide.”

“How do we do that?” Spark asked. “It could be anywhere in this mountain. If we move too far away, then we’re gonna lose the river and have to back-track.”

“Spark’s right,” said Mischief. “We’ll need to listen for a spring, and follow it.”

Cleo gave the whimsicott a dumbfounded look. Listen for a spring? Well, the mountains were oddly silent, with only the odd breeze stirring through the foliage. But how would they listen for water?


Cleo turned her head back towards the river. If it was fed by a spring, then…

“It’s lower down,” she said.

“Eh?” Spark inched forward on Cleo’s shoulder to see her face.

“If it’s a spring that feeds it,” Cleo explained, “then the source would be lower down.”

“You’re jumping to conclusions,” Spark scoffed. “First find one flowing spring, and then jump to conclusions!”

“No,” said Mischief from behind them. “Water flows down! Not up!”

“Huh.” Spark inclined her head on one side and scratched her chin. “Good point. Then… Urgh, then we need to climb higher, right?”

“Not necessarily,” said Mischief.

Cleo turned to look at Mischief, who was stood several feet away with his ear to the ground and his bottom in the air.

“I hear water,” he said. “But it’s faint.”

“Because something’s blocking it?” Cleo asked.

Mischief stood and looked up at the slope beside them. Then he leapt into the air and drifted lightly up onto the loose rocks. Cleo braced herself, ready to scold the whimsicott for taking such a foolish risk, but his light footing didn’t dislodge a single one. He hopped over them like wind.

She let out a breath she’d been holding and leant back against a slender fir trunk. If she’d attempted that climb, she’d have caused a mini-landslide, sending both her and Spark tumbling back down to their deaths. Maybe Mischief had more use to the Guild than a mere trump card for Tinker?

She jolted back from the tree as Mischief vanished out of sight beyond a clump of ferns. Not wanting to lose him, she moved along the path until she caught sight of him again. He bobbed up and down as he pressed his ear to the ground, following the water source. After a while, he looked up at them and beamed, before skipping his way back down the slope.

“I’ve found it!” he said cheerily.

“Then shouldn’t you be following it?” Spark asked.

“I am! It runs right beneath your feet.”

Cleo looked down at her paws, then back up at Mischief. “How are you doing this?”

“I might have no memories,” he said. “But I know what water sounds like. I think it’s what you call ‘instinct’.”

Cleo blinked a few times. Of course. Many, many years ago, grass-type pokemon used to live around large bodies of water. Perhaps they were naturally drawn to it?

A smile spread across her muzzle and she stood aside, gesturing a paw. “Then lead the way.”

“Gladly!” he said. “We need to go down that slope.”

Cleo clenched her teeth together and turned towards the steep incline. This wasn’t going to be easy. She crouched on all-fours to peer over the edge, searching for the best way down. Her eyes fell on a cave several feet away, the lip of it protruding slightly from the rock face, the remains of an outcrop that had been clipped by a few too many landslides. Her first thought was that it would provide a convenient foot-hold as they slid their way down, even if it was a little out of the way of the spring’s flow, and a rather dangerous trip, to boot. But then she noticed the deep crevice leading out of it, curling and twisting to join the river below.

Mischief stood carefully behind Cleo, speaking in a low voice so as not to startle her over the edge. “Is everything okay?”

“Not really.” She swallowed dryly and pushed herself back up. “The source seems to be that cave over there. It… runs all the way through the mountain.”

“Is that a problem?” Mischief’s voice was thick with innocence.

Cleo seethed. Did he have no idea at all? “Of course it’s a problem!” She twisted on the spot to face him, but before she could elaborate her foot landed on thin air and she stumbled backwards.

Mischief grabbed her flailing paw and yanked her back from the edge, sending her sprawling onto her stomach. Spark rolled off her shoulder and sat up a couple of feet away. She shook her little head and fixed Mischief with wide, black eyes.

“Watch what you’re doin’!” she gasped.

Mischief’s face fell and he looked between the two of them. “I… I’m sorry.”

“No, it was my fault.” Cleo stood up and brushed a few stray pine needles off her fur. “I was careless.” She took a breath and glanced back at the steep drop. “You just saved my life.”

“Oh.” Mischief shrugged. “I guess I did.”

“That’s twice now…” She trailed off as confusion washed over the whimsicott’s face. Of course, she couldn’t tell him.

He tilted his head to the side. “Twice?”

“Yes.” She crouched down so Spark could hop back onto her shoulder. “You distracted that noivern, remember?”

“Nice save,” Spark mumbled in her ear.

“Oh yes!” Mischief beamed. “With my glowing green ball!”

“Energy ball,” Cleo corrected. “And I’m sorry, Mischief. I shouldn’t have snapped like that. Of course you’re not going to know where that cave leads.”

He shook his head slowly. “No. Is it bad?”

“It might be,” Cleo said quietly. “We’re going to have to find a way down, and fast. I have a horrible feeling in my stomach.”

“So do I,” said Spark. “And it ain’t hunger. That spring, the cave… where do you think it all goes?”

Cleo had her suspicions, but she didn’t want to admit it. Putting it into words would only solidify her fears. All she knew was that something was blocking off the water supply, and it could go one of two ways - a natural accident, or malicious intent.

She deeply hoped it wasn’t the latter.


