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3~Sixteen - The Truth

SparklingEspeon

Back on Her Bullshit
Staff
Location
a Terrace of Indeterminate Location in Snowbelle
Pronouns
She/Her
Partners
  1. espurr
  2. fennekin
  3. zoroark
Headline Today: Grimmsnarl’s Storm set to hit Noe Town, Paradise, later in week

The first major winter storm of the year is projected to make landfall at Noe Town on Mist’s southern coast this Friday, setting a new record for earliest winter storm. “Grimmsnarl’s Storms”, as they are referred to by Air and Grass natives, are immense, violent storm systems that form over the sea between the Air and Water continents, and often strike the eastern coast of Mist during the winter.

“We’ve observed strange behavior from this system compared to others,” remarked meteorologist Espeon. “Most of these large storms develop out on the waters where hot and cold air combine, then quickly move north propelled by the wind. As they continue towards land, they weaken and eventually peter out. This storm, however, has been consistently staying in one place for weeks, and as it moves towards the coast only seems to be gaining in strength.”

Residents of Noe Town are being ordered to move inland, and travel to the coast is highly discouraged. In an unprecedented move, the storm is projected to head towards Paradise in the days after making landfall at Noe Town.

~ The Daily Pelipper


~\({O})/~

CHAPTER SIXTEEN: THE TRUTH

~\({O})/~

The Night Before

~Sparkleglimmer~

A single touch of her ribbons was all it took. Just a light press on the back as he walked through the hallway, a few black sparks zipping out of her and into him, and the poor, oblivious sentry braixen was hers. He slumped backwards almost immediately; there was barely time to catch him before he landed. She nearly dropped him anyway; he was much, much heavier than she’d anticipated, nearly too much to carry. But she made it work, lugging him through a round wooden door and into a side room before anymon could pass by to notice.

She sat him down in a chair, inspecting him as he snored. He'd fallen asleep so easily… just how tired was he? Hopefully not too tired for her to work her magic. She only needed him around for a few questions anyway.

Then, he changed before her eyes. The violet fur that seemed to fuzz up strangely when she wasn’t looking rippled away, leaving before her something much larger, heavier, and shaggier. A zoroark.

Sylveon Sparkleglimmer took the realization without letting any of her surprise show. Only a satisfied, wry smirk crept its way across her muzzle, the only thing her professional persona allowed her to betray.

The Voice had told her this braixen would be helpful when they’d first had him stationed outside her quarters. It had pulled a few strings just to make it happen, in fact. Now she remembered why he was familiar: this was Primarina’s lackey.

To think this was the big secret he had that couldn’t come out at all costs. Not the forgery and theft she’d known was happening, this. It was almost humorous.

She propped him up further in the chair, making sure she had a ribbon on him at all times to keep him under. Putting somemon in a trance was easy; keeping them in one was much harder. Especially when you needed to move them around. Though, granted, he was so far under she didn’t have to do much as it was.

He would’ve slumped over in his seat, if not for the deceptively strong ribbon keeping him in place. Clearing her throat and amplifying the soothing pulse she was sending through him, Sparkleglimmer whispered her first question into his ear.

“Do you hear me? Nod if you do.”

A nod. After years of flawless manipulation she shouldn’t even doubt. But it never hurt to be thorough.

“What is your purpose here?”

Though addled, the zoroark told her without hesitation.

“To find a home.”

A less skilled interrogator wouldn’t have caught the way his lips moved as if to say something else, the way he tensed up a little before relaxing them. There was more.

“Continue,” she told him.

The words nearly escaped. But still, his mouth stayed shut. Considerable willpower; she was nearly impressed. But she would break him yet. Her ribbon pressed into him a little harder, the dark current coursing out of her and into him increasing.

“Continue.”

“And to spy,” the zoroark spat out, like releasing a breath he’d been holding for minutes. Sparkleglimmer’s heart jumped, her body didn’t; she was trained to conceal such moments. So this was their spy…

“Spying on what?” she asked, doubling the soothing, hypnotic current from her ribbons just to be sure. “Who do you work for?”

“My… he’s a scyther. He makes me do things for him, get things.”

“What does he make you do and get?”

“Files,” the zoroark muttered. “Information. Plans for things.”

It took less than a second to put two and two together. The files that had disappeared from the room of records had been plans for the Paradise Expansion Project. Whoever this scyther was… whatever trouble they were looking to cause must have had to do with that.

“Tell me about your employer’s motives,” she said. “What is his end goal?”

The zoroark tensed up. Her ribbons were still sensitive to emotion; she could feel the blend of anger and fear that ran through his veins.

“He wants… he wants to hurt,” the zoroark growled. “He wants to stop the houses at the edge of the city from being torn down. He’ll do… whatever it takes.”

He was slurring his words now. The trance she’d put him in had balanced him on the edge between waking and sleep, and ever-so-slowly he was tottering towards dreamland. She’d need to wrap up quickly.

“What has he sent you for now?”

“He wants supply locations,” the zoroark responded laboriously. “And…” some hesitation. He was gritting his teeth. Too bad. A pulse of dark current zapped his resistance away. “He wants me to burn down the room of records.”

Sparkleglimmer restrained her surprise. Sabotage in the room of records.. he’d be in for a surprise if he expected there to still be anything in there right now. Regardless, this was all valuable information she could use to determine who she was fighting, and how they could be used.

There was just one last thing she needed to ask.

“Before you came here, did you work with Ambassador Primarina?” she asked him.

A sluggish nod told her yes.

“Where is he now?”

She expected something with more fanfare, maybe for him to make her press him harder than she already was. In hiding? In captivity? Had he finally gotten on the bad side of enough lawmakers that they were doing something about it? But the response was immediate, and it was one word:

“Dead.”

With that word, Sparkleglimmer couldn’t stop herself from stiffening up. It was a possibility she’d entertained after he’d gone completely off the radar, but hearing it confirmed before her was surreal.

“How did he die?” she managed to ask levelly.

“The…” the zoroark trailed off, and for a second she worried she was losing him. “The Exeggutor was destroyed.”

“By pirates?”

A shake of Zoroark’s head.

“What destroyed the Exeggutor.”

What had killed her most agreeable politician.

“A sea serpent,” Zoroark said. “A gyarados, a red one. It was… big. Outside the storm. Between Air and Water.”

A moment of silence. Sparkleglimmer, for a rare moment in her life, was struggling to process the facts that lay before her. Her most reliable piece on the board, killed in a freak accident?

Her mind flipped into damage control mode. It was the only way she knew how to process in the moment. The first thing she needed to do was confirm what she’d been told. Send a team out there to search for scraps of the Exeggutor and any mentions of a red gyarados. Yes, tomorrow she would do that.

“When you wake up from this, you won’t remember our talk,” Sparkleglimmer told the limp, nearly sleeping zoroark. “You will reinstate your illusion, head back to your quarters, and take a well-deserved rest. Doesn’t that sound nice?”

The zoroark could only lazily nod, the power of the suggestion worming its way even further into his brain.

Deftly, another ribbon wormed a file folder into his claws, making sure he grasped it. He’d carry it all the way back with him towards his room.

“And I want the address of your boss. The one he sent to spy on me.”

She watched from the doors of the room as the zoroark walked off like a zombie, checking the halls around her to make sure that no-mon had caught any glimpse.

She had a few letters to send.


~\({O})/~

~Alice~

It was happening again.

Or maybe it had been happening all this time, and she just hadn’t realized until now.

It was that feeling she got, the one that said something just wasn’t right, the one that almost always had a plain cause she was just ignoring for some reason or other. Not this time. This time, she could see it in front of her plain as day: Something was wrong with her partner.

Again.

She’d told herself to stay distanced for this reason, because if something happened to go wrong, if something just wasn’t adding up… Why couldn’t she just stay professional?

