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Pokémon Pocket Monsters

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SparklingEspeon

Insquisitabilitating
Pronouns
She/Her
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Pocket Monsters is a very weird fic of mine. One of my first attempts at writing a fanfiction of any kind was when I was thirteen and had had only watched the Pokemon Anime and a few game walkthroughs. I saw a tabloid report upon the possibility of a Detective Pikachu Movie (back in 2016 those were only rumors, and stayed that way for almost two years afterward), and then spent the next half hour watching mock-up pokemon movie trailers on youtube. I’ve always loved movies, and the thought wouldn’t leave my head: What if there was a Pokemon Movie? A real one, not the silly things the anime did to showcase legendaries? I searched the internet for examples, but to no avail – it seemed I would have to fill the gap no-one else realized existed. And so naïve, thirteen-year-old me set out on a grand journey to write the first Pokemon Movie.

As I later figured out, however, Pokemon Red/Blue does not fit very well into a movie (Also, I was not a very good screenwriter – one of the earliest drafts looked like an awful attempt at computer-programming and had Ash as the main character). I put the project down for a couple of years, then came back to it in mid-2020 and fixed it up into its current version. Pocket Monsters is now a television script – or rather, a series of them. All of Pokemon Red/Blue has been adapted into the first “””season””” of this. Depending on how these are received, I might try to cover other games in subsequent “seasons” too!

Beat – A pause in the flow of the scene.

Continuous – The weather/setting of the titled scene is exactly the same as whatever was in the last one.

Int. – Interior.

Ext. – Exterior.

Cont'd – This means that a character will continue speaking even after they break off from their original line of speech.

O.S. – The character is off-screen when speaking.

V.O. – The character is speaking, but not present in the scene.

CUT TO – go straight to the next scene.

SUPER – Text on screen.

CUT TO BLACK – The screen goes black. Usually signals the end.

Season One:
Episode 1: Dreams
 
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Season One - Episode One

SparklingEspeon

Insquisitabilitating
Pronouns
She/Her
Based off the games by Nintendo and Game Freak


Written by SparklingEspeon



Pocket Monsters

Episode One: Dreams



OPEN ON:



INT. POKEMON MANSION – NIGHTTIME

Dirty stone steps.

A door BANGS in the background…

…And a RESEARCHER with long golden hair dashes down the stairs.

Running for his life.

Lights flicker.

A silver POCKETWATCH dangles from his belt as he dashes for the ROOF TRAPDOOR at the end of the corridor—

-BANG. Researcher spins on his heels.

A not-quite-human silhouette stands in front of the steps. Dripping.

Researcher stands frozen. Horrified.

A loud buzzing begins to whiz through the air, before-

-The lightbulb above the creature SHATTERS into a thousand pieces.

Researcher springs into frenzied action-

-Rushing to the end of the corridor as lights flicker and POP consecutively-

-He reaches the end of the hall-

-Pop-

-He lowers the ladder-

-Pop-

-He fiddles with the lock-

Pop-pop-POP-

-Researcher throws the door open-

EXT. POKEMON MANSION – CONTINUOUS

-And staggers onto a beach at night.

The massive silhouette of the POKEMON MANSION blots out the sky.

Suddenly, it EXPLODES in a blast of light and fire-

-Researcher is thrown back-

-And pinned to the ground by a large piece of wood.

The MAN IN BLACK, an imposing figure in a trenchcoat, watches from afar on the beach. He stands unflinchingly as a shockwave of sand engulfs him and blows away his FEDORA.

FROM A DISTANCE: Someone else scrambles out the door of another structure to see the burning house…

WITH RESEARCHER: Researcher struggles under the beam. His Pocketwatch lies nearby in the sand; he sees it.

Researcher stretches his hand out towards it, but it’s just out of reach.

Behind him, the CREATURE floats above the flames of the burning house, a silhouette. Its flickering oval EYES fly open, locking directly on Researcher.

Researcher reaches harder for the pocketwatch. No dice.

A telekinetic force BLASTS the wooden beam off Researcher-

-The same force THRUSTS him into the air-

-Researcher floats helplessly.

The creature MOVES to Researcher at inhuman speeds and clutches his face. It’s INSPECTING HIM.

For a moment, there’s silence. The creature snorts into Researcher’s face.

Telekinetic powers release Researcher, and he plummets back towards the ground—

-The world is BLURRED and FUZZY and filled with RINGING. Researcher staggers to his feet. His pocketwatch lies near him, forgotten.

MIB watches, a silhouette in the distance. Unmoving.

Researcher stretches his hand out towards him for help…

…But no help comes. Researcher collapses. He lies unconscious in the sand next to his pocketwatch, which GLISTENS in the flames…

SLOWLY FADE TO BLACK.

INT. BLACK SCREEN

SUPER:

POCKET MONSTERS

OPEN ON:

EXT. VIRIDIAN CITY – RAINY AFTERNOON


VIRIDIAN CITY, a tight maze of dirty buildings amid clouds and LIGHT RAIN.

SUPER:
Viridian City

INT. VIRIDIAN CITY – CONTINUOUS

The streets are no less rainy, but practically deserted. Two POKEMON TRAINERS run by with backpacks on their heads, laughing hysterically to each other.

They pass a MAN who walks down the street with a PARCEL in his hands. Shrewd. Stoic. Vigilant. This is DETECTIVE LOOKER. He’s heading for the POKEMON CENTER that’s just down the street.

Looker stops at an INTERSECTION. He turns to look at the VIRIDIAN GYM, which is now a pile of rubble behind Crime Scene Tape.

Someone accidentally NUDGES Looker in passing. He drops the parcel—

-It lands on the ground.

Looker crouches to retrieve it and turns around to view the aggressor. The Man in Black stares back at him from across the street. His face is OBSCURED by the fedora.

Beat. MIB stands unnaturally still.

Looker picks up his parcel. He adjusts his overcoat. He walks away.

INT. VIRIDIAN CITY POKEMON CENTER – CONTINUOUS

Looker enters the VIRIDIAN CITY POKEMON CENTER, which is dry and well lit. The bored CLERK at the desk listens to the radio as Looker approaches.


RADIO NETWORKING
In light of the recent attacks by
criminal organization Team Rocket,
authorities have-

The Clerk shuts off the radio as Looker approaches. He slides a card on the table.

LOOKER
I’m looking for a room.

The Clerk looks at the card.

CLERK
One-Hundred Kay-Ar…

LOOKER
Looker.

The Clerk frowns, but swipes the card anyway. She begins to punch things in.

CLERK
So, you’re a police officer?

LOOKER
Essentially.

CLERK
Essentially?

LOOKER
Essentially.

The Clerk taps some more buttons.

CLERK
I know someone who works in that
profession. Aaall the way in Saffron
City. Haven’t heard back in a while.
To be honest I get a bit worried
nowadays.