The path down to the cave was a precarious one. After trekking back and forth for most of the morning to try and find another way down, they’d given up and decided to try out Cleo’s first idea - working their way down to the lip of the cave.

Mischief made it look easy, skipping over jagged rocks and splintered wood that jutted out at deadly angles. The remains of unfortunate trees that had received a pummelling from one too many avalanches. Cleo found herself noting each one while placing each paw carefully. One wrong move and she would soon find herself either impaled, or tumbling down the rest of the slope.

Loose rocks slipped beneath her paws, threatening to roll away. The fear she might cause a landslide increased with each one, and she clutched onto anything that her paws found desperately. She’d never been good on mountains. She’d grown up in a forest, surrounded by rocky planes. Everything had been flat. No need to climb, unless it was a tree. Climbing over rocks was very different to climbing a tree.

Spark scampered along beside Mischief with more ease than Cleo, yet she had her own problems. At one point, a small stone gave way and Spark slid down the slope on her belly, only coming to a stop when she was caught in some large leaves sprouting out of the rocky ground.

Finally, they reached the cave opening and perched on it. Going down either side would be a potentially deadly endeavour. The cave was a lot wider than Cleo had first thought, and it was a pretty nasty drop from all angles. The dried river was dotted with debris that could cushion their fall, but it also hid the rocks that would inevitably be there.

“So,” said Spark. “How do we get down?”

“Easy!” With a little hop, Mischief leapt from his perch and vanished over the edge out of sight.

Cleo strained to see over the edge, not wanting to shout for Mischief perchance there was someone lurking inside the cave. He poked his head out and looked up at them.

“Just do what I did,” he said.

“Are you kidding?” Cleo hissed. “I can’t float like you can.”

“You don’t need to,” he said. “Just hold onto the edge and drop.”

Cleo just stared at him, hoping he’d get the message.

“It’s not too far,” he said. “And if you slip, I can catch you.”

Spark shook her head slowly. “Having no memories has clearly left you oblivious to the fear of falling to your death, hasn’t it?”

“I’d hardly say that’s a bad thing,” he said.

Cleo tutted and moved so she had her back to the edge of the cave mouth. “Fearlessness leads to foolishness.”

Despite that, she took Mischief’s advice. There really was no other way. She clutched the edge of the outcrop and lowered herself. Her feet waved high above the ground, and she had to repress a frightened yowl.

Just drop.

She screwed her eyes shut and opened her paws. The wind rushed past her ears as her stomach seemed to leave her body. Pain radiated through her legs and she stumbled back, landing in Mischief’s arms. He steadied her back to her feet, and she took a few breaths to try and still her racing heart.

“That wasn’t so bad, was it?” he asked.

She restrained the desire to box his ears.

A soft ‘oof!’ came from behind her, and she looked back as Mischief removed Spark from the fluff atop his head. He set the dedenne on the floor, and she turned to look into the cave mouth.

This close up, Cleo confirmed one thing. The river was indeed dry. Not so much as a trickle flowed through it. An earthy smell rose up from the gorge where the debris, still damp since it didn’t get any sun, rotted away.

“No sense in standing here staring into the dark.” Spark shuffled past them into the cave. “I suggest we go inside.”

Cleo silently agreed and followed after her with Mischief in tow. The cave grew gradually darker until Spark decided it was too much and discharged electricity, causing her to glow brightly. The light reflected off the damp walls, making it seem colder than it was. The earthy smell grew stronger the further they ventured inside, but far ahead was the familiar gurgle of water.

The river expanded in width, pushing them into single file as they tried to stick to the natural path beside it. Cleo didn’t want to walk in the gorge. It felt off. The smell of rotting leaves was growing more and more foetid, and she clasped her paw over her muzzle to try and stifle it. It was almost unnatural.

“You said this cave leads through the mountain?” Mischief asked, causing a slight echo off the walls.

“Yes.” Cleo’s voice was muffled by her paw. “Pokemon have used it to get from one side to the other quickly. Personally, I’ve never taken this route. But it’s good to know about it.”

“Something doesn’t half stink,” said Spark. “I’m starting to think the water might be off. How long do you think it’s been stuck like this?”

“Going off the damage,” said Cleo, “I’d say a long time. It would be unusual for something like this to happen quickly.”

A breeze drifted through the cave towards them, drawing that horrible smell with it. Cleo almost gagged, stepping backwards into Mischief.

Spark spluttered and clasped her tiny hands over her face. “What on earth is that? All right, I take back what I said. That doesn’t smell like stagnant water, that smells like somethin’ dead!”

Joke or not, those words set Cleo’s fur on end. She stepped past Spark and scooted on ahead, treading carefully as the path narrowed out even more. The foetid smell grew stronger with every step, with the occasional intense whiff as the mountain breeze washed through the cave.

She froze as Spark’s electricity lit up the wall ahead of them. The rocks smoothed out, forming a perfect disk, complete with the Guild’s sun symbol. She placed a paw on it as her heart skipped a beat, before picking up at a gallop.

“Cleo,” Spark said quietly. “Did you know about this?”

Cleo shook her head, not wanting to voice her concerns. If this was a deliberate attack, then there was the dreadful possibility whoever had done it was still lurking.


She’d not wanted to believe this was deliberate. Just a landslide. A cave-in.

But that smell? Something was horribly wrong.