No. She had to keep herself calm for now. She didn’t know anything was wrong with him yet. All the word around the base about spies was spurred on by the tighter security they’d been assigned guard duty as part of. Pokemon from Grass had burned down a guild affiliated with HAPPI, and now some important records had gone missing from the company archives. Word from the higherups was they might be here too, everymon had been on edge since the wall blew up. She couldn’t make any assumptions yet. But when your partner started acting like he had something to hide right when this began to flare up… she had to come to some kind of conclusion. And she was running out of good ones.

He tromped out after her once everymon else had retired to their quarters, after doing something in that bedroom that only seemed to make him more stressed than before. Maybe it was the one hour of sleep that made his eyes look haunted, his body limp, his fur slightly strange in ways she couldn’t put her paw on. Maybe he just had bad nerves from his new environment. Maybe he couldn’t handle the schedule. Maybe it was the cold. Damned if she knew. All she knew was that she didn’t want to take chances.

“You look peppier today,” she said, trying to make small talk. It was a complete lie. He looked like he usually did, except worse.

It was like speaking to a zombie. He jolted like she’d wrenched him out of a trance, looking at her with those weary, sunken eyes.

“Got some sleep,” he said, going back to staring straight ahead.

“Well, I hope you make the most of it,” she told him. “We’ve got an early day patrolling streets tomorrow.”

She could see him slump a little further than he already was.

“It’s an early night after that,” she continued. “But brace yourself for a lot of walking.”

“Looking forward to it,” he said with no enthusiasm at all. And she didn’t blame him.

They stood in silence for a minute longer. That might have been as long as an eternity, or as short as ten seconds. Guard duty tended to make time relative.

“I know my maps, by the way,” she continued. Best to just cut to the chase.

“What?” he asked, the tone in his voice indicating confusion.

“Swanna Inn,” she said. “It’s only a block away from the HAPPI building, and shifts get off an hour before you showed up.”

“I don’t know what this is about,” he said dully, with that same lack of emotion he’d had during all their talks.

“Something had to have happened in between you leaving and you arriving tuckered out at this building an hour later,” she said.

Something that happened just around that time, just in that area, with a pokemon who could very well be—

“What does that matter?” Braixen asked grouchily. “One slipup doesn’t matter.”

“It does when you act like you have something to hide,” she continued. “So what’s the deal? What’s going on that’s got you acting like you’re a criminal?”

“Like I said,” Braixen said firmly. “It’s nothing.”

She wanted to believe it.

“And you know I’m not going to take that for an answer,” she told him.

“You don’t have a right to question me!” Braixen suddenly exploded. It took her aback. He was so meek, and then all of the sudden…

He seemed to realize how aggressive he’d just been. Calming down, he pulled back into his position, diverting his gaze towards the floor. He was breathing heavy.

“It’s…. it’s just the nerves,” he said, boring holes into the stones once again with his gaze. “I don’t really want to talk about it.”

They both knew, she thought, that it wasn’t the nerves. But she could tell he wasn’t in the right condition for her to keep pursuing it. So, for the time being, she let it rest. They stood at their posts, and silence filled the gap between them.


~\({O})/~

~Zoroark-as-Braixen~

She knew.

There was no other explanation. Either she knew, or she was catching on, and one way or another he wasn’t going to be able to keep a lid on it much longer. Berry crackers, he wasn’t a liar. He wasn’t, he wasn’t a thief! He wasn’t…

Who was he kidding? He’d told more lies this past week than he had in the last several years. And stealing… well, this place was swarming with guards now because of him, wasn’t it?

But if there was one thing he wasn’t, he wasn’t a murderer. Despite what those wanted posters said, he wasn’t a murderer. He didn’t want to be a murderer. But when push came to shove, he’d broken more boundaries than he thought he could. And if it came down to Alice finding out the truth… he didn’t know if he’d be crafty enough to find another solution. And what then? That was a question he couldn’t afford to discover the answer to. He just couldn’t.

“What do you mean I can’t apply for reassignment?” Zoroark-as-Braixen complained agitatedly to the front desk of the lobby. It was so early in the morning that the sun still hadn’t come up yet, and the hall was sparsely lit by emera-lights. This was right when he should be sleeping. But he had to do this now, while there wasn’t a line for the desk or anywhere he was missed.

“With exception of extenuating circumstance or sufficient reason, all HAPPI teams must spend a minimum of six months together before any members can apply for reassignment,” the glameow monning the desk recited wearily. She looked up at him with bored, tired eyes. “You have four months and a week left to go.”

“But…” Zoroark-as-Braixen stammered. “Are you sure you can’t make an exception?”

“I’m afraid I can’t,” the glameow said. “Unless you can provide a valid reason for reassignment, then you’re plumb out of luck.”

Oh, he could provide several valid reasons. If they wouldn’t land him in jail.

She waved him off after that. And with her coily, spring-like tail, she waved away his last chance of a clean escape. It was dawning on him that it hadn’t even been a whole two months yet. It didn’t feel like that. It felt like it had been a whole year here. How could he make it through five months more of this?

Scratch that. He had a day.

One day to decide whether he’d attempt Amadeus’ impossible job, or if he’d cut and run and hope that the scyther couldn’t find him before he left. Which just left him with the same problem: Where would he go after that?

A newspaper read that a severe winter storm was slated to hit Noe Town in just a few days, and would be moving up towards Paradise. Travel between the two was heavily discouraged, and the city gates were shutting down ahead of the storm anyway. So that was that out of the question. He set down the newspaper he’d have to pay for with his spare change if he read any more of it, and sullenly continued towards the mess hall for an early meal before the first rays of sunlight crept in. Given he had to head out in half an hour, there was no point in sleeping now.

With the amount of fatigue he was feeling, he sure hoped the cafeteria was giving out chesto berries.


~\({O})/~

~Alexis~

He was poking around again. He didn’t know why.

Well, with complete honesty in mind, that wasn’t true. It wasn’t like he could do anything about it, but ever since Cloud Nine and Director Sparkleglimmer had turned up, he’d been smelling something fishy. He couldn’t kick the feeling the Director was up to no good.

So here he was, digging around in her office while she wasn’t there. Off the books, the sort of thing that no-mon was ever going to hear about. Luckily for him, the Director was off doing some publicity stuff for the press, and he had enough clout to order the day guards away. He seized the chance while he could.

He’d started with her desk. Any important documents would be in there, not the fancy oval frames on the pink walls that had been collecting dust for ages, or the upholstery that looked like it had been pulled out of a Noe Town décor shop thirty years ago. Anything to give him a hint about what was going on would suffice.

Before long, he found something. It was an envelope, addressed to him. And under it, a similar one for Elliot. Why would she keep this?

The top was already partially torn apart, so he used a letter opener in the drawer to tear the rest of it. Then he took the paper out, unfolding it and spreading it open in his paws.

Dear Alexis,

It has come to my attention that both you and Elliot decided to abstain from your judging positions on the date of Cloud Nine’s second Entercard trial. Considering we had previously aligned on the fact that HAPPI’s shutdown of our entercard production was not in the spirit of the law, I found this decision peculiar.

Perhaps we can arrange a date to talk? Umbreon and I will be stopping in Paradise when Cloud Nine lands, and there are a few fish restaurants here I have been interested in trying.

Best regards, Espeon of Paradise


The entercard case… he’d heard about it in the news. Sparkleglimmer had insisted he didn’t testify that day, for reasons that seemed obvious. Espeon’s attempts to keep skirting the law couldn’t go on forever.

Keeping the letter didn’t prove anything on its own, but it confirmed that the Director was hiding things. Why else would she keep mail addressed to him? He kept rifling through her desk, opening a new cabinet as soon as he’d meticulously put away the contents of the last. What else could he find in here…


~\({O})/~

The Daily Pelipper Headquarters

~Espeon and Umbreon~

Espeon didn’t like cold things. She never had. Her species was designed to thrive in hot climates, sunbathing on sand and ventilating the heat through her large ears. Not trudging through the snowy weather, freezing her paws solid by walking through yesterday’s frost. She felt hairless in this climate, and it only got worse the further north you went.