LOOKER
Sometimes, your feelings hold you
back.

CLERK
Sometimes, they can save your life.

She slides him his card back, along with a ROOM KEY.

CLERK
Third room on the second floor;
checkout at Noon sharp.

Looker nods and takes the card and key.



INT. POKEMON CENTER ROOM – CONTINUOUS

Looker enters the POKEMON CENTER ROOM, which is all battered up and in serious need of some TLC. He sets the parcel on the DESK and flips the light switch. ONE OLD LIGHTBULB flickers on.

Looker sits down. He opens the parcel and removes several sheets of PAPER, a PEN, and a DUSTY LEATHER NOTEBOOK.

Thunder crashes outside. The window’s curtains are open. Looker gets up and walks over to draw them, but then he sees: OUTSIDE, the Man in Black stands. Looking up at his window.


EXT. VIRIDIAN CITY POKEMON CENTER – CONTINUOUS

Looker stares out of a second-story window, and pulls the curtains SHUT-

CUT TO:

EXT. PALLET TOWN – MORNING

It’s SUNNY. We see PALLET TOWN from above, a small village located amongst sprawling green fields and stunning waterfront property. In the distance, there’s a lighthouse.

SUPER: Pallet Town

INT. PALLET TOWN – CONTINUOUS

The buildings of Pallet Town are scarce and quaint. Few reach above two stories.

A CATERPIE slowly climbs to a House-BELLSPROUT that sits in the potted plant of a second-story window…

Several SPEAROW alight upon a cream-colored sign standing in front of the woods- The PALLET TOWN ENTRANCE SIGN.

INT. RED’S BEDROOM – CONTINUOUS

The bedroom is dark and cluttered. It's still morning. An ALARM CLOCK on a dresser RINGS…

…And wakes RED (11), who very much doesn’t want to be awoken. Red expertly SLAMS his hand down on the stop button-

-But it lands on a squeaky toy PYUKUMUKU instead. The ringing continues. Red sits up in his bed, confused. The alarm clock is all the way on the OTHER side of the desk. That’s by design.

Red inwardly groans: Are you kidding me? He tries to reach for it, but it’s too far-

-Red topples off the bed. He groans. He sits up. He tries to get up-

-But his feet become entangled in the YELLOW TENT on the floor-

-And he trips AGAIN. The alarm clock is still ringing.

Red pulls himself up to the dresser with his hands and reaches for the clock-

-And finally STOPS it. 7:30.

Beat. Red sits back against the dresser, exhausted.

A large commotion suddenly erupts outside Red's window. Red looks at the window. He shakes the tent off his feet and pulls himself off the floor.

At the window, Red parts the drapes-

OUTSIDE: BLUE (12), a loose-clothed, smug-faced boy with sandy hair, performs parlor tricks for a gang of whooping children. Blue finishes his juggling act and smugly bows to applause.

Nonplussed, Red shuts the drapes.

INT. RED’S HOUSE – CONTINUOUS

Red tromps down the stairs and enters the LIVING ROOM. RED'S MOTHER (30's) talks on the phone as she washes dishes.


RED’S MOTHER (Into Phone)
Yes. Yes, he did. He invited me over
for lunch today, in fact-

Red grabs an APPLE from a fruit bowl on the table.A TELEVISION SET adjacent the dining table buzzes with static. Red kicks it, and the static is replaced with the image of four boys walking down railroad tracks.

RED’S MOTHER
Red!

Red spins. Red's Mother looks at him from the kitchen.

RED’S MOTHER
I'm going out today. You can make
yourself breakfast.

Red nods. She goes back to her conversation.

RED’S MOTHER (Into Phone)
I know, I didn't believe it either
when he told me!

Red grabs a KHAKI-COLORED BAG from the coat hanger. He searches the shelves above it, but finds NOTHING.

Red approaches his Mother in the kitchen.


RED
Mom? Where's my hat?

She can't hear him over the dishes and the phone.

RED RED’S MOTHER
Mom. …Yes, kids can be a handful-

Mom. (To Red)

MOM! What is it?!

RED
I can't find my hat.

RED’S MOTHER
It's on the counter. It found it
lying around on the floor.

Red looks around for and snatches a red/white SPORTS CAP with a grey button off the counter.

He mumbles his thanks, and places the hat on his head.

He walks to the front door and slowly parts the curtains next to it…

Outside, Blue makes an inaudible declaration. He throws a STICK in the air.

Red closes the drapes before it lands.

Red's Mother sets a stack of cleaned dishes on the counter.


RED’S MOTHER (Into Phone)
Tell me about it. I've lost count of
the amount of times we've had our house
Tee-peed by those kids.

Red slings the bag over his shoulder, and heads down the hallway…

…To the BACK DOOR.


RED’S MOTHER
Red! Why are you leaving through the
back door? Use the front, please.

Startled, Red turns around. So close.

RED
But-

RED’S MOTHER
No 'buts.' I won't have you scurrying
out the back door like some undignified
scoundrel. Use the front. Now.

EXT. RED’S HOUSE – CONTINUOUS

The door to Red's house slowly opens, and Red reluctantly steps out. He slowly walks down the porch steps. They CREAK as he goes.

BLUE, twirling his stick, approaches Red from the street.


BLUE
Yo, freakshow! Reddy-boy.

Red ignores him.

Blue slaps him on the shoulder and shoves him towards the child-mob.


BLUE
Get over here; join the show!

Red adjusts his bag and begins to walk away from Blue. He throws an apple core in the trash can as he passes.

BLUE
I'm sorry, what's that? Couldn't hear
you.

Blue's mockery is popular with the other kids. They hoot and jeer in approval.

BLUE
Delcatty got your tongue?

Red adjusts his hat to cover his face. Blue begins to walk after Red. Red walks faster.

BLUE
Bet it does. Hiding behind that hat
like a stinking coward-

Blue reaches over with the stick-

-And PLUCKS Red's hat right off his head. He dangles it in the air.

Red turns around and grabs for it. Blue mirthfully holds it out of his reach.


BLUE
What, this?

He waves the hat above Red.

BLUE
Ya want this back, ya gotta talk to
me.

The children laugh as Red jumps for the hat. Blue effortlessly holds it away from him.

BLUE
Just a couple of words, can't be that
hard-

-Blue sticks out his foot and TRIPS Red-

-He hits the ground hard.

Blue throws the hat to the child-mob. He picks Red up by the shirt, and pins him to the wall.


BLUE (Hushed)
Say it. 'I'm a stinking coward.'

Red remains silent.

BLUE
Say it!

He holds Red tighter.

BLUE
Say. It.

Red struggles to breath…

RED
-I'm-A-Stinking-Coward!

Blue releases him. Red gasps for breath.

BLUE
Good. Loser.

He leans in, just for a second-

BLUE (Hushed)
Gramps wants you over at his lab
tomorrow, but if you've got half a
brain in there you’re not gonna show
up. Got it?