Spark scampered on ahead of her, leaving her and Mischief in brief darkness. As they moved on, that putrid smell grew stronger, and the darkness seemed to thicken so much so that Spark’s discharge barely seemed to penetrate it. An illusion, that’s all it was. Created by Cleo’s own fears that someone might be hiding in the shadows.

Spark rushed on ahead on her hind legs with her paws over her nose. Desperate to get this over and done with. Cleo trotted to keep up with her, one paw over her nose while the other had been claimed by Mischief who was struggling to see the way.

The gurgle of water grew louder, as if a large body of it was being fed by a waterfall. Cleo adjusted her paw over her muzzle as her stomach turned. That stench was incredibly intense. Spark’s light bounced across something just ahead of them, glistening with damp. Beyond it, several springs flushed out from the walls, pooling into the water below.

“Urgh.” Mischief released Cleo to clamp both his paws over his face. “I picked a bad day to have a large breakfast.”

“Then you might not want to look at this.” Spark was perched at the edge of the river, staring up at the glistening mound.

Cleo had to squint to work out what she was seeing. It looked at first like a rocky dam, holding back a large body of water. But at second glance, it was something a lot worse. Thick lumps of black, purple, yellow and red poked out from between huge rocks and twigs. She had to blink a few times to process it. They weren’t just mounds… and what she’d thought were twigs were actually bones. The rocks glistened with something sticky and indescribable, and Cleo felt her stomach flip as it threatened to empty its contents.

Mischief wasn’t so fortunate. He turned away from her as his breakfast made a swift exit.

Cleo’s eyes watered and she staggered into the wall, unable to tear her eyes off the dam. The smell seemed a lot stronger now she knew what was causing it.

One thing was for certain. This was very bad news. She had to inform Tinker.

Spark’s voice seemed oddly small and feeble, as if she’d been struggling to find it. “Cleo… What were they?”

Shadow of Antioch

Messina, Italy
Chapter 1 review:

You certainly know how to make good first impressions. The opening paragraph is superb!

This was not limited to the opening sequence: environmental descriptions were rich and vibrant all throughout the chapter. But what impressed me more, perhaps, was the spatial awareness you maintained throughout. I was always able to tell what the scenery around the characters was, how far one place or object was from the next, all contributing to paint a wide and vivid picture of the land.

The contents of your world are no less fascinating. Caravan villages that need to move every few months? What's this "Darkness" they're escaping? My first assumption is that the "Darkness" is this Hydreigon king's evil empire, but I have a hunch that's not the whole story. Heck, there's even a place called the Shadow Lands! That makes me imagine of a plague of sorts spreading across the land, not unlike the Abyss from Dark Souls.

... Oh. It is just the king's domains. Oops! Regardless, well, I'm still curious to see what this place looks like. What would push dark and dragon types to band together and go on a genocidal spree through the continent? Surely there has to be a grand reason for it. It'll be even more fascinating to read how that impacts their culture. Think about it: how does the population of the Darkness view dual-types? Hydreigon gets off easy because its line happens to be both dark and dragon, but what of Salamence? What of Bisharp? Judging by the last scene (and assuming Harbinger is working for the Darkness), dual-typing might not present a problem, but who knows. I can definitely see the topic causing social tensions.

In short, your world feels concrete and alive. I'd go as far as to argue that so far it's your strongest point, even. While I don't usually like worlds that split people into arbitrary groups (cough Divergent cough), the brief description you gave in the second-to-last scene dispelled that worry.

(For fairness, though, there was a single point when your environmental descriptions faltered:

Cleo nodded again and trotted through the town, searching out the familiar banner that marked the Guild. The white flag with its sun emblem waved above the rooftops, a beacon to all who were searching for the Guild for help or work.

“Whew!” Spark declared as they entered the door. “Well, I don’t know about you, Cleo, but I’m heading straight to that dinner hall.”
What does this Guild look like on the outside? Is it another wagon house? A larger building? Does it have a fence, pokémon outside, windows? It felt strange for them to see the flag in the distance and suddenly teleport to the door.)

Cleo and Spark are already looking to be quite the dynamic pair. While they didn't get a chance for a heart-to-heart, the few interactions they've had make me yearn for more. Spark appears to be the small-yet-headstrong, sassy member of the team, while Cleo... I still don't have a good enough read on her. She's obviously been worn down by the war, and is fiercely loyal to her cause beyond pure survival. I hope we'll see more moments on her own, where she has time to reflect.

Side note: Seeing Spark climb into the bag and pop out with an item was nothing short of adorable.

Odd for the leader of the Guild to be a Riolu. You'd expect it to be someone strong, with many years of exploring and combat experience behind them. Perhaps it's another reflection of the hard times this world is going through? That there are few veterans around left to guide the rest? To be fair, he speaks with quite the authoritative tone. I really appreciated the extra details that enrich him as a character, without necessarily having him do or say anything. His office being a mess being chief among those.

If there's one complaint I have so far, it lies with how easily Cleo and Spark dispatched the Weavile assassins at the beginning. And not just them, either:

“This coming from the meowstic who just laid waste to an army of jangmo-o?”
I'm... not quite sure how to feel about this. The story's summary, the opening sequence, and basically every other part of the chapter, make this world out to be dark and dangerous—one where death lies around every corner, and only the characters' wits can keep them safe. I expected more hiding and running away, you know?