“You sure you don’t need a cloak?” Umbreon asked her. Unlike her, he was much more at home in this weather than she could ever hope to be. A shaggier coat tended to do that for you. Espeon noticed by now she was shivering lightly. No wonder he’d asked.

“Going back to get a cloak will just slow us down,” she said through gritted teeth. She would like a cloak. She didn’t want to admit she should have just sucked it up and bought one when they’d entered the city like Umbreon had advised. “What should we be looking for?”

“Mail wagon,” Umbreon replied. “They deliver to the Daily Pelipper each dawn.”

He pointed with a paw across the street, where a somewhat fancy, three-story complex sat. This was the more business-y district of town, so the streets were mostly free of litter and the buildings had been kept somewhat clean. Lit up in emera-powered lighting above the roof were the words “The Daily Pelipper”.

“We got here early,” Umbreon continued. ‘They could arrive in the next ten minutes, or the next hour, all depends on their route. We could be waiting here a while.”

Espeon sighed, watching her breath freeze in the air. An hour out in the cold… now she was really wishing she could go back for a cloak.

It took the mailmon about a half hour to show up. The cold was beginning to numb the tip of Espeon’s tail by the time the wagon rolled in, still carrying enough parcels and letters that the snorunt had to dig through the cart just to get the package they needed. She’d taken to lazily trotting in place, creating motion just to keep her a little warmer. Umbreon shook the snow that had fallen on his ears off, rising and stretching.

“Showtime,” he said.

The two of them carefully crossed the street, slipping in through the doors of the building while the mailmon snorunt was still gathering the package.

The transparent doors closed behind them, and with the inside of the building came a temperature change that nearly made Espeon trill in delight. Less ‘freeze your tail off’, more ‘cozy fireside’. The building must’ve had one of those heavenly emera-powered heaters she’d sunned herself next to back on Cloud Nine.

Undoing the flap of Umbreon’s satchel with her psychic grip, she pulled out of it a parcel that was wrapped identical to the ones they’d sent out back on Cloud Nine. It was weighted the same too—filled with common candies and other junk that they’d purchased at a low-value mart. If anymon asked, it was a present for a relative’s kit.

The doors behind them slid open again, admitting the snorunt they were waiting for. It was time for them to make their move. Faking a stumble forwards, Espeon ‘accidentally’ tripped over Umbreon’s tail and crashed into the mailmon.

Just like she’d hoped, packages flew everywhere. Her parcel and the one the snorunt was carrying flew, intermingled, and landed on the ground.

“Oh, so sorry!” Espeon said, pulling herself to her feet dizzily. Beside her, the snorunt was picking himself up, rubbing his cone-like forehead. “Mr. Clumsy over here was letting his tail wag all over the place again.”

Umbreon managed in response to look suitably abashed.

The snorunt looked down at the two packages, unsure of which one was which.

“Uhh… which… did you have a…”

“My package!” Espeon cried out, diving for the parcel she was pretty sure was the right one. “Oh, it would’ve been a mess if I lost this!”

She sure hoped she’d played up the drama enough. By the looks of the snorunt’s sheepish face, at least, she’d played her part to a tee.

“Well, uh,” he grunted. “Just take it so I can get on my way. Lots more stops to make today.”

Espeon quickly snatched up the package and returned to Umbreon. It went in his satchel, all safe and sound, and then they quickly made a beeline for the exit. The doors slid open to admit them, and before the pokemon at the counter could realize the slipup, they’d slunk into an alleyway to check they had the right one.

“That felt too easy,” Espeon said. At least, after they’d waited a half hour in the cold. It was quickly beginning to bite at her again. She shivered.

“It’s not that much trouble for us to loop back and buy you a cloak,” Umbreon said.

“I can deal with the cold for a few more minutes,” Espeon said, puffing out a breath. “Let’s just make sure we have the right package.”

Standing back slightly, Espeon used her psychic grip to untie the strings and throw the package open…

The package gave in from the bottom, and something hard and heavy hit the ground with a clunk. Immediately both of them huddled around it, scrabbling through the dirty street to pick it up. They disappeared from the alley seconds later as quickly as they could.


~\({O})/~

Apartment Room

It sat on the table in front of them, barely a foot long on any side. The disk was square, nearly flat, with a slight silver dome at the top. Intricate engravings neatly carved into the metal ran up and down its frame, the machinery underneath blood red. To anymon who couldn’t read the machinery, it would have looked unremarkable. Only Espeon and Umbreon knew its true power.

“So what now?” Espeon asked. They’d brought it in through the door, barely even daring to open Umbreon’s satchel until it was locked and latched and all the curtains were drawn. She’d been staring at its cold, motionless form on the table for a couple of minutes, almost unwilling to believe it was in front of her.

Umbreon flicked his tail against a switch on the wall, and the lights in the apartment clicked on.

“We open it,” he said. “Let’s figure out what makes this tick.”

They pried the top off easily. Whatever these were, they weren’t made to be as durable as the prototypes. The inside was even more fragile; as soon as they had the top off the whole thing seemed to be holding together by the barest threads. Espeon was always better with technology, and used her expert psychic grip to undo the wires and the boards in ways that wouldn’t break or accidentally set off the machine. It wouldn’t do to have a dungeon-creating device suddenly begin working within their rented hotel room.

When they were done, they were able to conclude that aside from the materials and a different configuration, there were only a few major differences from their original prototypes.

“What’s the verdict?” Umbreon asked. He’d been standing off to the side and handing Espeon tools for most of it. Clumsy paws didn’t work well for a delicate job like this.

“In most ways, it’s the same,” Espeon said, raising the goggles she was wearing as she turned away from the table. “Just one thing.”

“A good thing, right?” Umbreon asked.

She wished.

“They removed the power inhibitors,” was all Espeon said. She watched as Umbreon’s face twisted into disbelief, then confusion.

“They…” he trailed off. “But why? What ‘mon in their sane mind would remove that?”

“You said HAPPI wanted us off the entercard project because we didn’t get along with their ethics,” Espeon said. “Maybe this is why.”


~\({O})/~

Zoroark-as-Braixen

Work dragged on and on. He’d gone to the cafeteria, but they didn’t have any chesto berries. It was wintertime, and there were fresh food shortages around the city due to the weather sinking a worrying amount of Grass Continent supply ships. He took the tasteless muffin and the dried berries he was handed and went on his way.

The noise of the room echoed around his ears, other rescue teams sharing lively, animated conversations over the bricks of bread. A closer look revealed the cracks in the smiles, the way everything was barely holding together. Whispers of the coming winter storm and how they’d never seen anything like this before, and half the buildings in town might not hold up against it. How the price of everything was rising ever since ships had started sinking, and soon some of them weren’t going to have enough to eat. How there was a reported murderer on the loose so soon after the gates had been brought down, and if the two were connected. The conversations were all fraught and gloomy. Did any of them enjoy their life here? Or were they all just trying to get by?

Sentry duty started just half an hour after he ate. The skies of the city were grey and gloomy even during the morning, snow dancing around in the air, the chilly wind a bit stronger today. He adjusted his violet HAPPI scarf, carefully checked his illusion for inconsistencies, and trudged down the street wherever Alice guided him. Step after step, one foot after the other. The pavement was so icy it froze his paws. Every block felt like a battle, and if they had to intervene somewhere he didn’t know if he would have the energy to do it.

Alice trudged ahead of him, her steps just as labored as his were. Her movements were chilled by the wind, her legs so stiff she had to jerk them every time she moved. She walked faster than he did even though she’d had less sleep, and she did it without a single complaint. He couldn’t see her face now, but he’d seen it back when they left: brows furrowed, expression stony, snout pulled back into a labored grimace. She was fighting to get through the day, just like him. But she’d just resigned herself to it. To living her life here aimlessly. She wasn’t living. She was just waiting for it all to be over.