Blue shoves him lightly and retreats. He takes the hat from a young boy and throws it at Red.

BLUE
Here. take your trash.
(To Child-Mob) C’mon, this is boring
now! Let’s go TP someone’s house!

Everyone cheers at that. Red, shaken, dusts off his hat and scampers off.

CUT TO:

OAK RANCH PATHWAY - AFTERNOON

Red walks down a dirt pathway surrounded by fields, past the football-field-sized glasshouse that is PROFESSOR OAK'S LABORATORY.

He gazes up at the glass building as he passes. It’s massive.

PALLET TOWN OUTSKIRTS – CONTINUOUS

A vibrant purple FLOWER grows outside the TALL GRASS.

In the distance, Red's bag leans against the PALLET TOWN ENTRANCE SIGN.

Red chucks Poke-ball sized STONES at a TARGET TREE located just a few meters from the tall grass and the LOOMING FOREST.

None of them are hitting.

PALLET TOWN OUTSKIRTS – SUNDOWN

The sky is now golden.

Red holds his last stone in his hand.

He closes his eyes and concentrates…

…And throws the stone-

-It soars over the tree and up into the canopy.

Flocks of PIGEY fly away from the tree he hit and nearby ones.

Red leans back against the sign in defeat. He lets out a groan of frustration, and looks to the sky. He sees the STORM CLOUDS that are building on the horizon.

Red snatches his bag away from a bowl of stones as he walks back to Pallet Town…

CUT TO:

EXT. SAFFRON CITY - MIDDAY

A large metropolis of glittering skyscrapers and shining towers that only get larger until we see The SILPH COMPANY, crown jewel of the Kanto Region.

SUPER:
Saffron City – Capital of the Kanto Region

EXT. SILPH CO. BUILDING – CONTINUOUS

A BLACK TRUCK pulls up to the building's grand entrance as the Man in Black heads through the massive front doors…

INT. SILPH CO. LOBBY – CONTINUOUS

…And walks into Silph Co.'s massive LOBBY- Larger than a ballroom. A FOUNTAIN of a Poke-ball forms the lobby's centerpiece.

NEWS CREWS gather around an empty STAGE near the far end of the room. MIB leans against one of the massive pillars supporting the roof, and watches from a distance.

Waiting…

…A VOLTORB, half red, half white, rolls onto the stage.

It COMBUSTS-

-Into dazzling FIREWORKS that sparkle and fizzle out above the crowd.

Applause. Cameras flash. MIB watches.

An elderly man in a suit walks onstage and basks in the deafening applause. This is the SILPH CO. DIRECTOR.

Director bends over, picks up the two halves of Voltorb, and clicks them back together.

He sets Voltorb on the ground, who comes to life and rolls circles around Director.

Quick as a flash, Director pulls a POKE-BALL from his belt and presses the button-

-Scarlet ropes of light shoot out of the ball and latch on Voltorb, who dissolves into white energy as the ropes whip back into the ball-

-Which closes.

Director dusts off his suit. He clips the Poke-ball back on his belt.


DIRECTOR
Good afternoon. What you just saw was
one of the Silph Company's most innovative
inventions to date.

INT. KANTO ROUTE ONE - MIDDAY

A field of TALL GRASS.

A YOUNGSTER crouches in the tall grass as he spies on a RATATTA gnawing on rocks in the field. There’s a Poke-ball in his hand.

-Youngster presses the button and THROWS the ball-

-That opens midair-

-Scarlet ropes of light consume Ratatta as it tries to flee-

-And the Poke-ball closes just as it lands.


DIRECTOR (V.O.)
The Poke-ball not only makes life with
the creatures we call Pokemon bearable,
but opens up a universe of possibilities.

Youngster runs over and scoops the Poke-ball up out of the grass as it LIGHTS UP BRIGHT WHITE-

INT. BATTLEGROUND – AFTERNOON

Ratatta squares off on a cement field with a GROWLITHE.

-Ratatta DIVES through Growlithe's legs as Growlithe lunges with a mouth of FIRE-

-Ratatta spins around and sinks its teeth into Growlithe's tail. It barely hangs on as Growlithe tries to shake it off, then scampers up its back.


DIRECTOR (V.O.)
We've perfected the ancient art of
the Pokemon battles…

Growlithe does a flip, but suddenly loses control as Ratatta gets itself in Growlithe’s face—

-Growlithe crashes at the end of the battlefield. Ratatta emerges from the fallen Growlithe victorious, and runs over to the Youngster as the other trainer attends to Growlithe.

INT. POKEMON CENTER – NIGHTTIME

Inside a POKEMON CENTER, glittering with lights and filled with People and Pokemon. Pokemon trainers feed their Pokemon from a table of POKEMON TREATS.


DIRECTOR (V.O.)
…And created technology that makes
standard healthcare obsolete.

A NURSE places six Poke-balls on a high-tech machine, which displays health data on the Pokemon inside…

INT. TRADING CENTER - AFTERNOON

Youngster, visibly older, approaches a six-sided TRADING CONSOLE. He places Ratatta's Poke-ball in an indent-

-And a burst of white data shoots up into the DATA stream protruding from the console…

…And a bright tangerine stream takes its place.

The Poke-ball lights up bright ORANGE

INT. ANOTHER TRADING CENTER – CONTINUOUS

Ratatta's NEW Poke-ball rolls out onto a surface surrounded by a gang of whooping children, who snatch the Poke-ball.

INT. GRASSY HILL – SUNDOWN

The rowdy gang of children trade with a boy holding a BUG CATCHER'S NET: Ratatta’s Poke-ball for a bag of RARE CANDIES.

YOUNGESTER JOEY smirks behind his sunglasses as he pockets the pokeball.

INT. SILPH CO. LOBBY – MIDDAY

This was all an AD on a large screen above the stage – Director clicks it off.


DIRECTOR
For years, Silph Co. has prided itself
on taking leaps of faith. Doing things
no other company would dare try.

Director clicks the remote. The screen now shows a clothed pedestal that sits on the stage.

DIRECTOR
And we're happy to continue that trend
with-

Director WHIPS the cloth off of-

DIRECTOR
-The Silph Scope.

-A bulky, goggle-like device.

Director takes it into his hands.


DIRECTOR
A device that makes the unseen-

Director presses the On-button and TOSSES the Silph Scope in the air-

-It catches the light, and suddenly the entire room is lit up like a PRISM. The device reveals a HAUNTER floating up above the stage, which laughs, makes a face, and then zips up through the roof.

The Scope falls, and Director catches it cleanly.


DIRECTOR
-Seen. A foolproof way to catch
ghost-types in any environment!

Applause. Cameras flash. MIB is unmoving. He looks down at the poke-ball he holds in his own hands…

CUT TO:

INT. RED’S HOUSE – AFTER DARK

It’s storming out. Red walks in through the BACK DOOR, and kicks it closed behind him.