“That’s because we’re losing.”

(...) No. It was no longer a war. Now it was just survival.

“Outcasts are being picked off day by day, you know that,”
Cleo and Spark are saying these things, yet it's hard to believe them after they've dispatched three assassins with ease, and allegedly dozens more before that. You later clarified that they were lower-tier troops, but even still, actions speak louder than words in a reader's minds. The tone you're trying to create and the dialogue speaks of one story, but the characters' actions speak of a completely different one. Why should I be worried about their safety? They've obviously got this. In the future, even when you're writing a character that starts off quite powerful, I nevertheless recommend giving them a challenge. Maybe the battle starts off in the protagonists' favour, but then one slip-up almost causes them to die?

Finally, here's a collection of random thoughts and comments:

She slipped from the room and yanked the door closed. But it didn’t slam. Instead it jammed over a mound of crumpled paper.
Lovely way to end a scene! It's a sentence that's built up to properly and feels powerful because of the tone you've created.

A huge moorland, trimmed on one side by a forest while the other side was dominated by a mountain that curled around the moors before it stretched away towards the north.
The description here is utterly beautiful! You can almost feel your eyes flowing over this map, following the lines and curls that you're describing.

Overall, fantastic job. I'll jump onto chapter two straight away.
Chapter 8 New


*Crazy Absol Noises*
Behind a laptop, most likely with tea
Thank you so, so much for such an encouraging and insightful review! It's really made me want to do my best re-writing this.

You certainly know how to make good first impressions. The opening paragraph is superb!
Thank you. I've had a lot of feedback from people who liked the opening paragraph in the original, so I kept it for the re-write. Both stories start exactly the same XD

I was always able to tell what the scenery around the characters was, how far one place or object was from the next, all contributing to paint a wide and vivid picture of the land.
This is great to hear. I strive to paint a picture. I have a descriptive style, and I'm so happy you're enjoying it =D

I'm still curious to see what this place looks like. What would push dark and dragon types to band together and go on a genocidal spree through the continent? Surely there has to be a grand reason for it. It'll be even more fascinating to read how that impacts their culture.
Oh you'll learn a lot about the Darkness and the Shadow Lands as the story goes on! Believe me!

In short, your world feels concrete and alive. I'd go as far as to argue that so far it's your strongest point, even.
Thank you so much ='D

What does this Guild look like on the outside? Is it another wagon house? A larger building? Does it have a fence, pokémon outside, windows? It felt strange for them to see the flag in the distance and suddenly teleport to the door.)
Thanks for pointing this out. I may look over this in the near future and see if I can fix it. I'd forgotten during my first-chapter tweaks this morning.

Side note: Seeing Spark climb into the bag and pop out with an item was nothing short of adorable.
Spark is an adorable ball of sass and I love writing her XD

Cleo and Spark are already looking to be quite the dynamic pair. While they didn't get a chance for a heart-to-heart, the few interactions they've had make me yearn for more. Spark appears to be the small-yet-headstrong, sassy member of the team, while Cleo... I still don't have a good enough read on her. She's obviously been worn down by the war, and is fiercely loyal to her cause beyond pure survival. I hope we'll see more moments on her own, where she has time to reflect.
Thank you =D Their interactions are great to write, and I feel they work really well together. They always have each other's backs. A majority of the story is written from Cleo's perspective so you will get a lot of insights as time ticks on!

Odd for the leader of the Guild to be a Riolu. You'd expect it to be someone strong, with many years of exploring and combat experience behind them. Perhaps it's another reflection of the hard times this world is going through?
Tinker is a lot older than he looks! I don't know if his everstone pendant came up in the first chapter? It should have. But yes, he's an odd one to lead the Guild. I wonder if there's a reason for that? ;)

I'm... not quite sure how to feel about this. The story's summary, the opening sequence, and basically every other part of the chapter, make this world out to be dark and dangerous—one where death lies around every corner, and only the characters' wits can keep them safe. I expected more hiding and running away, you know?
The opening chapter was inspired by Slayers, and in Episode One of the first season the main character Lina dispatches a band of bandits in one fell swoop. However, she does meet her fair share of difficulties in the series!

Cleo and Spark are very competent, strong Guild Warriors with a lot of experience under their belt. Whereas they can dispatch some foes easily, however, there have been and will be times they have to run away. Their combined strength allows them to be sent on missions like dispatching the kommo-o which are part fighting, and as expressed in Cleo's reiteration of their encounter, were also children. So Cleo being able to dispatch them easily (we didn't see the fight so we don't know how easily) shouldn't be much of a surprise! But yes, this tone change is one that has been brought to my attention and I have tried to fix without losing the flavour I wanted in the opening chapter. I even added a little bit more today concerning the weavile =D

If there's one complaint I have so far, it lies with how easily Cleo and Spark dispatched the Weavile assassins at the beginning.
As the writer, I know a lot more about the weavile. But yes, readers should get a little bit of a clue in. So I added a little bit extra to that specific scene this morning!

Lovely way to end a scene! It's a sentence that's built up to properly and feels powerful because of the tone you've created.
Thank you =3 Tinker's terrible office management was an addition to the re-write XD

The description here is utterly beautiful! You can almost feel your eyes flowing over this map, following the lines and curls that you're describing.