Their route took them into the run-down section of town, where he’d been the day he arrived in the city. He’d seen the locals around here and there – a chansey who tended to look after the neighborhood kits while the other pokemon were working, a leavanny who made just enough cutting things to get by, a marshtomp who pushed around a cart of warm treats. None of them had seen him nearly as many times as he’d seen them. When he was in disguise, they just avoided him. They were trying to enjoy their lives here, the best they could when everything around them was falling apart and the chill crept between the cracks and patches in their walls.

Today they were packing up and holing away, reinforcing their houses with whatever they could. The neighborhood kits were huddled up around the chansey and a few others, staying in one place as the adults worked. The leavanny was helping cut things until they fit the different houses, pieces of discarded wood and cloths that were then added to walls and roofs. The marshtomp hadn’t brought out his cart today and was helping with moving the heavy materials. When the storm hit the city, this block would be hit the hardest. They all must have known, and they were preparing earlier than most. Were they preparing because they thought this was home, or were they just trying to get themselves by?

He passed Amadeus’ house on his way. It stood imposingly on stilts that were covered in a brittle coating of ice, its walls and shingles covered in frost, its windows dark. Zoroark-as-Braixen looked up at it as they passed, almost fixated. The windows were too dark and too covered in frost to see through from the outside. Was he in there, watching him right now?

No. He was out further down the block, helping the local shopkeeper hole up their store. Gone was the stern face he always addressed Zoroark with, the stiff, rigid way that he held himself with his scythes behind his back; his movements were relaxed and he was cheerful. He chatted with the lucario shopkeeper like they’d known each other for years. No-mon would have guessed what he got up to by nightfall. He must have considered this block of ramshackle houses home.

They circled around to the base again by noon, when the sun was high enough to almost poke through the clouds. The halls of Headquarters were deserted at this time of day, nearly every other rescue team out on a chosen mission by now. The storm prep was happening here too, the hall staff packing up the easily broken things like decorative vases and picture frames trapping the portraits of Paradise higherups. Alexis’ formal pose, Elliot’s grin and wave, the Director’s stern face, all were taken down from the wall and wrapped in cloths for storage.

The tables in the mess hall were completely empty, and the mission board, always drowning in requests, was as deserted as the corridors. A quiet sense of gloom settled in with the building silent and dead, leaving Zoroark with his thoughts as he split away from Alice and headed up to their room.

He passed the hallway leading to the Room of Records on his way up. It seemed to stretch out before him, the end of the corridor dark in a way only he could see.

What about him? Could he grow to consider this place home? Halls as magnificent as these made a wonderful house. He could count on a meal twice a day, stale as they were, and a bed at night. All he had to do was pitch in around the city once or twice a day. It was a dream job, it should have been a dream job. A dream life. If only he wasn’t—

His back was up against a wall now, breathing heavy. The hallway wasn’t a place to break down, he knew it. It didn’t matter, he couldn’t stop it. He couldn’t come so close to having a normal life here and then have it snatched away from him all over again.

He couldn’t buy a life here. Why would he ever think that he could have a life here? He was wanted for murder. He was a zoroark, a pokemon that wasn’t wanted. No-mon who knew would want him, not even his own partner. Not after yesterday.

His knees shook. He slid to the bottom of the wall, his snout clasped in his claws. He looked at the corridor ahead of him. An impossible task. An unwanted task. He couldn’t do it. He couldn’t do it. Woe turned to anger, and anger turned to a determination he hadn’t felt in weeks. He pulled himself up from the floor, steeling his claws like fists.

No. He wouldn’t do it. He was done with all of this. Living here wasn’t worth this. He’d grab all of his spare change and belongings, wait out the storm, and once it had passed he’d be out the city gates and down to Noe Town as soon as he could. He’d find somewhere he was wanted.

And as for Amadeus… with the storm on the way, it would be days before anymon realized he’d lied. By then he’d be long gone.


~\({O})/~

Sparkleglimmer’s Office

It was getting dangerous to keep poking around in here. These were the Director’s most personal files, the papers no-mon but her ever saw. Morbid curiosity had driven Alexis to read the first one, but duty compelled him to read the rest. Tear out the desk drawers and gut them for everything they had, then it was on to the fancy wooden cabinets against the walls.

He figured anything she really didn’t want anymon to see would be hidden better than that, so he started searching for secret compartments in the wall or under the floor. Pull up the rug, move the desk, take every infuriatingly pink oval mirror off the wall and feel for crevices behind it. His efforts rewarded him – on the middle mirror in the third row from the roof, above where most ‘mon could reach but doable if you were a pokemon with long limbs about an eon’s size, the plaster was cracked, attached to a stone that slid out of the wall and revealed a box.

The office was well and truly torn up by now. He’d tried to keep it neat at the beginning, but it didn’t stay that way once he got frantic about his search. Oh well, he could put everything back to rights in five minutes. Right now, it was time to open this wooden box in his paws.

The bottom was dusty, but the top wasn’t, as if it had recently been opened. Alexis slid off the top, watching it pop off neatly into his other paw. Inside, there were several different papers, all sealed up and folded up so that they’d fit inside. He hesitated to touch these, unsure if he’d be able to fold them up the way they were later… but he was so far in now that if he didn’t just take them out now, he’d be back again later. In for a penny, in for a pound, it was best to finish snooping while he still could.

As he read, he felt his heart sink into his stomach.

It started with Entercards. Sparkleglimmer had shut down the company on dubious grounds and shelved the project, and officially that was supposed to be the end of it. If that was true, it didn’t explain why she’d contracted another company to continue working on them on Cloud Nine, and why she’d gone to such lengths to keep him and Elliot out of it.

His first thought was fraud. For some reason, she must not have wanted Espeon and Umbreon involved in the entercard project, so she’d rigged this whole loop de loop to take it for herself. If that was everything, it would have been small beans. But it didn’t stop there.

A folder sat within the box – a copy of the Paradise Expansion Project, with certain districts marked in red. Sparkleglimmer’s own writing filled the margins – when all the houses at the edge of the city were knocked over, they’d be replaced by large company buildings and fancy mansions. The mass displacement was designed to herd pokemon who “couldn’t earn their keep” out towards Noe Town… she’d planned this?

He rifled further and further, sifting through the small papers in hopes of reaching an answer. He found a letter.

Director,

Your correspondence with this project has been of the utmost importance and help, and for that I cannot thank you enough. I you intend to make a demonstration of the entercards’ might with Traveler’s Demise before our next meeting. When we convene once more to decide the Air Continent’s next Guildmaster, I should look forward to seeing your update on the project – and, of course, transferring you the funds you are due. Boltund Industries’ construction company will handle development of the project’s other side, as promised.


~ Your Business Partner

Like nothing had happened, he put everything back exactly the way it had originally been. Letters back in the box, mirrors on the wall, the rug back in its place, the drawers all organized and shut, the dust he’d unearthed swept from the floors. It was like the office had never been touched.

But he knew what he’d seen. That couldn’t be plucked from his mind, that couldn’t be set back to rights just like everything else was.

He couldn’t just let her get away with it. But what would she do to him if she knew he’d found it?

“Hmm.”

The noise startled him. He was disciplined enough not to let it show. Looking behind him, he saw that Sparkleglimmer had entered the room. Her teal spinerak-silk cloak, one of many she owned, danced above the floor with every step as she strode towards him.

“Did you need something?”

Oh, how he wanted to question her right there and then. How he wanted to ask her what the meaning of all this was.

“I thought better of it,” was what he said.

She looked at him through sharp eyes for a few seconds. Then she walked past him and took a seat at her desk, carefully studying the things strewn about on it.

“Did you move anything here?”

Alexis had put everything back the way he remembered it, but no-mon was perfect. Maybe he’d forgotten the positioning of something…

“I bumped into the desk by accident,” he said. “Something probably got jostled around.”