INT. RED’S HOUSE – LATER

Red and his Mother sit at a table. A plate of spaghetti is in front of Red; nothing is in front of his mother, who reads a book. She looks over her book at Red. He’s still wearing his hat.


RED’S MOTHER
Red… What do we say about hats at
the table, sweetie?

RED
You're not eating.

RED’S MOTHER
That's not what we say about hats at
the table.

RED
But you're not eating.

RED’S MOTHER
I'm just not hungry.

RED
You're never hungry.

Red's Mother reaches over, and whips the hat off Red's head.

RED’S MOTHER
I'll keep that! You can have it when
you're done eating.

Red shovels another forkful of Spaghetti in his mouth.

RED (mouth full)
It's Professor Oak, isn't it?

RED’S MOTHER
Don't talk with your mouth full.

RED
You're never hungry because you go
to Professor Oak's for lunch every
other day.

RED’S MOTHER
It's good to have a social life.

RED
People say he's a loon. They say he
sits around in that kooky building of
his on the other side of town, tinkering
around with crazy lab experiments.
(Hushed)
I heard he once asked someone whether
they were a boy or a girl!

RED’S MOTHER
He's a famous researcher! Those are
ghost stories.

RED (mumbling)
A famous researcher with a grandson
who wants me dead.

RED’S MOTHER
No-one wants you dead!

RED
Blue does.

RED’S MOTHER
Blue is a child!

RED
Blue’s a psychopath! He'll have me
gutted if I go within a hundred feet
of that laboratory!

RED’S MOTHER
You can't live your life in fear of
an eleven-year-old boy! One day, you're
going to have to stand up to him.

RED
So he can run me into another wall?

RED’S MOTHER
Well, if you can't stand up to what
scares you, how do you expect to
succeed in life?

Red's Mother rises from the table and takes Red's empty plate, leaving his hat there.

RED’S MOTHER
You should get some sleep.

Red gets up from the table, and snatches his hat. He thrusts it on the floor as he heads up the stairs.

Thunder crashes-

CUT TO:

INT. VIRIDIAN CITY POKEMON CENTER – STORMY EVENING

-Looker writes on the page with his pen.

Beat. The pen scratches in silence.

Thunder crashes again. The unlatched window FLIES open-

The incoming wind sends papers soaring. Looker jumps up from his seat and runs to shut the window…

…The Dusty Leather Journal BLOWS OPEN, its pages blowing with the wind-

-Looker shuts the window, and this time he latches it. He collects the upset papers, and sets them on the desk. Then he picks up the journal

CUT TO:

INT. PEWTER CITY – MIDDAY

It’s the cloudy, mountain-surrounded, gemstone-ridden landscape of PEWTER CITY, and the place is simply teeming with MINERS and MINER POKEMON.

SUPER:
Pewter City – Mining Town

Not DR. JOHN SMITH FUJI. Bright colors. Dressed smartly. He sticks out like a splendidly dressed sore thumb amongst the very grey crowd.

Fuji carries a leather-bound JOURNAL with him. Notes are practically falling out of it.

In fact, one falls to the ground. It’s a BLUEPRINT. Fuji picks it up. Stuffs it back in the notebook. Continues on his way.

He pushes past a pair of gravelers carrying a large metal BEAM.

His destination: The grand, domed PEWTER ACADEMY OF SCIENCE.

INT. PEWTER UNIVERSITY OF SCIENCE - CONTINUOUS

Fuji walks into the Pewter City Academy of Science, bustling with all sorts of people. A GYARADOS skeleton eternally pursues a school of fossilized MAGIKARP hung from the inside of the dome.

The Man in Black - leaning against a wall - looks up as Fuji passes.

Fuji sits on a wooden bench. He sets his journal aside.

He takes out his POCKETWATCH. Opens it. Checks something. Closes it and puts it away.

Fuji spreads his blueprints, looking through them as he waits.


SECRETARY (O.S.)
Appointment for Dr. John Smith Fuji?

Fuji looks up. A SECRETARY stands outside the door to a side OFFICE.

FUJI
Yes- That’s me-

He scrambles to get all his blueprints in order, before hurrying in the door.

The Man in Black watches him as he goes. His face is unreadable.

INT. MANAGER’S OFFICE – CONTINUOUS

The MANAGER audibly sighs as Dr. Fuji enters his office. Fuji takes a seat opposite Manager and sets his journal on the desk.

He opens it. The blueprints lay neatly folded inside. Fuji slides it over to Manager, who looks it over.


MANAGER
You’re here for another funding
grant.

FUJI
If I could just convince you-

MANAGER
Stop trying.

Manager slides the journal back to Fuji.

MANAGER
I heard about… what happened. You
have my condolences.

Under the desk, Fuji clutches his pocketwatch.

FUJI
Thank you for that.

MANAGER
However… We are still picking up the
pieces of your last endeavor. Big scandal,
that one. Do you have any idea how much
bad press we’ve had to endure for that?

FUJI
This academy rode on the coattails of
my biological research. I think I’d
have a little more leeway with the
company-

MANAGER
You blew up a lab. We covered your
behind. That’s leeway enough.
(Cont’d)
And we haven’t even begun to broach
upon your recent spending record, Doctor.
You’ve amassed something of a reputation
as a reckless spender here. A reckless
spender without any results to show for
it.

FUJI
My last few projects were missteps
in more ways than one. That’s true.
But I have double-checked the math,
the science is sound… I’m really
faithful in this one. This is the one.

He slides the journal towards Manager again. Manager looks at it like it’s radioactive.

MANAGER
Be that as it may…

Manager gets up from his desk. He walks over to Fuji.

MANAGER (Cont’d)
We at the Pewter Academy of Science
no longer have the funds nor the
drive nor the confidence to pour
into your machinations.

He puts his hands on Fuji’s seat. But Fuji connects the dots.

FUJI
You’re firing me?

MANAGER
Bluntly speaking.

FUJI
You can’t fire me. There would be
social uproar-

MANAGER
Keeping you in the academy is
causing social uproar. Haven’t you
read the newspapers?

He pulls Fuji’s chair out, and Fuji with it.

MANAGER
Good day, Doctor Fuji. I can’t say
it’s been a pleasure doing business
with you.

CUT TO:

INT. POKEMON CENTER ROOM – RAINY EVENING

Looker SNAPS the journal shut.

CUT TO:

INT. RED’S BEDROOM – RAINY SUNRISE

The alarm clock rings, LOUDLY. Rain lashes against the windowpane of Red's bedroom.

Red wearily sits up in his bed. He gropes the toy pyukumuku tiredly, then remembers about the alarm clock. He stands up, reaches over, and stops it.

7:30.

Slowly, Red walks across the room. He steps over the tent, but trips on a belt of unused poke-balls right after and hits the floor-


RED
Ow!