Overall, fantastic job. I'll jump onto chapter two straight away.
Thank you so much! This really means a lot to me =D I'm glad you're enjoying it and want to continue. I look forward to hearing more from you!

8 - A Nefarious Plot​

"Seviper," said Tinker. "Definitely seviper."

The riolu leant over the dry gorge, using Spark like a torch. Her light reflected off the damp, decomposing remains crushed beneath the rocks, making the jagged red spikes and pointed fangs shimmer in an unsettling fashion. It made the scene feel a lot more real than it initially had.

Spark's little face scrunched up, repulsed by the foetid smell that seemed somehow stronger. "Great. Can you put me down now?"

Tinker seemed reluctant to comply as he raised Spark higher to see behind the dam.

"I have one question," said Cleo. "Who did this to these pokemon? To build a dam out of their remains…" She shook her head and settled back against the wall, exchanging worried glances with a stout marshtomp. The aquatic pokemon gave Tinker a look that suggested the same question was on all their minds.

"I agree, it's abhorrent," said Tinker. "It will also have severely polluted the water supply. I dread to think of the damage it could have caused."

Could have? Cleo grimaced and looked back at the cave entrance. One of the first things she'd said during their trek back from New City's belly was that the plants along the river had died. But she'd never guessed it could have done more damage than that. The mountains were empty, save for New City.

There was a chance Tinker hadn't fully taken it all in. He'd been more occupied with finding a water pokemon who could investigate the dam, and had immediately recruited Skipper. Although Cleo was baffled as to why, since surely, like Tinker had said, the water would be filled with poison?

Skipper scratched his head fin, nudging aside a pair of swimming goggles. "No idea who done it then, Tink? 'Cos I'm outta ideas meseln."

Tinker finally set Spark back on the bank, getting a quick 'thanks' from the dedenne before she scampered away from the rotting mound.

"My first guess is an assassin," said Tinker. "Hydreigon does have a poison user in his ranks."

"Och, aye, that Harlequin." Skipper nodded.

"You think it's them?" Cleo gasped. First the noivern, and now Harlequin? "So it could be a direct attack from the Darkness?"

"It could be. I'm not ruling that out, and the thought is very unsettling." Tinker rubbed behind his ear in thought. "I mean, all rivers run away from the Shadow Lands, so to get rid of the remaining Outcasts en-mass, poisoning a major water source would do a pretty efficient job. But it would also mean Hydreigon's own soldiers wouldn't be able to use it if they were in the area, and a take-over would be delayed while the poison was given time to fade away. So it's a pretty counterproductive strategy, and not one I think Hydreigon would resort to unless he was desperate."

"So… you have doubts it might be Harlequin?" Cleo suggested.

"Not entirely," said Tinker. "But it could just be someone who has a grudge against the pokemon that live in this area. Anyone could move in at any point, and these snakes had to come from somewhere, so I won't rule that out either. But pretty much, whoever did it is clearly a vindictive soul." He gave the dam a sorry look and leant against the wall beside his friend. "I can only imagine the horror those poor seviper would have felt. I didn't even know such pokemon lived in these mountains. The poison-type pokemon are having a difficult time right now. They're being tracked and chased far away from their home in the Border Woods, and there are very few swamps to accommodate them this far south. If I'd known, I would have put some means in place to protect them."

"Could it have been a zangoose?" Spark asked, with some hope in her voice.

"While it's true the two species have some deep-rooted hatred for one another, I highly doubt it," Tinker explained, and Spark visibly deflated. "It's not like a zangoose to do this to another pokemon, no matter how they feel about them. Not to mention it could destroy an entire eco-system. No…" Tinker nibbled on a claw as his eyes turned distant. "This feels personal. Like whoever did it had a specific target in mind."

"Not New City?" Cleo asked.

"No." Tinker shook his head. "We've tapped into mountain springs and draw the water straight from them into an underground lake. It would be very difficult to taint those, although not impossible. And going off the state those bodies are in, I'd say this has been here for a few days at least."

"Aye," said Skipper. "An' this water ain't even risin' any higher. I'd say it's bein' sent elsewhere."

Tinker looked up at him with some surprise. "You believe it's being diverted?"

"Aye, right enough." Skipper nodded. "If our mysterious assassin wanted t'poison someone, I think it's safe t'say it ain't us, nor anyone livin' along this river."

"Then why poison it?" Cleo spat.

"Collateral damage," Tinker said before Skipper could reply. "The water would still have been running while this dam was being built. Whoever did it clearly didn't care, otherwise why not block the water first then poison what was left?" He sighed and looked back at the dam. "I'd like to call it a sloppy job, but the damage has been done."

"So how do we find out who the target is?" Cleo asked. "Mischief could follow the sound of the water, but…"

She gave a glance back to the whimsicott. He was sat against the wall with his paws clasped in his lap, trying to look anywhere but at the dam. It had been an awful shock to him. He'd only just re-learnt about the world, but to see this… it was like a wake-up slap. Reality dumped on him. She tore herself away to come back into Tinker's explanation half-way through.

"-someone into the water and have a look around." He stopped to tap his chin, but he had one eye fixed on Skipper. "This is where you come in."

"Hang on!" Cleo raised her paws. "Won't he be poisoned? He's not exactly immune to seviper venom."