“That must have been quite an accident,” Sparkleglimmer mused. In one of her lower ribbons, she clutched a letter opener. “I’m pretty sure this was in one of my drawers.”

If Alexis didn’t know how to keep a cool head, he would have froze there. The game would have been up. She would have known.

Instead, he shrugged.

“Never seen it before.”

More silence. If Alexis didn’t know better, he would have said the Director was spacing out. Then she ‘hmmed’. A second lower ribbon opened the drawer under her desk, and the first slipped the letter opener within. With a slam, the drawer was shut.

"Remind me, have you gotten the names for those vote counts yet?” she continued. Alexis felt the tiniest amount of his high-strungness leave him. She must either have not noticed, or decided to dismiss the thought.

“Not yet,” he said. “Still trying to track them down.”

“Get them for me by tomorrow, please,” Sparkleglimmer instructed, going back to studying an unsigned sheet of paper on her desk. “I’ve scheduled a press meeting on the topic in a day, and I want to get that expedited. Missing files or not, this project moves forward.”

Alexis nodded. “I’ll do that.”

As he walked for the door, a thousand thoughts raced through his head. When he’d heard it, Elliot’s plan had sounded farfetched, silly even. But now it was beginning to make more sense than it did before. Was it possible to do that in just a day? Maybe if he was smart about it.

He closed the door of the Director’s office after him and walked down the hall. His own office was on the other side of the building, so he had a walk of at least five minutes ahead of him.

But before he’d gotten far, a subtle sound made his ears twitch. He looked behind him, paws twitching as if ready to grab his scalchops at any minute. He’d expected to see another HAPPI member, or a mouse or rat.

Instead, a familiar form seemed to blend out of the shadows. The emera-light in the corridors reflected off lime-green feathers and cloak-like wings.

“Hello, Alexis,“ said the xatu.


~\({O})/~

Alice

Her partner liked to slink away on his own when they didn’t have a mission. Sometimes, he skulked around in the corridors. Other times, it was the mess hall. Their room was where he went when it was late, but never when she was there. Often it was somewhere outside of the building, after the sun had set. She didn’t know where he went when he took those trips, but they happened at least once a week.

She hadn’t followed him before, because normal pokemon didn’t stalk their partners out everywhere. Normal pokemon didn’t have to think about what their normal partners were doing when they weren’t looking. So given she was a normal pokemon with who she really hoped was a normal partner, she didn’t really want to think about why she was preparing to do it now, as he started heading off on one of his signature outdoor disappearing sessions. Could she count it under criminal investigation? That probably lessened the initial blow a little.

Was that an excuse? She didn’t want to think about that.

It started out pretty normally. If you could call any of this normal. He left their quarters with a pouch that he wouldn’t disclose the contents of, then started down the hall. Once he was pretty far along, she discreetly tailed him. Once he’d left the building, he suddenly seemed to vanish.

Luck was on her side. The snow was heavy, and he wasn’t good at sneaking away – he didn’t even know how to properly cover his tracks. He’d made a hap-hazard effort, but there was still a clear trail she could follow. Normal pokemon didn’t try to cover their tracks. She padded after him, ignoring the little ways her joints froze up and her legs felt stiff and limber. Cold weather would kill her one of these days.

The path led her further out into the city, down snowy streets that were lit by streetlamps, past trash blowing out in the wind across the street in tumbleweeds, down, down as the houses slowly grew less pretty and more shabby. Eventually it took a turn down the very street they’d been patrolling on earlier that day, footprints leading down a completely deserted street. All the buildings had been boarded up and shuttered in preparation for the storm, and there wasn’t a single other soul about. At least they’d have privacy.

She caught up to him halfway down the street, where the house on those rickety stilts stood. Hiding in a nook between the buildings just a little ways back, she watched as he finished trudging towards the house and finally collapsed against a wall for his breath. He looked one way, then the other. Then, everything changed.

His fur rippled in a disorienting way. Her first thought was evolution – did he come out here just to evolve? – but quickly she realized that wasn’t what was happening, as purple fur gave way to a shaggier grey coat, he grew two feet in height, and a wild red mane sprouted from his back. Her eyes widened, her jaw felt slack. She was completely stiff, and she knew it wasn’t just from the cold weather.

She knew it. She knew it. She knew something had been wrong, and how she didn’t want to be proven right… but here was the truth right in front of her.

And she had to do something. She was an enforcer of the law, and he was a murderer. If an outlaw was right in front of her, she had to catch him.

He was an outlaw. He was an outlaw, not her partner. That was what fueled her charge forward. He probably never had been her partner. To think that he had been was too complicated for now. For now, he was just a criminal.

“Stop right there!” she yelled, charging out from her hiding place. His head snapped around to look at her, his eyes wide in shock. He couldn’t have been more shocked than she was.

They stood several meters apart. It was like time had frozen, even the blowing of the wind had died down.

“Partner…” Alice began, barely able to stomach the word. “You are placed under arrest for the murder of three pokemon.”

Her partner stammered incoherently, apparently still too shocked to say anything.

“You will proceed with me to the nearest location of law or risk possible deadly force in capture,” she continued, loudly talking over him.

“But, but I,” he broke off, trembling. He looked scared to death. And she already didn’t want to do this. Why did he have to make it so hard for her?

“Anything you say from this point onward can and will be used against you when deciding your sentence,” she finished, stepping closer. She didn’t know how a water move would work in temperatures this cold, but she was ready to freeze his feet to the ground if she had to.

He suddenly bolted.

And she didn’t do anything to stop him.


~\({O})/~

Music of the week!

The Fallen – John Lunn
 
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Panoramic_Vacuum

Hoenn around
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  1. aggron
  2. lairon
Hello, apologies this has taken so long for me to fully formulate into a composed review. Though on the other hand it's been a treat to reread this chapter (and the others) to refresh myself on what happened in which chapter (since I read them all as one block before because I simply couldn't put it down). I'm intending for this review to cover chapter 8, but there's a very good chance it will bleed into things from chapter 9 and 10 as well, because this final set of chapters to wrap up the opening arc meld together so well. Chapter 8 builds steam for things to go wrong, and the wheels come off as things hurtle downhill for Espurr and Tricky. (Well, maybe not entirely downhill for Espurr, given her new boons, but Tricky definitely.)

I love the opening of chapter 8, and the formatting of the bold text in Espurr's dream is super eerie. Combined with the fact that she wakes up with the entire language in her brain (which is seriously some Matrix "I know kungfu" kinda stuff) is really amazing. It's such a clear signal that *something* isn't right, either with Espurr or this world or both. It's tantalizing, worrying, and intriguing all at once.

A small aside, I'm not sure if there's any kind of code/info hidden in the letters with underline formatting, but I couldn't decipher that for myself.

“The Adventures of an Intrepid Psyduck,” Espurr said, the shock tumbling out of her mouth along with the words.

“What?” Audino asked.

“That’s the title of the book.”
Love the way you handled the reveal that Espurr just learned how to read in the span of one crazy nightmare. Nuzleaf's reaction and Espurr's own worry is also lovely. (I'm also pretty intrigued by Nuzleaf and Carracosta's history, since my first impression of Nuzleaf was kind of a loner/drifter and not necessarily one to know any of our protagonists and their relatives, let alone be such close friends with one of them.)

And oh man Tricky section, love when it's just her causing chaos in a solo scene. It's funny, it feels like we get a look of what really goes on in her bonkers crazy mind, and every time I just laugh and shake my head because it makes just about as much sense as I'd expect. Really love her as a character, her high energy, laisse-fair attitude, and over the top behavior. And I love it all the more from the gut punch that's headed our way in chapter 9. (It *should* have been huge red flags based on how she is, but it's a testament to your storycrafting that it's such a twist at the reveal and then it ALL makes sense after that. Kudos)

Oh my gosh though, poor Espurr, first being tired of Tricky's shenanigans, and then having to complete an 80 question test given by Watchog. Love that she cheated through it with her newfound powers, and that she did feel bad about it. It shows Espurr taking a lot more agency for herself in this new world. Also more agency in saying no to Tricky and choosing to do something that she wanted to do.

