K_S
Unrepentent Giovanni and Rocket fan
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I can wait for you to finish then hunt down the comic for a compare contrast after the fact...
Alright, so I’ll just get this out of the way first. You should not, under any circumstances, be telling readers “go look up these characters if you don’t know them.”Though future chapters will require knowledge of characters like Hareta and Mitsumi so look them up if you're unfamiliar.
I love this as an opener. I don’t know the Manga, but this tells me that it’s after their big defeat and that things may have gone differently than the canon I know (which is a huge plus to me lol). I also really like the way it sets our POV character out in front of us right off the bat.The first thing Saturn had heard was that Cyrus hadn't put up a fight.
Here’s what I meant. I know you’re probably not trying to bog the fic down, but if this character is important, then their significance should be explained in the fic (even if it’s not explained at this point).there had been no 01, not after Mitsumi left,
I kinda wondered why Charon apparently took over Galactic after Cyrus lost. It never really got explained, and the fact that everyone disliked him made it more confusing.Charon's recent actions, how prepared he was for everything, told Saturn that this was something Charon had planned well in advance, as if he knew Cyrus's failure as surely as any other element of the plan.
Lol, the matter of fact-ness of this makes me smile. Like, Saturn isn’t wrong that people probably want to kill Cyrus, but he’s probably not wrong that some would want to see him for other reasons.thought that anybody would see him again so soon was...difficult.
Ho boy, Charon really doesn’t think much of Cyrus, eh?He's just 'Cyrus' now. Some pathetic little wretch who thought he could play god.
Me too, Saturn. Me too. The smug little prick seems to need it.Saturn wanted to deck Charon full in the face,
Well, being entrusted with the safety of a man who you served unquestionably and attempted to kill you all the same (probably some other “bad boss” shit as well) would undeniably be A heavy burden to bear.The key was as light as any other but for some reason, Saturn felt a weight to it that went beyond the thin metal.