OAK RANCH PATHWAY – CONTINUOUS

The rain has lightened up.

Red walks down a dirt pathway surrounded by fields, past the football field-sized glasshouse that is PROFESSOR OAK'S LABORATORY.

He gazes up at the glass building as he passes…

…And suddenly dives into the field opposite the lab.

Red peeks over the crops, and watches as BLUE exits through the Lab's front doors.

He picks up a stick, looks around, and begins to walk down the path AWAY from Red.

Red breathes a sigh of relief.

EXT. OAK’S LABORATORY - CONTINUOUS

Red approaches the massive building. It looms ominously above him. A wooden door is the only entrance to the otherwise metal building.

Red stares at it for a few minutes…

…But then shoulders his bag. He leaves the area.

PALLET TOWN OUTSKIRTS – CLOUDY MORNING

The rain has stopped. It's still cloudy. Water drips off the leaves of a vibrant PURPLE FLOWER, before-

-An ELDERLY HAND SNIPS the stem. The flower shudders, and falls to the ground.

In the distance, RED walks towards the Pallet Town Entrance Sign.

Red drops his bag by the Entrance Sign and grabs a stone from the ground.

There’s a sudden FLUTTERING from above. Red looks upwards to see several SPEAROW watching him intently from the treetops. They all stare at him intently.

Red ignores them, and throws a stone anyway. It soars into the canopy and makes FLOCKS OF THEM scatter.

PROFESSOR OAK, an elderly man in a lab coat, carefully places the snipped purple flower inside a PLASTIC BAG. He rises to his feet to witness the flock of screeching spearow fly away from the tree.

Red returns to the Target Tree with another stone. Je closes his eyes as he steadies his aim…

A Spearow flies back to the Target Tree. Then another. And another.

Red opens his eyes. He shoots them a glance, but then returns to his exercise.

More Spearow return to the tree. One hops steadily closer to the target zone. It pecks at the carved "X…"

…Red throws the stone directly at the Target Tree. It HITS the Spearow square in the beak. The spearow falls to the ground, lifeless.

Red opens his eyes. He sees the fallen Spearow. Slowly, he approaches it as it lies lifelessly on the ground…

…The Spearow opens its eyes and lets out a bloodcurdling SCREECH as it flaps madly on the ground. A downpour of countless Spearow suddenly engulfs Red. He makes a mad dash for the ENTRANCE SIGN and ducks behind it-

-The birds find and attack him anyway. Red uses the bowl that held the stones as a shield against them, but to little avail. He cries out wordlessly for help.

…The Spearow attack Red mercilessly from above as Oak arrives at the clearing-

-Oak shields his face and draws a Poke-ball from his belt. He throws it-

-Scarlet ropes of light give form to a tiger-striped GROWLITHE.

Red sees the Growlithe and DUCKS-

-As the Growlithe hurls a ball of FIRE at the Spearow-

-And BLOWS the Entrance Sign to pieces.

The Spearow scatter, squawking.

Red sits up among the singed remains of the Entrance Sign. Professor Oak returns the Growlithe.


OAK RANCH PATHWAY – EARLY MORNING

The sun is shining. Oak and Red walk down a dirt pathway surrounded by fields.

RED
You're Professor Oak? The Professor
Oak?

Red quickens his pace to catch up.

RED
You're not some loon with withering
grey hair… I -I mean, you still have
grey hair, but you're not a loon…
Right?

OAK
…Is that what people say about me?

Red looks down at the ground. Awkward.

RED
Some do.

Beat. Silence between them as they walk.

OAK
Amusing.

Oak begins to walk again. They reach the lab. It looms above Red, almost ominously.

Oak tries to unlock the door, but realizes it's already open. He mutters something inaudible to himself, and walks inside.

Red slowly follows him through…

INT. PROFESSOR OAK’S LAB – CONTINUOUS

…And steps into another world.

Various conflicting habitats of nature impossibly co-exist within the plant-lined walls of the laboratory, filled with Pokemon of all shapes and sizes that run amok. Red takes it all in, awestruck.

A giant ARCANINE runs through a grassy field to greet Professor Oak, who halts it with his hand. Oak releases the Growlithe from its poke-ball, which runs up to the Arcanine.

Oak gestures to Red, who walks forward. Oak guides his hand to the Arcanine's nose. The Arcanine presses up against and nuzzles Red’s hand.

A bird pokemon calls out from high above. Red looks up to see-

-A massive movement of BUTTERFREE cover a grove of trees, as PIDGEY and PIDGEOTTO and a lone PIDGEOT circle around the large glass top of the dome. Red stares upwards, transfixed.

He quickly snaps out of his trance, and follows Oak into a forested grove surrounding a small CAVE. Red lifts his foot to let a SANDSLASH and her SANDSHREW young pass.

He gawks at an elevated den of PICHU. A RAICHU huddles over its young protectively. What looks like a patch of grass splits into several ODDISH to reveal a dormant GLOOM.

A PARAS scuttles from its perch on the rocky wall, under several large yellow pot-like plants, attached to the wall by vines. Red extends his hand toward one—

-It SNAPS at him. Red recoils. Oak looks over at him.


OAK
Don’t touch the victreebel. They bite.

Red walks over to where Oak is. He stands in front of an aquatic habitat full of miniature POLIWAG, which swim to the surface

He sprinkles a kelp-like weed into the water; the Poliwag swim around the weeds, eating them.


OAK
Poliwag.

Oak stands up, and continues.

Red and Oak walk onto a wooden bridge spanning a deep lake. Red leans over the side of the bridge to see schools of MAGIKARP and HORSEA and TENTACOOL swimming in the lake.

A dark shape appears in the water…

…Red stands back, as a colossal GYARADOS leaps out of the water to catch a low-flying PIDGEY that soars out of its reach.


OAK
Gyarados. Lord of the seas.

The Gyarados plunges back into the lake with a colossal splash, drenching both Red and Oak in water. Oak doesn’t even flinch.

OAK
My office is up ahead.

Oak walks down the path through a saffron-colored field of grass. Red gawks at several DOUDO and DODRIO, duos and trios of heads feeding in the grass.

Finally, they reach the end of the Lab, where a thick curtain to Oak's office lies. Oak parts it and walks in, and after one last look at the scenery, Red-

INT. OAK’S OFFICE – CONTINUOUS

-Parts the curtain as he enters Oak's office. It’s little more than a glorified tent.


OAK
Have a seat.

Red sits down. Outside, pokemon call lazily.

OAK
You're probably wondering why I brought
you here.

RED
I'm wondering why you didn't bring me
here sooner.

Oak leans back in his seat.