Again, though, you do a great job of foreshadowing without giving away too much. It's clear there's some kind of history and tension behind the student's behavior toward Tricky (the swirl of color emotions that Espurr can see) and the isolation of Tricky and the stripping her of the one friend who *doesn't* know her history. You feel glad for Espurr, but worried for Tricky at the same time. There's a lot of desperation there, and that's not a flavor we're used to seeing come from Tricky. It's unsettling, and keeps the reader on their toes.

The following back-and-forth between Espurr's and Tricky's days separate from each other is a great framing mechanic. The day ends up being a relative disaster for both of them, but in entirely different ways. Espurr's trapped in the mundane and boring, and while it might have been a good thing, it still didn't feel great despite her words. And then Tricky... Oh man, Tricky :(((( That's horrible, what Pancham and Shelmet did to her. And then the blow up with Tricky once she finally got herself down?? Oh oof my heart. That hurt so much to read. They both head back separately for the night, and Tricky, everything's coming to a head for her and it's just heartbreaking. That facade is shattering into a million tiny pieces.

I was going to dive into chapter 9 here, but it's so good I think it deserves a post all for itself. Because hoo boy, the set up, the tension from chapter 8 absolutely comes around and smacks you over the head with the bombshell that is chapter 9. On to the next one!
 

Panoramic_Vacuum

Hoenn around
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  1. aggron
  2. lairon
Chapter 9, chapter 9. Oh chapter 9. There's a little bit more build up the next morning as carry-over from chapter 8, first with Audino's concern about the dungeon test, then Espurr asking Deerling about Tricky upon which Deerling blows up about, coupled with the fact that Tricky hasn't showed up to school. (Which on any normal day is kind of whatever, because it's *Tricky*, but after yesterday, the previous night... I worry...)

But then. BUT THEN. The bomb drops. And not even all at once. Again the build up to this keeps growing and growing. Espurr sneaking away from detention, breaking into Tricky's room, going to the dungeon to find her herself. You keep waiting for something to go wrong, and even when it does, it *still* doesn't compare to Tricky's "I'm fine" (Another character to add to TR's list of Characters who are Fine) My god, the way you describe her trying to lie to herself:
“No!” Tricky yipped, interrupting her again. The grin on her face was stretched so wide it was quaking. “I’m fine! I’m really fine! I have to be fine! I have to be! I have to be! See?”
Oh man this whole sequence hit so hard. Espurr accidentally knocking Tricky out of her manic panic, the way she crumbles afterward, and then the REVEAL. Oh my godddddd Tricky no :((((( It all comes together here and I want to wrap her up in the biggest hug because she has gone through hell and back and then through hell again. Absolutely heartbreaking.

I was actually taken aback at the horror and level of violence implied in the flashback. It wasn't something as innocent as a missing person after an ambush: the fact that Tricky had to witness the aftermath of the attack, gods. No wonder she's been this ticking time bomb of self-loathing and hatred. It's incredible, of the entire village, no one has showed her sympathy, understanding, support. It's a minor miracle that Epurr the one who was there when she finally lost it, and able to eventually save her after she ran off into the Beedrill dungeon in her despair.

Loved the action of the rescue and escape, and how it wasn't completely a "damsel in distress" situation with both Tricky and Espurr getting their chance to shine, working together to get out of the mess they'd made. And then gosh, YES thank you Espurr:

“Shake on it,” Espurr said, thrusting her paw out. “I’ll still be your friend. Just… as long as we aren’t only going into mystery dungeons. We can do other things too, y’know? Less… dangerous.”

“Why?” It sounded like Tricky barely dared to ask.

“Because real friends lift each other up,” Espurr said. “We haven’t been good friends, but maybe we could be.”

It was slow, but she watched as Tricky rose up from her spot on the ground, and held out her own paw for Espurr to grasp. They shook.

Espurr had never seen a brighter look on Tricky’s face, even as she was suddenly pulled into a tight hug by the fennekin, which she returned. All seemed to be well in the world.
I love everything about this. And of course after I'm grinning like an idiot at how sweet this is, the next line is Tricky puking her guts out because of the Beedrill poison and I laughed out loud again. It's this cathartic release at the end of this long tension-filled tunnel and it's such a delight to read.

I was a little unsure of the impact of the finale of the chapter after how much of an emotional roller coaster the rest of it was, but I like what it did to set up the opening of chapter 10. I will admit the whole Tricky and Espurr ordeal overshadowed my enthusiasm for Archen and Mawile's adventures, but I'm still so impressed at the way you're interweaving so many plotlines into one story, it makes me excited to see how they eventually come together.

But yeah, just, man I loved chapter 9 and the way it brings so much from the earlier chapters into completely new light. It's as satisfying as a penultimate chapter to an arc can be.
 

Panoramic_Vacuum

Hoenn around
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  1. aggron
  2. lairon
Chapter ten chapter ten! The culmination of everything the arc has led up to until now, and I really liked it as a conclusion to the opening of this fic. It covers a lot of ground and brings a lot of things full circle, and not just the school year either. There was maybe a bit of wants for me in terms of a few of those things, but I'll get into those later in the review.

For now, I love how it picks up right where nine left off with Tricky being, well, Tricky:
Tricky resisted the urge to prance around in excitement, leaning in close to Espurr.

“You can’t tell anymon else about this,” she said, her voice dramatically low for secrecy. “Not under any circumstances!”

“Wait. You… believe me?” Espurr looked surprised.

“Well duh I believe you! Don’t you see how awesome this is?!” Tricky pranced back towards the window, then back towards Espurr, then back towards the window, then back towards Espurr, then back towards the window, then back towards Espurr again.
I love this as her reaction to Espurr's big reveal. All tension and worry and anxiousness surrounding Espurr and her finally being able to tell someone, to trust someone enough to tell, and Tricky just does what Tricky does and it's this great use of comedy as relief to all the tension. Great stuff.

Of course, all this revelation happens on the eve of the school's dungeon test, very convenient! I liked the little pre-test bit in the library going over the history of famous exploration teams all with humans in them. It was funny that Tricky's like "wait, the world's gonna end? Sweet I'm besties with the savior!" and not actually worried that the world's gonna end. Just Tricky things v2.0.

The dungeon test itself was a great story from start to finish, and stands well on its own even without the bookending of the beginning and end of the chapter. The lead up with the randomly selected teams being less than optimal, the personality and shenanigans of the teams before they meet, the decision to say "screw the rules" and rumble in the jungle forest, and the resulting chaos because of that.

It's here that the start of my one gripe of this chapter begins: Tricky and the Mystery of the Missing Teammates. It's such a scary moment for her to realize that she's lost not only her new best friend but also her other teammate somewhere along the way. I get why she chose to do what she did (believing Espurr would be safe b/c of the escape orb was logical, she had no reason to suspect the escape orb wouldn't work properly, and thinking maybe Goomy had found the stairs on his own) but it seems like she didn't find Goomy on the next floor up and didn't think twice. Which felt odd considering a lot of her past trauma comes from losing a teammate in a dungeon.

Her reaction to discovering neither Goomy or Espurr were at the dungeon exit felt fine, and Deerling's reaction felt right because she's already so angry with Tricky before this, but no one realizing that all of this happened because of *all* of them?? I realize Tricky is buried by her guilt here, but I'm a little surprised it didn't kick in for her sooner, before she exited the dungeon the first time and in such good spirits too.

But I do think that's rectified in the second half of the chapter where Tricky makes the decision to go back in, and isn't messing around. She's earnestly trying to save her friends, and I love that her normally ditzy, air-headed approach to things vanishes when she's serious. I just wish there was a bit more self-crisis for her to overcome to reach that point, since it's a huge character-growth moment for her.