"Sure enough, aye," said Skipper. "But I do resist it. Jus' keep a pecha berry handy, aye? Jus' in case I swallow any." The last part had been said with jest, but that didn't rule out the likelihood.

The marshtomp tugged his swimming goggles down over his eyes and jigged them about until they were resting comfortably in place. It hit Cleo then that Tinker had clearly understood the situation before he even summoned Skipper. The goggles would help to keep any toxic water out of his eyes, one of his weak points to absorb any. However, that didn't mean he wouldn't be at risk of filtering it through his gills. She quickly checked her bag to make sure she had a pecha spare.

"So I'm jus' lookin' fer where it drains off then, aye?" Skipper asked.

"Yes," said Tinker. "And for any sign of who might have done this."

"Alright, then stand back. I'll try not to splash, but ye cannae be too careful."

Tinker joined Cleo, Spark and Mischief against the far wall. Skipper slipped head-first into the water, sending no more than a little surge of water over the rocks and dam. Cleo waited with baited breath, her heart racing. But the soft sounds of splashing reassured her that Skipper was still moving around nimbly beneath the surface.

"It's good you found this," Tinker told Cleo. "Not only does it raise a potential member of the Darkness to our attention, but if there are pokemon living in these mountains then they may need our help."

"Unless they're all poisoned," said Spark.

"Try to be a little more optimistic," Tinker told her. "All it takes is one poisoned party to alert the rest to the danger. And there's a distinct possibility they will have been cured. But if they're out there, I want to find them."

Skipper's blue head popped above the surface, cascading water over his face. He swiped it away with a clawed flipper and nodded to the far wall.

"I can see where it's goin', sure enough, but th'hole's too small fer me."

"Don't worry about that, Skipper," said Tinker. "Can you see what made the hole?"

"Nay." Skipper shook his head. "It were made too long ago. Any claw marks've been washed away."

Tinker sighed and ran a paw over his snout. "Oh well. We've enough evidence for now. We can find out where the water is being sent and see if anyone needs our help."

"We should clear th'blockage n'all." Skipper clambered out onto the bank, careful not to splash as he was doing so. "That'll get th'river movin' again, an' away from where it's bein' drained out."

"We can't do that!" said Spark. "If we get the river moving again, all the poison will just flow into the lake!"

"While that's true, Spark, we do have pokemon fit for the job," said Tinker. "Skipper, I need you to recruit all breloom and shroomish living in New City. They can draw the poison out. I'll round up the excadrill and durant to dismantle the dam, and I'm sure Grey could lend a paw to hold back the water."

"Can we do anything?" Cleo asked. "Maybe look for who the targets were? Any survivors? We might find clues."

"You can continue your original assignment to find any evidence concerning that noivern," Tinker told her. "I appreciate you bringing this to my attention, but it's in my paws now. You don't need to concern yourself with this any longer."

"What if this has something to do with the noivern?" said Cleo. "We could follow the drain while you busy yourselves down here. Mischief can-"

"My orders are clear, Cleo," said Tinker. "That noivern poses more of a risk to us than this tainted water source, and I'm not going to have you deviating away from that to satisfy your curiosity. I have enough Warriors at my disposal to handle this particular task. You stick to your original assignment. Dismissed." He turned his back on her to head back into New City.

Cleo sighed and pushed herself back from the wall. Sure, they needed to know more about that noivern, but countless innocent pokemon could have been affected by this poisoning. She tried to push it to the back of her mind and turned towards the exit, but it incessantly nagged at her. Noivern, poison, a blatant attack… the pieces fell into place like a complicated jigsaw, each one not quite fitting when they felt like they should.

She paused beside Mischief, who was staring at his paws. He'd not made a peep since they'd found the dam. Not even when they'd gone to find Tinker.


He looked up at her, his orange eyes wide and fearful. Something inside her twanged, but she didn't let it show. If he was in her care, then he needed a strong leader who wasn't swayed so easily. But it was becoming increasingly obvious he wasn't cut out for this kind of work. Putting him through all this was just emotional torture.

"Come on." She moved past him towards the cave mouth. "We need to investigate the forest."

She didn't look behind her, but the soft shuffle of paws over stone told her he was following. And that the former spring in his step had been brutally beaten out of him.


Enigma could hear the rushing water long before he saw the river. He still continued along with Harlequin, enjoying the zorua's entertaining company before their path would part ways.

The voices of the river pokemon rose over the rush of water as it smashed against rocks, careening its way long the treacherous, winding rapids. Away from the Shadow Lands, like every river in Estellis. A mob of black-furred rodents milled about the riverbank, hoisting cargo from a narrow ship and onto the wooden docks. Several feet away, a huge, fat raticate barked commands to his smaller kin. Nothing was going onto the boat, but it wouldn't be long before the rattata found themselves with an unexpected assassin on board.

Above them, perched in the branches of an oak, a morpeko watched the oncoming pair. Taut as a tightly coiled spring, the rodent's cheeks began to spark. But he didn't need to say anything.

Harlequin skipped over to the raticate, head held high. "Ahoy!"

Several of the rattata looked up as the zorua approached, and the raticate raised an eyebrow. The mob turned slightly on the defencive, tails raised, and a couple of them freed their paws as subtly as they could manage. Harlequin noticed, obviously. They wouldn't have become one of Hydreigon's aces if things flew so frequently under their radar.