OAK
If only others could share your
enthusiasm. The truth is… I had a
dream. A rather disturbing one,
actually. In this dream, there
was a man who had a dream of his
own. It was a dream long abandoned,
but one never forgotten. See, he'd
turned his back on it. He'd locked
it away, done whatever he could to
get it out of his sight. He was too
scared to even think about going
through with it, so he didn’t. Soon,
the man had grown old and feeble,
but his entire life was haunted -
dictated even, by one thing. What if
he had? What if, instead of putting
his lost dream out of sight, he'd set
out and accomplished what he had
meant to do? Taken a leap of faith? I
knew I couldn’t let this dream I had
become reality, so I decided to
bring you here instead.

Avian shrieks. Wings flap. The panicked screams of a twelve-year-old. Blue.

BLUE (O.S.)
Ger'off me, you stupid bird!

Seconds later, Blue enters the office, holding a parcel.

BLUE
'Sup, gramps. Got your package or
whatever.

He leers at Red, who glowers back. Clearly, they loathe each other.

BLUE
So. You did come.

He shoves past Red, whispering in passing-

BLUE
-You'll pay, loser-

-And leans against a large wooden beam supporting the tent-office.

BLUE
Gotten enough of Gramps' zoo yet? If
he wasn't such a loon he'd know by now
that it gets lame after the first ten
minutes.

OAK (Sighs)
Good morning, Blue.

Blue throws the package on the desk. Oak winces at the thud.

BLUE
So, Gramps. gonna rip me one of them
Pok-e-mans, or what?

OAK
There's a time and place for everything-

BLUE
-Come on, Gramps, not this again-

OAK
-Not now.

BLUE
Fine.

Oak opens the package and pulls out two candy red devices. He sets one on the desk and opens the other, showing off its many DIALS and BUTTONS.

OAK
This is a high-tech encyclopedia,
capable of recording scientific data
with a single scan. I call it "The
Pokedex." Together, I want the two of
you to travel throughout our home
region, and perform a scan of all
one-hundred and fifty-one species
of pokemon native to here. And to
help you along your way…

Red and Blue look less-than-happy about the prospect of working together on something.

Oak pulls out a BOX from under the table. Inside it are three poke-balls – one lit up ORANGE, one lit up BLUE, and one lit up GREEN.


OAK
Inside each of these, a different
Pokemon lies dormant. You may both
take one, and only one.
(Cont’d)
Blue. You first…

But Blue waves Oak off.

BLUE
Nah. Reddy-Boy can choose his first.

Red is suspicious. But he goes along with it anyway. His hand lingers over the poke-ball lit up green…

…But he takes the one lit up orange instead.

Quickly, Blue snatches the Poke-ball lit up blue-


BLUE
Dibs!

He smirks, and leans over to Red-

BLUE
-Water beats Fire. Every. Time.

Blue takes a Pokedex from the table. He pushes past Red-

OAK
Make sure you use it, Blue-

BLUE
Yeah yeah, Smell ya, Gramps-

-Blue leaves the tent.

Red gets up from his seat. He takes the other Pokedex, and follows after Blue. Oak simply reclines in his chair.

CUT TO:

INT. SILPH CO. LOBBY – AFTERNOON

It’s the AFTERPARTY. Everyone is talking and conversing in the lobby, and news cameras are still recording the event. The Man in Black decides its finally time to make his move.

He presses the button on the poke-ball he holds, then sets it on the floor and rolls it off.

Slowly, dementedly, he walks towards the center of the lobby. Attention becomes focused on him.

MiB raises his arms…

The poke-ball OPENS, and a MAGNEMITE comes out. It knows what to do – it unleashes an electrical attack, and all the news cameras suddenly SHATTER-

EXT. SILPH CO. BUILDING – CONTINUOUS

The Black Truck sits outside the Silph Co. headquarters. It never left. On its side is a bright red “R”.

Bang. The back doors open. Three men in black uniforms jump out of the truck's back. They are members of TEAM ROCKET, the villainous crime organization that is a growing threat to the Kanto Region.

Two of the three Rocket agents set a CASE on the ground. These are SCARFACE and RAGSKIN. Scarface opens the case, and Ragskin removes a VOLTORB from it.

INT. SILPH CO. LOBBY – CONTINUOUS

The lobby is chaos. People and pokemon are panicking and creating a scene. MiB stands in the middle of it, immoving.

…The Metal Detector beeps as a Voltorb rolls through it…

…And EXPLODES into a mass of smoke-

The three Rocket grunts advance through the smoke and enter the lobby. They head for the stage. The crowd makes a wide berth for them in fear.

Rocket Three spins on his heels, grabs a Poke-ball from his belt, and releases an eight-foot, serpentine ARBOK that HISSES at the guests menacingly. That keeps them in line.

Scarface and Ragskin advance to the stage, and Scarface removes the Silph Scope.

MIB stands unflinchingly as the Rocket Agents walks back down the stairs. Once they pass he turns to follow them.

The Arbok hisses again as it follows the Rockets out of the building.

EXT. SILPH CO. BUILDING – CONTINUOUS

The Rocket Agents quickly exit the building and climb into the truck. Scarface hands MIB the Silph Scope.

MIB admires it for a second, then climbs into the truck as it drives off.

In the distance, POLICE SIRENS can be heard…

CUT TO:

EXT. OAK’S LABORATORY - AFTERNOON

Blue violently pins Red to the wall of the Lab.


BLUE
I told you not to show up-

Blue punches. Red dodges.

BLUE
-Told ya you were gonna pay-

Blue punches again. Red scrambles to the side, but Blue grabs his arms.

BLUE
-Not so fast, Reddy-boy-

He shoves Red close and center.

BLUE
We're not done yet.

Blue grasps Red's shirt collar.

BLUE
Go ahead. Say it. You know the words.
I'm. A. Stinking. Coward.

Red KICKS Blue in the leg. Blue staggers back and hunches. Red falls on his behind. Surprised.

Red rises from his sitting position. He walks up to Blue.


RED
You think you're so much better than
everyone else.

He draws the Poke-ball Oak gave him and holds it up to Blue.

RED
Prove it.

Blue looks up. He’s grinning – was this what he wanted all along?

BLUE
That's more like it, Reddy-boy.

Blue takes several steps back. He expertly throws his Poke-ball into the air-

-Scarlet ropes of light give shape to a turtle-like SQUIRTLE that effortlessly sticks a landing.

Red throws his Poke-ball…

…It lands on the ground. Lifelessly.


BLUE
Press the button, you dunce!

RED
I did-

The Poke-ball bursts open-

-And sends a lizard-like CHARMANDER face-first into the dirt.

Red falls back in surprise. Charmander peels its face from the ground, and locks eyes with Red for the first time…


BLUE
Charge!

…Squirtle LUNGES at Charmander and sends it rolling backwards into the ground.

Squirtle pounces-

-Trades blows with Charmander-

-Charmander rolls over and spits a FIREBALL into Squirtle's face.