When the pain faded enough for Espurr to be able to look up, she finally got a good look at what she had walked into: in front of her was what seemed to be a perfect stone sculpture of a riolu, caught mid-run. Espurr was even mildly impressed that the artist had found a way to keep the sculpture’s balance without a base… but why here? Who was going to stare at their art in the middle of a mystery dungeon? It was even collecting dirt around its front paws, almost like it had been…
Speaking of the second half of the chapter, oh ho ho ho, this made my skin crawl. Everything that happened to Espurr in this chapter is hair-raisingly spooky. From recognizing the mystery dungeon as the one she fell into way back in the beginning of the story, to the escape orb somehow malfunctioning, to the creepy stone statue that we-the-reader have seen already in another horrifying situation, to the demon creature *thing* in the mist, excuse me?? I do need to get to sleep tonight y'know.

I'm so so glad Tricky was able to get back there to find Espurr because man that's seriously scary to face by yourself (AGAIN). I'm not entirely sure why the dungeon roaring isn't bothering literally anyone else besides Espurr, but chalk it up as societal differences. The fact that it's "just a thing dungeons do" is half hilarious, half troubling for how accepted it is.

Loved team mom mode Audino, she's so strong and I like her lots. And I'm so proud of Goomy, being so brave. It feels like a lot of characters get a moment of growth in this chapter. And the way it ends with such a warm positive feel for Espurr and Tricky, it feels right to close the arc on their newfound friendship being solidified as a team. Maybe a little bit too easy (related to some of Tricky's past trauma not impacting her as much as it probably would have, almost losing your new best friend in an eerily similar circumstance) but the fact that after all this tension being built up (and frankly still building, the mystery of the dungeon creature and the stone riolu and the rest of the strange happenings outside Serenity Village) it's a nice relief to end with such hope.

I've really enjoyed my read of the first arc of Psychic Cats, it's fun, entertaining, and wonderfully crafted in seeing how the bits and pieces build upon each other and come together to make the PMD world come alive. It satisfies while also leaving me wanting more. And if that's not the sign of a good story, I don't know what is.
 

JFought

Sloooowly writing...
Location
HCL
Pronouns
they/them
Partners
  1. jfought-sword
  2. jfought-blue
  3. deerling-summer
  4. charmeleon
  5. vulpix
I am back! It's a bit last minute for blitz, but I wanted to try and take out a chunk of Part 3, so let's get right to it!

Thoughts on Chapters 3-1 to 3-5
  • Part 3 opens with a side story featuring the Gates protags and Zoroark. We’ve already seen bits and pieces, but as a more proper intro to these characters I think it works in giving me a feel for them. I think the Gates protags being a Dewott/Pikachu combo is supposed to reference the promotional material? Either way, I like your portrayal of Elliot here: feels very true to the (what I remember of) the original character. He has a nice balance of “optimistic and sunny hero” and “experienced badass.” Alexis by contrast seems to be a bit of a departure. Not in terms of personality (i don’t remember any of the protag personalities to be honest), but more so in terms of skillset, presence, and his relationship with this world. In canon, the Gates protag can travel between worlds, but I got the impression that’s not the case here. Plus there’s his status as an absolute tech wizard who knows everything there is to know about how various things work. Then there’s Zoroark, who’s clearly being set up to be a major character in the future. I like how you use this chapter to naturally explain the way illusions work in this setting, and the scene with him and Xatu seems small but feels significant. The entire subplot with these three is completely new territory for Super, so I can’t help but wonder where you’re going with it and how they’ll tie into the larger narrative.

  • The actual ghost ship scene was also really well done! You do a good job managing the tension throughout this chapter. Even though the characters here are strong enough to deal with a Void Shadow, knowing what I do about how strong these things can be still makes the encounters they have here tense, especially with how the entire place has been drenched in shadow-goo-stuff.

  • The Latias section was foreboding! It looks like she made it to Fire Mountain? Which, considering what happens here, raises some questions regarding its role in this adaption. As for Latias, in the original game she got turned to stone alongside her brother, so I wonder if she'll have an expanded role here.

  • Gentle Slope Cave was an interesting and somewhat unsettling concept for a mystery dungeon! Also, I forgot that it had been established that wild animals existed in this world, so the bear completely caught me off guard! I think this is the first time our protagonists have actually had to deal with one, and like me they were not prepared for it!

  • We finally make it to Lively Town, and the Expedition Society is properly introduced! And at the same time, Espurr learns of their plans to investigate the Void Shadows. This feels like a good potential setup for this part: checking out all these important places that have ties to what they know of them. And the Sand Continent actually gets to be relevant for once!

  • 3-3 was a pretty fun breather chapter. We get to see how these two are acclimating to their new environment, and I enjoyed the interactions in this chapter. We get the Jirachi boss fight: I was wondering how you were going to handle it, and it was a pretty fun scene! Though it doesn't seem like the society has done a very good job of making them feel welcome. They're still kids at the end of the day, and that homesickness starts to get to them. And Espurr especially is on edge after what she learns through eavesdropping: not only do they know about the Void Shadows, but they also know about her, and when they haven't been completely honest about their intentions that homesickness really isn't getting any better.

  • The game between Tricky and Nickit was fun little exercise in bonding. I like the camaraderie they're starting to build with each other. We also learn that just as I thought, those aren't Harmony Scarves, they're Focus Sashes! This is definitely going to save them from something later: Chekhov's Scarf, if you will!

  • I don't remember if the Beeheeyem continued their pursuit in the original game, so if not, then this is definitely a departure! They're getting more bold too, just straight up bombing the café like that. The chase sequences here are well done and feel suitably tense. I really get the feeling that Espurr is running out of ideas. She feels like she has to do deal with them herself, but she literally can't, and that harsh reality really hits when she doesn't feel like she can trust anyone besides Tricky right now.

  • Espurr's distrust of the society is understandable. She really doesn't know much about these people, and given what's happened in the plot so far she has every reason to be on edge. It's just a shame that this misunderstanding is scaring her away from the group of Pokémon who currently both know the most and are the most equipped to deal with the situation. Especially considering that they could have helped protect her from the Beeheeyem. The setup at the end of the chapter is a pretty major departure from the main game: it looks like the Sand Continent really is going to have a point! And Bunnelby's there too, meaning he'll actually get development! I wonder how this situation will continue to develop, as we are pretty far off track now, so pretty much anything goes.

  • We learn about Zoroark’s past. It gives some context for his relationship with Primarina, though I do wonder how he feels about it all. His basic needs were, usually, mostly, met, and I got the impression that he didn't question it much except for the one time where he felt that Primarina was lying to him. But now he's away from all that, and has the opportunity to really forge a life of his own, so it'll be interesting to see where that goes.

  • It’s kind of sad to see Elliot doubt himself like that. It’s been a long time since the events of Gates, and it seems like his relationship with Alexis has become at least a little bit strained in the years since. I was kind of getting the impression that Elliot was being sidelined by his more famous partner before I started reading this part, and now it definitely seems that way.

  • Xatu is super suspicious after that. He seems to be the same Xatu we know from canon most of the time, but Alexis’ reaction to him suggests there might be more to him than that. bittercold related, maybe? We also get a tense chase scene that continues to establish the way Zoroark's powers work. It seemed like the dungeon ferals were all zombies, which is definitely pretty unsettling! it also raises questions regarding exactly what zoroark ate that night.
The first one on the list was “wake up Jirachi”.

“Doubt it,” said Nickit. “he sleeps like a rock on a good day.”

“There were the weirdest ‘mon at the docks today.”
I think this is grammatically correct but it still reads really weirdly.

Holly was clearly doing her best to contain herself, but struggling anyway.

“We’ll just use a window,” Espurr said, walking up towards the closest one to the door. Where did you throw the bun basket?”
There's a missing quotation mark here.

Zorua-as-fennekin shook his head, staring up at Primarina was curious eyes.