"Nice boat," Harlequin went on.

"Aye," said the raticate. "Riverclaw's one of me best." He paused and twitched his whiskers. "Took a long time to build after a bunch o' weavile sank me last one."

Enigma chuckled under his breath. Oh, this was going to be good. He warped up into the branches of a tree, his bell just audible over the roar of the river. One of the rattata's ears twitched and he looked up into the branches, face pale. Then he pointed a claw and squeaked something the banette didn't catch.

Hundreds of eyes followed, fixing on the ghost. The raticate bared his sharp incisors and lowered his head at Harlequin.

"What are you two doin' over here?" he snapped. "We ain't done nothin'!"

"I was actually hoping I could travel on your boat," Harlequin explained. They gave a nod towards Enigma. "Can't speak for him, but I can assure you he won't hurt you."

Enigma examined his claws, saying nothing. The trembling rattata below him flocked around their boss, keeping their red eyes on the ghost in the tree. The morpeko looked ready to bound across to him at any moment, sparks sizzling over his patchwork fur. Enigma settled down with his back against the trunk, each jingle pushing the rat-mob's fur on end.

The raticate fixed a glare back on the zorua. "You want to travel on my boat?" He spat each word with disgust.

"I can pay?" said Harlequin. "I never expected a free trip. I need to get to the Moorlands quickly, and I know how fast and efficient your boats are. Being able to travel in this river? Most pokemon who tried to swim in it would end up dead."

An attempt at flattery.

The raticate's eyes narrowed. "Aye, that they would."

A threat.

Enigma tucked his paws behind his head and grinned. At this rate, Harlequin would need to steal that boat in order to ride it.

Harlequin looked up at the boat and clicked their tongue. "How much? Ten gold?" They turned back to the raticate, who's glare had widened into a look of utter bewilderment. "Ten gold to ride this boat under the protection of your crew?"

"Ten gold?!" the raticate wheezed. "I barely get one per crate!"

"Okay, ten gold and my word," Harlequin went on. "I won't harm a single member of your crew or any other outlaw on board, nor relay your journey, plans or location back to Hydreigon."

The raticate spat at that, but there was a glimmer in his eye. "Sparin' us outlaws surely means your own death?"

"You'd be aiding me on my quest to avenge Boomer." Harlequin shook their head. "I hardly doubt Hydreigon would care?"

The raticate puffed air from his nose and gave a curt nod. "Very well. Get on me ship. We set off as soon as every crate is unloaded."

Harlequin looked up at Enigma and smiled. "I guess this is where we part ways?"

Enigma waved a dismissive paw and settled back against the tree.

The raticate nodded in his direction. "What about him? I've not exactly had his word he won't say nothin'."

Harlequin looked up at Enigma again, meeting his eyes. It was only brief. The zorua tucked a small pouch of gold into the raticate's paws, then turned to head towards the ramp onto the ship.

"I can't speak for him," Harlequin explained. "But I highly doubt he's going to betray me."

The raticate muttered something inaudible and returned to stacking the crates on the docks. Money in paw, he was a lot more placated, yet still clearly disgruntled at giving a lift to one of Hydreigon's assassins.

Enigma toyed with the hem of his scarf, watching the ship curiously. Harlequin stood on the deck, paws on the gunwale, as they looked over at the racing rapids. Rattata moseyed around the zorua, stepping carefully, as they unloaded the remaining crates.

Already, Enigma could feel the boredom setting in. As soon as that ship left, he'd be travelling the rest of the way solo. Harlequin would most likely make it to the Moorlands before he did, and complete their mission, leaving Enigma to travel both ways alone.

How boring that would be.

He dragged his claws through his mane and groaned. Oh, he was going to regret what he was about to do. With a quick flourish, he manifested before the raticate.

The large rat screeched, keeling backwards with his stubby paws flailing. Enigma stifled a chuckle, but he couldn't hide the smirk. He leant against one of the crates and wiped his claws on his scarf.

"Room for one more?" he asked.

The raticate smoothed out the fur between his ears with both paws as he regained his composure. "And what are you gonna pay me? Eh?"

"How about I spare you and each and every one of your crew?" Enigma fixed the rat in a crimson glare. "You are traitors, after all."

A tremor ran through the rat from his ears to the tip of his tail. "V-very well."

Enigma nodded and kicked back from the crate, his scarf billowing around him. "That's what I like to hear."

He warped onto the ship, landing neatly beside Harlequin. The zorua looked up, their eyes twinkling with amusement, and inclined their head on one side.

"I thought you hated ships?"

Enigma scoffed and folded his arms along the gunwale beside them. "It would be boring to travel alone."

"When are you going to just admit you get lonely?"

"I don't get lonely," Enigma said bluntly. "I get bored."

Harlequin laughed and shook their head, turning back to the rushing rapids. Beads of water clung to the black fur of their face, sparkling in the noon sun.

"Whatever," said the zorua. "It'll be nice to have a bit of company, anyway."

"I don't know what company I'll be." Enigma eyed the water warily and turned his back on it, leaning against the cool, damp wood and glaring out at the outlaws. "But it'll get me there faster."

"You never know," said Harlequin. "Maybe you'll find your river-legs."

Engima felt there was a much bigger chance he'd suddenly sprout fins.