-Squirtle falls back-

-Charmander scampers the other way…

…Squirtle flips back upwards-

-And shoots from its mouth several blasts of WATER-

-Charmander dodges-

-Red DUCKS-

-Water bullets rattle the Lab's walls.

…Charmander scampers and scurries-

-Over and under-

-One-

-Two-

-THREE Water blasts-

-Moving closer to Squirtle-

-Charmander takes a swipe for Squirtle, who ducks into its shell and pops out.

Squirtle headbutts Charmander-

Charmander stumbles back-

-Squirtle SPINS-

-And trips Charmander backwards-

-Who rolls onto all fours and scampers away…


BLUE
Finish it!

Red picks himself up from his ducking spot on the ground.

Charmander runs across the dusty plain…

…Squirtle stands up.

Charmander runs faster.

Squirtle fires a water bullet-

-That collides with Charmander-

-Sends it skidding across the ground-

-Until it arrives at Red's feet.

Unconscious.

Blue presses the Poke-ball's button, and scarlet ropes of light consume Squirtle. He hooks his Poke-ball to his belt as he walks over to Red, who cradles Charmander in his arms.


BLUE
Pathetic. I -I knew you were a wimp,
but…

He scoffs.

BLUE
…Go home. Just… Go home. Before you
get hurt or something.

Beat. Red stands up, holding Charmander.

BLUE
The world ain't like Pallet Town,
Reddy-boy. Might makes right out there.
And you clearly can't handle it.

Red looks at Blue loathingly.

BLUE
But hey. If you don't die first, you
might catch me in Pewter. Smell ya,
dunce.

With that, Blue strides down the dusty path. Away from Red.

INT. RED’S HOUSE - LATER

Red enters his house through the back door. He slams Charmander's POKE-BALL on the counter, and tromps up the stairs to his room.

INT. RED’S BEDROOM – CONTINUOUS

Red stuffs the Yellow Tent into his bag. He starts to leave…

…but stops before he trips over the belt of Poke-balls.

Red puts that in his bag too.

INT. RED’S HOUSE – CONTINUOUS

Red tromps down the stairs and heads for the door. He grabs Charmander’s Poke-ball on the counter.

Red walks through the FRONT DOOR, out into the streets of Pallet Town.

He disappears down a corner, and doesn’t come back.

CUT TO:

INT. VIRIDIAN CITY POKEMON CENTER – RAINY EVENING

Looker writes furiously with his pen. On the desk, the JOURNAL lies wide open…

CUT TO:

INT. PEWTER UNIVERSITY OF SCIENCE – DAYTIME

Dr. Fuji sits on the wooden bench. He drops his notebook and all his blueprints beside him.

He opens the pocketwatch again, but we don’t see what’s inside.


MIB (O.S.)
Doctor Fuji, I presume?

Fuji is startled. He closes the pocketwatch, and looks at where the voice came from: The Man in Black stares down at him…

CUT TO BLACK.

Deadlights - Benjamin Wallfisch
Paper Boat - Benjamin Wallfisch
Rituals - James Newton Howard
Blood on My Hands - James Newton Howard
Dragon Racing - John Powell
Travel Delays - Alan Silvestri
Inside the Case - James Newton Howard
Sorrento Makes an Offer - Alan Silvestri
Dragon Training - John Powell
Bicameral Mind - Ramin Djawadi
 
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canisaries

voted most likely to be edgy
Location
the middle of nowhere
Pronouns
she/her
Hello there! I'm here for Catnip. This is the first time I've read and reviewed a screenplay-type story, so there was a bit of a medium shock to me, but I think I managed to follow along fine nonetheless.

I'm gonna have to be honest and say that I think this story has a few issues weighing it down, so apologies in advance for a mostly negative review. I hope I'll be able to be constructive and helpful with my points, though.

At the start of the story, I can see the influences of Detective Pikachu, and it does come across much like a movie or show you could actually imagine existing. We begin the Mewtwo plot, which is a popular one to adapt, and get introduced to Fuji and someone whom I assume is Giovanni. After that, I was surprised to see Looker introduced, but it does make sense for him to be investigating these things as part of the international police.

Giovanni then makes his second appearance, and it's at this point that I start to feel his portrayal doesn't necessarily make sense. He bumps into Looker, seemingly on purpose, and then stares at him. This feels petty coming from someone who's supposed to be a coolly cruel criminal mastermind, and over the course of the chapter I kept wondering why he always shows up to places in person when he has an entire criminal organization worth of grunts he could be utilizing instead, saving himself the trouble and risk of doing these ground level things himself. Furthermore, he's shown his face multiple times (it's impossible for him to keep his face constantly obscured from all viewpoints with his fedora if he actually wants to see what's happening) and at the end links it to the criminal organization of Team Rocket. It just seems like a very risky and poorly thought out move on Giovanni's part, which makes him a lot less menacing.

Then we get to meet out protagonist, Red. It seems like life really sucks for him, with a mom that doesn't care about the fact that he's very clearly being bullied and instead cares more about him trying to use the back door instead of the front, which seems like a very minor thing to be upset about your kid doing. If there actually was no back door in the house and Red tried sneaking out of a window, that'd make a lot more sense, since windows are supposed to be kept clean and the drop can be dangerous and so on.

It's then that Blue is introduced, and he comes across pretty much like a stereotypical bully. Red is established as someone who doesn't dare to stand up for himself against a group of kids who aren't afraid to get physical, which is pretty sensible, to be honest, as there's no way he would win that fight. I do question how no one's arrested these kids if it's widely known that they go around defacing people's property, but as the concept of TPing doesn't even exist in my country, I'm not really someone to make judgments on its portrayal.

The next couple of scenes I don't really have anything to say about - though I'll say I thought the Silph Co. press conference presentation thing worked well - so jumping to the Fuji part, which is sandwiched by two Looker segments. Both scenes made sense on their own, but it's their juxtaposition that has me a bit confused. Originally I didn't notice that the time frames for these scenes were different, so I was confused about how this seemed to imply that Looker has a copy of the same journal as Fuji, when a journal having a copy makes no sense - although copies of printed documents would. Either way, I noticed now upon rereading that these events don't take place at the same time (unless Kanto is absolutely massive), so it makes more sense for Looker to have Fuji's notebook - but this also makes it very vague how much time has passed between these events, and how the other scenes involving Fuji relate to the timeline of the main narrative.

It's possible, also, that these journals are not the same, but focusing on two leather journals that aren't differentiated between two interwoven scenes strongly implies they are.

Moving on: Red is throwing stones at the tree again and manages to piss off a flock of Spearow, referencing the anime. Oak comes in and saves Red and finally brings him to the lab that Red's been interested in but too scared to enter before because of Blue. This makes for a nice change of pace in comparison to what else we've seen of Red, which is him being beaten down by the world in a lot of ways. I like the imagery of all the Pokémon and Oak guiding Red to pet the Arcanine specifically. Unfortunately, this niceness ends as soon as Blue comes in and it's kind of Red gets crapped on hours after that again until the end.