Zoroark could hear see sense the ferals hiding in the dungeon corners,
I kind of wonder if this is intentional? It's hard to tell.

Originally I wanted to get caught up on the fic, but blitz (and life in general) kinda kicked my teeth in, and as you can probably tell from the post timestamp eventually I ran out of time and had to cut my losses. Still, I will get caught up, I have decided that I will. This was a good set of chapters that leaves things pretty up in the air for Espurr and Tricky while establishing a new cast to focus on with Zoroark. I like this fic, I want to see where this goes, and I will see you in the future!
 
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Chibi Pika

Stay positive
Staff
Location
somewhere in spacetime
Pronouns
they/them
Partners
  1. pikachu-chibi
  2. lugia
  3. palkia
  4. lucario-shiny
  5. incineroar-starr
Alrighty, looks like the last chapter I reviewed was 4, so I went and revisited 6-10 to refresh myself on them. This will mostly just be a sort of "general thoughts" review of the opening arc.

5-6


So, we get a bit of info on how the dungeons work in this setting, always good to get that early since it can vary so much in PMD fics. Looks like we've "Dungeon mon aren't real" approach in this one, as well as the tantalizing implication that dungeons could be alive. I'm enjoying the supplementary material about things like the dungeon class system, makes these things feel like scientifically studied phenomena.

The fic's narration often employs a sort of deadpan humor like: "Mystery dungeons had stairs? [cut] Mystery dungeons had stairs." that keeps it entertaining to read. :P

Man, Tricky gets so angry at Espurr for doing risky things in the dungeon. "I don't want it to happen again…" And yet, she really doesn't seem to have too many qualms with dragging people into dungeons in the first place. :/

Really satisfying when the Drillbur stood up to Watchog \o/ I know he's meant to be super grating but... yeah he's super grating. :V

> “But who’s the village gonna listen to? Me… or the local troublemakers?
idk I haven't really gotten the impression that anyone listens to Pancham. :V

Ah, that mood of "I don't know whether it's okay to have fun during a life-risking event... Jade can relate.

Nice to get the continuing thread of Ampharos searching for humans. It makes his crossing paths with Tricky and Espurr feel a lot less aimless.

Geez, Honchkrow is a real asshole. It was really satisfying when Mawile's back maw went and chewed him out, totally without her intending it to, no siree.

Man, Tricky just going and making decisions for Espurr really gets to me! Stop doing that! :screm:

Increasingly... wanting... to see Pancham get dunked on.

7-8

Go Goomy! Was really rooting for him when he called out Tricky. I can't help but get the feeling that Tricky only shows remorse not because her actions hurt others, but because that makes them mad at her, and when people are mad, they're less fun. It always comes back to how it affects her and not how it affects them. It's almost like her ideal playmate would be someone to whom she could do whatever she liked and they'd never complain. It's pretty unnerving!

And oh shit, the petrification is spreading, with an ominous threat to go along with it. But it's not as if it's safe to just leave things be and not look into it!

Ampharos giving out the junior memberships sure hits differently now that we know that he's got some kind of plan involving the arrival of a human, and that that's why he came here in the first place.

And then, hooooo boy, the crooked house. That sure was unsettling as hell. :copyka: I still don't know what to make of these demons (void shadows?). The hidden messages keep saying to embrace them, but I wonder if there's something limiting where they can go in the real world, which is why they're limited to targeting her in the dreamscape.

Interesting that it seems to be some kind of actual psychic block on her understanding the unown writing, and not just her unfamiliarity with them.

8

Hm! It seems that line of thinking was correct, as one spooky dream later, Espurr can read the Unown writing now! Luckily, she's a psychic-type and people can brush it off as that, but we all know that it's something far weirder than just her typing...

> He could be spying on us and we wouldn’t even know it.”
that is in fact exactly the case lmao

>“Question 57: The species of the pokemon directly involved in the Time Crisis were…
“Meowth, Riolu, Litleo, Shinx, Grovyle, Celebi, and Dusknoir.”

So... assuming that Meowth and Riolu were a human/partner duo, the inclusion of a Shinx and Litleo is interesting...

Time to cheat on the exam! Espurr deserves little a cheating, as a treat. After all that she's been through. :V

I love how it takes them an entire hour to set up a chessboard. An hour. No braincells.

And to no one's surprise, Pancham and Shelmet duped Tricky. And she then proceeds to blame Espurr for spending time with other people. Trickyyyyy... it's not Espurr's fault that Pancham and Shelmet are dicks. She's allowed to spend time with other people, you don't own her! :screm: Really satisfying for Espurr to finally call her out on yanking her chain all the dang time. >:[

9

Interesting plot thread about dungeons going bad faster than they're supposed to...

Of course Pancham would come up with some bullshit reason why passing the test is actually bad. I know it's realistic to elementary schoolers but can I dunk him in the lake plz. :/

"stick a wooper in it" is the funniest turn of phrase. And there have been an awful lot of them too! It keeps the prose lively.

Ah, like the long line of protags before her, Tricky joins the Simba club of "manslaughter makes me a murderer." :sadbees:

So here we go with the Tricky backstory. There's some good stuff here, and of course it's nice to finally get a reason for her being so... like that. And yet...

I'm admittedly a little bewildered by the fact that her coping mechanism for getting her friend killed in a dungeon is to... dungeon harder, all the time. It seems like the sort of thing that would leave her with a phobia of dungeons! And maybe there's a bit of one there, thinking back to how she freaked out at Espurr risking herself in the minds. But then she keeps dragging Espurr in more dungeons like she's trying to go for a repeat of the Budew incident. And maybe it's all to do with the split identity thing, if it's Tricky doing this, there can't be any problems. Tricky didn't do anything wrong, so if she retreats into the Tricky persona, she can keep on doing whatever she wants without any consequences. That's my best guess anyway.

More void shadows? :eyes: And in the flesh this time, rather than a dreamscape? Or some blending of the two...

Anyway, despite my reservation with Tricky, I'm glad Espurr is sticking with her, but more glad that Espurr is standing her ground about not getting dragged into dungeons against her will like some kind of toy.

10

Ha, you got me with Tricky's reaction to the human reveal, I thought she'd think it was a joke at first. But... oh no, of course she'd be willing to jump on any sign that the two of them might have some cool destiny.

>“…What?” Tricky asked. “It’s a good plan…” It wasn’t.
amazing

As hard as I am on Tricky, it is easy to see how she could have been separated from Goomy without meaning to, given how wonky these dungeons are. And to give her at least a little credit, her regrets afterward are firmly in the "wanting to make sure goomy/espurr don't get hurt" camp rather than the "oh no people won't want to hang out with me" camp. Of course, Espurr's skepticism was well-warranted! But it seems like Tricky might be in the right here for once. I'm still sideyeing her, but I'm willing to at least extent a little benefit of the doubt.

Also satisfying for Nurse Audino to call out Watchog for constantly acting like a bunch of kids aren't gonna act like kids and then being all pikashock every time that they do. A lot of good callouts lately tbh. :P

Soo, that little plot thread about dungeons getting worse far faster than they're supposed to... there's no way it's not tied to the arrival of these void shadows.

But in the end, they all got out, and now they've got their shiny new Expedition membership! Along with Tricky actually stopping to ask Espurr if she wants to be a part of it. And well, it's a start.

> the Dungeon Wraith is widely agreed to be a myth from times long gone.

uh huh, sure :V

I do have to admit that this is a lot of setup for the opening arc of the fic. That was quite a lot of words, and I get the feeling that we haven't even hit the real plot yet! But tbh, that's kind of on Super for being structured in that way. And a point in your favor over Super--there's a lot more eye-catching stuff and foreshadowing to latch onto here. Plus we've got the early hints of the political intrigue that I know if going to be a big focus later. So even if it's a bit of a slow start, it's already doing better than its source material, lol.

That's all for now, hope to read more soon~
 
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