Hydreigon's library had been burned down a long time ago, taking any manuscripts with it. Yurlik didn't remember any of them. He wasn't a reader. But there'd been rumours of what it had contained. History. Folktales. Stories told to hatchlings. The library had been older than the Shadow Lands, but had been left to stand for years out of interest. Until Hydreigon had instructed the Wildfires to destroy it.

Regardless, Hydreigon remained focused on finding something that he'd discovered in that library. There was no record of its location, just a vague description. Yurlik had lost count of how many times he'd had to explain this to the various troupes scattered around the Shadow Lands.

"If we don't know where it is," said a noibat, "or what it looks like… then how can we find it?"

Yurlik glared up at the army of upside-down faces peering at him. Every small bat in his swarm had clamoured around, blocking the entrance to their shared cave.

"I told you, Echo," Yurlik spat. "It glows red. Hydreigon said you'll know it when you find it. That's all I can tell you."

"It could be under the earth, and we don't dig," said the noibat. "Even worse, it could be under water!"

"We have pokemon for that," said Yurlik. "You keep an eye open, and feed back to us if you need help uncovering it. Understood?"

"We can't take anyone else with us?" Echo asked. "No ground forces?"

"I need to spread them out as much as I can," Yurlik explained. "Estellis is huge, and this cocoon could be anywhere."

"And what would stop the Outcasts finding it first?" one of the other noibat asked.

Yurlik clicked his beak at that, and met the bat's large eyes. "I've been told if they find it, they'll die."

The swarm rustled their wings, a faint buzz growing in intensity as the noibat grew excited.

"Such power!" one of them said. "Does it really exist?"

"Of course it exists!" Yurlik snapped, plunging the swarm back into silence. "Do you question Lord Hydreigon?!"

Echo turned his head to glare at the smaller bat.

The noibat who'd raised the question looked shrewed and cowered back behind his allies. "Of course not…"

"Good," said Echo. "Watch your mouth, Rumble, or you'll find yourself cleaning the guano pit."

Yurlik cleared his throat, drawing Echo back to him. "So I can trust you with this task?" It wasn't a question.

"Well, if it will really help us take over all of Estellis…" Echo spread his wings and yawned. "Fine. We'll take off at sundown."

"Split into four groups," said Yurlik. "Your army is big enough to spread out over Estellis without weakening your forces too much."

Echo waved a wing, which Yurlik felt was meant to be a salute but seemed rather dismissive. The honchkrow's oily feathers stood on end along his back. He had to remind himself, despite the noibat's size, since Boomer was out of the picture the smaller bat had taken over the swarm. It wouldn't be long until he evolved. Yurlik might be his superior, but he didn't want to find himself on the receiving end of a boomburst just for riling up the noibat who was still adjusting to his new position of authority.

Echo turned to head back into his cave, but paused as he let out a small 'oh!' He turned his head back towards Yurlik.

"What about Boomer?" he asked. "Any news on his murderer?"

"Lord Hydreigon has sent Harlequin to deal with those pokemon," said Yurlik.

"Really?" Echo raised his eyebrows. "I heard it was a whimsicott who killed him?"

Disgust laced the noibat's words, along with a hint of disbelief.

Disbelief… it was safe to say that was the growing trend throughout the Shadow Lands. A whimsicott… one of those little grass-types couldn't fell a dragon, let alone a full-grown noivern. Not on their own. Even Yurlik was beginning to doubt the words of his own flock who claimed to have witnessed the massacre. Only two pairs of eyes, and two beaks to speak of it. The cowards had fled. Surely there could be some mistake?

But the evidence was there. Blunt trauma wounds marred the noivern's body, reducing him to a bruised and sticky pulp. And then there were the tell-tail tufts of white fluff stuck to the dried blood that coated his body.

"Yes," Yurlik told Echo. "It was a whimsicott."

Echo's lip curled and he pulled his ears back. "Really? I wonder what it could do to the rest of us?"

What, indeed?

Echo ducked back into the cave, and the swarm closed in behind him before they were swallowed by the darkness within.

His words lingered long after he'd gone. Yurlik stood there, shuddering.

What on earth was wrong with that whimsicott, that it could take down a dragon? Hydreigon had his concerns, but he hadn't voiced them to Yurlik. But the large dragon was definitely afraid. Enough so to put emphasis on finding that cocoon.

A cocoon that may or may not exist. Yurlik's own concern, one he dared not speak out loud.

He deeply hoped Harlequin could make swift work of that whimsicott, before it became a huge problem.


Mew specialist

It's been a while since I last reviewed this fic, sorry about that. Having read this chapter, I did like it for the most part.

The first half had a neat concept for how ghost types get around, and we got to see that Enigma is still scared shitless of Hydriegon despite his cocky nature. And he has a Zorua teammate, Harlequin. The two appear to be assassins and Enigma seems to enjoy murder, so that crosses them off my list of favorable characters. I do like their personality and synergy, but not being able to really like remorseless killers is more of a preferential dislike for me than a criticism of the characters as a whole sorry.

On other things, I did enjoy seeing Mischief showing more usefulness to his peers outside of just being an anti dragon weapon. His borderline innocent outlook on most things is still charming, and I enjoy seeing his personality bounce off of Cleo's. The content warning had me worried there would be gore of characters getting mauled to death or something, but at least it was just a corpse of some kind. I wonder how it ended up there and why?