This scene, I think, struck me as the most unrealistic. It's very strange of Oak to give his grandson, who is a notorious bully, brat and overall unproductive - destructive, even - member of society, a Pokédex and a Pokémon. The Pokédex would mean Oak assumes this kid won't just instantly throw the thing away after like 20 minutes of playing with it since he seems completely uninterested in both Pokémon and doing favors for people, and the Pokémon is a powerful magical monster that needs someone responsible to take care of it and absolutely not use for nefarious purposes. Neither of these traits seem to describe Blue at all, so Oak comes across as extremely irresponsible. Oak doesn't reprimand Blue's behavior almost at all, nor does he apologize to Red or even explain something about why Blue is this much of a little bastard. There could have been a good opportunity to flesh out Blue more by Oak explaining to Red that Blue does things for attention or he's trying to feel in control by bossing people around because his parents are divorcing and he feels helpless or something.

After this, Red goes outside and Blue attempts to literally physically assault him, but they end up having a Pokémon battle instead. Red loses, is humiliated once again, and even Blue takes pity on him and spews some crap about how Red needs to be strong to survive in this world as if he wasn't constantly wasting resources by TPing peoples houses like an idiot. Blue leaves while I wish the Mew Truck would suddenly show up and run him over.

I know it's kind of rude to tell someone else how to tell their story, but I think it would have made for a better hook to actually have Red win. He's been the universe's dog toy the entire chapter, rather passively as well, and something like that can kill reader engagement if done too much. If we always know Red is going to get screwed over no question and he's not really going to do anything about it except maybe cry, we won't root for him anymore as it just seems like a lost cause. A win would show that Red isn't all helpless, that there actually is hope and a reason to root for him.

Red winning the battle would also allow the Charmander to stay conscious and let Red him bond it afterwards. Bonding with your Pokémon companion is a very strong part of the franchise's charm, but in this episode, Pokémon mostly seem to play the part of background props or tools rather than creatures to form friendships with.

Finally, we get two short scenes, one with Looker and one with Fuji. The Looker one, to me, seems kind of out of place. Looker hadn't made an appearance after like the halfway point, and now shows up for what would be a second or two until cutting away again. I think it'd be better if he made a call or something to make the scene just a bit longer so it wouldn't feel like a quick reminder of "hey, remember this person also".

As for what Giovanni is seeing Fuji for at the end, I don't know. They already seemed to be working together at the start of the story, and the lab explosion is referenced in the Fuji bit in the middle, meaning it took place before it already. My best guess is that Giovanni is upset about Fuji not getting a grant or something.

Okay, that's the story and the characters. I still had a few minor notes on other stuff like the writing, so I'll go over those quickly.

Its flickering oval EYES fly open, locking directly on Researcher.
"Flickering" in reference to eyes makes me think of fluttering eyelids, and I'm not sure if that's the meaning you wanted or if you wanted to express that the light in Mewtwo's lights was flickering instead, in which case you'd want some clearer wording.

The Clerk shuts off the radio as Looker approaches. He slides a card on the table.
The clerk's gender/pronoun has not yet been established as female, so this "he" seems to refer to the clerk as she was the one that started the paragraph and would so be focus of the paragraph by default.

CLERK
I know someone who works in that
profession. Aaall the way in Saffron
City. Haven’t heard back in a while.
To be honest I get a bit worried
nowadays.

LOOKER
Sometimes, your feelings hold you
back.

CLERK
Sometimes, they can save your life.
I'm not sure if this is meant to be some kind of code, since I don't understand how the first comment naturally leads into the second.

A CATERPIE slowly climbs to a House-BELLSPROUT that sits in the potted plant of a second-story window…
This is a nice image, but it's kind of terrifying if thought about for longer. Is this Bellsprout forced to sit in the same spot despite specifically having root-legs to move? Can it even get down safely from that window? Is it trapped there?

RED RED’S MOTHER
Mom. …Yes, kids can be a handful-

Mom. (To Red)

MOM! What is it?!
Is this how these quick dialogues are normally formatted in screenplays? It was pretty hard to read - if any line was longer than a sentence, it would be ambiguous where one's line ends and where the other's starts, and screenplays are meant to be as clear as possible, as I understand it.

Flocks of PIGEY
*PIDGEY

a RATATTA
*RATTATA

This one was misspelled in every instance I saw, while the Pidgey was just the one time.

Red gets up from the table, and snatches his hat. He thrusts it on the floor as he heads up the stairs.
He gets his hat... to throw it on the floor?

Not DR. JOHN SMITH FUJI. Bright colors. Dressed smartly. He sticks out like a splendidly dressed sore thumb amongst the very grey crowd.
I genuinely cannot understand what the "Not" at the beginning means here. Is he not an actual doctor? Is this person not actually Dr. Fuji?

Another more minor criticism is that John Smith Fuji is a very strange name to have. It would make much more sense for someone with a Japanese surname to also have Japanese first names. It's not impossible to have a combination name, but "John Smith" just seems as American as you can get.

His destination: The grand, domed PEWTER ACADEMY OF SCIENCE.

INT. PEWTER UNIVERSITY OF SCIENCE - CONTINUOUS

Fuji walks into the Pewter City Academy of Science,
Place name is different three times?

An ELDERLY HAND SNIPS the stem. The flower shudders, and falls to the ground.
The flower... shudders? Before it falls? I don't understand.

Je closes his eyes as he steadies his aim…
*He, and I don't get why he's expecting to hit anything with his eyes closed.

…Red throws the stone directly at the Target Tree. It HITS the Spearow square in the beak. The spearow falls to the ground, lifeless.

Red opens his eyes. He sees the fallen Spearow. Slowly, he approaches it as it lies lifelessly on the ground…

…The Spearow opens its eyes and lets out a bloodcurdling SCREECH as it flaps madly on the ground. A downpour of countless Spearow suddenly engulfs Red. He makes a mad dash for the ENTRANCE SIGN and ducks behind it-
"Lifeless" is used twice in quick succession, and it sounds misleadingly literal in this context.

The Black Truck sits outside the Silph Co. headquarters. It never left. On its side is a bright red “R”.
This feels cartoony if they're trying to be incognito. Or are they there to specifically make a statement?

Slowly, dementedly, he walks towards the center of the lobby.
Demented means "behaving irrationally due to anger, distress, or excitement", and none of this seems to fit the situation and the character.

serpentine ARBOK
turtle-like SQUIRTLE
lizard-like CHARMANDER
These descriptors are redundant. They're unnecessary for the people that know what these Pokémon are, and they're not enough information for someone that would have to imagine these just based on those adjectives.

Alright, that's everything. Sorry again for the negativity. I hope this was still helpful.
 
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